高中英语基础性写作(活动)

如何写根底性写作〔二〕Howtointroduceanactivityoraprogram?Wordsandexpressions1.概述活动:修饰活动的形容词:meaningful,important,unforgettable,colorful,instructive

修饰活动的短语:succeedin…;failin…holdaparty/meeting/celebration/ceremonyorganizeanactivitybroadcastaprogramspendone’stimeinmanydifferentways;geteverythingreadyfor;2.介绍活动的套语:…attend/takepartin/joinin…whichwasheldin/whichwassponsoredby(由…主办)……TherearegoodprogrammesonTVonweekends.Duringthefourdays,aseriesofactivitieswereheldincluding……Therearealotofactivitiesat(thebeach).Inorderto…,anactivitywasorganizedby…duringtheweekfrom…to….Exercise1.1〕昨晚,俱乐部音乐会现场座无虚席。(giveaconcert,with+宾语+宾语补足语)2〕全体师生员工约4000名参加了这次消防演习。3)介绍2011年“地球一小时(EarthHour)”活动Lastnight,aconcertwasgivenintheclubwithnotasingleseatempty.

Allstaffandstudents，about4,000intotal，participatedinthefiredrill.

活动时间每年三月最后一个星期六的20：30至21：30活动性质世界自然基金会(WWF)发起的全球性活动目的让民众了解全球变暖的影响,唤起环保意识形式熄灭不必要的灯一小时历史2007年在悉尼(Sydney)第一次举行现状2011年3月26日,125个国家的1亿多人参与本活动。①活动时间+性质+形式EarthHour,aglobaleventorganizedbyWWF,isheldbetween8:30p.m.and9:30p.m.onthelastSaturdayofeachMarch,askingpeopletoturnofftheirnon-essentiallightsforanhour.②目的+历史EarthHour,firstheldinSydneyin2007,aimstoremindpeopleoftheinfluenceofglobalwarmingandtoraiseawarenessofenvironmentalprotection.③现状Morethan100millionpeoplefrom125countriestookpartintheeventonMarch26,2011.

3.活动(事情)的过程介绍活动过程的连接词:Atfirst,…Then,…Afterthat,…Atlast/Finally,…

描述活动过程的短语:havenotroubledoing;makeupone’smindtodo;preparesbfor…;giveupdoing…;dosthasusual;dowhathewantsustodo;setaboutdoing;tryone’sbesttodo…=goallouttodo;getintotrouble;helpsbout;doone’sbitforNewChina;waitforsbtodo;findawaytodo;makefriendswithsb;show(tell)sb.howtodo;take(send)sbto…;

描述活动过程的短语:can’thelpdoing…;dosomegooddeedstopeople;passthetimedoing;feelexcitedaboutdoing…;bepreparedformorehardwork;描述活动过程的句型:I’mtryingtofind…;I’mafraidweareoutof…;SomearedoingA,othersaredoingB,andstillothersaredoingC.Exercise2.1)请用介绍活动过程的连接词把18岁成人宣誓仪式的程序介绍出来----①.学生宣誓;②.学生代表发言〔表达谢意，畅谈理想〕;③.教师和家长代表发言〔表示祝贺，寄予希望〕First,wemadeanoath.Andthen,astudent,representingallofus,madeaspeech,showingourthankstonotonlyourparentsbutalsoourteachersandtalkingaboutourgreatideals.Afterthat,representativesoftheteachersandparentsofferedustheircongratulationsandexpressedtheirexpectationsforourfuture.

2)笔友Robert写E-mail问及你高考后暑假的安排，请用介绍活动过程的连接词回复他你的安排：①.学开车；②.参加英语培训课程；③.游览广东的名胜First,Iwilllearntodrivetogetadrivinglicense,whichisanewactivityforahighschoolgraduateinChina.ThenIwilltakesomeEnglishcoursestoimprovemyEnglishcommunicationability.Afterthat,IwillpayavisittosometouristattractionsinGuangdongtowidenmyhorizon.

4.活动的影响或目的:描述活动影响或目的的短语Todosth./Inordertodo…;aimto…;hopetodosth;forthepurposeof…;

keepsb.fromdoing(prevent/stopsb.fromdoing);callon/appealtosb.todo;speak/thinkhighlyof;bedesigned/intendedforsb.todohaveabetterknowledge/understandingof…enrichone’slife;broadenone’shorizons;gainthesocialexperience;makeabettersenseofone’spersonalvalue

Exercise3.1)这次活动的目的是用英语宣传广州、宣传亚运、激发学英语的兴趣。ThepurposeofthisshowistoencouragestudentstointroduceGuangzhouandthe2010AsianGamesinEnglishandtoarousestudents’interestinEnglishaswell．2)为了培养师生在火灾发生时的自我保护能力和自救能力，我们学校在本周星期一下午4:00举行了一次消防演习。Inordertoimprovetheabilitiesofserf-protectionandself-savingwhenafirebreaksout，afiredrillwascarriedoutatfouro'clockthisMondayafternooninourschool．3〕用2个句子介绍下面内容〔《英语周报》第4期〕名称青年旅社（HostellingInternational简称HI）性质………宗旨致力于为全世界会员，特别是为经济条件有限的青年学生提供“安全、卫生、友善、舒适、经济、环保”的住宿服务，鼓励青年热爱旅游、热爱自然、广交朋友，培养一种亲近自然的健康生活方式，促进青年人的文化交流与融合（blend，v.）HIaimstoprovideallmembers,especiallytheyoungstudentsoflimitedmeans,safe,clean,friendlyandlow-carbonaccommodationataffordableprices.Besides,HIencouragesanaturalandhealthylifestyleoftraveling,makingfriendsandgettingclosetonature,andatthesametime,promotesthecommunicationandblendingofdifferentcultures.活动的影响或目的:总结活动影响或目的套语:…providesb.withavaluableopportunitytospeakEnglish,makefriendsandexchangelearningexperience.IfoundmyEnglishmuchimproved.NeverinmylifeshallIforgettheimpressivedaysin…….…gainalotofsocialexperienceandlearntoworkforthesociety.Throughtheseactivitieswecanlearnmanythingsthatcan’tbelearnedinclass.Weenjoyachangefromourbusylifeinthecity.ItwasaveryrelaxingSunday.…makesyouausefulpersonanditisalsofullofjoys.Exercise4.中英或英中翻译1)通过活动，我们感到这次的消防体验很重要，大大提高了我们的平安感。(experiencesucha…，improveoursenseof)Aftertheactivity，wefeelit'sveryimportantforustoexperiencesuchadrillandgreatlyimproveoursenseofsafety．2〕总而言之，这次学生摄影展览确实丰富了我们学生的生活。Inshort,thisphotoshowreallymadeourlifecolorful.3〕通过这些活动，我们学到很多课本上学不到的东西。Throughtheseactivitieswecanlearnmanythingsthatcan’tbelearnedinclass.4〕Itwasofgreatimportance/sense/value/helptoshowconcernfortheelderlyandprovidethemwithmorehelpifpossible.尽可能地多关注老年人和多为他们提供帮助，这是非常重要/有意义/有价值/有帮助的。5〕Wegainalotofsocialexperienceandlearntoworkforthesociety.我们得到了很多社会经验，还学会为社会效劳。Writingorder:

第一句:what:Anintroductionoftheactivity/program发生了什么事第二~四句:who&when/where&how活动(事情)的具体情况:发生在谁身上?什么时候/地点发生的?是怎么进行的?第五句:Effect/AimAconclusionoftheactivity/program活动(事情)的目的或结果.时间8月26日（上星期六）地点广州市青少年宫过程查资料；写演讲稿；上台时很紧张，但很快平静下来。结果荣获第三名感受一方面自信心很重要，另一方面只有在不断使用英语的过程中，语言水平才能到提高。你参加了一次以“ProtectOurEarth”为主题的英语演讲比赛。请完成一篇短文。Sample1:what事件名称+时间+地点how过程

effect结果感受人称：

时态：

主题:I(第一人称)一般过去时〔主要〕“ProtectOurEarth”的英语演讲比赛。tookpartin

aspeechcontestat…last….lookedforinformationin…andon…;

preparedadraftforthespeech;feltextremelynervouswhen…;

triedtocalmmyselfdown;

gotthethirdplaceself-confidencecanencourageustodo

everythingwellandonlybyusingthelanguageconstantly

canweimproveourEnglish.LastSaturday，August26,Itookpartin

aspeechcontest

atGuangzhouChildren’sPalace,whosethemewas“ProtectOurEarth”.AfterIlookedforinformationinthelibraryandontheinternetmanytimes,Ipreparedadraftforthespeech.Butwhenmyturncame,Ifeltextremelynervous.Itriedtocalmmyselfdown,andtomyjoy,Igotthethirdplaceatlast.Byparticipatinginthiscontest,Icametotheunderstanding

thatself-confidencecanencourageustodoeverythingwellandthat

onlybyusingthelanguageconstantly

canweimproveourEnglish.5月1日，高二〔3〕班的学生志愿者LiYue和ZhangHua去阳光敬老院〔SunshineNursingHome〕开展志愿者活动〔送水果.清扫.聊天等〕。[写作内容](据2009年浙江卷改编)假设你是校英语报的记者，根据以上情况，按以下要点，写一篇采访报道，内容包括：1．时间、地点、任务、活动；2．老人们的反响；3．简短评论。注意：报道的标题和记者姓名已给出。[写作要求]只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。[评分标准]句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。Sample2:

StudentVolunteersBroughtSunshinetotheElderly____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

ByChenJie,SchoolNewspaper第一步：【审题】文体：提纲式、半开放性、叙事体裁的作文。要求考生以“学生记者”的身份写一那么新闻报道，表达学生志愿者去阳光敬老院的一次活动。2. 主体时态：一般过去时。3. 主体人称：第三人称。内容要点：

…wenttoSunshineNursingHometo…,on…

what活动名称+时间+地点+任务（目的）how活动内容effect老人们的反应

简短评论

presented…withflowersandfruits;sweeping…;chatwith…thankful,unforgettable…happy,forwhattheydidhasbrought…toothersandenrichedtheirownlives.第二步：【写作】

可以先在草纸上起草，用自己最有把握的句型、单词、短语去表达，要尝试最简单的复合句，如用定语从句、宾语从句等，但句式不宜过于复杂，要用一些恰当的连词，使句与句之间、段与段之间过渡自然。

OnMayDay,LiYueandZhangHua,thestudentsfromClassThree,SeniorTwo,wenttoSunshineNursingHome

todosomevoluntarywork.[写作要求]假设你是校英语报的记者，写一篇采访报道，内容包括：①说明“活动时间、地点、任务〔目的〕”；5月1日，高二〔3〕班的学生志愿者LiYue和ZhangHua去阳光敬老院〔SunshineNursingHome〕开展志愿者活动。

respectfully,

theypresentedtheelderlywithflowersandfruits.

Upontheirarrival,LiYueandZhangHuawerewarmly

welcomed,andThen,

theystartedworkingatonce,

cleaningthewindowsandsweepingthefloortheysatintheyardchatting

withtheelderlypeople.

witheverythingdone,andlater②～③说明“活动内容”学生志愿者去阳光敬老院的一次活动，送水果、清扫、聊天等。theelderlypeoplethankedthemfortheirkindness,

sayingthatitwassuchabeautifuldaythattheywouldrememberitforever.

When

itwastimeforthevolunteerstoleave,LiYueandZhangHuawere

veryhappy,forwhattheydid

hasbroughtjoy

toothersand

enrichedtheirownlives.④表达“老人们的反响”

⑤作出“简短评论”LanguageMistakesThevolunteer’sactivitiesincludingbuying…Someactivitiesareheldsuchas/includingsentflowerstotheolds.…hadameaningfulactivitythatwentto…时态用了将来时或一般时主体人称没有用第三人称，而是用了I/we，写出了“我”自己的经历。句法错误，汉语式的表达。最后一句感想写成了建议。Throughthisactivity,wehavealesson.Weshouldlearntotakecareabouttheoldpeoples.sendingtheelderlythattheywent(1)介绍活动过程的连接词Assoonas…,/Upon(their)arrival,...Atfirst,…Then,…Afterthat,…Atlast/Finally,…(2)修饰活动的形容词meaningful,important,unforgettable,valuable,instructive,pleasant好句归纳(3)句型①表示活动时间、地点、目的、内容的句型TheyspentthewholedayinSunshineNursingHome,

cleaning

thewindows,sweepingthefloorandchattingwiththeelderlypeopleabouttheirolddays,changesofthecity,oranythingtheyareinterestedin.OnMay1st,…participatedinthevoluntaryworkin

SunshineNursingHome.Theyvisitedtheelderlyintheirrooms,presentingthemwithflowersandfruitstoshowtheirrespectandlove.Theysetaboutcleaningtheroomsfortheelderly

assoonas

theyarrivedthere.好句归纳②表达老人们反响的句型充满喜悦tobefilledwithjoy感到满意tobedelightedat/pleasedwith/gratefulto/satisfiedwith…对…评价很高，认为…很好tospeakhighlyof;tothinkhighlyof;e.g.TheelderlygratefultoLiYueandZhangHuaforwhattheyhaddoneforthem.e.g.Howtheelderlyenjoyedthewonderfulmoment!e.g.TheelderlyexpressedtheirgratitudeforallLiYueandZhangHuahaddone,sayingthattheyweresuchwarm-heartedstudents.好句归纳③表示评论的句型对…有了更好的理解haveabetterunderstandingof(theelderly)…丰富/充实…的生活enrichone’slife获取一些可贵的社会经验gainvaluablesocialexperience......很重要/有意义/有价值/有帮助Itwasofgreatimportance/sense/value/helptodo...

好句归纳e.g.Itwasofgreatimportance/sense/value/helptoshowconcernfortheelderlyandprovidethemwithmorehelpifpossible.

e.g.Thisunforgettableexperienceenrichedtheirownlivesandhelpedthemtogainvaluablesocialexperience.

e.g.Itwasimportanttocarefortheelderlysothattheycouldfeelthewarmthofthesociety.好句归纳(对某人来说)……很重要Itmakesadifference(tosb.)...

e.g.Itmakesadifferencetotheelderlywhethertheyarerespected,caredforornot.e.g.Throughtheseactivities,theycouldlearnmanythingsthatcouldn'tbelearnedinclass.e.g.Theyfelthappybecausetheyhaddoneagooddeed.好句归纳

StudentVolunteersBroughtSunshinetotheElderly

OnMayDay,LiYueandZhangHua,thestudentsfromClassThree,SeniorTwo,wenttoSunshineNursingHometodosomevoluntarywork.

Upontheirarrival,LiYueandZhangHuawerewarmlywelcomed,andrespectfully,theypresentedtheelderlywithflowersandfruits.Then,theystartedworkingatonce,cleaningthewindowsandsweepingthefloor

andlaterwitheverythingdone,theysatintheyard

chattingwiththeelderlypeople.

Whenitwastimeforthevolunteerstoleave,theelderlypeoplethankedthemfortheirkindness,sayingthatitwassuch

abeautifuldaythattheywouldrememberitforever.LiYueandZhangHuawereveryhappy,forwhattheydid

hasbroughtjoytoothersandenrichedtheirownlives.ByChenJie,SchoolNewspaperExercises1.春节来临之际，你校志愿者协会将组织一次献爱心活动，活动方案如下：活动时间下周六上午活动目的让学生学会帮助社会上需要帮助的人

活动内容到学校附近的社区慰问孤寡老人，送上礼物和祝福到孤儿院看望小孩，辅导他们做功课

志愿者条件高一、高二学生有爱心、乐于助人、善于与人沟通

报名方法有兴趣报名参加活动的同学，可到志愿者协会办公室报名

参考词汇：志愿者协会--VolunteersAssociation

孤儿院—orphanage[写作内容]假设你是校报小记者，请写一那么公告，介绍该次活动，并为该次活动招募志愿者。内容包括：1. 活动的时间、目的和内容；2. 志愿者条件和报名方法；3.希望同学们踊跃报名参加。【写作要求】只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。【评分标准】句子结构的准确性、信息内容的完整性和连贯性。Inordertoarousestudents’awarenessofgivingahandtothosewhoareinneedinsociety,theVolunteersAssociationinourschoolwillorganizeasignificantactivitynextSaturdaymorning.Onthatday,studentswillbeprovidedthechancestovisitthechildlesselderlyinthecommunitynearourschoolwiththeirpresentsandtheirbestwishes.Moreover,studentswillgototheorphanagewheretheycanhelpthechildrenwiththeirhomework.Senior1andSenior2studentswhoarewarm-hearted,willingtohelpandgoodatcommunicatingwithotherscansignupfortheactivityintheofficeoftheVolunteersAssociation.Welcomeallofyoutojoinusandwearelookingforwardtoyouractiveparticipationinsuchameaningfulactivity.2.假设在暑假期间你参加了一个英语夏令营，在最后一次举行的晚会上，你要对该夏令营进行简单总结并表达对这次夏令营的感谢之情。英语夏令营：时间：7月10日-7月28日人数：20人〔教师5人，学生15人〕；内容：练习口语、阅读英语文章、唱英语歌曲等。[写作要求]：标题：ThankstoEnglishsummercamp;假设在暑假期间你参加了一个英语夏令营，在最后一次举行的晚会上，你要①对该夏令营进行简单总结并⑤表达对这次夏令营的感谢之情。英语夏令营：②时间：7月10日-7月8日③人数：20人〔教师5人，学生15人〕；④内容：练习口语、阅读英语文章、唱英语歌曲等。[写作要求]：标题：ThankstoEnglishSummerCamp;注意：时态

WhatanunforgettableEnglishcampwehavehad!OurEnglishcampwhich

lastedfromJuly10th

toJuly28thhassuccessfullyachieveditsaims.Alltheparticipantsincludingfiveteachersandfifteenstudentscontributedalottothecamp.Weheldmanyactivities,forinstance,practicingspokenEnglish,readingEnglisharticles,singingEnglishsongsandsoon,allofwhichhavegreatlyimprovedourEnglish.Ifeelverygratefultohavethechancetoknowsomanyrespectableteachersandkindfriends,whohavegivenmegreathelpinimprovingmyEnglish.Version1It’sagreathonorformetostandheretosaysomethingabouttheunforgettableEnglishcampwehavehad.OurEnglishcampwhich

lastedfromJuly10th

toJuly28thhassuccessfullyachieveditsaims.Alltheparticipantsincludingfiveteachersandfifteenstudentscontributedalottothecamp.Weheldmanyactivities,forinstance,practicingspokenEnglish,readingEnglisharticles,singingEnglishsongsandsoon,allofwhichhavegreatlyimprovedourEnglish.Ifeelverygratefultohavethechancetoknowsomanyrespectableteachersandkindfriends,whohavegivenmegreathelpinimprovingmyEnglish.Version23.请你根据提示用英语写一篇5句话的短文，介绍你校开展跑操活动的情况，并谈谈跑操活动的意义。目的舒缓压力，增强学生体质tostrengthenone'sphysique形式班主任领跑时间每个星期一和星期三下午5:10—5:30要求每位学生在这个时间段中至少跑三圈。结果一个学期后，大多数同学的体质得到了明显的提高；学习取得了很大的进步。①Toreducethestressfromourstudyandbuildupourhealth,ourschoolorganizesasportsactivityforusSeniorThreestudents,totakepartin.②Weareencouragedtojoginthestadiumfrom5:10pmto5:30pmeveryTuesdayandThursday.③WithourheadteacherasaguideEachstudentisrequiredtorunatleast3ringsduringtheseperiodsofthetime.④Afteronetermofexercise,moststudentsfindtheirhealthgreatlyimproved.⑤Excellenthealthisveryhelpfulinstudyingandamajorityofushavemadegreatprogressinourstudies.4.请你根据提示用英语写一篇5句话的短文，介绍为期5天的广州书展的情况，并谈谈举办书展的意义。日期2011年8月19日地点广州人数6万余人（来自全国各地、各行各业）主要活动开幕式、科普讲座、作者与读者见面受欢迎图书社会科学、少儿读物、外语等意义提供好书、方便购书、满足人们增长知识的愿望审题,找出要点,主要包括：1.于2011年8月19日在广州召开；2.当日有6万余人到场，来自全国各地、各行各业；3.主要活动包括开幕式、科普讲座、作者与读者见面；4.受欢送的图书有社会科学、少儿读物、外语等；5.举办书市的意义是提供好书、方便购书、满足人们增长知识的愿望。1.为期5天的广州书展于2011年8月19日广州召开；The5-day2011GuangzhouBookFairwasheldonAugust19thinGuangzhou.2.当日有6万余人到场，来自全国各地、各行各业；Presentwereabout60,000fromalltradedandprofessionsindifferentregions.3.主要活动包括开幕式、科普讲座、作者与读者见面；Various

activities

wereorganized

,includingopeningceremony,popularsciencelecturesandmeetingsbetweenwritersandreaders4.受欢送的图书有社会科学、少儿读物、外语等；Booksonsocialscience,childrenandforeignlanguagesarepopular.5.举办书市的意义是提供好书、方便购书、满足人们增长知识的愿望。The

book

fair

brought

much

convenience

toreadersandsatisfied

people’sneed

to

increase

their

knowledgeas

it

could

provide

such

a

great

variety

of

books.

The5-day2011GuangzhouBookFairwasheldonAugust19thinGuangzhou.On

that

day,presentwereabout60,000peoplefromalltradesandprofessionsindifferentregions.Various

activities

wereorganized,includingopeningceremony,popularsciencelecturesandmeetingsbetweenwritersandreaders.Booksonsocialscience,childrenandforeignlanguagesarepopular.The

book

fair

brought

much

convenience

toreadersandsatisfied

people’s

need

to

increase

their

knowledgeas

it

could

provide

such

a

great

variety

of

books.5.今天你班进行的一次非常有趣的课外活动——参观渔业研究中心〔FisheryResearchCenter〕，请你据此写成一篇日记。内容要点：1〕.受到热烈欢送； 2〕.听专家作如何科学养鱼的报告；3〕.工作人员带着参观并介绍日常工作；4〕.毕业后决心为我国渔业做奉献。February20,SundayFine①Today,ourclasswenttovisitaFisheryResearchCenter,whereweweregivenawarmwelcome.②First,anexpertgaveusatalkonhowtoraisefishscientifically.③Then,someworkersshowedusaroundtheresearchcenterandtoldusabouttheirdailywork.④Welearnedquitealotofthingsthatcouldn’tbelearnedfrombooks.⑤Inspiredbythetalk,someofmyclassmatesaredeterminedtoworkinfisheryindustryaftergraduationandbecomeexpertsinthisfieldsoastomakegreatcontributionstoourcountry.6.假设你叫李平，你在由英国领事馆文化教育处所举办的“ExperienceUK’’的演讲比赛中获得了冠军，并有时机参加了为期一周的“英国文化之旅”活动。回国之后，你准备给你的美国笔友Michael写一封信，告诉他有关你的旅英经历和感受。【写作内容】请根据下面表格的内容和提示，给你的笔友Michael写一封，信的开头和结尾已给出。【写作要求】只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。【评分标准】句子结构的准确性、信息内容的完整性和连贯性。旅英时间10月22-30日参加活动者25位来自不同国家的中学生去过的地方伦敦(London)、牛津(Oxford)、湖区(theLakeDistrict)最喜欢的地方及原因伦敦：了解了许多英国的历史和文化牛津：看到了很多古老的图书馆最遗憾的事及原因湖区很美，但天气不好，下大雨最快乐的事结识了许多新朋友DearMichael,Hi!IjustcamebackfromBritainlastweek.___________________________________________________Well,I’dbettergetbacktomyhomeworknow.Bye.Cheers,LiPingAtthelanguageclinic’s1.审题1)多余内容要点：2)信息整合不恰当(相同信息应整合在一个信息块里)Itookpartinaspeech,whichthemeis“ExperienceUK”andIgotthereputationofchampion.IhadachancetoparticipateintheactivityofthetourofEnglishCulture.Whatapity,whenwearrivedinthebeautifullate,itrainedstrongly,butfortunately,Imademanyfriendsinthisactivity.旅英时间10月22-30日参加活动者25位来自不同国家的中学生去过的地方伦敦(London)、牛津(Oxford)、湖区(theLakeDistrict)最喜欢的地方及原因伦敦：了解了许多英国的历史和文化牛津：看到了很多古老的图书馆最遗憾的事及原因湖区很美，但天气不好，下大雨最快乐的事结识了许多新朋友DearMichael,Hi!IjustcamebackfromBritainlastweek.___________________________________________________Well,I’dbettergetbacktomyhomeworknow.Bye.Cheers,LiPingIhadvisitedLondon,Oxford…,Duringthetrip,wehavebeen/gonetoLondon…,AndIlovedLondonandOxfordthebest,becauseIhave/hadknew

manyEnglishhistorysandcultures…IlikedtheLondonmostbecauseIcouldlearn

manyhistoryandcultureofEngland.

2)句子结构混乱,中式英语现象严重Therewere25studentswhofromdifferentcountries

joinedintheactivity…25students(whowere/came)fromdifferentcountriesjoinedintheactivity…2.语言表达错误较多1)动词时态误用或混乱：Duringthetrip,IhadbeentoLondon,OxfordandtheLakeDistrictandIlovedLondon,andOxfordbest.

BecauseIhavelearnedalotofcultureandhistoryofEnglandinLondonandvisitedmanyoldlibraryinOxford.

Duringthetrip,ItravelledtoLondon,OxfordandtheLakeDistrictandIlovedLondon,andOxfordbest,becauseIlearnedalotaboutthecultureandhistoryofEnglandinLondonandvisitedmanyoldlibrariesinOxford.

IlikedLondonandOxfordbest,IcouldlearnmanyhistoryandculturesofEnglandinLondon,IcouldseemanyoldlibraryinOxford.IlikedLondonandOxfordbest,

becauseIlearnedmuchaboutthehistoryandculturesofEnglandinLondon,andIsaw/visitedmanyoldlibrariesinOxford.放在同一句号当中的两个句子之间一定要有连词！3)连接词语运用不恰当However,theLakeDistrictisverybeautifulbutthebadweatherwithheavyrainedmademefeelreglet.Allinall,Istillfeelhappywithmakingmanynewfriends.Unfortunately,