优秀课件托福写作100分toefl writing

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武汉新航道学校课程安排一、托福写作简介和评分标准二、写作结构和构思三、首段写作四、主体段写作五、结尾+语言提升1六、语言提升2七、综合写作（1）八、综合写作（2）九、作文修改+复习备考TestofEnglishasaForeignLanguageInternet-basedtestETSiBTTOEFLOfficialGuideUnlikeGRE/SATTypingLaptop?EducationalTestingServiceTheStructureofTOEFLIBTReading（60-100minutes）1Listening（60-90minutes）2Speaking（20minutes）3Writing（50minutes）410minutesbreak

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≥25现状：Averagescoreformainlandtest-takers解决方案2078211918一托福写作概论1.托福写作是什么？2.托福写作要求？3.如何准备托福写作？1.托福写作是什么

Section时间最少字数题型考查能力分数比重readinglistening1.Integrated20mins150words3mins/230—300words2mins/230—300words听和记50%2.Independent30mins300wordsEssay来源：185+机经话题：个人偏好，生活方式，教育，社会，科技，媒体等语言表达50%2.托福写作要求？标题-无写作基本知识格式1.齐头2.缩进3.OG评分人给分换算分数评分人给分换算分数5303.5224.75293.25214.5283204.25272.75184252.5173.75242.2515ScoringScaleIndependentWritingScoringRubrics(OG,P207-209)Anessayatthislevellargelyplishesallofthefollowing:1.effectivelyaddressesthetopicandtask2.iswellorganizedandwelldeveloped,usingclearlyappropriateexplanations,exemplifications,and/ordetails3.displaysunity,progression,andcoherence4.displaysconsistentfacilityintheuseoflanguage,demonstratingsyntacticvariety,appropriatewordchoice,andidiomaticity,thoughitmayhaveminorlexicalorgrammaticalerrors

1.切题：effectivelyaddressesthetopicandtask

2min23min3min2min检查修改正式写作拟提纲审题审题1.effectivelyaddressesthetopicandtask

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跑题的三大原因1.effectivelyaddressesthetopicandtask

有效回应题目，阐明文章主题（1）：偷换概念（2）：题目核心词缺失（3）：题目理解错误偷换概念小明：我不认为孩子们应该往大街上乱跑。小红：应该把孩子们关起来，不让他们呼吸新鲜空气。小明：我比你长得高。小王：你再高够姚明高？偷换概念Do

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(OG,p207-209)5Anessayatthislevellargelyplishesallofthefollowing:1.effectivelyaddressesthetopicandtask2.iswellorganizedandwelldeveloped,usingclearlyappropriateexplanations,exemplifications,and/ordetails3.displaysunity,progression,andcoherence4.displaysconsistentfacilityintheuseoflanguage,demonstratingsyntacticvariety,appropriatewordchoice,andidiomaticity,thoughitmayhaveminorlexicalorgrammaticalerrors充分论证2.iswellorganizedandwelldeveloped,usingclearlyappropriateexplanations,exemplifications,and/ordetails逻辑条理清晰，论证充分展开小明英语作文很强：他的文章不仅遣词造句恰到好处，而且论证十分有力；英语作文经常刊登在英语周报上；托福写作得了29分；小明真的很会写作文啊，写得真是太好了，好得不得了啊“Thirdly,computergamescanteachchildrenaboutteamwork.Manycomputergamesrequiremultipleplayerstocooperatewitheachothertocompleteatask.Forinstance,theplayerofLOL,awidelypopularon-lineReal-TimeStrategyGame,ismorelikelytobeatyouropponentsifs/hecooperateswithplayerswithdifferentbutmutuallycomplementaryabilities.Counter-strike,afirst-personshootinggame,isanotherexample.Thegamerequiresanumberofplayerstoformananti-terroristspecialforcetosavethehostagesheldbyterrorists.Ifaplayeractsalone,itisverylikelythatheiskilledbythefiresoftheenemies.“论证充分展开Eg论述的合理：三大注意事项2.iswellorganizedandwelldeveloped,usingclearlyappropriateexplanations,exemplifications,and/ordetails

逻辑条理清晰，论证充分展开（1）解释清楚，符合常识（2）避免绝对，言辞温和(only,best,most)（3）敏感话题，避而远之IndependentWritingScoringRubrics1.effectivelyaddressesthetopicandtask2.iswellorganizedandwelldeveloped,usingclearlyappropriateexplanations,exemplifications,and/ordetails3.displaysunity,progression,andcoherence4.displaysconsistentfacilityintheuseoflanguage,demonstratingsyntacticvariety,appropriatewordchoice,andidiomaticity,thoughitmayhaveminorlexicalorgrammaticalerrors文章组织(Organization)3.displaysunity,progression,andcoherence内容统一连贯，衔接自然顺畅Unity:统一Progression:递进Coherence:连贯（1）Unity

（统一性）

E.g.Ifalanguagedisappeared,thentheculturewoulddisappear.Forexample,McDonaldsandKFCareverypopularamongChineseyoungpeople,leadingtothegraduallossofChineseculture.Unity-反面案例Thepeopleliningupintheembassyareapplyingforavarietyofvisas.Someapplicantswantstudentvisas.Otherapplicantswantresidentvisas.Theotherapplicantswanttouristvisas.Applyingforresidentvisasisverydifficult;onehastomeetalotofrequirements.Accordingtoarecentsurvey,thelargestnumberofapplicantsisapplyingfortouristvisas.Thenumberofpeopleapplyingforstudentvisascomesinsecond.Amongalltheapplicants,onlyafractionwantresidentvisas.（2）Progression（渐进性）Eg1.Therhythmoflifeisfast,butpeoplestillwanttoeatnutritiousfood.Eg2.IworkforaFrenchcompanysoweuseEnglishatwork.（2）Progression（渐进性）Smoothlogicflow

语义链：AB-BC-CD-DE-EF-GH-HEg.IworkforaFrenchcompanysoweuseEnglishatwork.IworkforaFrenchcompany.Stafferscomefromdifferentcountries.WeuseEnglishatwork.（3）Coherence(连贯性)

使用衔接词（句间、段间）

Nowadays,childreningeneralarenotassociableaspreviousgenerationsofchildren,whousedtospendmoretimeplayingwithfriends.Somechildrenmayfeellonelierandmoreisolated.Theymaybelessimaginativethanchildreninthepast.Theydonothavetoinventtheirowngamesandtheyspendlesstimereadingbooks.

Nowadays,childreningeneralarenotassociableaspreviousgenerationsofchildren,whousedtospendmoretimeplayingwithfriends.Asaresult,somechildrenmayfeellonelierandmoreisolated.Inaddition,theymaybelessimaginativethanchildreninthepastbecausetheydonothavetoinventtheirowngamesandbecausetheyspendlesstimereadingbooks.

Summary:评分标准三3.displaysunity,progression,andcoherence（1）统一性（观点与例子）（2）渐进性、过渡性（思维不要跳跃）（3）连贯性+衔接（段间与句间）IndependentWritingScoringRubrics1.effectivelyaddressesthetopicandtask2.iswellorganizedandwelldeveloped,usingclearlyappropriateexplanations,exemplifications,and/ordetails3.displaysunity,progression,andcoherence4.displaysconsistentfacilityintheuseoflanguage,demonstratingsyntacticvariety,appropriatewordchoice,andidiomaticity,thoughitmayhaveminorlexicalorgrammaticalerrors4.Language(1)word(3)grammarLanguage

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/broadenhorizonspeople:consumers,users,tax-payers…③.

WordLevelrichman/wealthyman/affluentmanfindajob/secureemployment④.

WordVariety/Range(Avoidrepetition)Ithink/Ibelieve/inmyview4.Language(1)word(3)grammarLanguage

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(mixlongersentenceswithshorteronesOGP324)15-20words/sentence(金牌P256)AB1.Itisimpossibleforustoaccomplishthetransformationofthewholesocietyovernight.1.Itisimpossibleforustotransformthewholesocietyovernight.2.Thenationaleconomicstrengthexperiencedthemostrapidincreaseduringthisperiod.2.Theeconomygrewmostrapidlyduringthisperiod.3.Inordertoaccomplishthis,anapproachofgradualtransitionwillbeadopted.

3.Weshallaccomplishthisbyagradualtransition.ComplexPKSimple&Direct句子长度"Expertsbelievethattheaveragesentencelengthshouldbebetween15-20words.Thislengthallowsyourreadertoabsorbyourideas."——Writer'shandbookforUsersofEnglishLanguageHowever...insomecases,thewriterextends,or"runson",asentencetoincludemanystepsintheargumentwhenusingtwoormoresentenceswouldmaketherelationshipsbetweenideasclear.OfficalGuide句子过长的问题Tobeginwith,Ijustdon'tenjoythegeneraltroubleoftheeveningbecausesincesmalllocalmovietheatersareathingofthepastihavetodrivefor15minutestogettothenearestmultiplexwhoseparkinglotissharedwithseveralrestaurantsandasupermarket,soit'salwaysjammed.句子过长的问题EgTobeginwith,Ijustdon'tenjoythegeneraltroubleoftheevening.Sincesmalllocalmovietheatersareathingofthepast,Ihavetodrivefor15minutestogettothenearestmultiplex.OnceIgetthere,itsparkinglotissharedwithseveralrestaurantsandasupermarket,soit'salwaysjammed.句子过长的问题Eg

写作提高方法？A.态度B.方法3.如何准备托福写作？输入：精读，挑选，记录，重复输出：模仿输入→输出

Forexample…ReadtoWriteThesecondreasonforallmymovingaroundisthatafterIreturnedtotheU.S.andfinishedmyMBA,Ibeganwhatiscalled,“climbingthecorporateladder.”Thismeansdevotingoneselfwholeheartedlytoone’scareer,goingwhereverone’scareershoulddictate.Thus,mymoveswerenotsomuchinordertosearchforabetterjob,butbecauseIhadfoundabetterjobwhichrequiredmetomove.Intheprocessofclimbingthecorporateladder,Ichangedjobsanumberoftimes,looking