高三英语讲评开放式书面表达--三步作文法课件

书面表达：古人云：“笑福开来”。微笑是和谐的开始，微笑是沟通的通行证。微笑可以冰释前嫌，微笑可以舒缓窘境，微笑可以感化灵魂，微笑可以增强自信，微笑可以增添魅力，微笑可以请你以微笑为主题写一篇英语短文，题目自拟。注意：1.对所提示内容不要简单翻译，可以适当发挥。2.词数150左右。3.文中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。,Beforewriting审题审主题：smile(微笑)审人称：要求以微笑为主题写一篇英语短文。Smilingisthebeginningofharmony.(smilingcausesharmony.)smilingrelievesstress故人称应为第三人称。2.审时态：smilingissmilingdoes一般现在时,3.审要点：微笑是和谐的开始，微笑是沟通的通行证，微笑可以冰释前嫌，微笑可以舒缓窘境，微笑可以感化灵魂，微笑可以增强自信，微笑可以增添魅力，微笑可以4.列提纲：三段法模式第一段：Introduction:主题句或背景导入或使用hook.第二段：Body:具体细节或具体论据既要点陈述。第三段：Conclusion:换种说法重申主题或提出倡议、号召。（目前大多数作文的要求是表达自己的观点）,Whilewriting(注意书写)表达要点：用动宾短语来表达。makeusattractive.causeharmony.changeourmood.buildupthebridgeofcommunication.meanconfidence.relievestress.meansuccessmakeusseemsuccessfulhelpstaypositive.,2.扩展成句：Smilingmakesusattractive.Smilingchangesourmood.Smilingrelievesstress.Smilingpeopleappearmoreconfident.Smilinghelpsusstaypositive.,连缀成文：关联词的使用。复杂句的使用。高级词汇的使用。Smilingmakesusattractive.Wearedrawntopeoplewhosmile.Smilingchangesourmood,asitcantrickthebodyintofeelingbetter.Smilingisinfectious.Whensomeoneissmilingtheylightenuptheroom,changethemoodsofothers,andmakethemhappier.Smilingrelievesstress.Ithelpstopreventusfromlookingtired.Smilingpeopleappearmoreconfident,andaremorelikelytobeapproached.Smilinghelpsusstaypositive.Whenwesmileourbodyissendingtherestofusamessagethat“LifeisGood!”,Afterwriting检查单词拼写、标点符号等。检查要点是否遗漏。检查句子结构是否正确。估计字数是否符合要求。,学生作文中错误的句子：Keepyoursmiles,youwillhealthierinthefuture.Smilingalsocontributesyourselfconfident.Smilealsocanincreaseoursconfidentwhichhasagoodeffectonourswork.Aidiomgoesthatwhenyousmiles,youwillownhappiness.Notonlysmilingcanpromotethedevelopmentofnationshipswithothers,butalsoitcanmakeourselveslivebetterthanbefore.,be,and,to,Self-confidence,ourconfidence,our,An,smile,cansmiling,friendship,学生作文中较好的句子：Whileyouaresad,agentlesmilefromyourfriendsorevenstrangerswillcheeryouup.(王娟)Asisknowntousall,smilingisthebeginningofharmony.（刘晓菲）Sincesmilinghasmanyadvantages,whydontyousmileallthetime?Laughterisagoodmedicine.Ifyoureallysmile,youwilllivelongerandleadahappylife.(吴晓远)Forexample,itisthebeginningofharmonyanditisalsoagoodwaytocommunicatewithothers.(刘静),抄阅读文章中的句子;不知所云.得分为0分,语言素质欠缺;基本功差;语句毛病多;大小写;标点符号;书写不清等等;得5分.,卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得12分,语言不地道;中文式思维;词汇错误;卷面有涂改;得15分.,有少许语言错误;得23分,范文：WhyDoWeSmile?Everybodylikessmiling.Butwhydowesmile?Smilingmakesusattractive.Wearedrawntopeoplewhosmile.Smilingchangesourmood,asitcantrickthebodyintofeelingbetter.Smilingisinfectious.Whensomeoneissmilingtheylightenuptheroom,changethemoodsofothers,andmakethemhappier.Smilingrelievesstress.Ithelpstopreventusfromlookingtired.Smilingpeopleappearmoreconfident,andaremorelikelytobeapproached.Smilinghelpsusstaypositive.Whenwesmileourbodyissendingtherestofusamessagethat“LifeisGood!”Sojusttrysmilingourwaythroughtheday.Stayaw