1121高考写作指导课

1、How to improve writing Do you want to score high in the writing part ?15？20？25!Nothing is impossible!Todays taskWrite an application to a press Task 1 假设你是某报社的记者，请用英语写一篇假设你是某报社的记者，请用英语写一篇新闻，报道小悦悦被撞事件发生的经过，新闻，报道小悦悦被撞事件发生的经过，并发表自己的感想。并发表自己的感想。 注意：注意：1.词数词数120左右。左右。 2.冷漠的冷漠的-indifferent；碾；碾-roll On Oct

2、ober 13th ,2011, a girl was hit and rolled by two cars. Her name is Wang Yue. She comes from Fu Shan city and she is just two years old. That afternoon, she was playing on the street. Suddenly, she was hit by a car. She lay and bled on the road.18 people passed by her, but no one came to save her. T

3、hen, another truck rolled her again. At last,an old lady picking up waste pulled her to the side of the road. Wang Yue was sent tohospital immediately. She died two days later. From my point of view, the passers-by were too indifferent, so Wang Yue died.As a member of our society, we should bemore s

4、ympathetic and kind-hearted. We should help others when they are in trouble. We should not be cold, and wemust build up a more harmonious and warmer society. On October 13th, 2011, a girl was hit and rolled by two cars. Her name is Wang Yue. She comes from Fu Shan City and she is just two years old.

5、 That afternoon, she was playing on the street. Suddenly, she was hit by a car. She lay and bled on the road.18 people passed by her, but no one came to save her. Then, another truck rolled her again. At last, an old lady picking up waste pulled her to the side of the road. Wang Yue was sent to hosp

6、ital immediately. She died two days later. From my point of view, the passers-by were too indifferent, so Wang Yue died. As a member of our society, we should be more sympathetic and kind-hearted. We should help others when they are in trouble. We should not be cold, and we must build up a more harm

7、onious and warmer society. the same subject “She” simple words simple transitions（过渡词）（过渡词） simple sentencesProblems & ways of improving them: Use different sentences (使用多样句型使用多样句型) Change the subject (改变主语改变主语)Use good transitions (使用过渡连接使用过渡连接)Choose advanced phrases (选取高级词汇选取高级词汇)1.A girl was

8、 hit and rolled by two cars. Her name is Wang Yue, she comes from Fu Shan city and she is just two years old. Wang Yue, (用同位语改写）用同位语改写）was hit and rolled by two cars.a two-year-old girl who comes 2.That afternoon, she was playing on the street. Suddenly, she was hit by a car. That afternoon, _ , (用用

9、when +V-ing省略句式改写省略句式改写) she was hit by a car. when playing on the streetfrom Fu Shan city,II.使用高级词汇使用高级词汇1.rolled her again. 2.but she died at last. a second time3. we should be more sympathetic. be supposed to/ought to 4.we should be more sympathetic and kind- hearted. as well as 5. we should help

10、 others give a hand to/do sb. a favor lost her life III.使用过渡词使用过渡词 1. Suddenly, she was hit and rolled by a car. She lay and bled on the road. Suddenly, she was hit and rolled by a car. _ , she lay and bled on the road. 2. She lay and bled on the road. 18 people passed by her, but no one came to sav

11、e her. She lay and bled on the road. _ , 18 people passed by her As a resultTo our surprise3. Wang Yue was sent to hospital immediately. She died after two days. Wang Yue was sent to hospital immediately. _ , she died after two days.Unfortunately/HoweverIV.使用多样句型使用多样句型1.At last, an old lady picking

12、up waste pulled her to the side of the road. _ （用强调句型改写）（用强调句型改写）2. The passers-by were too indifferent, so Wang Yue died. _ .(改为改为sothatsothat句型）句型）The passers-by were so indifferent that Wang Yue lost her life.At last, it was an old lady picking up waste that pulled her to the side of the road.3.

13、We should help others when they are in trouble. When others are in trouble, _ _ (用主语从句改写）用主语从句改写） 4. We should not be cold, and we must build up a more harmonious and warmer society. (用用“only+状语状语”的句式倒装）的句式倒装） what we aresupposed to do is give a hand to them.Only when we are not so cold can we build

14、 up a more harmonious and warmer society. 5. She lay and bled on the road. _. (V-V-ing作伴随状语）作伴随状语） She lay on the road, bleeding On October 13th ,2011, Wang Yue, a two- year-old girl from Fu Shan, was hit and rolled by two cars. That afternoon, when playing on the street, she was hit by a car. As a

15、result, she lay on the road, bleeding. To our surprise, 18 people passed by her, but no one came to save her. Improved composition: Then, another truck rolled her again. At last, it was an old lady picking up waste pulled her to the side of the road. Wang Yue was sent to hospital immediately, howeve

16、r, she lost her life two days later. From my point of view, the passers-by were so indifferent that Wang Yue lost her life. As a member of our society, we should be more sympathetic as well as kind-hearted. When othersare in trouble, what we are supposed to do is togive a hand to them. Only when we

17、are not socold can we build up a more harmonious and warmer society.First of allSecondThird高考写作中常用过渡性词语高考写作中常用过渡性词语表对等关系的表对等关系的：and，or, as well as, bothand, on the one handon the other hand, Firstsecondthird, for one thingfor another表因果关系的表因果关系的：therefore, so, as a result, as a result of, because of

18、, due to, owing to, thanks to, thus表时间顺序的表时间顺序的：at first, then, later, meanwhile, in the end, before long, for the first time表转折关系表转折关系： yet, but, while, on the contrary, however高考写作中常用过渡性词语高考写作中常用过渡性词语表解释说明的表解释说明的： that is, that is to say, in other words, such as, for example表递进关系的表递进关系的：even, in a

19、ddition, furthermore, also, moreover, whats more, besides, worse still, whats worse, above all表总结陈述的表总结陈述的：in a word, on the whole, in short, in brief, to sum up, all in allTask2： 随着高考临近和学习压力的增大，不少同随着高考临近和学习压力的增大，不少同学感到非常紧张。为了帮助同学们缓解紧张的情学感到非常紧张。为了帮助同学们缓解紧张的情绪，轻松应对紧张的高三学习生活，你的英语老绪，轻松应对紧张的高三学习生活，你的英语老

20、师要求每个人以师要求每个人以“How to make yourself happy”为题写一篇为题写一篇120左右的英语短文。左右的英语短文。 （1） 随着高考的临近随着高考的临近，（with的复合结构的复合结构) a lot of students of Senior Three feel nervous （2） 由于很大的压力由于很大的压力 .（介词词（介词词 组组+n.词组）词组）So（3） 知道如何释放压力很重要知道如何释放压力很重要 .（it作作 形式主语）形式主语）and live a happy life. The following suggestions may（4） 有作用

21、有作用 .（用（用 be+of 结构）结构） （5）首先首先，对自己满意对自己满意 （用（用Do+V-原原强调）强调）if you work hard and make progress every day. （6）其次其次 ，寻找更多笑寻找更多笑 的机会的机会（V-ing作主语）作主语）is （7）你应该做的你应该做的 ,（表语从句）（表语从句） because laughter can relieve stress and improve your mood. Thirdly, think about happy things in life. For example, your pare

22、nts love you deeply and you have great ambitions,（8） 这会使你感这会使你感 到满意到满意 .（用定语从句）（用定语从句） （9）是否快乐取决于你自己是否快乐取决于你自己. （用（用whether引导主语从句）引导主语从句）I hope all of you enjoy studying. ，（with 的复合结构的复合结构) a lot of students of Senior Three feel nervous （介词词组（介词词组+n.词组）词组）So （it作形式主语）作形式主语）and live a happy life. The following suggestions may_. （用（用be+of的结构）的结构） _，_（do+V-原原表强表强 调）调）if you work hard and make progress ev