BEC作文范文及写作点评

BEC作文范文及写作点评Yourdepartmentneedstorecruitmorestaff.Yourlinemanagerwantsyoutowriteareportexplainingyourrequirementsandcommentingonrecruitmentmethods.Lookattheinformationbelow,onwhichyouhavealreadymadesomehandwrittennotes.Then,usingallyourhandwrittennotes,writeyourreport.Write120-140words.

作文范文：ReportonstaffrecruitmentAsourcompanyisdevelopingseveralnewproducts,thedepartmentofR&Dneedsnewstaffurgentlytohelpdesignandmonitorourproducts.Thusweneedtorecruit35newstaff,includingelectricalengineersandproductdevelopers.Allofthemshouldhaveatleasttwoyears'experienceinrelevantfield.Morespecificrequirementswillfinallybedecidedinafewdays.Astorecruitmentmethods,thedisadvantageofrelyingonrecruitmentagencyisthatweneedmoretimeandprocedurethanwecanafford.SoIsuggestweturntoamoredirectwayofNewspaperadvertisement,whichhasbeenusedmanytimesandprovedeffective.Comparingthetwonewspaper,EchoandChronicle,weprefertheformerbecausethoughitcharges£500morethanthelatter,thegeneralreadersare400,000more,mostofwhomarehighly-educated.Wearesuretogetreplysoonafterwelaunchtherecruitmentcampaign.考生作文一：

Asthenewprojectwillbesetoffthisyear,ourdepartmentneedstorecruit35newemplyees[1].Thenewstaffs[2]shallhaveabilityincludinginnovation,teamwork,hard-working,goomanner.[3]

Thereexiststhreewaystorecruitnewstaffs[2]:Newspaper(Echo)advertisments,Recurimetagency,Onlinerecuriment.Allofthemhaveitsadvantagesanddisadvantages,soweshalluseallofthemtoassurehigh-qualifiedstaffscanseetheinformation.[4]FortheRecurimentagency,theefficiencyislowbutitprobablycanoffergood[5]qulifiedpeople.WHyichoseechoinsteadofChronicasithasmuchmorereaderswithonlyfivehundreddollorshigher._________________________________________

[1]拼写是BEC作文中很重要的给分原则。

[2]基本词汇不过关，staff是集合名词，不用复数

[3]这看起来是招聘广告上的东西吧，很抽象。审题要看懂要求，whattypeofstaff是指要招聘什么部门的员工。

[4]废话一句，可以去掉。题目要求是写出recruitmentagency的缺点，当然任何一种招聘方式都各有优缺，所以直接写disadvantage。

[5]去掉，形容词怎么能修饰形容词考生作文二：DearPaddy,[1]

Nowourcompanyhasalreadyputintoarightpath.Ithink[2]weshouldbuildan[3]completeorganizationinordertoleadourcompanytoobtainbetterandlongerdevelopment.[4]Soweneedrecruite35newstaffallocatedin4departments.

Pleasecheckthefollowinglist:

Dept.No.Duty

PersonnelDept.2StaffManagement

MarketingDept.5Marketingresearchandplan

QCDept.5Controlthequalityofproducts

SalesDept.20Productpromotionindomestic

InternationalbusinessDept.3Productpromotionoverseas[5]

Regardingwithpossiblerecruitmentmethods,therearethefollowingthree:

1)Recruitmentagency.

Themethodisthebestpopularwayinmarket.Butconsideringthatthecostismuchhigher,Idon'tsuggestweadoptit.

2)Newspaperadvertisement

Itisaeconomicalmethodcomparedwiththefirstone.Thoughweusedmanytimesbefore,italsocouldenlargesthepopalarityofourcompany.

3)Onlinerecruitment

[6]

Itisthebesteconomicalmethod.Butithaslargelimits.Andcouldn'thavetheinterviewfacetoface.

Soafterthecomparison,Ithinkthesecondwayismostsuitableforus.NowIhavetwochoiceinNewspaper.OneisEcho,theotherisChronicle.NumberssoldeachdayofEchois600,000,andcostofadvertisementisjust2500.ButThenumberssoldeachdayofChronicleis200,000,lessthanthefirst,andcostof2000isnotcheap.Echocouldletmorereadersknowthisrecruitionofourcompany.lSoEchoisourbestchoice.

Howaboutyourconsidering?

Iamawaitingforyouradvice.Bestwishes,

Jerry[7]_________________________________________

[1]这不是写信，怎么有称呼

[2]报告中没有主观的表达，去掉

[3]这是什么？

[4]原因不具体，公司至于为了长久发展招聘员工？

[5]这占了报告很大一部分，喧宾夺主了。

[6]跑题了，考题中并没有让考生陈述各个招聘方式的优缺。

[7]这不是报告的格式，整体结构错误考生作文三：WiththeincreasingofournewmarketinNewYork,ourdepartmentneedstorecruit35newstaffsinsalesarea.Totally,therearethreewaystorecruitournewstaff,byrecruitmentagency,OnlinerecruitmentorNewspaperadvertisement.Idon'tthinkthewayofrecruitmentbytheagencywhichwilltakehighcostforeachnewstaffofall35staffsisagoodone.[1]AndIsuggestourrecruitmentshouldbedonethroughtheNewspaperadvertisementthatweusedmanytimesbefore.

Therearetwomajorlocalnewspapers-EchoandChronicle,which(wecanchooseforourrecruiment).[2]TheEchohasanaveragesalemumberof600,000eachdaycomparingwiththatof200,000ofChronicle.[3]

NeedlesstosayweshouldchooseEchobecausewecanletthreetimesreadersmorethanChronicle'sknowourrecruitmentadvertismentusingalmostthesamemoneyof2000pounds._________________________________________

[1]句子逻辑不清楚,改为：thedisadvantageofusingrecruitmentagencyisitisnotcost-effective.

[2]去掉

[3]重要原因没有陈述，BEC中一直都很在意的，成本。考生作文四：ReportonStaffRecruitment

Ourproductshavetakenabigbusinessmarket[1]lastyearandthebusinessorderstendtoincrease.Inordertomeetproductionrequirements,weneedtorecruit35workersatthebegin[2]ofthecomingyear.

Thereareusuallythreerecruitingmethodsnow,namelyRecruitmentagency,onlinerecruitmentandNewspaperadvertisement.IproposetouseNewspaperadvertisement.Asyouknow[3]itishighcosttorecruitworkerbyRecruitmentagencyandfewworkersfindjobthroughinternet[4],sobothofthemare[5]notsuitforworkerrecruitment.Therearetwopopularnewspapersnow-EchoandChronicle.IthinktheEchoisbetterthanChroniclebecauseithas600,000piecessoldeachdaythoughitcost$500higherthanthelatter.Itisworthofit._________________________________________

[1]marketshare

[2]Beginning

[3]报告类文章谁是读者？怎么主语会用you?

[4]去掉，考题要求中没有提。

[5]改为：do考生作文五：Recruitmentreport

SinceourcompanymadeacoorperationwiththeIBM,ourdepartmentneedstorecruit35newstaffs,sothatwecouldgettheworkdone.Thenewstaffsincludes[1]projectmanager,accountant,translator,andclientmanager.

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