读后续写（2）-研读近十年高考英语书面表达聚焦2023高考

研读近十年高考英语满分书面表达聚焦2023高考Part2读后续写（二）1.（2020•新高考全国卷）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,“shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara."Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon*tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,“saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoIJsaidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）."Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone."Itellyouwhatwecando,“saidJohn."YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花）,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”注意：.续写词数应为15。左右：.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.（4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.【答案】Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.MyhorseturnedtothelefttoavoidthelittlerabbitasIheldontightlyandtriednottofall.Thenmydadturnedaroundandshouted,"Holdon!”Allofasuddenthehorsebegantorun.Mydadtriedtokeepupbehindus.Forafewminutesmyhorsesloweddowntoatrotandthenstoppedbesideariver.Ilookedaroundandrealizedthatwewerewayoffthetrack.Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Luckilythestarscameoutandgaveusalittlelightwhenwewerelookingforthewaytothefarmhouse.Afterwhatmusthavebeenseveralhours,wesuddenlyheardthesoundofsheepinthedistance.MydadandIbothrodeourhorsestowardsthesoundofthesheep.AswegotcloserwesawUnclePaulwithaflashlightwavingusover.Whatanight!【详解】读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络。续篇这篇短文时，考生要搞清楚故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的变化等。在此基础上，考生要顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用语言表达出来。通过阅读所给文章可知，父亲带儿子去西部荒野的一个朋友家体验农场生活，见父亲和叔叔骑马，儿子也很想骑，于是亲身上马体验。根据第一段所给首句Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.这一句是故事发展的转折点，可从rabbit出现后带来的反应扩展开，可以写马的反应，也可以写人的反应，但要注意与第二段首句相呼应。第二段首句是Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.这一句呼应前文UnclePaul的叮嘱不要误吃晚饭，可从如何寻路返回农场去写。续写时注意要使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后要用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。6.（2017•浙江卷）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（骑行）alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim."Man,that'sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn'tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac'sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追赶）。Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoshowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatzxxkoncehehitthehill,he'dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf'steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn'tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.注意：.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。【答案】Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.PaulandBeckygotoutofthecarimmediatelytogivethehelp.Withnothinginthehand,theydidn'tdaretofightagainstthewolf.However,theystillapproachedtothewolfbravely.Atthesametime,thewolfalsonoticedthemandturneditsheadback,howlingangrilytowardsPaulandBecky.Macthenjumpedoffthebicycleandwasreadytofightagainstthewolf.Thencamethedeadlock.Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Theyfoundthedangeroussituation,wherethreemencircledthewolf.Mac*sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicyclesandjoinedthefightwiththewolf.Moreandmorecarsstopped.Somedriverstookoutthesticksfromthecars,andsometookouttheknives,eventhegunstowardsthewolf.Inthemeanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople'sthreatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.Soon,itranawayofftheroadanddisappearedinthedistance.【分析】本篇书面表达是读后续写，要求续写两段内容（Paul和Becky勇救Mac,试图赶走狼，但没有成功）以及（越来越多的人加入到救援之中，最后成功地赶跑了狼）。【详解】第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求写一篇读后续写：本文主要讲述了Mac在骑自行车前往阿拉斯加的途中，被一只狼追赶的故事，第一段要求续写车上下来两个人帮助Mac,但他们势单力薄，并没能赶走狼，双方陷入僵局；第二段要求续写越来越多的人加入到救援之中，众人合力将狼赶走。时态以一般过去时为主，人称以第三人称为主。同时要兼顾字数的要求，不要过多，关键词列出5个以上，需要均匀分布在两段中。考生要注意几个关键信息和情节变化并结合给出的内容提示进行合理构思。第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如；immediately（立即），dangerous（危险的），howl（嚎叫）,threat（威胁），join（加入），bravely（勇敢地）及deadlock（僵局）等。第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。【点睛】范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有fightagainst（对抗），runaway（跑掉）,getoutof（从中出来）,bereadytodo（准备好做某事）,daretodo（M做某事）以及approachto（靠近），而且还使用了非限定性定语从句“Theyfoundthedangeroussituation,wherethreemencircledthewolf.”，倒装句"Thencamethedeadlock."，非谓语动词"Atthesametime,thewolfalsonoticedthemandturneditsheadback,howlingangrilytowardsPaulandBecky."，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.【答案】WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.So,theywenttothelocalsupermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcornandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.Whentheygothome,theymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Withthepopcorn,theywenttoBernard'shome.TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswereverygrateful.AndtheMeredithfamilyalsofeltveryhappytohelpthisfamily.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaroundtothehousesandsoldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,hewantedtobeself-dependent.Therefore,heaskedMrs.Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthat,notonlydidhesellpopcorn,buthealsoaddedcreamandsalttothepopcorntomakeittastebetter.Bernardgrewuptobearemarkableman.HedidnotforgetthehelpofMeredith'sfamily,andhealsodidwhathecouldtohelpthoseinneed.【分析】本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。【详解】1.认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意-制作爆米花，让Bernard去卖爆米花。.根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的。.续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。.根据第——段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.（当Meredith太太听到John的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意）可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.（一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意）可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。2.（2020•浙江卷7月高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。“Pmgoingtomissyousomuch,Poppy,"saidthetall,thinteenager.Hebentdowntohughisoldfriendgoodbye.Hestoodup,huggedhisparents,andsmiled,tryingnottolethisemotions（'IW绪）getthebetterofhim.Hisparentswerenotquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutoftowntotheuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastimetosaygoodbyefornowatleast.Thefamilyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulder,andflashedabrightsmile."Iguessthisisit,“hesaid."I'llseeyoubackhomeinamonth,okay?”Hisparentsnodded,andtheywatchedashewalkedoutofsightintothecrowdsofhundredsofstudentsandparents.Theboy*smotherturnedtothedog,“Okay,Poppy,timetogobackhome.”Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.Allthatweek,Poppydidn'tseeminterestedinherdinner,herfavoritetoy,oreveninherdailywalk.Herownersweresadtoo,buttheyknewtheirsonwouldbebacktovisit.Poppydidn't.Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavoritepeanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthesofa,buttheoldgirljustwasn'therusualcheerfulself.Herownersstartedtogetworried."WhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyup?HaskedDad."We'vetriedeverything.^“Ihaveanidea,butitmightbealittlecrazy,"smiledMom."Withoutanybodyleftinthehousebutus,thisplacecoulduseabitoffun.Let'sgetalittledogforPoppy.nItdidn*ttakelongbeforetheywalkedthroughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppywelcomedthemhomeasusual,butwhenshesawthebox,shestopped.Sheputhernoseonit.Hertailbeganwagging（摆动）eversoslowly,thenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.注意：.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Para1.Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Para2.Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.【答案】Para1.Dadputtheboxonthegroundandopenedthetop.Ashinylittlewetnosepoppedup.Thentwofluffypaws.Nexttheboxtippedoversideways,andouttumbledamassofwigglygoldensilliness.Poppywasamazed.Shewaggedfuriously.Shebarkedwithjoy.Shesmiled,hertonguelollingoutassheinvestigatedthesurprise.Thelittlepupwasnotshyandimmediatelystartingyippingandjumpingaroundtheolderdog."Thatdidn'ttakelong,“remarkedMom,asbothdogswentroaringaroundthehouseinanimpromptugameofchase.Dadlaughed.Para2.Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.HehadmissedPoppyandwaslookingforwardtoseeingher.Whenhebentdowntogiveherabighug,hefelloverinsurpriseasasmallgoldencloudcameracinguptolickhisfacetoo.ct0hmygosh,whoisthis?”heexclaimed.Hisparentslaughedatthelookofshockonhisface."That'sPee-wee,“saidDad."Ican'tbelieveyougotyourselvesapuppy!”"Wedidn't,"repliedMom."ThispuppyisforPoppy!,,【详解】通过阅读所给文章可知，文章讲述了男孩要去上大学，和自己的狗Poppy道别。而没有了男孩在家里，Poppy也非常想念男孩，于是男孩父母决定给Poppy买一条小狗作伴。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：爸爸打开盒子，一条可爱的小狗出现了。所以后文应该是描写买来的小狗的样子以及这两只狗的相处情况；第二段开头是：几个星期后，男孩从大学回到家里。本段应该写男孩回到家以后看到两条狗的反应，以及父母告诉男孩这条狗是买给Poppy的。续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。【点睛】本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：amassof,withjoy,lookforwardto等高级词汇；非谓语动词的运用Thelittlepupwasnotshyandimmediatelystartingyippingandjumpingaroundtheolderdog.；时间》犬语从句Whenhebentdowntogiveherabighug,hefelloverinsurpriseasasmallgoldencloudcameracinguptolickhisfacetoo.等高级句式。3.（2020•浙江卷1月高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside"thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld^-thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears-likeallwildanimalsshouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough-hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws（爪子）.Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter（相遇），Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn'tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears'eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar（用L口U）,thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraphl:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Paragraph!:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.【答案】Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp,thenwerealizedthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.Atthiscriticalmoment,Elligrabbedseveralpiecesofgarlicbreadandthrewthemoverthefence.Itworked!Thebearstoppedtheattackandrantothebread.Butitwasn'tlongbeforeheeatupallthebreadandcamebackagain.Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived."Thankgoodnesswearesaved!”Ellicriedout.Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.Whenweweresafeonthehelicopterupintheair,Iwasamazedtothespotthatthebearhadfinallytoredownthefenceandrantowardsthefoodweleftbehind.Iquicklytookoutthecameraandphotographedtherarescene-wewererobbedbyapolarbear.【分析】本文以事件为线索展开，讲述了作者和妻子前往被称为“北极熊之都”的加拿大丘吉尔镇拍摄北极熊。夫妻二人做饭之时，一头饥饿的雄性幼熊跟着面包的蒜香味，靠近了营地，猛烈撞击营地边上的铁丝围栏。作者和妻子使出浑身解数，想吓退这头熊，不料它“不破篱笆誓不归”。无奈之下，作者求助营地管理员，被告知救援直升机要30分钟后才能赶到，只得先尝试用胡椒喷雾喷洒北极熊的眼睛，不料这使熊变得更加暴躁，在千钧一发之际直升机及时赶到，他们得救了的故事。【详解】1.段落续写：由第一段首句内容“几分钟后，熊返回了我们的营地。”可知，第一段可描写作者夫妻二人如何再次对付熊及两人在此过程中的紧张害怕。由第二段首句内容“就在那时，直升机赶到了J可知，第二段可描写作者夫妻二人获救时的心情。.续写线索：熊返回营地一一紧张害怕一一用面包攻击一一直升机赶到一一，决速登上飞机一一熊把篱笆推到——拍下熊“打劫”的画面.词汇激活行为类①激怒：anger/provoke/enrage②抓起：grab/snatchup③拿出：takeout/fetchout情绪类①疯狂的：mad/crazy②兴奋的：excited/thrilled【点睛】[高分句型1]thenwerealizedthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly,（for引导的原因状语从句）[高分句型2]Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.（现在分词作状语）[高分句型3]Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved,（once弓|导时间状语从句和形容词作状语）.（2018•浙江卷11月高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother---loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler'schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout（放哨）whileIgo,andI'11standoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo."Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:"Honey,wherearethekids?”"What?!Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet."Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren'tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections（反对）.Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.注意：.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.【答案】Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Thinkingofthistent,Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillageinexcitement,withhereyesglittering.Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed.Whenthedoorofourcaropened,Momstormedoutinstantlyandurgedustoputupthetent.DavidandIwereaskedtopickupsomebranchestobuildafire.Andwhenwecameback,DadandMomhadalreadylaindownthegrasscomfortablyinfrontofthetent,talkingmerrilywithalocalboyatourage,whokeptglancingatthistentcuriously.Soonwelearntthattheboyinragsevendidn'thaveahometolivein.Ofcourse,Mom"fbrgot“totakethistentwithusagain.Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Andwealsohadanicetimelivingwithmygrandparentsduringthattrip.Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthattent,whichwasforgottendeliberatelybyMom.Thoughshedidlovegoingcamping,shepresentedthatpoorboywiththistentoutofsympathy.ItwasMomthatmademychildhoodcolorful.Anditwasalsoshethatshowedmethetruemeaningofgiving.【分析】这是一篇读后续写。短文叙述了作者的母亲很健忘，一家四口自驾旅游去祖父母所居住的地方，途中发生了有趣的事情。【详解】首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩,例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事（尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个forgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事）（也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点）；其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景：此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只能有景色描述；例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色（同时回忆往事），最终把故事的落脚点放在“家人的感情”“亲情”“生活的乐趣”“与妈妈一起的趣事”等等角度都可以的;当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题;总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多；再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度;高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型