《高三一轮复习写作指导》

高三一轮复习之写作指导

韩彦瑾

沈阳二中.

Howtoimprovewriting?.第五档〔很好〕〔21—25分完全完成了试题规定的任务。—覆盖所有内容要点。—应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。—语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或高级词汇所致；具有较强的语言运用能力。—有效地使用了句间的连接成份，使全文结构紧凑。完全到达了预期的写作目的。.第四档〔好〕〔16-20分〕完全完成了试题规定的任务。—虽然漏掉一、二个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。—应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的需要。—语法结构会词汇方面应用根本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试叫复杂语法结构或词汇所致。—应用简单的语句间的连接成份，使全文结构紧凑。到达了预期的写作目的。.第三档〔适当〕〔11-15分〕根本完成了试题规定的任务。—虽然漏掉了一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。—应用的语法结构或词汇能满足任务的要求。—有一些语法结构或方面的错误，但不影响理解。—应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文连贯。整体而言，根本到达了预期的写作目的。.第二档〔较差〕〔6-10分〕未恰当完成试题规定的任务。—漏掉或未描写清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。—语法结构单调、词汇工程有限。—有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。—较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。信息未能清楚地传达给读者。.第一档〔差〕〔1-5分〕未完成试题规定的任务。—明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未能理解试题要求。—语法结构单调，词汇工程有限。—较多语法或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。—缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。信息未能传达给读者。.0分未能传达给读者任何信息；内容太少，无法评判。写的内容均与所要求的内容无关或所写内容无法看清。.比较优秀的作文;条理清晰,用词得当,结构合理,书写很好;得23分.语言表达流畅;层次清楚;连接不够;得19分..语言不地道;中文式思维;词汇错误;卷面有涂改;得14分..卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得11分.用词不当;语句毛病多;大小写;标点符号;书写不清等等;得6分..兴奋点1.语言简洁,层次清晰.2.选词准确,句式多变.3.内容连贯,表达地道,无明显错误.4.书写标准,卷面整洁..阅卷老师的厌倦点和兴奋点厌倦点1语言层次不清,令人感到单调乏味.2.词汇有错误,句子结构单一.3.表达不地道,汉语味太浓.4.书写潦草,令人无法识别.得分较低的作文：1.词汇错误;语言不地道,中文式思维2.语句毛病多;层次不清3.段落层次不清楚;连接不够;4.书面不整洁较优秀的作文：１．语言表达流畅;层次清楚２．条理清晰,用词得当,结构合理,书写很好Wordsproblems

SentencesproblemsParagraphsproblems

HandwritingproblemsProblemsof

writing.PartoneDictionwriting(thechoiceanduseofwords).1选择适当的词汇:1Thechildlikes________(seeing,watching,looking)TV.2Therain_______(had,caused,led)alotofeffectonthecrops.3InareaChinaisthethirdlargest_________(state,nation,country)intheworld.4Iwillhavea/an____________(date;appointment)withProfessorLiuthisafternoononmytermpaper.5Finally,ourclass_______(won,beat)theirclass.watchinghadcountryappointmentbeat.2选择具体的词汇3.Heisagoodman.Heisa_________________________________________________man.(具体词汇)

kind/honest/generous/brave/selfless/warm-hearted…2Thefoodiswonderful.Thefoodis_________________________________________________.(具体词汇)tasty/deliciousfresh/appetizing…1.Itisoftenbadhereinspring.Itisoften_____________hereinspring.(具体词汇)windyanddusty一般词汇(wordswithageneralmeaning)

具体词汇(wordswithaspecificmeaning).“走出房间〞，general的词是:walkoutoftheroom

但是小偷走出房间应该说:slipoutoftheroom

小姐走出房间应该说：sailoutoftheroom

小孩走出房间应该说：danceoutoftheroom

老人走出房间应该说:staggeroutoftheroom

.3选择书面的词语1Itishardtogetthegeneralideaofthisarticle.(口)Itis______to_______thegeneralideaofthis…(书)2Afriendisaguyyoucandependonwhenyouareintrouble.(口)Afriendisa_______youcandependonwhenyouareintrouble.(书)3Ateacherissomeone/somebodywhohelpswithyourstudies.(口)Ateacherisa______whohelpswithyourstudies.(书)difficultgrasppersonperson.4.不要用中文的思维来写英语词汇:(chinglish)

1新年就要到了.TheNewYearisgoingtoarrive.2光阴似箭!Timeislikeanarrow!3接receivethephone4人山人海peoplemountainpeoplesea5.好好学习,天天向上Goodgoodstudy,daydayup

TheNewYearisaroundthecorner.Timesflies!AnswerthephonehundredsofthousandsofpeopleStudyhardandyou’llmakeprogresseveryday..ParttwoSentencewriting.1句子要简洁,不要啰嗦1Mr.SmithusuallylikestodrinkallkindsofwinesthatareproducedinFrance.(wordy)Mr.Smith_________________________(concise)2WhenIpushedthedooropen,Isawagroupofyoungpeople.(wordy)____________________,Isawagroupofyoungpeople.(concise)3Sheisattractiveinappearance,butsheisaratherfoolishperson.Sheis__________,but_________________prefersFrenchwine.Pushingthedooropen,attractiveratherfoolish..2句子符合语法规那么,不要犯语法错误1Thereare40%ofthestudentsareagainstthisopinion.2Seeingfromthetopofthemountain,thecityisnice.3Heworkedhard,therefore,hewasagoodstudent.4Onlyinthiscountryyoucanfindsuchasocialcustom.5Hislefteyeisblind.＼＿Seen／and＿canyouHeisblindinthelefteye..句子与句子间的衔接:注意:别将moreover,therefore,however,nevertheless,forexample,forinstance等副词性的连接词当作连词使用,否那么就会犯堆砌句子的错误.Heworkedhard,therefore,hewasagoodstudent.Heworkedhard,

andtherefore

hewasagoodstudent.Heworkedhard;therefore,

hewasagoodstudent.Heworkedhard.Therefore,

hewasagoodstudent..1a)It’stoolatetogotothecinemanow.b)Ihaveanimportantmeetingtoattendafterlunch.It’stoolatetogothecinemanow.__________Ihaveanimportantmeetingtoattendafterlunch.2.a)Gotoseethedoctoratonce.b)Yourcoldmaygetworse.

Gotoseethedoctoratonce,_________yourcoldmaygetworse.3.a)Hesawtheboyinthestreet.b)Hestoppedtospeaktohim.c)Hegavehimapenny._________theboyinthestreet,hestoppedtospeaktohim________gavehimapenny.

句与句的衔接Besidesor/otherwise

Seeing

and.PartthreeParagraph

writing

._______JennyisaCanadiangirl.Wehavebeenpenfriendsformorethanthreeyears._______IfoundherinformationwhenIwasreadinganEnglishmagazineand______Iwrotetohersoon.InmyfirstletterIintroducedmyselfandtoldhersomethingaboutmyfamily.Wekeepintouchwitheach.______,Wealsotalkaboutourschoollifeandourfuture.Shewillvisitourcitythissummer.A.

BelieveitornotB.Ofcourse,C.AsyouknowD.What’smore

Questions:Whereyoushouldputthem?Whatisthefunctionofthem?CABD.

Function:

Theycanmakesentencesinaparagraphcloselyconnected.Theyarecalledtransitionalwords.

(过渡词).逻辑角度合适的过渡性词汇时间顺序first,second,then,finally/atlast,soonimmediately,suddenly对称顺序foronething,fortheotherthing,ononehand,ontheotherhand转折顺序but,however,while,though,otherwise因果顺序because,since,as,thanksto,asaresult(of)条件顺序aslongas,solongas,onconditionthat,if,unless让步顺序though,as,evenif/though,whether,who(what,when,where)ever递进顺序what’smore,besides,tomakethematterworse,what’sworse过渡性插入语Ithink,I’mafraid,youknow,Asweallknow.

Function:

1.Theycanmakesentencesinaparagraphcloselyconnected.2.Theycanalsomakeparagraphsinapassagecloselyconnected.Theyarecalledtransitionalwords.

(过渡词).Improvethepassagebyaddingtransitionalwords:Deareditor,________Studentsofourschoolhavemadeasurveyof“ViewsonNewspaper〞.Thepeoplewhomweinterviewedhavetwodifferentopinions.45%ofthepeopleenjoyreadingnewspapers.__________,asaconvenientsourceofinformation,readingnewspapersisnotlimitedbytime.________,readingalsomakespeoplethink,whichhelpsdeveloppeople’sintelligence.__________,peoplecanselectandreadwhateversectiontheyareinterestedin.__________,55%ofthepeopledon’tturntonewspaperstogetinformation.Theyholdtheideathatnewspapersarenotveryattractive_________theylackthesoundandvideothatmakeothersourcesofinformationmoreexcitingtolookatthannewspapers.__________________,peoplecanmakeuseofwhatevermeanstogetinformation,solongasit’sconvenientforthem.Bestwishes,Yours.LiHuaRecentlyFirstofallSecondlyMoreoverHoweverbecauseInmyopinion.

联合国教科文组织某考察团正在我国某乡村参观考察。假定你是接待人员,请根据下列提示以发言稿的形式简要介绍这个村的情况：

1)大小：近100户人家，约500口人。2)变化：过去很穷，78年后变化很大。人们生活比以前好多了。现已旧貌换新颜。3)教育：原来的学校很小，现已经过改建。新建的教学楼有4层，是村里最美的建筑物。村所有学龄儿童在此免费就读。注意：1）要点齐全，前后连贯。2）词数：100-120之间。修改例文Ladiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool.Thisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.Ithaschangedalotsince1978.Peopleherearericherthanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.Theschoolherewasverysmall.Nowithasbeenrebuilt.Thenewlybuiltteachingbuildinghas4storeys.Itisthemostbeautifulbuildinginthevillage.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.Thankyou..Ladiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool!Ladiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool!①Thisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.②Ithaschangedalotsince1978③.Peoplehere④arericherthanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.①Thisvillageis

asmallonewith/whichhas

nearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.②

However,ithasch