雅思大作文AcademicWriting评分标准+首段写法+主体段写法

1、AcademicWritingTask2IELTSWritingTask2评分标准解析Band8descriptionTaskResponseLengthAddressallquestionsdirectlyClearpositionandwelldevelopedCoherenceandCohesionCohesivedevicesClearprogressionClearcentraltopicLexicalResourceUseawiderangeofvocabularySkillfullyuseuncommonitemsErrorfreeGrammaticalRangeandAccur

2、acyUseawiderangeofstructuresErrorfreeTask2评分标准解析LR得分对策避免口语词汇always;very;alotof避免表意不明newthings;badthings避免使用使役动词makesthadj.避免意译startingplaces;cutoutWritingTask2分类突破雅思写作话题分类Report【报告型】ReasonsInfluencesMeasuresArgumentation【论证型】OpinionsEvidences首段写法贫富差距：-在当今社会，贫富差距很普遍并且越来越明显。这种状况如果得不到有效的解决将会给社会带来各种问题。本

3、文将探讨贫富差距产生的原因并提出相应的解决方案。国际旅游-当前，出国旅游现在已经非常普遍并且人们在旅游过程中了解的异国文化。这种国家之间的了解对国际关系将产生重大影响。本文将探讨国际旅游受欢迎的主要原因以及对个人与社会的影响。环境污染：-在世纪，人类面临着严峻的环境问题。这个问题如果没有得到有效的控制，会威胁人类的生存。在本文中，我将探讨环境污染的主要原因并提出有效的解决方案。首段写法贫冨差距：首段写法国际旅游首段写法环境问题首段写法贫富差距：-在当今社会，贫富差距很普遍并且越来越明显。这种状况如果得不到有效的解决将会给社会带来各种问题。本文将探讨贫富差距产生的原因并提出相应的解决方案。国际旅

4、游-当前，出国旅游现在已经非常普遍并且人们在旅游过程中了解的异国文化。这种国家之间的了解对国际关系将产生重大影响。本文将探讨国际旅游受欢迎的主要原因以及对个人与社会的影响。环境污染：-在世纪，人类面临着严峻的环境问题。这个问题如果没有得到有效的控制，会威胁人类的生存。在本文中，我将探讨环境污染的主要原因并提出有效的解决方案。首段写法一Accordingtoonerecentsurvey,thenumberofprivatecarsinBeijinghasincreasedby20%to2millionanditisdifficulttoforeseeanydownwardtrend.-THES

5、ISSTATEMENT一Thisever-swellingcarownershipinmanybigcitiesaswellascountrysideiscausingnumerousproblems.-Itisreportedthattheworldisfacingaworseningyouthemploymentcrisis:youngpeoplearethreetimesmorelikelytobeunemployedthanadultsandover75millionyouthworldwidearelookingforwork.-THESISSTATEMENT一Theimpactso

6、fthesituationshouldbegivenadequateattention.一Provingsurprisingfacts:statisticsAccordingtoarecentsurvey,morethan70%oftheItisreportedthatAnauthoritativemagazineconcerningrevealsthat一InastudyconductedbytheMedicalAssociation,researchersconcludedthatPractice:Thedyingoutofspecies一Surprisingstatement:frome

7、xpertsorresearches,aseducationalistssuggests/pointsout/advises一Studieshaveshownthat/proventhat一facts.SomeexpertsdrawtheconclusionthatPractice:NoisepollutionLongtermexposureinnoisecouldleadtoseriousphysicaldisordersorevenfataldisease,asmedicalexpertsadvises/cautions/suggests.-THESISSTATEMENTTheyalsop

8、romptthegovernmenttoidentifythesourcesofnoiseandtotakeeffectiveactionstoreducenoise.一Noisepollutionadverselyaffectsthelivesofmillionsofpeople.Studieshaveshownthattherearedirectlinksbetweennoiseandhealth.Problemsrelatedtonoiseincludehearingloss,sleepdisruption,lowproductivityandsoon,amongwhichHearing

9、Lossisthemostcommon.-THESISSTATEMENTThesehealthhazardscanonlybeeliminatedthoughidentifyingthemainsourcesandthemeasurestoreducenoises.Sample:Inrecentdecades,anincreasingnumberofmuseumsandgallerieshavebeenbuiltinmycountries,mostofwhichareequippedwiththelatesttechnologyandadvancedfacilities.Whatisthefu

10、nctionofsuchplacesandwhoshouldberesponsibleforfinancingsuchplaces?Mostteenshavemoneytospendthankstoanallowanceorafter-schooljob,butdotheyhavethemoneymanagementskillstogoalongwiththatincome?Thereforesomepeoplesuggestthatweshouldteachchildrenaboutfinancialmanagementatanearlyage.Itisknowntoallthatnoise

11、canbeannoying,butareyouawareofthefactthattheimpactsofnoiseonourhealthcanbeappalling?THESISSTATEMENTToalleviatethehazardouseffects,itiscriticaltoidentifythemainsourcesofnoiseandtakenecessarymeasurestoreducenoisepollution.素材梳理：C7T3Page167WRITINGTASK2Asmostpeoplespendamajorpartoftheiradultlifeatwork,jo

12、bsatisfactionisanimportantelementofindividualwellbeing.Whatfactorscontributetojobsatisfaction?Howrealisticistheexpectorationofjobsatisfactionforallworkers?Report主体段结构考官范文赏析：Body1mployeesgetjobsatisfactioninanumberofways.Firstly,feeltheworkisvaluedandvaluableandfeelthejobisworthdoingSecondly,asenseof

13、progressionThesenseofbelongingalsocontributetoSatisfactionisalsoincreasedbyasenseofresponsibilityReport主体段结构素材梳理：环境资源类Fartoolittlehasbeendonetopreventanimalsandplantsfromdyingout,althoughpeoplehavenoticedthisproblemforaongtime.Whyarepeoplefailedtoimprovethissituation?Whatareyoursuggestions?Report主体段

14、结构素材梳理：Page228Reasonsandsolutionsforjuvenilecrime.Report主体段结构素材梳理：Page246Reasonsandsolutionstowatershortage素材组织：环境资源类Fartoolittlehasbeendonetopreventanimalsandplantsfromdyingout,althoughpeoplehavenoticedthisproblemforalongtime.Whyarepeoplefailedtoimprovethissituation?Whatareyoursuggestions?Report主体段

15、结构素材组织（平民版）：首先Firstofall;tobeginwith;first其次Inaddition;besides;inadditionto再次Moreover;whatsmoreReport主体段结构素材组织（砖家版）：Reasons主要次要；直接间接一个主要原因是Themajor/main/primecauseisthat,J另一个因素是Theothercontributingfactorinvolves.也不能被nadditionshouldnotbejgporedReport主体段结构素材组织（砖家版）：Measures有效性一个有效解决方案是Oneeffectiveappr

16、oachtosolvetheproblemis此外勺选择。esides,todoisalsoafeasiblechoice.如果能，问题也能rovidedthatcanbedone,thisissuecouldbelargelyimproved.-ort主体段结构素材组织（专家版）：Report主体段结构素材组织（专家版）：Thefirstreasonisassociatedwiththemassmedia,whetheritisprintmediasuchasnewspaperormagazineortheelectronicmediaincludingtheinternetorTV,whe

17、rethereadersoraudiencesarebombardedwithfashionablecontent.However,whethertobuysomethingfashionableisultimatelydeterminedbyweindividuals,ormoreexactly,consumers.Therefore,someconsiderationshouldbegiventothebuyerthemselves.Report主体段结构素材组织（专家版）：Report主体段结构素材组织（专家版）：Manypeoplesuggestthatthefailureoffami

18、lyeducationmaybe.toblame.Duetothefactthatyoungchildrenspentthemajorpartoftimeinschooleducationalistsalsopointoutthatthereisaproblemwithschooleducationaswell.eport主体段结构素材组织（专家版）：Toreducejuvenilecrime,firstofall,parentsshouldregulatechildrensbehaviorandinstillcorrectviewoflife.Thougheducatingaboutrigh

19、tandwrongcanreducecrimeinthelongrun,tohaltthecurrenttrendofjuvenilecrime,childrenshoulddevelopclearrecognitionabouttheconsequencesofinappropriatebehaviors,whereschoolsareinthebestpositiontoimplementthesolution.Schoolsshouldincorporatelegaleducationintotheelementarycurriculum.Report主体段结构素材组织（专家版）：C8P

20、age167solutiontotrafficandpollutionIthinktotackletheproblemofpollution,cleanerfuelsneedtobedeveloped.However,trafficcongestionwillnotbesolvedbychangingthetypeofprivatevehiclepeoplecanuse.Todothis,weneedtoimprovethechoiceofpublictransportservicesavailabletotravellers.Task2论据扩展方法论据扩展：环境资源类Fartoolittle

21、hasbeendonetopreventanimalsandplantsfromdyingout,althoughpeoplehavenoticedthisproblemforaongtime.Whyarepeoplefailedtoimprovethissituation?Whatareyoursuggestions?Task2主体段落扩展主体段落论据扩展：ThemainreasonisthatalargeproportionofpeoplelacktheawarenessofprotectingtheendangeredspeciesTask2主体段落扩展主体段落论据扩展：Themainr

22、easonisthatalargeproportionofpeoplelacktheawarenessofprotectingtheendangeredspecies.Whyso?【给出原因】Really?【给出具体事例】Task2主体段落扩展主体段落论据扩展：themainreasonisthatalargeproportionofpeoplelacktheawarenessofprotectingtheendangeredspecies.解释原因Manypeopleassumethatthereisnodirectrelationbeweenthelivingofthoseplantsan

23、danimalsandours.解释后果Asaresult,peopleseldomseethenecessityandthesignificancetoinvestheavilyonprotection,duetowhichmanyspeciesbecomeextinct.Task2主体段落扩展主体段落论据扩展：Theothercontributingfactorinvolvestheeconomicdevelopment.解释原因Economicgrowthisinvariablyaccompaniedbytakingresourcesfromthenaturesuchascuttingd

24、ownwoodsintheforest,anddischargingwasteandpollutantintothenature.解释后果Inthisprocess,thehabitatsofmanyspeciesaredestroyed.举例说明Takingchemicalindustryforexample,asitcontributestotheoverallnationaleconomy,thetoxicwaterandothersubstances,whichweredischargedwithoutbeingtreated,havebeenthemaincauseofextinct

25、ionofsomeaquaticlives.Task2主体段落扩展主体段落论据扩展：Peopletendtogiveprioritytoeconomicdevelopmentratherthanspeciesconservation.解释原因Generallyspeaking,ecomomicbenefitsaretheprimaryconcernofpeople,whileprotectingendangeredspeciesdemandstremendousamountofresourcesandproducedlimitedvalues.解释后果Accordingly,beingconf

26、rontedwiththechoices,mostwouldchoosetodeveloptheeconomyattheexpensesofsomespecies.Task2主体段落扩展主体段落论据扩展：Toimprovethecurrentsituation,thegovernmentneedtolauncheducationalprogramtoinformthepublicaboutthesignificanceofprotectingendangeredspecies.Howtodothat?【C8T3】Isthateffective?Task2主体段落扩展主体段落论据扩展：Forex

27、ample,schoolscanopencoursesconcerningenvironmentalprotection,andthegovernmentcanbroadcasteducationalcontentsthroughthemassmediatothepublic.Inthisway,peoplewillbecomingincreasingawareofthelivingconditionofendangeredspeciesandtakenecessaryactions.Task2主体段落扩展论点表述：20081023Manypeopleusedistance-learningp

28、rograms(studymaterialpost，TV，internetetc.)tostudyathome，butsomepeoplethinkthatitcannotbringthebenefitasmuchasattendingcollegeoruniversity.Discussbothviewsandgivesyouropinion.远程学习上大学(在学校学习)讨论双方观点并给出自己的观点Task2主体段落扩展Task2真题练习Manypeopleusedistance-learningprograms(studymaterialpost,TV，internetetc.)tostu

29、dyathome，butsomepeoplethinkthatitcannotbringthebenefitasmuchasattendingcollegeoruniversity.Discussbothviewsandgivesyouropinion.Task2主体段落扩展Task2真题练习TSOneobviousadvantageforstudentsgoingtouniversityisthatstudyinginuniversitymaycontributetoenhancingthestudentscommunicativeabilities.在学校学习一个最大的优势在于大学学习对提

30、高学生的交流能力有益。Task2主体段落扩展Task2真题练习SsThisisprimarily/mainlybecause这studentslivingontheuniversitycampuswillbeabletogetplentyofopportunitiestocommunicatewithdifferentpeople,suchastheirroommates,classmatesandtutors.ask2主体段落扩展Task2真题练习SsForexample,whenstudentshaveproblemsabouttheirstudies,theymaytrytogetacl

31、earunderstandingofthequestionbycommunicatinganddiscussingwiththeirprofessors.Intheprocess,studentswillbeabletoacquiretheskillsofcommunication.SsBycontrast,ifstudentsstayathome,learningthroughdistaneelearningprograms,theymaybedeprivedoftheopportunitytocommunicatewiththeirpeersandteachers.Task2主体段落扩展T

32、ask2真题练习SsFromtheanalysisabove,itisclearthat由attendinguniversitywillbenefitthestudentsinvolvedintermsofcommunicativeskills,whichareessentialfortheirfuturecareers.150wordsTask2主体段落扩展Task2真题练习TSThemostobviousadvantageforstudentsgoingtouniversityisthatuniversityeducationmaycontributetoenhancingthestude

33、ntscommunicativeabilities.Thisisprimarily/mainlybecauseForexample,henycontrast,ifFromtheanalysisabove,itisclearthatTask2主体段落扩展Task2真题练习TSGovernmentshouldtakethemainresponsibilitytoaddresstheenvironmentalproblem.Thisisprimarily/mainlybecauseForexample,henycontrast,Fromtheanalysisabove,itisclearthatTa

34、sk2主体段落扩展Task2真题练习TSHowever,ontheotherhand,bystressingtherolethatgovernmentsplaydoesnotmeantheindividualscannotmakesignificantchangetothecurrentsituaiton.Thisisprimarily/mainlybecauseForexample,henycontrast,ifFromtheanalysisabove,itisclearthatReport末段Report构思：末段：总结要点总之，问题涉及到多方面的原因，但是结合上面提到的方式，我们可以有效

35、的减少负面影响。Inconclusion,multiplereasonsresultinthecurrentproblemissue),whilebycombiningtheapproachesmentionedabove,wecaneffectivelyminimizethenegativeinfluencesoreveneliminatetheproblem.Report真题实战Report写作分析WritingTask2Inmanycountries,moreandmoreyoungpeopleareleavingschoolandunabletofindjobsaftergraduat

36、ion.Whatproblemsdoyouthinkyouthunemploymentwillcausetotheindividualsandthesocietyandwhatmeasurescanbeadoptedtosolvethisproblem?Report写作分析Report写作分析写提纲：ProblemsthatunemploymentcausesNewgraduateswouldliveinmiserablesituation.CausehugewasteoftalentIncreasetheinstabilityofsocietySolutionsNewgraduatessho

37、uldlowertheirworkingexpectationGraduatesshouldequipthemselveswithnewskillsGovernmentshouldmakeeffortincreatingmoreworkingopportunitiesReport合理安排：ProblemsthatunemploymentcausesForindividuals,newgraduateswouldliveinmiserablesituation.Forsociety,itcauseshugewasteoftalentForsociety,Increasetheinstabilit

38、yofsocietySolutionsAttheindividuallevel,newgraduatesshouldlowertheirworkingexpectationAttheindividuallevel,graduatesshouldequipthemselveswithnewskillsAtthegovernmentallevel,governmentshouldmakeeffortincreatingmoreworkingopportunitiesTask2论点论证结构Report构思：WRITINGTASK2Recentstatisticsshowthatthecrimesco

39、mmittedbytheyoungpeopleinthemajorcityoftheworldareontheincrease.Giveyouranalysisofthereasonsandthesolutions.Reasons:IncreasingstressinlifeNegativeinfluencefrommediaAdolescentpsychologic论论pr点点le论证证e结o构ltreatedReport构思：2009.11.7WRITINGTASK2Reasons:TS:Mostcontributingfactorsareassociatedwithenvironment

40、thatyouthlivein.IncreasingstressinlifeandstudyNegativeinformationfrommodernmediaTS:Anotherelementisintertwinedwithpsychologicaleducation.AdolescenLjpsychologalp论e点s论证证罗里构edReport构思：WRITINGTASK2Recentstatisticsshowthatthecrimescommittedbytheyoungpeopleinthemajorcityoftheworldareontheincrease.Giveyour

41、analysisofthereasonsandthesolutions.Solutions:PromotepsychologicaleducationProvidepsychologicalconsultancyservicesDepuratenetworkenvironmentTask2论点论证结构Report构思：WRITINGTASK2Solutions:TS:Sincetheproblemmainlyarisesfromsub-healthymentalstate,TS:Correspondingactionsshouldbetaken.Promotepsychologicaleduc

42、ationProvidepsychologicalconsultancyservicesDepuratenetworkenvironmentReport篇章结构考察时间：2009-5-212009-5-21Ahundredyearsago,peoplethoughtthatthehumanracewassteadilyimprovingineveryareaoflife.Nowitseemsthisisnotcertaininthatsituation.Inwhichareasdoyouthinkwehavemadeimportantprogressnowadays?Inwhichareasdoyouthinkweneedtomakeprogress?