高中英语读后续写公开课课件

ContinuationWriting

WhoWhenWhereWhatWhyHowThestoryisabout…I,mydad,

UnclePaul,Tina,RyanandKyleasummerafternoontheWildWest,UnclePaul’sfarminPecoswentonavacationStep1Readforthebasicinformationtense(时态)?thesimplepasttenseIwantedtotakeahorseride.....climaxstorymountainbeginningdevelopmentendingTip1Useastorymountaintounderstandthestorybetter.Step2Readfortheplot

BeginningEndingClimaxexcitedimpressedTheplot&thefeelingsseeing…traveling…Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don’tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!”“OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Readfortheplot

BeginningEndingClimaxriding…excitedimpressedTip2Feelingschangeasthestorydevelops.relaxedjoyfulFeelings??seeing…traveling…jumpingoutgettinglostTheplot&thefeelingsPredict

thedevelopmentoftheplotwith

thecluesofthegiventextthe2firstsentences10keywords.Step3PredictthedevelopmentPara.1Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.Para3Hiswife...MydadandIspentthenight...ofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby..Para.4...“Don'tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon'tgetlost!”...Clue1:Wehadan__________________vacationIhaveneverhadbefore.thecluesofthegiventext

exciting/unforgettable

Clue2:Asuggestivemethod：toreturnhome_____________________byridingalongtheriverClue3:Wegotlostbecause_____________________theyrodeoffthetrackPara.1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.

wherewhat①Whatwastherabbitlike?②Whatwasmyreactiontotherabbit?③Whatwouldweseewhilechasingtherabbit?④Whathappenednext?Step3Predictthedevelopment

Para.2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Wegotlost.Howdidwegetlost?①HowdidIfeelandwhatdidDadreact?②Didwefindthewayout?How?③Whomaycometoourrescue?④Howaboutthesurroundingsinthedarkness?Tip3:Byraisingquestionsonyourown,youcanproducemoredetailsofthedevelopmentofthestory.Step3PredictthedevelopmentdadUnclePaulfarmhouseriverfeedsheeplatetrackgotlostsightWho（人物）

When（时间）Where（地点）What（行为）

10keywords

dad;UnclePaul;sheepfeed;gotlost;sightfarmhouse;river;tracklateStep3Predictthedevelopment第五档

(21-25)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。

内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。

所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。keywords

logicalplotrich,accurate,coherent(连贯的)languageRequirementsforwritingStep4FinishthestoryThelanguageofthegiventextisA.plainandsimpleB.complicatedC.beautifulD.detailedPossibleversionParagraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishoutedwitheyesglitteringwithterrificexcitement.ItwasquitedifferentfromthoseIsawinourcity,thusimmediatelystimulatingmyinterest.

Dad

wasalsostunnedbythisspecialrabbit,gawkingatitmotionlessly.“Dad,let’scatchitasourpet!”Isuggested,unexpectedlyreceivinghispromptagreement.Entirelyforgettingwhat

UnclePaul

hadtoldus,wechasedafterthatprettyrabbit,franticwithrapture.Unfortunately,socleverandswiftwasitthatitdisappearedintheforestbeforelong.Notuntilthendidwerealizethatthelastrayoftwilightwasquicklydisappearingamongthenumeroustreesandwecouldn’tfindour

track

atall!Wedid

getlost.

PossibleversionParagraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Thebone-chillingwindhowledfiercelylikeawolf,makingthedarknessevenmoresuffocating.“Dad,whatcanwedo?”Ithrewmyarmsaroundhimtightly,quiveringandseizedbystarkhorror.“Allisgoingwell!”Dadansweredinagentlevoice,calmandmollified.Wewanderedinthescaryforestanddidn’tknowwhathorriblethingswouldhappentous,hopingtofindthewayback.Suddenly,weheardthesoundofwaterrollingdownthe

river.Wewereoverthemoonanddecidedtofollowtheriver.Afterawhile,weheardthefamiliarsoundof

sheep

andthencaught

sight

ofthe

farmhouse.Thefamilywerewaitingforusinthedistance.Seeingthis,aradiantsmilelitupbothofourfaces.评点：光线的消退暗示了时间的流逝和黑夜的到来，推动了故事情节的发展，与下文的gettingdark衔接；bone-chilling,scary,horrible词的运用以及比喻修辞的运用，渲染了阴森恐怖的气氛，也烘托了主人公内心的害怕、恐惧；同时，河流和羊的声音也为故事的结局提供了线索和出路，给故事画上了圆满的句号。语言：准确、丰富语言风格要与原文的风格相一致通过细节描写使续写具有画面感Howtoenlivenyourwritingandenvisionyoursituation?如何添加细节描写（情绪表达）读后续写微技能指导他很高兴。Hewasveryhappy/excited/ecstatic...Show,Don'tTellDiscussion一个人高兴（兴奋）会体现在哪些方面呢？从自身到周围环境进行思考。他很高兴。Hissmilebroadenedfromeartoear.(表情之面部)Heclappedhishandstogetherandjumpedupanddownwithjoy.（动作）Hegiggledandsquealedwithexcitement.（语言声音）(1)看到眼前可爱的小兔子，我兴奋极了。Seeingthelovelyrabbit,Ifelt______________.

眼睛因兴奋而闪烁。Seeingthelovelyrabbit,myeyes___________________withexcitement.

激动得心砰砰跳Seeingthelovelyrabbit,myheartwas_______________withexcitement.激动得大喊

“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishoutedwitheyesglitteringwithterrificexcitement.表示兴奋的心理excited/thrilledshone/twinkled/sparkled/gleamedthumping/pounding（2）当Tom紧紧拥抱Jane时，她开心极了。WhenTomheldhertightly,Janewas____________________.非常幸福;心满意足WhenTomheldhertightly,itseemedasifJanewereon________oftheworld.眉开眼笑；笑容照亮天空WhenTomheldhertightly,herface________andherbrightsmile__________thesky.欢欣雀跃WhenTomheldhertightly,hereyes__________withjoyandsweetness.表示开心的心理happy/delighted/fullofjoytoplitup

beameddanced(3)当看到那只凶恶的狼逼近时，Mac感到很害怕。Atthesightofthefiercewolfapproaching,Macfeltvery________________....,Mac感到很害怕，嗓子发紧，膝盖发软。Atthesightofthefiercewolfapproaching,Macfeltsoscaredthathisthroatwas_______________andhiskneesfelt_____________....,Mac吓呆了，不敢动弹。Atthesightofthefiercewolfapproaching,Mac_________withterror,tooscaredto___________aninch....,Mac被深深地恐惧感所控制，手心出汗Atthesightofthefiercewolf,Macwas_________byastrongsenseofhorrorandmypalmswere________________表示害怕的心理scared/frightenedtightenedweakfrozemoveseizedsweating(4)意识到不得不再过一夜，Jane悲伤不已。

Realizingshehadtostayaloneforanothernight,shefeltextremely_________.心痛，眼泪直流。Realizingshehadtostayaloneforanothernight,herheart_________,tears___________downhercheeks.悲伤到失去知觉，不能开口说话Realizingshehadtostayaloneforanothernight,she,numbwith________,hadtroublespeaking.被一股悲伤之感控制，忍不住哭泣Realizingshehadtostayaloneforanothernight,shefeltseizedbyaburstof_________andcouldn’thelpcrying______.表示悲伤的心理achedstreamingsadnessgriefbitterlysadThe___________(甜蜜的)fragranceofflowers,thefaint___________(嗡嗡声)ofinsectsaswellasthegentletouchofthe__________(微风)broughtbackmemoriesofthebygonedayssharedwithTom,hottearsalmost_________(涌出)upinher__________(变红)eyes.sweetbuzzingbreezewellingreddened情景交融表示悲伤的心理Thewindwas__________dreadfullyandtherainwas_________fromtheheaven,__________againstthebranchesoflinedtrees.Theworldwas______________withaseaofdarkness.howlingpouringwhippingburdened/loaded表示悲伤、害怕的心理Thewindwashowlingdreadfullyandtherainwaspouringfromtheheaven,whippingagainstthebranchesoflinedtress.Theworldwasburdenedwithaseaofdrakness.A：Asenseofhorrorcreptuponme.B：Afloodoffearwashedoverme.Iimmediatelyturnedaroundtothrowmyarmsarounddadtightly景情过渡(5)看到学生们拙劣的书写，Mr.Yang感到非常生气。

Whenseeingpupils’poorhandwriting,Mr.Yangfeltvery___________.充满愤怒,紧握拳头，身体僵硬了一会，说不出话。然后慢慢向前走去，教室里的温度似乎都降低了许多，没有人敢抬头。突然，他冲出了教室，狠狠摔门。Boiling/Filledwith_____________,Mr.Yangclenchedhisfists,__________forseconds,unabletoutterasingleword.Thenhe__________hisfeetforward.Thetemperatureintheclassroomseemedtohavedropped,andnobodydaredtolookathim.Suddenly,he__________outoftheclassroom,___________thedoorfuriouslybehindhim.表示生气的心理angrystormedrage/furystiffeningshuffledslammingAngeladraggedherlegsandmovedoutofthetestcenter,herheaddropped.Anairofsorrowanddepressioncouldbesensedtenyardsaway.Soon,hereyesbegantowater.Shewouldfailthemathexam,definitely!Disappointmentcameinwavesandatlength,tearsstreameddownherface.Theonlythingshewaseagertodowasrushbackhomeanddropherselfontotheshabbylittlecouchandweep,wildly!How？1.夯实课本知识，做好积累2.关注练习，注重积累3.阅读课外小说，丰富积累4.学习他人作品，补充积累PracticeChooseoneofthetopic

towriteashortpassagetodescribewhatyouwouldsee,hearorthinkandhowyouwouldfeelifyouwereinsuchasituation.1.Itwaspitchdarkonenightandyouhappenedtobeinaforestalone.Whenyouwerecontrolledbypanicyousawdimlightinthedistance.2.Oneafternoon,youstayedhomealone.Therewasasuddenpowerfailurewhenarainstormcame.Youfeltsoscaredthatyoudidn’tknowwhattodo.Onepossibleversion1.Itwaspitchdarkonenightandyouhappenedtobeinaforestalone.Whenyouwerecontrolledbypanicyousawdimlightinthedistance.Itwaspitchdarkintheforest.Hearingtheweirdnoises,Ifel