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个人例子整合,例子写法回顾1分析题目,找出抽象词2列出抽象词的细节,组织顺序。3论点+中间例子的描述+议论4中间例子描述过程中:一段细节可以加上一两句总结。,Failure-success失败-世界联合书院竞选失败成功-模拟联合国竞选成功,Mypersonalexperiencecanbeservedasacompellingexample.,Iwasbornashyandretiringgirl.Iamalwaysseekingchancestoimprovemyinter-personalskills.Twomonthsago,therecameanopportunitytoentertheUnitedWorldCollege(UWC),aworld-renownedgroupofinternationalhighschoolsaimingatpromotingtheunderstandingbetweendifferentcountries.Studentswhodliketoenterthisschoolneedtopasstwointerviews,onewithourschoolEnglishteachersandanotherwithteachersfromUWC.Aftertwodaysofconsideration,Idecidedtoapplyfortheschoolmostlybecauseofthechanceofaninterview.,Beforetheinterviewday,IwatchedChristopherGardnersinterviewwithhisbossinthefilm“ThePursuitofHappiness”againandagain,imagininghowIshouldbehavethenextday.Thenthedayfinallycame.Thereweretotally29studentsapplyingfortheschoolandweweredividedinto3groups.IwasdesignatedtoGroupC,thelastgroup,withtheother8students.,Duringtheinterview,wewereaskedtohaveadiscussiononthreerandomtopics,eachtopicfor10minutestimeafter3minutespreparation.ItalkedaboutmyanswerwithinmyheartoverandoverbutIwasjusttooafraidtospeakthemout.Listeningtoothergroupmembersvoicingtheiropinionfluentlyandconfidently,IknewIshouldntwaitanymoreandIshouldtalkasthenextspeaker.,“Allright.Ithinkwecanviewthisquestiononanotheraspect.”SuchwordsmiraculouslycameoutofmymouthandIknewIwasbeingchallengingmyself.Theclassroomwassuddenlyquiet,leavingme,alone,totalk.Ifeltalittlebitblankanddisorderedinmymind.Itriedtoorganizethosefragmentsofideasbutitseemedreallyhard.Withshynessagainsurpassingmyconfidence,Ihawed,blushedandtittered,endingmyspeechinahurry.,ItookapeepattheteachergradingformebutIhadnodesiretoseemyscoreandIwasafraidso.Fortherestofthediscussion,Ididntcatchanychancetospeak,notbecauseofmylackofquicknessbutformyfear.Icoweredagain.通过背景介绍引入面试环节,营造不成功的细节。,Aftertheinterview,weninestudentsallgotalittlebitreliefbuttherewasstillsomeaftershockinmyheart.Oneofmyfriends,alsoanapplicantatthisinterview,Jane,noticedmyfeelingsandcametome.“ItsOK,Lily.”saidJaneslappingonmyback,“Everyonehashisfirsttimeandyouvebehavedwellreally.Justtrytobemoreactiveandconfidentnexttime.Getyourthoughtsorganizedandspeakthemoutwithoutcaringtoomuchaboutothers.”SherestedasmileonmeandIfeltalittlebetter.(通过朋友点出了问题),Threedayslater,theresultcameout.OnthenamelistwasnomynamebutJanesand3otherstudents.IsentmycongratulationstoJaneandsheencouragedmeinreturn.Thoughfeelingsomesortofupset,IseizedallthefollowingchancestoimprovemyEnglishspeakingskills.EveryWednesdayafternoon,IwenttotheEnglishcorneratschooltocommunicatewithotherstudentsandforeignteachers.IalsoreadnewspapersandwatchedTVtogettoknowcurrentaffairs.(失败让我做出的改变),MyeffortsfinallypaidoffinanothercompetitionoftheModelUnitedNations(MUN)twodaysago.(承上启下)Thistime,8applicantscompetedfor5ticketstogototheMUNinFudanUniversityinJuly.Eachofuswasgivenafamiliartopicandwasaskedtotalkonthetopicwithoutevenasecondofpreparation.MytopicwastovoicemyopinionsabouttheInternetaddiction.,WiththeexperienceandcourageIacquiredatmylastinterview(承上启下),Istoodupandgavemyanswerinafluentandorganizedmanner.Thoughstillabitshyatthebeginning,Isoonovercameitandexpressedmyselfwell.IcouldseetheaffirmationintheteacherseyesandIknewIcouldprobablygetit.TheresultwaslikewhatIpredicted.IgotasecondplaceandwonatickettotheMUN!(营造成功),AllofmyselfwasfullofsuchecstasythatIalmostjumpedoutoftheclassroom.Attheschoolentrance,IhappenedtomeetJanewhowasabouttoleave.“Youknowwhat?IGOTIT!IGOTatickettotheMUN!”Iexcitedlyrockedherbicyclebasket.“Congratulations!”shesmiledasshealwaysdid.(成功后的喜悦),Frommypersonalexperience,wecaneasilyconcludethathadInothadthatfailureinterview,Iwouldnthavepracticedalotlaterandhadsuchcourageandconfidencetofacethenextchance.Itisthatfailurethatactuallyledmetomysuccess.(议论),Aretherebenefitstobegainedfromavoidingtheuseofmoderntechnology,evenwhenusingitwouldmakelifeeasier?技术-因特网好处:帮助适应生活。怎么写之前不适应(天气语言包括课程)+因特网出现+慢慢适应,Attheageof16,offeredafour-yearscholarshipbytheMinistryofEducationinSingapore,IleftmyhomelandChinaandbegantostudyinRiverValleyHighSchoolinSingapore.ButthefirstfewmonthstherealmostdrovemecrazyduringwhichIhadtoadjusttoabrandnewcircumstance.Precisely,1theweathertherewasmorethanuncomfortablecomparedwithmyhometown-Suzhou,amedium-sizedcityinChinawithacoolandpleasantweather.IcouldhardlyadjustmyselftotheheatofSingapore.,2Morethanthat,thelanguagewasalsoabigbarrier.AllofmyteachersandclassmatesspokeinEnglishwithastrangeSingaporeanaccent,whichwastotallyunfamiliartome.Sobeitinaclassorarestaurant,misunderstandingfrequentlyarose,whichgreatlyhamperedmycommunicationwiththenativepeople.,3Atthesametime,Ialsocameuponanotherproblem,namely,somanyunexpectedextracurriculums,suchasband,choirandbadminton.AsatypicalChinesestudent,IpaidmuchofmyattentiontostudysinceIwasaprimaryschoolstudent,hardlyplayinginthesportsfieldorattendingmusicalgroups.Butatthattime,noonethoughtitwasaproblemasmostofmyteacherswouldonlypointatmyhighscoresandlaughedbroadly.,ButinSingapore,extracurriculumsareanessentialindexinweighingtheoverallperformanceofastudent.SoIhadnowaybuttoattendachoir,butIwasataloss,forIwasnotaccustomedtosingingbeforetheaudience.(营造3点不适应),Fortunately,Igotahelper-mylaptop.Everynightat9p.m,Iwouldturnonmycomputer,usingMSNtocommunicatemymomanddad.ThismomentwasinvaluabletomeasIcouldspeakoutmyinnerthoughts,releasemypressureandmoreimportantlygetthecouragetotryagain.(帮手出现了),Mymomwasconsistentlypatientandconsiderate,whogavemecomfortandencouragement.InmyfirstfewmonthsinSingaporeshewouldoftensay,Stopcomplaining.Youhavetochangeyourselfasyoucouldnotchangethecircumstance.Ifyoufeelhot,takeoffyourcoatanddrinkmorewater.Maybeyoufeelalienated,butyouknowwearealwaysstandingbehindyou.Youarenotalone.Ifyouthinkyouarenotgoodatsinging,youcouldpracticemorebeforemeandyourfather.Weareforeveryoursincerefans.ShedrovethosewordssodeepintomyheartthatIfinallymadeit.(如何帮助的),Halfayearlater,IgraduallygotusedtomynewlifeinSingapore.1Thoughitwasstillhot,IbegantoenjoywearingvariouskindsofniceT-shirtsalltheyeararound.2Thoughmyclassmatesandteachersstillspokedifferentlyfromme,Ibegantoenjoymimickingtheiruniqueaccentperfectly.3ThoughIwasstillalittleshywhenIwassingingbeforestrangers,Ibegantoenjoymyvoice.IevenbecameanhonorabletreasureroftheScholarCommitteeorganizedbytheMinistryofEducation.,议论,Lookingback,haditnotbeenfortheInternet,afantasticproductofmoderntechnology,Iwouldnothavebroughtoutthebestofme,whocouldsinghappilybeforealargecrowdandtalkexcitedlywithalotofSingaporeanfriendsinatropicalcountry.Therefore,itisclearthattheadventofmoderntechnologycontributedalotingivingusabetterlife.,Docloseddoorsmakeuscreative?关上的门-失败-细化以前没人尝试过创造力-unusualideas-自己用方法帮助模特换了衣服,Theexampleofmyselfindressingamodelcouldprovethepointthatdifficultiesdogiverisetounusualideas.(P),manikin,OnedaywhenIwasattheageofabout10,Iwentoutwithmyauntoneday.ThenshetookmeouttooneclothingshopownedbyJane,oneofherefriends,tobuydressings.Inthattinyshopstoodsomewomenmodelswearingtheshopsstate-of-artdresses.IsoonbecameinterestedinthesemodelsandbeganstudyinghowJanedressedthesemodels.,Interestingly,Idiscoveredthatoneofthemodelswasjustwearingpartofasuit,thedress,withoutthecoat,soIaskedwhyJanedidntputitonforthemodel.Sheansweredthatbecausethemodelsarmscouldonlyberevolvedupanddownaroundhershoulder,shewasnotabletodressthecoatonher.(困境)Herwordsdisappointedmeforamomentsinceanincompletedressingcouldnotshowthebeautyofthedesign.(为什么创造),Thusanideaoftryingtodressthemodelwiththecoatcametome.“WhymustIbelievethecloseddoors?Imaybeabletomakeit!”Motivatedbythisthought,ItriedeverymeansIcouldthinkoftodressthemodelwhilemyauntandJanechattinghappilyatthecounter,totallyunawareofmyexistence.(开始创新),Afterseveralfailures,Itriedanotherway:putdownthetwoarmsofthemodelandmakethemgetthroughthesleevesatthesametime.(如何创新)“Ivemadeit!Ihaveputonthecoatforthemodel!”Icriedwithrapture.“Wow!”acclaimedJane,“Itsunconceivable!Nooneeversucceededbefore.Youaresuchacreativegirl!”Afterhearingherpraise,Ifeltsoproudofmyself.(结果),议论Ifithadntbeenforher“closeddoor”thatitwasimpossibletodressonthecoat,Iwouldnthavehadtheideatohaveatryandfinallysuccessfullycreatedthatmethod.Itwastheimpossibilitythatmotivatedme.,思路集合,Point:Yes.Theexampleofmedesigningtheyearbookofmyschool.细节:我擅长用photoshop之类的软件,一个人担任yearbook的设计,从来没有设计过这么大的东西,在电脑前呆了很久一点都没头绪(困难)(无力感)通过爸爸找了一个设计公司的姐姐,她教我了很多,她说我可以到网上找其他大公司的annualreport借鉴设计元素(1stoutdoor)我回家在网上找到了很多设计非常精美的annualreports,举例,P&G和Apple.利用这些reports,我学到了很多设计元素,并且出色的完成了yearbook(2ndoutdoor)(成功),P:yesI:inaJapaneselaboratory,aresearchworkercreatedthefirstplasticconductorwhichbroughthimtheNobelPrize.Buttheprototypeofthisnewmaterialisonlycreatedbyasillymistake.E:setbackcanmakepeopleseetheanotheraspectofstufforcanhelppeoplesolveanotherproblemwithoutintention.,Isitnecessarytochallengetheauthority?权威-谁-老师为什么挑战-犯错误,挑战权威,Likemanyotherpeers,Igotoschooltoobtainknowledgefromteacherseveryday.Tousstudents,teacherscanbeviewedasanauthoritysincetheirstatementsandopinionsarealwaystakenforgranted.(树立权威)However,haventteachersevermadeamistake?Iamafraidtheyhave.,OnceourEnglishteachertaughtusanewword“frustrated”,sheledustoreadthiswordoverandoveragainwiththepronunciationas“flustrated”.However,noneoftheotherstudentspointedoutthismistakeandnordidI.IguessmostoftheotherstudentsthoughtlikeIdid:thepronunciationofflustratedmightbeasecondoptionforthiswordandmoreover,howcouldateacherpossiblybewrong?Withthiskindofidea,wedidntevenrefer
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