高考英语 My Pocket Money 英语书面表达写作指导

1、高考英语 My Pocket Money 英语书面表达写作指导 假如你是某国际学校记者站的小记者,你校以How I Spend My Pocket Money为题向全校学生做问卷调查,结果如以下表格所示。请你写一篇文章分析该调查结果反映的问题并给出你的建议,发表在校英文网站上。词数:120左右。项目花费(元/月)占每月总支出百分比书籍1512.5文具108.3服装5041.7零食2016.7娱乐2520.8合计120100写作分析:第一步,认真审题,提炼要点。 一审体裁:本次写作任务为说明文体裁写作。 二审结构:文章可分为三部分。首先,简要交代关于问卷调查的一些情况,如调查的内容和结果等,以引

2、出写作的主题。然后,结合表格中的数据分析调查结果反映的问题。最后,根据反映的问题给出自己的建议。 三审要点:用英语思维,理出写作要点。1. spend 120 yuan of pocket money2. dont spend much on books and stationery3. lead to serious problems4. pursue material comforts5. help the students spend money reasonably6. their parents and teachers第二步,紧扣主题,扩点成句。1. A high school s

3、tudent spends 120 yuan of pocket money per month on average.2. They dont spend much on books and stationery.3. Students spend too much money on clothing and snacks, which could lead to serious problems.4. They may learn to pursue material comforts.5. For the sake of helping the students spend money

4、reasonably .6. Their parents and teachers should teach them what is important and how to spend money properly.第三步,补充修改,连句成篇。范文1:Nowadays a high school student spends 120 yuan of pocket money per month on average. Almost half of the money is spent on clothing. And the money spent on amusement and sna

5、cks takes up 20.8% and 16.7% of the 120 yuan respectively. However, they dont spend much on books and stationery.Obviously, students spend too much money on clothing and snacks, which could lead to serious problems. For example, they may learn to pursue material comforts and compare clothing with th

6、at of their classmates, both of which will have a bad impact on their studies.Accordingly, for the sake of helping the students spend money reasonably, their parents and teachers should teach them what is important and how to spend money properly. 亮点展示:1. 文章结构合理:首段介绍调查情况,第二段阐述其危害,最后一段提出自己的建议；2. 正确使用

7、定语从句,使文章句式多样:., students spend too much money on clothing ., which could lead to serious problems. / ., they may learn to pursue material comforts ., both of which will have a bad .3. obviously和accordingly 不仅使文章更有逻辑性,而且起到了承上启下的作用。范文2:According to the survey on How I Spend My Pocket Money conducted b

8、y our school, students spend about 120 yuan of pocket money per month on average. Compared with the small amount spent on books and stationery, almost half of the money is spent on clothing. In addition, money spent on snacks and amusement makes up a large share of the total spending.It is quite eas

9、y to see that too little money is spent on books. As students, our job is to study hard and learn as much as we can, especially in such a rapidly developing society. If we dont equip ourselves with knowledge, we could fall behind the others and sink to the bottom of the society.As far as I can see,

10、we should concentrate on our studies and attach great importance to knowledge, which comes from books. 亮点展示:1. 文章首句点明调查的内容和结果,直接点明写作的主题:According to the survey ., students spend about 120 yuan of pocket money per month .2. 文章词汇表达丰富:compare with, equip with及concentrate on等；3. 最后一段用一句话点明自己的建议,语气坚定:As

11、far as I can see, we should concentrate ., which comes from books.Powerful Sentences:1. It is useful to read a reasonable amount of science fiction, but you shouldnt become crazy about it; otherwise you could have trouble adapting to reality.2. Recently we had a meeting to discuss what should be con

12、sidered to be honor-able behavior and what is shameful.3. I hope that the results of my survey can attract the attention of our parents and teachers.4. A survey has been done to find out the cause of obesity among high school students.巩固练习: 针对中学生交通出行安全问题,你校对全校1013名学生进行了问卷调查,结果如以下表格所示。假设你是校刊英语版的特约小记者

13、,请你根据表格中的调查结果,分析其中一种交通方式可能存在的隐患及预防措施,并进行简要评价,将文章发表在校刊英文版。词数:120左右。交通方式使用人数（人）占总人数百分比自行车54353.6公交车34233.8步行10710.6其他212合计1013100参考范文:Recently a survey about transportation was carried out in our school. According to the survey, nearly half of the students go to school by bike, while 33.8% take the bu

14、s. Walking accounts for 10.6%, and 2% use other means.Nowadays, traffic safety must be paid special attention to. Whatever means of transport we take to go to school, there are some possible hidden dangers. Lets take travelling on foot for example. It will be very dangerous if we dont follow the traffic rules or cross the road at the zebra crossing. For the sak