探索英语作文读后续写艺术美2020浙江宁波十校联考高三英语书面表达写作指导解读

1、最新精选研究英语作文读后续写的艺术美：十校联考英语写作指导原题重现阅读下边短文,依据所给情节进行续写,使之组成一个圆满的故事。Itwasapeacefulnight.Iwassleepingwithmybrothers,feelingwarmandcomfortable.Mamawassleepingnearby,coveredbysnow.Papawassomewherenearby,watchingoverus.Therewasabrightmoonandwehadallhadagoodmealofvenison鹿(肉)Papahadcaughtearlier.“UncleLouisisc

2、oming”wasafunnywolf,andalwayshadinterestingthingstotellusandshowus.Alittlewhilelater,UncleLouisappeared.WedidnotapproachhimwithrespectthewayweapproachedPapa.Weflewathim,jumpedalloverhim,androlledhiminthesnow.UncleLouislaughedandpatteduswithhispaws.Heisblackallover,withyelloweyes,andheisverytall.“Its

3、thelongestnightoftheyear”,UncleLouissaid,everyonefeelliketakingarunthroughthewoods?Iwanttoshowyousomethingunusual.”Hearingthat,Papawarnedthatitwasdangeroustogonearthatpackofhumanswholivedinthewoods.“Theyarehardlydangerous”,UncleLouislaughed,“Theclumsyandmakesomuchnoise.Theyarenotabletogetnearusoreve

4、nseeusifwedontwantthemto.Besides,thisistheirspecialnight.Theyarequitepeacefulandwontbebotheringaboutwolves.”“Oh,please,Papa,letusrunthroughthewoodswithUncleLouisandseesomethingunusual!”Weallbegged.最新精选“Itisafinenight”,Papasmiled,“Imustadmit,Idofeelrunning.”注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.最少使用5个短文中标有下划线的重点词语；

5、3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写达成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的重点词语。Paragraph1Andwewereoff,allofus,headingtowardsthewoods.Paragraph2Westoppedandsatonahillsideandbelowuswasthehumansplace.分析故事人物Papa:humansaredangerousUncleLouis:afunnywolfMybrotherandI:neverseehumans环境Moon,star,winternight,peaceful主要情节Iwanttoshowyousometh

6、ingunusual.这个分析能够看出来：故事要旨应当是平易的，依据peaceful能够看出来，因此不合适写人和狼发生强烈的矛盾。写作步骤一、抓要旨下的矛盾Conflict:findtheunusualthingSolution:celebratewiththehumans二、抓突显矛盾解决的结尾结尾：以景结情，状况交融，响应主题Thatunusualnight,theharmoniousnoise,Iremembered,wentoverthehillandfurthertothemoon.我记得那个不平常的夜晚，这友好的噪音超出树林，传得那么远，远到了月亮之上。最新精选主题辞：unusua

7、l,moon三、抓主要动作：ActionandResponse一个故事的action尽量用3-5句归纳，三句是最理想的，情节越简单，细节就越丰富。联合两段开头，我们能够猜想动作：Andwewereoff,allofus,headingtowardsthewoods.1、Wedashed.2、Wesawhumans（.看到人后，应当就要停下来，这样是连接的）Westoppedandsatonahillsideandbelowuswasthehumansplace.3、Wejoinedintheiractivity.重点是最后一个action，怎样实现？我想起了和狼共舞电影，邓巴围着篝火跳舞，一个

8、人在野外，远处是一个狼静静看着。今后，这只狼成为他的好朋友。这个电影对我触动很大，人和狼不用然就必然是鱼死网破的零和博弈。其他绿皮书电影中的黑人走进酒吧抚琴，大家侧目静看，此后迸发雷鸣般掌声，让我写出了这样的结尾。有时，我真的发现，多看经典电影，多思虑导演为何这样安排，对我们写作有很大的促使。四、抓环境描绘和感情变化环境的描绘重在景和情要圆满交融，我这样安排：风景感情变化Themoonwashedthewoodsinagentlelight.Thestarstwinkledlikeachildblinkingwithanticipation.希望（anticipation）好奇scurious

9、eyescurious）Thechillingwindsuddenlysentwavesofnervousnesscoursingthroughme紧.张（nervous）Withthis,wespedup,thepiercingcrunchofthesnowunderourfeet最新精选ripplingthroughtheairandsendingthebirdsflutteringamongthetrees期.待ButIndulgingintheirhappiness,mybrothercannothelphowling.快乐（happy）Suddenly,totalsilencedes

10、cendedonthehillside.Allthehumanslookedatusinterror,andsodidus恐.惧（terror）Unexpectedly,aroaroflaughterbrokeoutandthenthecelebrationwentonmoreenthusiastically.快乐说明：这个句子：Atthis,wespedup,thepiercingcrunchofthesnowunderourfeetripplingthroughtheairandsentthebirdscrashingthroughthetrees.我想到了李清照的词：常记溪亭日暮，陶醉不

11、知归路。兴尽晚回舟，误入藕花深处。争渡，争渡，惊起一滩鸥鹭。汉语诗歌对写作也有好多启迪，写景重在境地，心中有画，此为大美。风景描绘关于月亮星星描绘，我是直接把moon，star在各样大辞典里查，我以为字典里里的描绘都是平常易懂的，不至于遥不能够及，拥有广泛适应性。试水范文twinkledlikeachildscuriouseyesblinkingwithanticipation.Thechillingwindsuddenlysentwavesofnervousnesscoursingthroughme.“Arewegoingtomeetthedangeroushumans?feltmysoun

12、dquivering.“Relax.Weareseeingtheunusualthing.”UncleLouissmiled.Withthis,wespedup,thepiercingcrunchofthesnowunderourfeetripplingthroughthe最新精选airandsendingthebirdsflutteringamongthetrees.Shortly,abigbonfirecameintoview.Westoppedandsatonahillsideandbelowuswasthehumansplace.Now,notfaraway,aroundthebonf

13、irearedancingmanyhumans,handinhand.Papawarnedusnottostartlethem.ButIndulgingintheirhappiness,mybrothercannothelphowling.Suddenly,totalsilencedescendedonthehillside.Allthehumanslookedatusinterror,andsodidus.Mybrother,notknowingwhathappenedatall,imitatedtheirdancingclumsily.Unexpectedly,aroaroflaughte

14、rbrokeoutandthenthecelebrationwentonmoreenthusiastically.Thatunusualnight,theharmoniousnoise,Iremembered,wentoverthehillandfurthertothemoon.官方范文是对故事作者的原文的更正，特别是风景描绘和结尾艺术特别值得细细感悟，请读者必然不要放过：官方答案Paragraph1Westoppedandsatonahillsideandbelowuswasthehumansplace.ItwasthefirsttimemybrothersandIhadeverapproachedthosewoodenthings,which,accordingtoUncleLouis,weremadebyputtingpiecesofwoodtogether.Wedidntseeanyhumans,butwecouldhearthemsingingtogetherinside最新精选thewoodenthing