高考书面表达讲评--求助信(37张ppt)教学提纲

1、高考书面表达讲评-求助信(37张ppt)直击高考直击高考评分原则：评分原则： 1.本题总分为本题总分为25分分,按按5个档次给分个档次给分. (第一档：第一档：15分；第二档：分；第二档：610分分;第三档：第三档：1115分；第四档：分；第四档：1620分；第五档：分；第五档：2125分）分）2.评分时评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档的然后以该档的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。后给分。 3.词数词数少于少于80和多于和多于120的的,从总分中减去从总分中减去2分分. 4.评分时评分时,应

2、注意的主要内容应注意的主要内容为为:内容内容要点要点,应用应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性,上上下文的连贯性下文的连贯性及及语言的得体性语言的得体性。 5.拼写与标点符号拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时面，评分时,应视其对交际的影响程度予应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英以考虑。英,美拼写及词汇均可接受。美拼写及词汇均可接受。 6.如如书写较差书写较差,以至影响交际以至影响交际,将分数将分数降低降低一个档次一个档次.Chinese knots(2013课标卷全国课标卷全国II) 假定你是李华，自制了一些中假定你是李华，自制了一些中国结

3、（国结（Chinese knot）。给开网店的美国朋友）。给开网店的美国朋友Tom写写封信，请他代卖，要点包括：封信，请他代卖，要点包括：1. 外观（尺寸、颜色、材料）外观（尺寸、颜色、材料）2. 象征意义象征意义3. 价格价格注意：注意：1.词数词数100左右；左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。Dear Tom, How are you doing ? _ Li hua写作步骤：写作步骤：一、审题。一、审题。二、写作。二、写作。三、检查修改。三、检查修改。一、审一、审 题：题：1.

4、 审主题审主题2. 审人称审人称3. 审时态审时态4. 列要点列要点5. 谋篇谋篇Before-writing 审主题：审主题：2. 审人称：审人称：请开网店的美国朋友请开网店的美国朋友Tom代卖自制中国结。代卖自制中国结。Im writing to ask if you can help me to sell some home-made Chinese knots.3.审时态：审时态：请代卖中国结，介绍其外观、意义和价格。请代卖中国结，介绍其外观、意义和价格。求助信求助信(a letter for help)。故人称为第一人称和第二人称。故人称为第一人称和第二人称。一般现在时为主，其它时态

5、为辅。一般现在时为主，其它时态为辅。4. 列要点：列要点：5. 谋篇谋篇：三段法模式：三段法模式 第一段：第一段：Purpose: 第二段：第二段：Body: 第三段：第三段：Conclusion:求助求助求助原因求助原因, 介绍情况介绍情况。表达期待或谢意。表达期待或谢意。 请朋友代卖自制中国结。请朋友代卖自制中国结。自制中国结的外观（尺寸、颜色、材料）。自制中国结的外观（尺寸、颜色、材料）。自制中国结的象征意义。自制中国结的象征意义。自制中国结的价格。自制中国结的价格。二、写作：二、写作：1. 选选词词组织要点。组织要点。2. 扩词成扩词成句句。3. 整理成整理成篇篇。While-writ

6、ing 选词组织要点：选词组织要点： 请朋友代卖自制中国结。请朋友代卖自制中国结。自制中国结的外观（尺寸、颜色、材料）。自制中国结的外观（尺寸、颜色、材料）。自制中国结的象征意义。自制中国结的象征意义。自制中国结的价格。自制中国结的价格。ask you to help me sell some Chinese knotssell some Chinese knots for megive me a hand to sell Chinese knots for meshape; 6 inches long and 5 inches wide; in length and width; red s

7、ilk threads; home-made; a diamond.a symbol of union; sdand for; good luck; love.price; only 5 dollars each; can be sold at a price of $12;.2. 扩词成句。扩词成句。 请朋友代卖自制中国结。请朋友代卖自制中国结。自制中国结的外观（尺寸、颜色、材料）。自制中国结的外观（尺寸、颜色、材料）。I wonder if you could sell some Chinese knots for me.If it is convenient to you, would

8、you please give me a hand to sell some for me?Would you do me a favor to help me sell some?Chinese knots are popular with Chinese families, which are in the shape of a diamond, about 5 inches long and 4 inches wide.They look really beautiful in the shape of a diamond, about 5 inches in length and 4

9、inches in width.自制中国结的象征意义。自制中国结的象征意义。自制中国结的价格。自制中国结的价格。表达期待或谢意。表达期待或谢意。In China, these knots stand for friendship, love and good luck.Chinese knots will bring you good luck and love.We Chinese attach much significance to Chinese knots, which are a symbol of union.They are only 10 dollars each.They

10、can be sold at a price of $5 each.You can make the price 10 dollars each.Looking forward to (receiving) your early reply. I would appreciate it if you could help me.Thank you in advance.3. 整理成篇。整理成篇。(句式多样化句式多样化)关联词的使用关联词的使用复杂句的使用复杂句的使用高级词汇的使用高级词汇的使用 Dear Tom, How are you doing? Im writing to tell yo

11、u that I have been making some Chinese knots recently. If it is convenient to you, would you please give me a hand to sell some for me? You know, in China, Chinese knots are popular with Chinese families, which are in the shape of a diamond, about 5 inches long and 4 inches wide. Chinese knots will

12、bring you friendship, love and good luck. Not only can they be presented to others as gifts but also they can hang them to decoarte their houses. The price is $13 each. If anyone around you shows interest in the knots, contact me soon. Meanwhile, do let me know if you need further information. I loo

13、k forward to your reply at your earliest convenience. Yours, Li Hua三、检查修改：三、检查修改： 检查检查单词拼写、标点符号单词拼写、标点符号等。等。 检查检查要点要点是否遗漏。是否遗漏。 检查检查句子结构句子结构是否正确。是否正确。 估计估计字数字数是否符合要求。是否符合要求。 学生习作中的错误句子：学生习作中的错误句子： I want you can help me sold some Chinese knots. It stands for happiness, healthy and luck. If you could

14、 help me, I would greatly appreciate you.1. Looking forward for you reply.I hope you can help me sell some Chinese knots.healthitto yourPost-writing抄阅读文章中的句子; 不知所云.得分为0分语言素质欠缺语言素质欠缺;基本功差基本功差;语句毛病多语句毛病多;大大小写小写;标点符号标点符号;书写不清等等书写不清等等;得得6分分.卷面不整洁卷面不整洁; ; 涂改较多涂改较多; ;语言错语言错误多误多; ;层次层次不清不清; ;得得11 11分分语言不地道

15、语言不地道; ;中文式思维中文式思维; ;词汇错误词汇错误; ;卷卷面有涂改面有涂改; ;得得15 5分分. .有少许语言错误有少许语言错误; ; 得得2222分分（2016全国卷I）假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历（resume）。给外教Mr Jenkins 写信，请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式（format）注意： 1. 词数100左右; 2. 可以适当增加细节，已使行文连贯。PracticeThink about?The style:The main idea:Person:Tense:The style:The main idea: Person:Ten

16、se:a letter for helpask whether the foreign teacher can help to polish the letter of application and resumethe first personthe simple present tense列要点列要点Point 1: 学生李华，向您求助学生李华，向您求助Point 2: 暑假想去一公司任职暑假想去一公司任职Point3: 申请书和个人简历已完申请书和个人简历已完成，希望老师帮忙修改成，希望老师帮忙修改Point4：修改内容修改内容Point5：表达期望表达期望扣主题扣主题 拓展句拓展句Po

17、int 1: 升级句式（名词作同位语）升级句式（名词作同位语）Point 2：拓展：拓展今年暑假去一家公司兼职今年暑假去一家公司兼职+做兼职的意做兼职的意义义(非限制性定语从句非限制性定语从句) Point 3：拓展：拓展 FirstlySecondlyLastly/ besides Dear Ms Jenkins, Im one of your students, Li Hua from Class Two. Im writing to ask for your help. This summer I intend to take up a part-time job in a foreig

18、n company, through which I would like to broaden my horizons, gain some working experience and meet new friends. My application and resume have been prepared and I sincerely hope you can help me polish them. Firstly, Im wondering if you can help add some contents. Besides, if there are some mistakes

19、 in them, I hope you can help correct them. Lastly, I attach some materials whose format had better be changed and hope you can help.I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to do so much for me. Looking forward to your early reply. Yours truly, Li Hua 五档作文五档作文Dear Ms Jenkins, Im Li Hua f

20、rom your English writing class last term. Im writing to ask for your help. Im applying for a part-time job at a foreign company in my city during the summer vacation, and I have just completed my application letter and resume. However, I am not quite sure of the language and the format Ive used. I know you have a very busy schedule, but Id be very grateful if you could tak