中考英语作文讲评课(优秀课件).ppt

Writing,Leavingschool（毕业时分）Growingpainsandgains（成长的烦恼与欢乐）Ihaveadream（我有一个梦想）ThingsIhatetodo（我不喜欢。）Lovearoundme（我身边的爱)Iwanttodosomethingformyschool(我为学校做件事）Improudofmyself（我为自己感到自豪）,与生活相关与“我”相关,Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopicThebestwaytomakemehappy.(以“最能使我快乐的方法”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons),内容（7分）,+语言（8分）+文采（3分）,一、认真审题，结构合理,*写什么,(题目，参考问题）,Whatshouldwewriteabout?Whatshouldntwe(only)writeabout?,Freetalk,1.Myschoollife,2.Mydreamteacher,3.ThethingIhatetodo,4.Myopinionsofkeepingpetdogs,5.Thebestwaytomakemehappy,内容（7分）,+语言（8分）+文采（3分）,一、认真审题，结构合理,*写什么,(题目，参考问题）,Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopicThebestwaytomakemehappy.,Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons),Thebestwaytomakemehappyisachievinggoodmarks.IthinkthiswayisthebestonetomakemehappybecauseitistheeasiestwaysanditcanimprovemyabilitysoIthinkitisthebestway.Inthisway,Icangetsomeprizes,soIwillfeelhappy,whatsmoreitcanalsomakemyparentshappy.,Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons),内容不全,therearealotofwaystomakemehappy.Thebestwaytomakemehappyistoplaybasketball.Toplaycomputergamesisalsoawaytomakemehappy.EverydaywehavePElesson.Thesearealotofinterestsinit.SoIfeelhappyinthisway.,Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons),内容不全,thebestwaytomakemehappyistohelpanother.WhenIfeelsad,Icanhelpanother,becauseIhopetheothershappy.Icanhelpoldpeoplecrosstheroadandplaywithsmallchildren.InthiswayIfeelanotherhappy,thenIalsowillhappy.Helpothersnotonlymakemehappy,butalsomakeothershappy.,Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons),内容不全,ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.,Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?,内容不全,1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4)3.Whydoyouthinkitsthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2),Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingholidaysintheyear.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysismakingabirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherboughtthethingsweneededfromthesupermarket.Wemixedtheflourandeggs,thenaddedsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheoven.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilymembers.Itwasreallydelicious.Iwillneverforgetthatday.,内容得分5,MyspokenEnglishusedtobeverypoor.Itriedtoimproveit,butfailed.SoItoldittomyEnglishteacherandwishedhimtogivemesomeadvice.HetoldmethatIcouldimprovemyspokenEnglishbyspeakingmoreEnglish.Hesaid,ThemoreyoupracticespeakingEnglish,themoreprogressyouwillmake.ThenIfollowedhisadviceandspokeasmuchEnglishaspossible.Atlast,myspokenEnglishimproved.,Mytrouble,Whatismissedinthisarticle?,Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2),内容得分5,Theenvironmentisimportanttousall.Weneedfreshair,cleanwaterandsoon.Thereusedtobemanytreesaroundus,theairwasfreshandtheriverwasclean,butnowtheydisappearedforonereasonoranotherandwerereplacedbydirtywaterandpollutedair.Becauseoftheterriblepollution,peopleshealthisgettingworseandworse.Whatsmore,thegreenhouseeffectischangingourclimate,whichmayleadtoevenmoreserioussituation.,Environmentaroundus,Whatismissedinthisarticle?,1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3）,内容得分4,ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.,Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?,内容不全,1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4)3.Whydoyouthinkitsthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2),Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingholidaysintheyear.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysismakingabirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherboughtthethingsweneededfromthesupermarket.Wemixedtheflourandeggs,thenaddedsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheoven.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilymembers.Itwasreallydelicious.Iwillneverforgetthatday.,内容得分5,MyspokenEnglishusedtobeverypoor.Itriedtoimproveit,butfailed.SoItoldittomyEnglishteacherandwishedhimtogivemesomeadvice.HetoldmethatIcouldimprovemyspokenEnglishbyspeakingmoreEnglish.Hesaid,ThemoreyoupracticespeakingEnglish,themoreprogressyouwillmake.ThenIfollowedhisadviceandspokeasmuchEnglishaspossible.Atlast,myspokenEnglishimproved.,Mytrouble,Whatismissedinthisarticle?,Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2),内容得分5,Theenvironmentisimportanttousall.Weneedfreshair,cleanwaterandsoon.Thereusedtobemanytreesaroundus,theairwasfreshandtheriverwasclean,butnowtheydisappearedforonereasonoranotherandwerereplacedbydirtywaterandpollutedair.Becauseoftheterriblepollution,peopleshealthisgettingworseandworse.Whatsmore,thegreenhouseeffectischangingourclimate,whichmayleadtoevenmoreserioussituation.,Environmentaroundus,Whatismissedinthisarticle?,1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3）,内容得分4,Nowadays,ourenvironmentisbecomingworseandworse.Ourbadhabitscausemanyproblemslikeairpollution,landpollutionandwaterpollution.Tomakeourenvironmentbetter,Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector.WecanplanttreestomaketheaircleanbecausetreescantakeinCO2andreleaseO2intotheair.Weshouldbuyanduseenvironmentallyfriendlygoods.Finally,wemustntleavealotofrubbishintotheriver,pondorsea.Soletsbeenvironmentprotectorsandenjoylivingabetterlifeontheearth.,Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector,内容（7分）,+语言（8分）+文采（3分）,一、认真审题，结构合理,*写什么,(题目，参考问题）,*重点写什么,(提示问题）,Nowadays,therearemanyproblemsofourenvironmentsuchasairpollution,waterpollutionandlandpollution.Peoplecutdownandburntheforest.Peopleusethingsonceandthrowthemaway.Peopleusechemicalstoproducemanythings.Becauseofthesereasons,ourearthisingreatdanger.Weliveontheearth,itsourdutytoprotectit.IwilldoalotofthingssothatIcanprotecttheearth.,Forexample,Iwillreusetheplasticbags.Therearealotofwaystobegreenconsumers.,Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector,Usethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要点仅供参考）Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?,Everybodyhasmanywaystomakehappy.SodoI.First,Ilistensomefavoritemusic.Second,Ireadsomebooksandmakesomenotes.Ithinkitisgood.Third,Iplaybasketballwithmyfriends.Inmyopinion,playbasketballisthebestwaytomakemehappy,becauseIfondofit.Becauseofthose,Ibecomehappyandstrong.,1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons),内容（7分）,+语言（8分）+文采（3分）,一、认真审题，结构合理,*写什么,(题目，参考问题）,*重点写什么,(提示问题）,*时态,(参考问题）,”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector(保护者)”,Usethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要点仅供参考）Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?,Mytrouble,Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2),ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.,1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4)3.Whydoyouthinkitsthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2),Environmentaroundus,1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3）,二、理清思路，列出提纲,Writeapassageofatleast60wordsonthetopic”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector(保护者)”(以”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。),Usethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要点仅供参考）1.Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?2.Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?3.Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?,Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopicThebestwaytomakemehappy.(以“最能使我快乐的方法”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons),三、连词成句，初步成形,四、检查修改，内容无误,Environmentisveryimportantforus.Inourlife,theproblemsofourenvironmentareveryimportant.Wehavehurtittoomuchbycuttingdowntreesandpollutewaterandland.Iwanttobeaenvironmentprotectorsothatsaveit.Idsuggestmyparentstotakebusinsteadofdrivecar.Iwillprogressmyhabbitssuchasuseabasketorapaperbag.Iwillpreventpeoplethrowrubbisheverywhere.Ifeverybodycandosomethingstoprotecttheearth,ourenvironmentwillbemuchbeautiful.,Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector,Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingdaysintheyear.Ididalotofthingsthiswinterholidays.themostunforgetablethingistomakemybirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherbuythethingsweneedfromthesupermarket.Wemixedthefloorandeggs.Thenaddsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheiron.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilynumbers.Itwasreallydelicions.IwillneverforgetthatdaybecauseIlearnedtomakecakesaswellassharemyhappinesswithothers.,ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.,Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?,错误太多,10,Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.,1.Iclimedslowlyandwasverytried.,2.IthinkitisanunforgetablethingbecauseIhelpedsb.,climbed,tired,unforgettable,somebody,3.Onafridayafternoon,Iwentshoppingwithmymother.,Spelling（拼写）,（others),Friday,4.Icantforgetthatday.Becauseitisthelasttimewecancelebrateherbirthdaytogether.,Icantforgetthatdaybecause,5.Whatacrazydayitwas,Iwillrememberitforever.,!,Capitalletter（大小写）,Punctuation（标点符号）,6.Iwillrememberedthatdayforever.,remember,7.Ithoughtitishungry.,was,8.Mygrandmotheralwaystidyupmyroom.,tidies,9.Howunforgettablethisthingsis!,thing,Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.,Tense（时态）,Verbagreement(主谓一致),Wordform(词形）,10.Inmyfathershelp,Ibecamemorepatientthanbefore.,Withmyfathershelp,11.Tocutalongstorytoshort,.,Tocutalongstoryshort,12.IwenttoShihuabyabuswithmymother.,bybus,13.Mymothertoldmedontgiveitup.,toldmenottogiveitup,Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.,Phrases(短语和固定搭配）,14.Isawanoldladylayinthemiddleoftheroad.,sawanoldladylying,16.Weplayedsnowinfrontofhouse.,playedwith,15.Isatonaseat,listeningmusic.,listeningto,17.Thenaladyaskedwhohadbrokenherwindow.Weallwereafraid.,wereall,Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.,Missingwords（漏词）,18.Weshoulddothingsbyourownhands.,with,thehouse,19.Itistiredwork.,tiring,Wordsorder（词序）,Usingwrongword（选词错误）,22.Heencouragedmetolookforthewatchbyheart.,carefully,21.OneSundaymorning,IwenttoShihuabybusandsatbesidemewasagirl.,IwenttoShihuaonabusandtherewasagirlsittingbesideme.,Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.,ChineseEnglish（中式英语）,Inmylife,manythingshappened.,20.Inmylifehavemanythingshappened.,1.Environmentisveryimportantforus.,2.Inourlife,theproblemsofourenvironmentareveryimportant.,3.Wehavehurtittoomuchbycuttingdowntreesandpollutewaterandland.,4.Iwanttobeaenvironmentprotectorsothatsaveit.,5.Idsuggestmyparentstotakebusinsteadofdrivecar.,7.Iwillprogressmyhabbitssuchasuseabasketorapaperbag.,8.Ifeverybodycandosomethingstoprotecttheearth,ourenvironmentwillbemuchbeautiful.,6.Iwillpreventpeoplethrowrubbisheverywhere.,to,polluting,inordertosaveit/sothatIcansaveit,takeabusinsteadofdrivingacar,fromthrowing,developgoodhabits,using,something,muchmorebeautiful,serious,anenvironment,1,2,3,4.2,5,6,7.1,8.1,4.1,7.2,8.2,1.是否有大小写错误(capitallettersorlowercaseletters)是否有拼写错误(spellingmistakes)是否有标点错误(punctuationmistakes)4.是否有语法错误(grammarmistakes)主谓是否一致动词的时态语态的使用是否正确词组的搭配是否合乎习惯,CommonErrorsinEnglishwriting,Duringthewinterholidays,Ithappenedalotofthings.Oneofthethingswashelptasmallgirltofindhermother.Whenmyfriendsandmeshoppinginashoppingmall,wesawasmallgirlcriedinacorner.Weaskedwhathappenedonher.Shesaidshecuondtfoundhermother.Sowestartedtohelptshetofoundhermother.Luckily,wefoundhermother,theywereveryhappyandwewerehappy,too.IthinkitwasthemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysbecauseIfoundIalsocanhelpothers.,ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.,Checkandcorrectthisarticle.,alotofthingshappened.,helping,I,wereshopping,crying,happenedto,couldnt,find,help,her,find,.,They,couldalso,so,Duringthewinterholidays,Ithappenedalotofthings.Oneofthethingswashelptasmallgirltofindhermother.Whenmyfriendsandmeshoppinginashoppingmall,wesawasmallgirlcriedinacorner.Weaskedwhathappenedonher.Shesaidshecuondtfoundhermother.Sowestartedtohelptshetofoundhermother.Luckily,wefoundhermother,theywereveryhappyandwewerehappy,too.IthinkitwasthemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysbecauseIfoundIalsocanhelpothers.,ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.,alotofthingshappened.,helping,I,wereshopping,crying,happenedto,couldnt,find,help,her,find,.,They,couldalso,so,=9,7,+2,+0,Commentonthisarticle.,1.What?(1)2.descriptions(4)3.Why(2),Howshouldwecheckthepassage?1.查主题，文章是否符合题目要求，内容是否完整。(checkthetheme)2.查语法，是否有时态错误，是否有主谓不一致，是否有语态问题，是否有词形错误，是否有不合乎搭配的词组。(checkthegrammar)查标点，是否有标点错误(check