望帆关于初级写作InteractiveWriting3-汇总

1、望帆关于初级写作 Interactive Writing 3-4 考前答疑 VOB 的发言大纲 Writing Checklist: 1. Typical Errors: 2. 1. Ineffective Sentence Fragments.:2. 2. Run-on Sentences: 2 3. Misplaced and Dangling Modifiers: 3. 4. Parallelism: 3 5. Article and preposition:3. 6. Tense:4 7. Collocation and coherence.:4. 8. Capitalization

2、and Italics: 5. Interactive Writing 3(related writing topics) 6. Interactive Writing 4 (related writing topics) : 7. Writing Checklist: Think about the following questions as you revise your own writing. 1. Content a. Is the story/narration/description/argument clear? b. Is the information relevant?

3、 2. Organization a. Is the organization clear? b. Is there an interesting and relevant title? c. Are there good topic sentences, ending remark? 3. Cohesion and Style a. Is there variation in your words and expressions? b. Is there sufficient description, i.e., enough details that c. Can the reader f

4、ollow the sequence,but not so many that the reader loses interest in the story? 4. Grammar a. What is the general context for this description b. Is the correct form of the past/present continuous tense used? c. Is correct sentencestructure used, e.g., no run-on sentences;no sentence fragments? d. A

5、re words appropriate/correct? 5. Form a. Is it a letter writing? Does it need special format? b. Are commas used correctly? c. Is quotation punctuation used correctly? d. Are the words in the title correctly capitalized? Typical Errors: 1. Ineffective Sentence Fragments: Ineffective sentence fragmen

6、ts reflect incomplete or confused thinking. They can be a single words, a phrase, a subordinate clauses or any other word group which violates the accepted subject-verb pattern. Sample 1: Fragment: The next afternoon we came to the waterfall. The most beautiful sight on our journey. Revision: The ne

7、xt afternoon we came to the waterfall, the most beautiful sight on our journey. (in the original sentence appositive phrase are used as sentence) Sample 2: Fragment: He finally decided to leave school. Because he was utterly bored with his work and was failing all his courses. Revision: He finally d

8、ecided to leave school because he was utterly bored with his work and was failing all his courses. (in the original sentence, subordinate clause are used as sentence) Sample 3: Fragment: The man who talked for an hour not realizing everyone was bored. Revision 1: The man who talked for an hour did n

9、ot realizing everyone was bored. Revision 2: The man talked for an hour, not realizing everyone was bored. 2. Run-on Sentences: A run-on sentence is two or more complete thoughts( or independent clauses) that are run together with no adequate sign given to mark the break between them. Sample 1: Frag

10、ment: A man is drowning in the water, maybe he has just fallen overboard. Revision 1: A man is drowning in the water. Maybe he has just fallen overboard. (2 sentences) Revision 2: A man is drowning in the water; maybe he has just fallen overboard. (using a semi-colon to connect) ( The second option

11、is better because it ties the two ideas closer together.) Sample 2: Fragment: From your home, you can call taxi, to forward to north along the East third ring, when you arrive the ANHUA flyover, turn right to North, then you should pass a panda island and continually to forward to North, when you ar

12、rive first cross, turn left to West, and then turn right when you arrive a cross, go on to North, and turn left when you see a small cross.In there, you ll find some beautiful buildings, called “HUATING JIAYUAN”, I m living beside them. Revision: From your place, take a taxi north along East Third R

13、ing Road. At the Anhua flyover, turn right and head north. Keep your eye open for Panda Island. It will be on your right. At the first intersection past Panda Island, turn left. Then at the next intersection, turn right. Continue straight ahead and at the first small intersection, the onewithout a l

14、ight, turn left. You ll see a big sign saying,“ HuaTing JiaYuan live in Building 56, Unit 2, Room 101. 3. Misplaced and Dangling Modifiers: Misplaced or Dangling Modifiers break the fundamental rule. They change the sense of the sentence and sometimes even make it meaningless or ridiculous. Sample 1

15、: Misplaced: Sometimes he writes letters to his girl friend in class, and sometimes he reads novels under the desk. .( The entire sentence needs to be re-written so that modifiers are closer to the words they are meant to modify.) Revision: In class, he sometimes writes letters to his girlfriend, an

16、d sometimes he reads novels while hiding them under the desk Sample 2: Misplaced: On Sunday I almost walked to the park. (this sentence implies that the writer decided not to go for a walk. However, this is not what he means) Revision:On Sunday I walked almost to the park. Sample 3: Dangling: Swimmi

17、ng in the lake, a rock cut my foot. Revision: Swimming in the lake, I had my foot cut on a rock. Sample 4: Dangling: To apply, an application form must be filled out. Revision: To apply, you must fill out an application form. 4. Parallelism: Parallelism is the rhetorical principle that sentence elem

18、ents having the same grammatical function should be put in the same grammatical form. It is the writers technique of balancing like with like. Sample1: Original: In his spare time, Lu Tao likes to read novel, watch various movies, listen music and traveling.Sentence lacks parallelism Revision: In hi

19、s spare time, Lu Tao likes to read novels, watch movies, listen to music, and travel abroad. Original: To jump, to run, or just swinging can be all the exercise a child needs. Revision: Jumping, running, or just swimming can be all the exercise a child needs. 5. Article and preposition: Sample 1: Or

20、iginal: Maya is one of my classmates in our University, and she lives on the campus. Revision: Maya is one of my classmatesat our university, and she lives on campus. Sample 2: Original: Lu Tao is also studying in Beijing Academic Movie University. Revision:Lu Tao is also studying at the Beijing Aca

21、demic Movie University. Sample 3: Original: “ Spring Festival is Chinese traditional holiday.” Revision: Spring Festival is a traditional Chinese holiday. (The word holiday is a countable noun and is mentioned in the passagefor the first time, so it needs the indefinite article a.) Sample 4: we all

22、dont want our mailboxes arefully occupied by spam. Revision: We do not want our mailboxes to be fully crammed/staffed by“spam”. (“all ”is redundant. where there is no this then that or those is not appropriate; also spam is singular and uncountable) 6. Tense: When he was asked why he selected this c

23、ourse to study English, he said Revision: When he was asked why hehad selectedthis course to study English, he . Historical Present Tense: When you discuss a novel that was written in the past or describe a painting that was painted in the past, you might think that you do so by using the past tense

24、. After all,the novel was written in the past and the paintingwas painted in the past. However, it is not the past tense that is used; instead, it is the present tense. Why? Each time you read the novel, the characters and events come alive. Similarly, each time you look at a painting, the story tha

25、t the painting conveys comes alive. (The present tense in these contexts is known as the historical present tense.) There is an exception: You do use the past tense if you are presenting facts about the item, e.g., The painting Watson and the Sharkwasdone by John Singleton Copley. 7. Collocation and

26、 coherence: Sample 1: His major is radio communication. He is taking mathematics, physics, and English classes. Revision: Becausehis major is radio communication, he is taking mathematics, physics, and English. (sentence connection/conjunction) Sample 2: “Because people in south China think the egg

27、Jiaozi will bring you rich andlucky, so every year in the Spring Festival we will have egg Jiaozi.” Revision: Use either Because peopleeveyear .or People ,so every year Do not use bothbecauseand soin this type of structure. Sample 3: For example, I often drink traditional herbs when I had a cold. Th

28、en my mother also used traditional treatment to treat a painfulbody such as used herb,straditional acupuncture, andold Chinese massage. Revision: For example, I often drink traditional herbs when I have a cold. When I was ill as achild, my mother also used traditional treatment to treat an aching bo

29、dy such as herbs, traditional acupuncture, anCd hinese massage. Sample 4: Secondly, large universities offer more advanced teaching and experimental facilities, so students can gain rich, broad knowledge. Revision: Secondly, large universities offer more advanced teaching facilities, so studentshave

30、 a greater opportunityto gain a broader based knowledg.e 8. Capitalization and Italics: Title: My classmate - My Classmate Words in a title are capitalized except forinternal articles, conjunctions, prepositions, and the to of infinitives. Name: Hu tao - Hu Tao Names of people are capitalized. Names

31、 of locations: Hebeiprovince- Hebei Province Names of geographical or political divisions are capitalized when they are essential parts of specific names. “thanksgiving .” Thanksgiving -.(The names of holidays start with a capital letter.) Book title/movie title should be in italics. Eg: Star War is

32、 my favorite movie. She hasmany English courses such as Enrichment English, Comprehensive English, English writing and so on. Revision: She has taken/attended/completed (depending on what you mean) many English courses such as Enrichment English, Comprehensive English, English writing and so on. (If

33、 these are the names of courses in schools or colleges that should not be in italics; if they are book titles, they should be) 考试临近了 , 你有没有开始进行有效的复习呢 ? 请大家仔细阅读分析写作课程考试模拟题目, 最 后的考试题目形式和样题是一样的 ! 请仔细阅读分析题干要求并抓住写作要点来模拟写一下 , 一 定会有不小的收获 . 下面是我为大家精心准备收集的写作题目 , 基本是按照课本上的范围来模拟出的写作题目 , 请大 家一定好好看看 . 如果没有时间练习写全

34、部的话题 ,大家可以采用略写提纲和精写主题句 (topic sentence) 的策略来练习 ,一样可以收到好的复习准备效果 . Interactive Writing 3(related writing topics) Unit 1-Education and Student Life ) ) 1234 567 On-Campus Living Vs. Off-Campus Living, which is better? I Prefer to Study in a Traditional College/ Online Institute Study Abroad, Beneficial

35、 or at High Risk? Do you agree that if possible all college students should spend some time studying in a foreign country/ or should spend some time practicing in rural area? I Prefer a Small-size Class/ a Large-size Class Team Work or Individual Work, which is more efficient? Online English learnin

36、g mode, more advantages or more disadvantages? Unit 2-City Life ) 123456 City Life or Rural Life, which is more favorable? A Good Place for Old People/Children/Young People to Live Good Neighborhood is Priceless and Precious My Favorite Place (library, park, museum or etc) My Beautiful School My Pro

37、posal for Reconstructing a Place in My Community Unit 3-Business and Money ) 12345678 Time is Money Live to Work or Work to Live Can Money buy everything? Lotteries Should Be Illegal Gambling Should Be Banned Borrowing Money Always Causes Problem Should Wealth be Equally Distributed to Everyone? Edu

38、cation Should Be Free for Everyone Unit 4-Jobs and Professions ) ) 1234 5678 My Ideal Career My Routine Work An Unforgettable Work Experience Should People be trained to be specialists /masters in a narrow field or to be Jack- of-all-trade but no business is professional? My Attitude towards Work/Li

39、fe A Whole-Person Development Project Volunteer Work, Valuable Experience? Creating Good Work/Living Environment Unit 5-Life styles Around the World ) 1234567 How to Deal with Lies? Not-Keeping Promises is the Worst Habit A Frustrating Day A Slight Change Makes My Life Totally Different How to Kill

40、Time When Sitting in Traffic My Way to Squeeze Time to Self-Learning Work at Home, Good or not? 8) My Way to Spend Spare Time Unit 6-Global Connections Global Village, Good for Everyone? Should we preserve more Specialties in Globalization trend? Great Changes in My Hometown An Imagination of the Wo

41、rld in Next Twenty Years Effective Ways to Lessen Generation Gaps Should we all choose to speak a Common Language? ) 123456 Interactive Writing 4 (related writing topics) : Unit 7-Language and Communication Why More and More People want to Immigrate to Other Countries? The Difficulties Newcomers Mee

42、t In a Foreign Country Learn To Live in a New Place Culture Shock US Culture-a Melting Pot How to Overcome Homesick Learning a Language in Native Speaking Environment ) 1234567 Unit 8-Tastes and Preference I Prefer to Live On Campus/Off Campus Buying Ones Own House to Live Vs. Renting a House to Live Live Alone or Share Room with Others, which is better? Live in Downtown Vs. Live in Suburb My Ideal Home My Past/Present Living Conditions ) 123456 Unit 9-I Wish I Could Go to Mars/Jupiter One