关于朱自清《匆匆》的两种英语译文对比与分析

关于朱自清匆匆的两种英语译文,对比与赏析,组员介绍：,PPT前期制作：。PPT制作：。PPT演讲：。,译文作者：,译文一作者：朱纯深,译文二作者：张培基,1,2,一、题目的对比,译文一：Rush（translatedbyZhuChunshen）译文二：TransientDays(translatedbyZhangPeiji)rush：asituationinwhichyouareinahurryandneedtodothingsquickly仓促行事，行事匆忙，做事草率Transient:continuingforonlyashorttime短暂的，转瞬即逝的倏忽相比之下，rush形容时间略带贬义，张培基的transient更符合时间的特性，也符合作者表达时间匆匆溜走的原意。,二、燕子去了，有再来的时候；杨柳枯了，有再青的时候；桃花谢了，有再开的时候。,译文一：Swallowsmayhavegone,butthereisatimeofreturn;willowtreesmayhavediedback,butthereisatimeofregreening;peachblossomsmayhavefallen,buttheywillbloomagain.译文二：Ifswallowsgoaway,theywillcomebackagain.Ifwillowswither,theywillturngreenagain.Ifpeachblossomsfade,theywillfloweragain.（1）dieback:ifaplantdiesback,itlosesitsleavesbutremainsalive叶凋而不死wither:ifaplantwithersorsthwithersit,itdriesupanddies枯萎，凋谢张译的wither只是单纯描绘树枯，而dieback却让我们感受到生命在轮回中的交替更新。（2）朱纯深的译文句式表达很好，正好与汉语的句式相当，并且把句子的内在含义表转折的意思表达出来。若将最后一句修改为和前句句式相同，这样译文就更显工整。,三、但是，聪明的，你告诉我，我们的日子为什么一去不复返呢？,译文一：Now,youthewise,tellme,whyshouldourdaysleaveus,nevertoreturn?译文二：But,tellme,youthewise,whyshouldourdaysgobynevertoreturn?（1）原文中虽有“但是”一词，但朱自清并非有表示转折的意思，张培基此处直译，使得译文略逊一筹。（2）leave一词有拟人的意义在里面，形容时间如人般离去，蕴含了时间的惋惜和感叹之情，而goby表示单纯表示时间的流逝，单调乏味，缺乏生动与美感。,四、是有人偷了他们吧：那是谁？又藏在何处呢？是他们自己逃走了吧：现在又到了哪里呢？,译文一：Iftheyhadbeenstolenbysomeone,whocoulditbe?Wherecouldhehidethen?Iftheyhadmadetheescapethemselves,thenwherecouldtheystayatthemoment?译文二：Perhapstheyhavejustrunawaybythemselves.Butwherecouldtheybeatthepresentmoment?朱纯深的译文忠实于原文，而张培基译文更显连贯，多使用被动语态，更显客观。,五、我不知道他们给了我多少日子；但我的手确乎是渐渐空虚了。,译文一：IdonotknowhowmanydaysIhavebeengiventospend,butIdofeelmyhandsaregettingempty.译文二：IdontknowhowmanydaysIamentitledtoaltogether,butmyquotaofthemisundoubtedlywearingaway.wearaway:tobecome,ormakesthbecome,graduallythinnerorsmootherbycontinuouslyusingorrubbingit磨光、磨薄，也可以指时间的流逝，以此烘托出作者内心的空虚与无奈。Empty：havenothinginsideempty貌似忠实于原文，实则缺乏内涵意义，更容易产生歧义。,六、在默默里算着，八千多日子已经从我手中溜去；,译文一：Takingstocksilently,Ifindthatmorethaneightthousanddayshasalreadyslidawayfromme.译文二：Countingupsilently,Ifindthatmorethan8,000dayshavealreadyslippedawaythroughmyfingers.takestock（ofsth.)：tothinkcarefullyaboutthethingsthathavehappenedinasituationinordertodecidewhattodonext(对某事物)作出估计评判,判断，估量Countingup：tocalculatethetotalnumberofpeople,things,etc.inaparticulargroup.原作中，朱自清在下文对日子还做了比喻，即引发了对时间的思考。结合上下文，可知朱纯深的“takingstock即(对某事物)作出估计评判,判断，估量”恰恰符合对时间的思考，而countup较多强调对日子的计算，并未体现出朱自清对时间的感慨。,七、像针尖上一滴水滴在大海里，我的日子滴在时间的流里，没有声音，也没有影子。,译文一：Likeadropofwaterfromthepointofaneedledisappearingintotheocean,mydaysaredrippingintothestreamoftime,soundless,traceless.译文二:Likeadropofwaterfallingoffaneedlepointintotheocean,mydaysarequietlydrippingintothestreamoftimewithoutleavingatrace.两位作者采用了不同的用词，disappearinginto，fallinginto两词中，disappearinginto更好的表现了间的来去匆匆，消逝的不留痕迹。而张培基旳译文中，用了的fallinginto和后文的disappearinginto也略显重复意味。,七、我不禁汗涔涔而泪潸潸了。,译文一：Alreadysweatisstartingonmyforehead,andtearswellingupinmyeyes.译文二：Atthethoughtofthis,sweatoozesfrommyforeheadandtearstrickledownmycheeks.朱