2024届高三英语二轮复习读后续写专题课件：五四三法则课件

读后续写五四三法：5R解读、4句框架和3大原则读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两端，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Mikelickedthelastofthemintchocolatechip

icecream.Itwasalmosttimetoleave.Hejumpedintothecarwithhis

parents

andheadedofftotheOlympic-sized

pool

forthebigswimmeet.Whenhis

race

cameup,Mikewasconfident.Hewasstrongandswift.Mikeclimbedoutthepool,smiling.Hehadjust

won

firstplace,makinghimthefastestboyinhisagegroup.“Congratulations,son,”hisfathersaid.Hismomgavehimahug,eventhoughhewassoakingwet.

Aweeklater,itwastimeforanotherswimmeet.Likebefore,Mikedecidedtoenjoyhisfavoriteicecreamflavor.Mikerememberedthatthelasttimehehadwonarace,healsoatemintchocolatechipicecreamfirst.Maybehe’dwinagain.He’staken

firstplace

againinhisrace.Mikewasfeelingprettygood.Asitturnedout,MikedecidedtohavesomemintchocolatechipIcecreambeforeeveryoneofthenextfewswimmeets.Hebegantothinkofitashis

luckycharm.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewasfeelingunbeatable.Andhewouldn’tadmitit,butallthaticecreamwasaddingafewpoundstohisathleticswimmer’sbuild.Itdidn’ttakelongafterthatforMiketostartcominginsecondplace-andthenthird-andthenlastplaceinhisraces.Theluckymintchocolatechipicecreamhadlostits

magic.

Onthedayofhisnextswimmeet,hismothersatdownatthetablewithhim.“Mike,weallloveicecream,butit'snot

healthy

foryourbodytoeatsomuchofit.Maybeit'stimetoquitthesweettreatsforawhile,especiallybeforeyougoswimming.Mikeunwillinglyagreed.Hewenttotheswimmeet,anddidn’t

perform

well.Hisfatherofferedtogorunningwithhimafewdaysaweektohelphimfeelbetterandstrengthenhismuscles.Theextraweightsoondisappeared,andMikefoundhimselfbreathingeasieratswimpractices.It

was

the

last

meet

of

the

season,

and

Mike

wasn’t

sure

what

to

expect.He

felt

healthyagain,but

he

didn’t

know

if

he

still

had

any

speed

in

the

pool.注意:1.

所续写短文的字数应为150左右；2.

至少使用五个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.

续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.

续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph1:As

he

drove

into

the

water,

he

kicked

his

legs

and

stretched

his

arms

as

far

as

he

could.Paragraph2:His

jaw

dropped

as

he

realized

he

had

beaten

his

own

best

time

,and

everyone

else

too.第一步：Analyzethestory：5Rs1.Readforcharacters:

Mike,hisparents,Icecream,teammates2.Readforconflict/problems：IcecreamandMike’sperformance:WhetherisitaLuckycharm3.Readforplot:

4.Readforemotionalchanges:

Whenhisracecameup,Mikewas

confident.

Mikewas

feelingprettygood.

Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewas

feelingunbeatable.

Mike

unwillingly

agreed.5.Readfortheme

WhatcontributestoMike’ssuccessinswimming?

第二步：四句步定框架：

写读后续写不同于写其它作文，有可能需要先倒着写的Step1:

先把最后一句写好，即：主题句

Mikerealizedthatone’sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.Step2:

再把衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句：

Hedashedtothefinishline.Step3:

紧接着每段的提示语句写角色的情感：

Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.

Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.

Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.

Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.

接下来就是把每段的中间补充完整，记住三大原则：1.Action—Response原则：角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其它角色的一系列反应的。每段对话1-2句，不一定两个人都要说话，无声的动作也是一种response。2.Conflict—Solution原则：一般而言第二段会有问题的solution，但本文和高考的读后续写文章出题不一样，因为solution在所给文章中就已经有了。同时思考：能否在第一段出现一个问题，然后把它解决了或者没有解决。一方面是增加看点，另一方面也是给第二段铺垫。3.Negative—Positive原则：写作中一定要体现情感的变化，无论前面是这样的变化，最终都是积极的。

最终：

Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.1.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.

（心情）2.“ThisiswhereIbelong.Ican

win

the

race,”thoughthe,histeethclenchedandhiseyesfixedonthefinishlineforward.

（内心独白）3.Suddenly,twofigures

whizzed

past,whichstartledhim.

（心情变化））4.Fearingtofallbehind,hefelthisheartpoundedfranticallyandhismindwentblank.

（解释心情变化和问题）5.Justthen,hethoughtofhissweatandhisfather’sencouragingsmile.

（问题的解决方法）6.Gradually,hisworrygavewaytohisconfidenceandthelast5minutessawhimdashtothefinishline,followedbytheendoftherace.

（衔接句）

Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.

7.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.

（心情变化）8.However,heknewhedeservedthehonorofchampionship.

（拓展）9.

Hisparents

cameupandgavehimahighfive,grinningfromeartoear.

（次要角色的回应）10.“Hey,whynottryyourfavoriteicecreamandcelebrate!”saidhisfather,pattinghisontheshoulder.

（对话1）11.“Thanks,Dad,butIhavegivenupthe

icecream.It’snotsucha

luckycharm

atall.”Hiseyesshonewithwisdom.（对话2）12.ItwasthatdaythatMikerealizedthatone’sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.（照应开头的主旨句）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Sarah,ahighschoolstudent,wasalwayseagertoparticipateineveryactivityhappeninginschoollife,andsheoftenpersuadedherbestfriend,Anthony,tojoinher.Oneday,SarahsawaposterannouncingtheannualGreatBake-offChallenge.Excitedly,sheexplainedtoAnthonyhowthewinnerwouldbegrantedabakingmasterclasswiththewell-knownbaker,ChefBella.BothSarahandAnthonylovedbakingandidolized(崇拜)chefBella,whosecookingshowwaspopularacrossthecountry.However,theyrealizedthecompetitionwouldbetoughastheirschoolhaditsshareoftalentedbakers.Despitethis,Sarahsuggestedthattheycombinetheirstrengthstoparticipateasateam.Anthonyagreed,andtheystartedthejourneytowintheGreatBake-offChallenge.SarahandAnthonystartedbyshortlistingtheirstrengths:Sarahwasskilledatconstructinganddecoratingcakes,whileAnthonywasgoodatdevelopingdeliciousflavors.Theyspentweekends

brainstorming,testing,andperfectingtheirbakingrecipes,transformingSarah'sfamilykitchenintotheirveryownbake-offbattleground.Asthedateofthecompetitiongotcloser,theygrewmoreanxious.Theyevenhadafewargumentsaboutthecake’sdesignortheflavorcombination,buttheyquicklyresolvedtheirdisagreementsandcontinuedtoworktogetherasateam.ThedayoftheGreatBake-offChallengefinallyarrived.SarahandAnthonywalkedintotheschoolhall,theirheartspoundingwithamixofanticipationandfear.Thesetuphadmultipleworkstations,eachequippedwithanoven,amixer,andbasicbakingtools.Theparticipantsweregiventhreehourstocompletetheircakes,afterwhichthejudgeswouldevaluateeachcreationbasedontasteandoriginality.Thecountdownbegan,andthecouplesprungintoaction.Anthonyworkedonthecomplexflavorcombinations,whileSarahstartedbuildingthecake’simpressivestructure.Duringtheintensity,theycouldn'thelpbutstealaglanceattheothercompetitors,admiringtheiropponents’skillsandcreativity.However,theyremainedfocusedontheircreation,supportingandencouragingeachotherthroughouttheprocess.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Threehoursunconsciouslypassedandthedeadlinewasup.Thejudgesbegantheirroundoftastingandassessments.范文:Threehoursunconsciouslypassedandthedeadlinewasup.Theytookastep

backandstartedadmiringtheir

accomplishment.It’sanextraordinaryfive-layercakewithanincrediblemixofflavorsandimpressivedecorations,

displayingtheirbeautifuljourney

togetherasfriends.Drawinginspirationfromtheiridol,ChefBella,theysoughttocreatenotjustacake,butagreatworkofart.Withdustedfacesandflour-coveredaprons,theylookedateachothernervously,wonderingwhethertheyhaddoneenoughtowinoverthejudges.Thejudgesbegantheirroundoftastingandassessments.Whenthejudgesapproachedtosampletheircake,theyheldtheirbreath.Everybitethejudgestook,everywhispertheysharedintensifiedtheiranxiety.Afterwhatseemedlikeacentury,theresultwasannounced:“ThewinnersareSarahandAnthony!”Theirheartsexpandedwithhappinessastheyhuggedeachothertight,holdingbacktearsofjoy.Theirhardworkfinallypaidoff,andtheywouldsoonstandinthesamekitchenwiththeirbelovedChefBella.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Saragazedthoughtfullyatherparentswhileholdingaletter.ShewasacceptedtopursuetheElectricalEngineeringdegreeprogrammeatUniversityPertanianMalaysia.Allherhardworkandsacrificeshadpaidoff.Butsheknew,beingtheeldestof6siblings,herfamilycouldnotaffordtopaytheuniversityentrancefees.Herfatherwasonlyasettlerworkingonapalmoilestate.Thoughshewasdeterminedtodeclinetheoffer,SarawenttovisitMs.Changwiththeletter.Ms.ChangwasoneofthemostdedicatedteachersthatSaraknew.Fromahumblebeginning,shesupportedherselfattheTeachers’TrainingCollegebyteachingtuition.Sosheunderstoodhowhardpoorstudentsstruggledtocontinuetheirstudy.Foryears,notonlydidshebringreferencebookstothestudents,butsheoftentookthemoutforlunchandassuredthemtheywouldsucceedinlife.“CongratulationsSara,Iamsoproudofyou,”Ms.Changsaidexcitedly.“ButI’mafraidIhavetorejecttheoffer,becausemyfamilyisunabletobearthecostofenrollingmethere,”Sararepliedinalowtone.Ms.Changlookedatherintentlyandtoldhernottoworryaboutfinance.Therewouldalwaysbeaway.Afewdayslater,whenSarawashesitatingaboutdecliningtheoffer,herhighschoolprincipal,Mr.Salim,calledhertohisoffice.Toherastonishment,Mr.Salimhandedheranenvelope,inwhichSarasawalargesumofcash.Itwasmorethanwhatsheneeded.ButwhenSaraaskedMr.Salimwherethemoneywasfrom,hejusttoldherthatthepersonwantedtoremainanonymous(匿名的).Withthemoneyinthecnvelope,Sarabecameafreshmanoftheuniversity.Onemonthlater,shereceivedanothersumofmoney.Shecalledherfather,“Dad,youdon'thavetosendmoneytome.Icanmanageonmyown.”Herfatherwasstunned,“ButIdidn't."Fromthenon,Sarareceivedthesamesumofmoneyeverymonth.“Whoisthekindsoulthatismakingallthiscontribution?"shewasalwayswondering.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。