高考读后续写附答案解析加解读ppt课件

1、读后续写,I looked out at the smiling faces packed into the school hall. Flashes from the cameras lit up in all directions. The applause filled my ears. I had done it. I really had done it. Just a few months earlier, I would never have pictured myself acting in a play in front of two hundred people. But

2、when the time came, I got up on stage and faced one of my greatest fears and discovered I could do more than I ever gave myself credit for. I found a new person inside me, a much more daring, outgoing person who had been hidden all along, just waiting for the opportunity to appear. If not for my tea

3、cher, Mrs Sather, I might never have found that opportunity. In the first and second grade, I was extremely shy. I had friends, but it just wasnt in my personality to be very outgoing , even when I knew someone well. I was afraid I would do or say something wrong, so usually I just smiled and listen

4、ed to other peoples conversations. I did well in school and I loved to write. However, I would escape into my writing, where I could be myself and never had to worry about what other people thought of me. In my stories, I was never shy. My teacher always encouraged me to write more. She told our cla

5、ss to go after our dreams and dig in with both hands. I think she was one of the first people to see my inner strength. One day, she announed that our class was going to perform a play she had written. “Ill begin to cast everyone tomorrow,” she said. “I need someone who is not afraid to be on stage

6、in front of a lot of people to play the lead part of Dorothy. Anybody want to try?” A few excited hands shot upmine, of course, was not one of them and Mrs Sather smiled. “Well talk more about it tomorrow,” she said. Then the bell rang and my classmates slowly left the classroom,Paragraph 1： When I

7、was loading up my packpack, Mrs Sather asked me to go to her._ Paragraph 2： Hearing my words, Mrs Sather looked at my eyes as if seeing my inner self locked away inside. _,读后续写出现的问题以及解决方法,1.描写角度少，导致描写不细腻，不深刻。 解决方法：多维度描写 动作、情感、心理、语言、环境等方面的描写 2.内心冲突没有很好的展现出来 解决方法：通过老师的劝说和自己的内心戏的斗争过程来体现。不要老师一劝说，自己没有内心挣

8、扎过程直接同意，要放大内心冲突，刻画好内心戏，也就是心理描写要细腻。 3.与人物性格、身份不符 解决方法：写作之前一定要分析好人物角色的性格，所言所行都要贴合人物性格和身份。本文作者是一个害羞的人，如果直接对老师说“Absolutely not”来回绝老师的要求，不符合人物的性格。而用“I.I dont think.I am right for the part”这种表达就能很好表现作者的不自信。 4.对话描写占比重大，废话多 解决方法：无助情节推动的，偏离人物性格的和偏离文章主线的对话绝对不用。 1-2处对话即可,范文第一段 1. Confused, I nodded and hurried

9、 to join her. confused 为形容词做伴随状语，为情感描写。nod and hurry 并列两个谓语动作，为动作描写。 2. Mrs Sather said, “I was thinking you would be perfect for Dorothy. But I was surprised you didnt raise your hand.” 此处为1处语言描写。用到了词组be perfect for sth很适合. 用到了句型 I was surprised that从句 3. Me, the lead? Was she crazy? I was terrifie

10、d at the thought of standing on stage in front of all those people. I told her that it seemed really hard because I was never good at talking in front of people. 此处主要运用心理描写，包括连续两个问号的使用，很细腻地刻画了自己当时的难以置信，害怕的心理。用到了词组be terrified at sth对.很害怕,范文第二段 1.She said，”But I had you in mind for Dorothy while writ

11、ing the play! If you really dont want to, I wont make you. Its your choice.” 这是第2处语言描写。 2.My mind was spinning fast. Mrs Sather, whom I loved and admired, wanted me in this role. She believed in me. I realised it was time to throw off my shy mask and show the world who I really was. 此处主要运用心理描写，描写地很细

12、腻。此处用到了一个非限制性定语从句。 3. She was right and the performance was very successful. And I overcame my inner fear as well. 最后点题。 在文章中出现了fear， afraid， shy， inner strength， inner self等关键词，可以提炼这些关键词，稍加修改化为己用来升华主题收尾,注意积累文章中的优美语句,1. Flashes from the cameras lit up in all directions. 2. The applause filled my ear

13、s. 此处用到了无灵主语 中国人习惯用人称主语，而英语中则常用无灵主语，即无生命的事物做主语，而避免“我”“我们”这样带有明显主观色彩的词语做主语，或是为了起到拟人化，形象化的效果,更多无灵主语的例子,主语是情感状态的抽象名词，谓语动词可选择：fill, grip, surround, seize, overwhelm,consume, overcome，take hold of, deprive等，在读后续写中运用比较多。 I felt scared. 改为 Fear seized/took hold of /flooded /consumed me. He couldnt speak. 改

14、为Her voice abandoned him I cant bear the heat. 改为The heat is unbearable,He lost his confidence/courage. 改为Confidence/Courage deserted him. I forgot his name. 改为：His name escaped my mind. I came up with an idea. 改为：An idea occurred to/ hit/struck me. I am homesick. Homesickness overwhelms me,有关自信的句子积累,1. The greatest prison that people live in is the fear of what other people think.人最大的牢笼常常是由对别人看法的恐惧铸成的。 2.The best way to de