读后续写练习写作指导 讲义-2023届高三英语二轮复习写作专项

--A*b*Hdi哄后敌耳际题阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。TheTurningPointIusedtobeacold-heartedindividualwholivedinnothingbutaworldofmyown.Unexpectedly,therewasatimeinmylifewheneverythingchanged.Sunshinesuddenlyarosefrommyheart,openingitsdoortoanewworldwhereIwasthekeyinhelpingthoseinneedofahand.IwasafreshmaninhighschoolwhenIsteppedinourlocalnursinghome,complainingabouthavingtovolunteerthereonweekendsbecausemymomhadaskedmeto.Anyway,whenIpulledintotheparkinglot,Irealizedhowdifferenttheplacewas.Itwasniceandcleanwithelderseverywhere.AsIcheckedinatthefrontdeskformyfirstservicehours,Ireceivedastreamofgreetingsfromthesurroundingpeople.Itfeltasgoodasbreathinginlove,whichfilledmewithsuddenwarmth.Shelby,theladyinchargeofcommunityservice,assignedmetowatchfortheelderinroom111.Myjobwastohelpwithanythingsheneeded.AtfirstIthoughtthiswasthebeginningofanightmare,butitturnedouttobesomethingcompletelydifferent.AfterlisteningtoShelby'sinstructions,Iwalkedtowardmydestinationandknockedsoftlyatthedoor,askingifIcouldcomein.Avoicecamefrominsideansweringyes.Isteppedinsideandintroducedmyself,withanexplanationofwhyIwasthere.Meanwhile,Itookalookaround.Thewhitewallswerealmostcoveredinpictureframes.Icouldtellfromthepicturesshemusthavebeenateacherbefore.WhileIwaslookingaround,sheintroducedherselfasMarieBrown,goingtobe80intwomonths.Herfacemarkedbywrinklesofwisdomcouldreallytellmeherlifestory.“Soyou'vebeenhereforawhile?”Iasked.Foraminuteitwasallsilent,andthensheansweredyeswithaverysadvoice,addingthatshehadnofamily.RealizingIhadaskedthewrongquestion,Ifeltbad,forthefirsttime,forhurtingsomeone'sfeelings,especiallythislonelyelder's.注意：.续写词数应为150左右；.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Seeingmyembarrassment,Mariesmiledatmeandsignedtometositbyher.Paragraph2:Touchedbyherstories,IdeterminedtogiveMariecare,companyandevensurprises.写作思路分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者曾经是一个冷血的人，只活在自己的世界里。有一次作者在妈妈的要求下周末去当地养老院做志愿者，认识了一个名叫MarieBrown的老人，她没有家人。作者在和Marie相处的过程中，和她建立了友谊，改变了自己。由第一段首句内容“看到我的尴尬，Marie对我笑了笑，示意我坐在她旁边。〃以及由第二段首句内容“被她的故事感动了，我决定照顾Marie,陪伴她，甚至给她惊喜。〃可知，第一段可描写作者和Marie相处的经过，以及Marie讲述自己的过去。第二段可描写作者怎样陪伴Marie,怎样给Marie惊喜。Marie的心情，我的感悟。Para1:SeeinqmyMariesmiledatmeandsignedt。metositbyher.Sayingsoftly,"Nevermind,I'vebeenusedtoit,“shepattedmeonthearm,attemptingtocheermeup.LearningIwasinhighschool,Mariewaslostinthoughtandstartedtotalkaboutherolddaysasateacher,fromwhichIcouldsenseherdeeploveforherstudents.Thensheshowedthepictureshangingonthewalls,excitedlysharingherstoriesconcerningherstudentsandproudlyintroducingwhateachofthemwasupto.Para2:Touchedbyherstories,Ideterminedt。qiveMariecare,compoayandever?surprises.I'dcallonMarie,chattingwithheranddoingeverythingIcouldforher.Onher80thbirthday,withthehelpofShelbyandotherelders,Iheldagrandpartyandmanagedtoinvitesomeofherstudentstocome.WhenIaccompaniedMarieintotheparty,allpresentrose,clappingsmilinglyandwishingherhappybirthday.Thebigsurprisebroughtexcitedtearstohereyes,herwrinkledfaceglowingwithhappiness.Bathedintheheart-warmingatmosphere,Ifeltsodelightedtohavelitupanoldteacher/slifeandmadeadifferencetoher.读后续写素材积累与拓展一一极限运动Skiing通过课程中所学的续写技能请用4・5句话续写一个微场景描写“我〃在高山滑雪时意外摔倒的场面。①Ablastofadrenaline（N.肾上腺素）charged（V.充电）throughoutmybodyasIexperiencedtheinitialdrop,（as引导时间状语从句）翻译：在我经历第一个下落时，我的肾上腺素瞬间贯穿了我身体每一个角落.（整体句式结构由as引导时间状语从句，这里用到了一个医学类词汇，一般Ph川是很少在课堂上让学生使用医学类词汇的，因为以高考的情况而言，第一必要性不大，其二，医学类词汇基本出现都是标注词.但这个词真的很好用，可以说背一个它，省了很多事.因为续写中基本情感都是起伏较大的，兴奋激动、惊吓恐慌等，都可以用到："Ablastofadrenalinechargedthroughoutmybody"；所以推荐给你）②Afterovercompensating（V.过度补偿）fromanearlydisastrous（Adj.糟糕的）slip（N.滑倒），1lostmybalance,mykneesbucklinghelplessly.（独立主格结构）翻译：在差点摔倒之后，我失去了平衡感，我的膝盖开始不由自主地发软.③Mylefthandplowed（V.耕地；犁地----深深扎进）forcefullyintoice,cracking（V.僻啪作响）painfullyatthewrist.（分词做状语）翻译：我的左手狠狠地扎进了雪地里，手腕因为剧烈冲撞发出了响亮的摩擦声.（进一步对于动作进行刻画，通过“plow”一词，形象生动地体现出手与雪之间的摩擦和状态、叠加副词"forcefully”的修饰体现摔倒的不可控和严重、而动词“cracked”是一个拟声词，该词的使用让人物在整体动作刻画上，拥有了视觉和声感的双重冲击，更好体现出了〃摔倒〃的程度和人物状态.）④Foraneternityof30seconds,mybodysomersaulteddownward,mogulsoficetoyingwithmyheadandfurtheragonizing（V折磨）mybrokenwrist.（独立主格结构一一构建自身状态、叠加拟人修辞）（MForaneternityof30seconds*'是一种夸张的体现，通过"eternity无穷无尽的〃一词，体现出30秒过程的痛苦与煎熬.将片刻瞬时，通过自身内心感受放大至永恒的程度.而在续写中，适当地放出时间状语，也能更好地体现故事清晰结构性；此外本句中通过""somersault翻筋斗”"toywith玩弄〃“agonize挣扎;折磨〃一系列得当的动词选取，进一步体现当下的险境及情况的糟糕例如toy