2024年高考英语二轮复习第四部分写作技能升华篇专题二读后续写第2讲微观把握、突破读后续写技法一精准解读文本

第四部分写作技能升华篇专题二读后续写第2讲微观把握突破读后续写技法一精准解读文本模拟精练·提考能技法点拨1.抓住记叙文的6要素即人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，读后续写所提供的文本除了结果这一要素之外，把其余五个要素叙述得清清楚楚。因此阅读文本时要紧扣这五个要素。2.掌握记叙文的3大线索即时间线、情节线和感情线。阅读文本时要抓住这三条主线。必要时可以列出这些线索，以更好地理解文章，为续写做好准备。只有对原文的脉络线索和段落结构有正确和深刻的理解，续写的内容才能和原文骨肉相连，契合紧密。3.把握文章主旨和故事的发展方向这点至关重要。只有把握了文章的主旨意图，才能很好地完成续写。确保续写的内容和原文要有逻辑上的一致性，并能回应原文的信息。4.分析文章的用词特点和行文风格考生要仔细阅读给定的前文，在充分理解文章内容的基础上，认真体会前文的用词特点和行文风格，只有这样才能使续写的内容在语言色彩上和行文风格上与所给文章保持高度一致。真题体验(2021·全国新高考Ⅰ卷)AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a．m..Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1．续写词数应为150左右。2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1：As

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1.抓住文本五要素人物：Thetwins：JeffandJenna时间：inthemorningofMother'sDay地点：inthekitchen起因：toplantocookbreakfastfortheirmotherasapresentonMother'sDay经过：Thetwinscookedbreakfastinthekitchenfortheirmother.2．理清文章三大线索时间线：beforeMother'sDay→at6a．m.onMother'sDay→first→next→then→thenextminute情节线：母亲节前双胞胎姐弟计划给妈妈做顿早饭当做母亲节的礼物→母亲节这天一大早姐弟俩就开始行动起来了→一开始做汤的时候还很顺利→弟弟把面包炸糊了，姐姐扔掉，重新再炸→这时汤溢出来了，把炉火浇灭了→姐姐让弟弟把火重新打开，继续做汤→弟弟不小心手碰到了锅，烫着了→姐姐让他在凉水下冲洗感情线：excited→smooth→busy→panicked→calm3．把握文章主旨，推测故事发展方向本文的主题语境属于人与自我。文章讲述了一对双胞胎兄妹计划给妈妈做顿早饭当做母亲节的礼物，一开始很顺利，但是中间出现了一些意外，汤溢出来了，把锅灶弄的一团糟，后来弟弟又烫了手，好在姐姐还冷静，让弟弟在凉水下冲洗。4．分析用词特点和行文风格文章侧重动作描写，运用大量的动词(短语)，如boil,put，left，broke，turnedon等，句式长短结合，生动形象地描述了两人做饭的过程，画面感强。并有一些情感类心理描写与情节叙述，渲染了既快乐又紧张的气氛。续写时要侧重动作与心理描写。【范文】Paragraph1：As

the

twins

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disappointment,their

father

appeared.Seeingthemessinthekitchen,heimmediatelyunderstoodwhathadhappened,buthewasn'tupset.Instead,heappliedsomemedicinetoJeff'shand,andthensetouttohelpthemcleanupthemess,throwingawaytheburnttoast.Next,theybegantomakebreakfast,andbynowthetwinslookedcheerful.Beforelong,theporridgewasready.Theirfatherinstructedthemtofrytherestofthebread.Soon,thebreakfastwasready,too.Paragraph2：The

twins

carried

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up.Openinghereyes,shecouldn'tbelievewhatshehadseen.Beforeshecouldaskanyquestion,theirfatherturnedupandtoldhiswifeabouthowthetwinshadmadepreparationstogiveherthesurprisebreakfast,andwhattroubletheyhadgonethroughwhenmakingtheporridgeandtoast.Disbeliefgavewaytoexcitementandpride.Huggingtheminherarms,shesaid,“Thankyou,children.It'ssuchanunforgettableMother'sDayforme.”【解析】

①语言风格与原文一致，侧重动作和心理描写；②丰富的动作类动词(短语)：looked,appeared,seeing,applied,setout,cleanup,throwing