2023学年完整公开课版basicwriting优化简单句

如何美化简单句

2012.12.25Task1.Readthefollowingtwopassagesanddecidewhichisbetter,why?Passage1 OnOctober21st2010,Megi,regardedastheworsttyphoon,hitTaiwan.Itlandedatdawnon21standlastedfortwodays.Itbroughtheavyrainfallandcausedaseriousfloodwhichwashedawayalotofhouses.Besides,powersupplywascutoffandthetransportationsystemstoppedworking.Worsestill,19touristsfromZhuhaiwerekilledinSuhuaHighwayandthenewsshockedthemainlandChina.Passage2Regardedastheworsttyphoon,MegihitTaiwanonOctober21st2010.Itwasatdawnon21stthatitlandedandlastedfortwodays.Itwasreportedthatduringitscourse,itbroughtheavyrainfallandcausedaseriousfloodwhichwashedawayagreatnumberofhouses.Besides,powersupplywascutoffandthetransportationsystemwasinabreakdown.Worsestill,thenewsthat19touristsfromZhuhaiwerekilledinSuhuaHighwayshockedthemainlandChina.Passage____isbetterbecause:灵活使用了非谓语、从句、强调句等多种句式，避免了文章的单调乏味，使其丰富适当地使用了连接词，使其自然使用高级词汇2Howdoyouimproveyoursentences?

Task2.方法一．合并法Learnthefollowingsentencesa.Hewastired.Hewenttobed.→Hewastired,sohewenttobed.b.Hehasfoundout.Shewaslate.(why)→Hehasfoundoutwhyshewaslate.Exercise:

1.Iboughtherapresent.Shedidn’tlikeit.Iboughtherapresent,butshedidn’tlikeit.2.Ifyouthinkhard,youwillanswerit.Thinkhard,andyouwillanswerit.3.Mikeisveryyoung.Hecan’tmovetheheavybox.(too…to…)Mikeistooyoungtomovetheheavybox.4.Istillremembertheday.IfirstcametoBeijingonthatday.(when)IstillrememberthedaywhenIfirstcametoBeijing.5.Howshouldweprotecteyesight?Itremainsaquestionamongus.Howweshouldprotecteyesightremiansaquestionamongus.6.Agirlwascrossingaroad.Thegirlwaspretty.Theroadwaswide.Theprettygirlwascrossingawideroad.7.Tom'sfatherisawell-knownprofessor.Heisgoingtogiveusalecture.Tom'sfather,awell-knownprofessor,isgoingtogiveusaleture.8.Thebellrang.Thestudentsrushedoutoftheclassroom.Assoonas/Themomentthebellrang,thestudentsrushedoutoftheclassroom.Hardlyhadthestudentsrushedoutoftheclassroomwhenthebellrang.

Summary

combining合并法这种将意义相关或结构相似的句子按一定的方式,如使用连接词，词组，从句等合并连接在一起，以增强句子的连贯性和表现力的方法叫做合并法Task3.方法二.改写法

Learnthefollowingsentences:Ididn’trealizeIwaslateuntilyoutoldme.NotuntilyoutoldmedidIrealizeIwaswrong.ItwasnotuntilyoutoldmethatIrealizedIwaswrong.一般式倒装式强调式Exercise:1.Eatingtoomuchisnotgood.(it)Itisnogoodeatingtoomuch.2.Mymotherdidn’tagreewithmeandmyfatherdidn’teither.(neither…nor…)Neithermymothernormyfatheragreedwithme.3.Mr.Greenisatallman,whowearsapairofthickglasses.(改成with短语）Mr.Greenisatallmanwithapairofthickglasses.4.Wewenttoplaybasketballafterwedidourhomework.(改成with短语）

Withourhomeworkdone,wewenttoplaybasketball.Ifheisgiventime,he’llmakeafirst-classtennisplayer.(用非谓语动词)Giventime,he’llmakeafirst-classtennisplayer.Mr.Leefollowedtwoofhisstudentsandwentintothelabinahurry.(同上)Mr.Leewentintothelabinahurry,followingtwoofhisstudents.5.Ifheisgiventime,he’llmakeafirst-classtennisplayer.(用非谓语动词)Giventime,he'llmakeafirst-classtennisplayer6.Mr.leefollowedtwoofhisstudentsandwentintothelabinahurry.(同上)

Mr.Leewentintothelabinahurry,followingtwoofhisstudents.7.Ifsheiscomparedwithotherteachers,wefindshepaysmoreattentiontoherwayofteaching.(同上)Comparedwithotherteachers,shepaysmoreattentiontohiswayofteaching.8.Youshouldkeepsilentatthemeetingunlessyouareinvitedtospeak.(同上)Unlessinvited,youshouldkeepsilentatthemeeting.9.Hedidn’trealizehisfoolishnessuntilhereturnedhome.(倒装/强调)

Notuntilhereturnedhomedidherealizehis

foolishnessItwasnotuntilhereturnedhomethatherealizedhisfoolishness.10.Wecanachieveasatisfyinggradebychangingthewaywestudy.(only倒装)Onlybychangingthewaywestudycanweachieveasatisfyinggrade.Summary改写法：这种使用比较新颖复杂或强调的表达方式来改写变换简单句，使表达手段丰富，游刃有余。如用同义词语来替换，把陈述句变为强调句、把复合句简化为分词结构或独立主格结构、等方法叫做改写法.

Task4.

方法三：扩展法Learnthefollowingsentences1.Ifailedintheexamagain.WhatdisappointedmemostwasthatIfailedintheexamagain.2.Itwillbemuchmoreconvinenttolookafteryourparents.Itwillbemuchmoreconvinenttolookafteryourparentsas/becausetheyaregettingolderandolder.Exercise:MissLeewillgiveusareportsoon.MissLee,whohasawideknowledgeofEnglish,willgiveusareportsoon.wealllikehim.WealllikeJim,whoisalwaysreadytohelpothers.WealllikeJimbecauseofhishelpfulnessandkindness.

1.因广告过多，影片放映晚点。拓展：这导致观众不耐烦甚至恼火。Thereweretoomanyadvertisementsthattheydelayedthetimeofshowingthefilm,whichmadeaudienceimpatientandsomeofthemevenannoyed./makingaudienceimpatientandsomeofthemevenannoyed.2.安全出口（exit）标志不明，存在安全隐患(potentialhazard）。拓展：万一遇到危险，观众难以逃脱Theexitisnotclear,sotherewillbepotentialhazard.Incaseofdanger,itisdifficultfortheaudiencetoescape3.对中学生假期通讯方式进行了一项调查。拓展：为了了解对中学生假期通讯方式。WedidasurveyabouthowourhighschoolstudentscommunicatewitheachotherduringtheholidayInordertolearnabouthowourhighschoolstudentscommunicatewitheachotherduringtheholiday,wedidasurveywiththehelpofmyclassmates.扩展法这种在原有单句的基础上（结合主题）适当增加描写成分或附加细节，使之表达具体、生动和充实的方法叫做扩展法。.

.二、合并法三、改写法一、扩展法

Task5“优化”简单句的方法：在写作中，上述手段可能会同时使用。增加细节把多个简单句变成一个复合句1.用同义词语来替换2.陈述句→强调句、倒装句等3.复合句→分词结构或独立主格结构Task6.

Practice:Readthefollowingpassageandmakenecessarychangetomakeitabetterone.

Mr.Chenisoneofmybelovedteachers.HeteachesmeEnglish.Heis1.7meterstallandhassomegreyhairs.Heisagoodteacherandisalwaysabsorbedinworking.Hetreatsuswellandoftensmilestous.Itmakesusfellwell.Allofuslikehim.Ifwehavesomequestions,heiswillingtohelpustillweunderstandthem.Henevercomplainsabouthisjob.Everystudentlikeshim.PossiblerevisionMyEnglishteacherMr.Chen,oneofmybelovedteachers,isa1.7meterstallmanwithsomegreyhair.Heisagoodteacherandalwaysabsorbedinworkingbutnevercomplainsabouthisjob.Hetreatsuswellandoftensmilestous,whichmakesusfellwell.Ifwehavesomequestions,heiswillingtohelpustillweunderstandthem.Everystudentlikeshimbecauseofhishelpfulnessandkindness.Homework

随着日本核泄漏的严重性日益加大，上周你校同学举行了一场英语辩论会。辩论的题目是：“是否应该发展核电站？”参加辩论的A组和B组的同学意见截然不同。请根据下表提供的信息，给某杂志社写一篇英语短文，客观地介绍辩论的情况。开头已经给出。

A组的意见1.应发展核电站。2.给人们带来更多电能，缓解用电压力

3.创造就业机会 B组的意见

1.应该限制核电站的发展2.会造成包括空气污染在内的各种污染。3.应该发展例如太阳能等类型的环保电站 ［写作要求］只能使用