大学英语四级作文评分原则与标准及得分范.ppt

大学英语四级作文评分原则与标准及得分范文,1、据统计，评卷老师在给个作文上花的时间大约为十几秒。2、评分标准：总体评分法；兼顾内容和语言；订档给分：2；5；8；11；14；分为这样五个档次；2分条理不清楚、思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子有错，而且多数为严重错误。5分基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误8分基本切题。有些地方思想表达不过清楚，文字勉强连贯。语言错误较多，其中有少量的严重错误。11分切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。14分切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性好，基本无语言错误，仅有个别小错。,写作范例得分标准举例AnEye-WitnessAccountofTrafficAccident假设你在某日某时某地目击一起车祸，就此写一份见证书。见证书须包括以下几点：1。车祸发生的时间及地点2。你所见到的车祸情况3。你对车祸原因的分析,ItwastheTrafficAccidentinTianjinRoad.TheTrafficAccidenthasbeenatthemorning,May1.Twochildrenbybikewenttoschool.Acarissofast,thestreel.Andthecartouchedtwochildrenbybike,andtheTrafficAccidenthashappened.Oneistouchedsofarwayandtheotherosputsown.Marypeoplecomehere,andtheysenttotwochidrenwhogotoHospiton.Waitatime,TheploiemenarrivedintheAccidentplace.Myopiopmtoin:Thecardriverissofastbycar,andHedidntattendationtothechildrenbybikeasidetheroad.Twochildrenbybikedidnthearedthecarcome.Allofabove,IthinkthecardrivermustbeseriertheTrafficAccident.,2points条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。,Itwas8:00thismorning,Iwentonmywaytoschool.WhenIjustattheschoolgate,Isawtheterribletrafficaccidenthappened.Astudentrideabikeinahighspeed,andjustwhenhearrivedtheschoolgate,alargetrucktraveledoutofthegateandhithimdown.Hefliedover3mbeforehisbikehithimontheground.Surely,thepoorboywashurtverybad.Ithinktherearetworeasonsfortheaccident.First,itwasjustthetimewebeganourfirstclass,Thebikeriderperhapsdidnotwanttobelate,theridehisbikesofast,evendidntlowdownhisspeedatthegate.Second,thetruckistoolarge,andatthattime,thereweretoomanywalkthroughthegate,sothebikedriverhavenootherwaytochose,buttorideinthemiddleoftheroad.,5points基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误。,ThetraficaccidentwastakenplaceatthejunctionoftwohighwayswhenIwasdrivingmycarhomeatabout4oclock.Theyellowcarinvolvedintheaccidentwasrunningatahighspeedalongtheright-handwhenithappened.Hardlyitreachedthejunctionwhenitcrackedwithatruckrunningfromanotherdirection.Therewasnotimeforthedriverstochangethedirections.Ithinktheaccidentmostlyattributedtosuchreasons:Firstlyandtheforemost,itwasthecarelessnessofbothofthedriversthatmostlymadetheaccidentshappen.Itwasnottoocarefulforthemwhenrunningacar.Secondly,theweatheralsoshouldberesponsibleforit.Thefogmadethevisionofdriversvague.Lastbutnottheleast,theconstructureoftheroadswasunreasonable.Thetraficlightsareneededatanyjunctions.,8points基本切题，有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重的语言错误。,ItwaslastFridaymorning.TheaccidenthappenedwhenIwasonmywaytoschool.ItwassoterriblethatIwouldneverforgetit.Iwaswalkingalongtheroad,andtherearenotsomanycarsontheroad.Then,withabigsound,theaccidenthappened.Theredcarstopedsuddenlyontheroadsothatthedriveroffollowingcarcouldntrespondimmiditely.Thebackoftheredcarwasbadlydamaged,butfortunatelytherewasnopeopleinjuredintheaccident.Ithinkthemainreasonsareasfollows.Firstofall,theredcarshouldntstopsuddenlywithoutanysignals.Secondly,thefollowingcarshouldkeepacertaindistancefromthefrontcarsothatthedrivercouldhaveenoughtimetotakemeasureswhenanyanybadlysituation.Finally,thesetwodriverswerecareless.Iftheyhadpaidmoreattentiontodriving,thisaccidentwouldnthavehappened.,11points切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误,ItwasthemorningofApril6th,2003.Atabout7:30,Iwenttoschoolbybikeasusual.Itwasarainydayandtheroadwasslippery.Ontheway,Inoticedaboyridinginfrontofme,talkingloudlywithhisfriends.Hedidntweararaincoat;insteadheheldanumbrellainonehand,androdewithanotherhand.AsheturnedlefttoGuangmingRoad,hefailedtoseeacarcomingfrombehindatruckparkedonthecorner.SuddenlyIheardabignoiseandsawanumbrellathrownaway.Theboywasknockeddownbythecar.Iwascompletelyshocked.Ithinktheboysabsent-mindednessaccountedmuchfortheaccident.Hewastalkingallthetimeanddangerouslyusedanumbrellawhileridingabike.Theweatheralsoplayedaroleinthetragedy.Thethirdcausewastheunproperlyparkedtruck,whichwasbigenoughtomaketheroadconditionsinvisibletothestudentswhoweregoingtomakeaturn.Allthesecontributedtothisaccident.,14points切题。表达思想清楚，文字通畅，连贯性好，基本无语言错误，仅有个别小错。,近几年了我校同学经典错误摘录1.Iverylikethecinema.2.Whensawtheteacher,hestoodup.3.Thereisanoldsentencesays“practicemakesperfect”.TherearemanypeoplewhothinkthatThereisageneralbeliefthatThereisafamousfilmentitled4.把someone误用作somepeople.Somebodysomeone作“有人”讲时，不是指“有些人、或有的人”而是指“某个人，有人”一般为单数意义。Someoneisknockingatthedoor.Someoneputforwardthequestionatthemeetingyesterday.而在四、六级考试中，我们经常说的：有人认为有人认为Somepeople,whileotherpeopleSomeothers至于someonesomebody,somepersons都是不正确的。,5.Weallknowthatfailisthemotherofsucceed.Chinaseconomiclevelislow,andmostpeoplecantaffordcarpresently.6.Myfamilyhavefourperson.7.whichmeaningthenewiscoming.Theyareusedtowatchit.cangiveouraopportunitytostaywithfamily.Theyopinioniscanceleveningparty.However,anincreasingnumberofpeoplearehavedifferentopinionstoit.Alongwiththeeducationdevelopment,thecollegegraduationsaremoreandmoremany.,8.Imveryhappytoprovideserveforyou.Ibelieveyouwillhaveahappytravelinthere.TomyopinionItismostimportant.IllsayishappyTeachersDaytoeveryteacher.Becauseofancaraccident,Susanlostherlegs.Thefactthatshewouldnevercanwork.Letwehaveacleanandtidyworld.,9.IthinkIcangotocollegewhichisveryluck.Hello,teacherpleaseteachergivemesomeadvice.InothaveabilitytoenterNBA,too.IcomefromGuangHan,whereisaverybeautifulcity.Ithinkinmyeyes10.Itwillbreakhimstomach.Weshouldbebannedsmoking.ThisismyfirstwinterholidaywhenIenteruniversity.Butotherspeopledontthinkaboutthat.Somepeoplearenotagree.,11.母语负迁移TheclimateofBeijingiscolderthanShanghai.Sheisolderthananygirlinhergroup.Imwaitingforyourcome.Iget80scoresinCET6.Youcanliveinmyhome.Butthereareotherpeoplethinkitisunnecessary.12.另外我们同学还要时刻注意在作文中要合理，恰当的使用人称代词。Iyouwe.,写作中的重点副词、连词、过渡词（短语）1.众所周知Itisgenerallyacknowledged(believed/recognized)that例：Itisgenerallyacknowledged(believed/recognized)thattheInternetwillplayanimportantroleinsocialdevelopment.2.现在，越来越多的人意识到Atpresent,moreandmorepeoplebecomeawareof3.说到，人们可能会有不同的看法。Whenitcomestopeoplemayhavedifferentopinions.例：Whenitcomestotheimportanceofwealthandhealth,peoplemayhavedifferentopinions4.尽管但Inspiteofthe例：Inspiteofhisefforts,themancanhardlysupporthisfamilywithhisincome.,5.从这一意义而言，Inthissense,例：Inthissense,healthisfarmorevaluablethanwealth.6.毫无疑问，有例：Undoubtedly,themasteryofacertainnumberofsentencepatternswillbehelpfultowriting.7.事实是Thetruthisthat8.综上所述，我们可以得出如下结论Formwhathasbeendiscussedabove,wemaydrawtheconclusionthat例：Formwhathasbeendiscussedabove,wemaydrawtheconclusionthatapersonwhoiswealthywillnotnecessarilybehealthy.,关键词、过渡词的引用可以使我们的作文增加色彩，给阅卷教师留下好的印象，从而拿到高分，同学们要认真掌握。列举first,second,third(themostimportant),第一，第二，第三firstly,secondly,thirdly(finally),首先，第二，第三2.举例说明forexample(forinstance),例如，Take,forexample,.以为例，suchas(namely),比如，3.对照however(but)然而(但是)onthecontrary(bycontrast)相反,4.并列thatis即，也就是说inotherwords换言之5.增加inaddition(besides)另外moreover此外6.结尾(总结)Inconclusion(Tosumup),总之，综上所述Inbrief,简言之，Inmyopinion(Tomymind),我认为，,常用结构词:Generally,undoubtedly,admittedly,obviously,interestingly,surprisingly,surely,actually,hopefully,probably,especially,particularly,因果关系过渡词语because(of),since,for,owingto,thanksto,asaresultof,consequently,forthereasonthat,therefore,hence,分类句型1.表示原因1）Therearethreereasonsforthis.2）Thereasonsforthisareasfollows.3）Thereasonforthisisobvious.4）Thereasonforthisisnotfartoseek.5）Thereasonforthisisthat6）Wehavegoodreasontobelievethat2.表示好处1）Ithasthefollowingadvantages.2）Itdoesusalotofgood.3）Itbenefitsusquitealot.4）Itisbeneficialtous.5）Itisofgreatbenefittous.,3.表示坏处1）Ithasmoredisadvantagesthanadvantages.2）Itdoesusmuchharm.3）Itisharmfultous.4.表示重要、必要、困难、方便、可能1）Itisimportant（necessary，difficult，convenient，possible）forsb.todosth.2）Wethinkitnecessarytodosth.3）Itplaysanimportantroleinourlife.5.表示措施1）Weshouldtakesomeeffectivemeasures.2）Weshouldtryourbesttoovercome（conquer）thedifficulties.3）Weshoulddoourutmostindoingsth.4）We