经典高考英语作文公开课省公开课一等奖全国示范课微课金奖

执教：汪建华（南通市高中英语学科带头人、江苏省高考英语优异阅卷老师）（特色阅读教学&作文教学）QQ：315310858欢迎拍砖&交流！高考英语作文公开课1/57IShallNotLiveInVain--EmilyDickinsonIfIcanstoponeheartfrombreaking,

Ishallnotliveinvain;

IfIcaneaseonelifetheaching,

Orcoolonepain,

Orhelponefaintingrobin

Untohisnestagain,

Ishallnotliveinvain.

DailySpeechWhat’sthethemeofthepoem?2/57cartoonpostergraphphoto3/57漫画作文Let’sdevelopourwritingskillsincartoons!4/575/57Whatisagoodwriting？

Content:*everythingneededincludedwhichisrelatedtoyourview.(内容要完整)Structure:*Goodbeginningandending(好开头结尾)*Wellorganizedandsmoothlydeveloped(结构合理,行文流畅)

Language:*NoChinglish(防止汉字式英文) *NoGrammaticalmistakes(没有语法错误) *Withexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatterns(词语准确利用和句式富于改变)6/57Howtowritebasedoncartoons?1.读图(topics)3.谋篇(organization)2.解意(theme)7/57Ⅰ.读图：Topicsofcartoons8/57TopicsofcartoonsEnvironmentalproblemsAttitudestowardslifeSocialphenomenon9/57Ⅱ.解意(Theme)-----tothepointAttention:

文字说明部分往往含有主要信息(clues),切记要认真阅读！！！1.辨明褒贬，找准角度(angle)２.联络生活，明晰主旨(theme)10/57ThecomparisonindicatesthephenomenonofeducationinequalityinmodernChina.Example1角度comparison主旨educationinequality11/57Example2角度criticize主旨Studentsandparentsonlyfocusontheiracademicachievements,neglectingpsychologicalqualityandmoralstandards.12/57Judgethethemesofthefollowingcartoonsasquicklyaspossible.Let’shaveacompetition13/57Comeon!Chooseme!

21354614/57Peoplelackcommunication.Picture115/57Protectanimals.Nobuying,nokilling.Picture216/57Peoplecan’taffordheavymedicalfees.Picture317/57Onefalsemovemaylosethegame.Thinktwicebeforewedoanything.Picture418/57Moneycan’tbuyeverything.Healthisthebestwealth.Picutre519/57Picture6Childrensufferfromtooheavyburden.20/57Ⅲ.谋篇---OrganizationStep1.Description

Describewhatyouhaveseeninthepicturebriefly.Step2.Analysis

Figureouttheinnermeaningofthepicture.Step3.Solutions

Giveyourideasaboutthepicture.发觉问题处理问题分析问题21/57Step1DescriptionTowhatdegreeshouldwedescribethecartoon?Properly,briefly22/57Exampleacountryboycryinglongforeducationacityboyenjoyallthebenefitsofeducation23/57Asisvividlyshowninthepicture,Ascanbeseeninthepicture,Inthepicture,thereare………Sentencestructures:24/57acountryboycryinglongforeducationacityboyenjoyallthebenefitsofmoderneducationAsisvividlyshowninthepicture,Ascanbeseeninthepicture,Inthepicture,thereare………25/57

acountryboyiscryinghelplesslyinthedarkness,longingeagerlyforschooleducation.Incontrast,thecityboyontherightisenjoyingallthebenefitsofmoderneducation.Asisvividlyshowninthepicture,26/57Step2Analysis(联络实际分析)(facts/reasons/results…)27/57

Clues：描述一下他们不一样境遇，并就怎样处理此问题发表你看法。(referringtothegivenChinesewords)28/57Indicate:educationinequalityFacts:dropoutofschoolsufferfromlowstandardsof…comparativelybetteropportunitiesResults:lowerenrollmentratesinruralcountryworsentheproblem29/57Sentencestructures:1.Readingthecartoon,wethinkofacommonphenomenonofoursociety.2.Itseemsveryridiculousthat…However,itisverycommoninourdailylife.3.Thepictureshowsthat…Itistheexactreflectionof…4.Thepictureindicatesthatwe…/Nowadays,itisacommonphenomenonthat…5.……30/57Indicate:educationinequalityFacts:dropoutofschoolsufferfromlowstandardsof…comparativelybetteropportunitiesResults:lowerenrollmentratesinruralcountryworsentheproblemSentencestructures:1.Readingthecartoon,wethinkofacommonphenomenonofoursociety.2.Itseemsveryridiculousthat…However,itisverycommoninourdailylife.3.Thepictureshowsthat…Itistheexactreflectionof…4.Thepictureindicatesthatwe…/Nowadays,itisacommonphenomenonthat…31/57Thecomparisonindicatesthephenomenon

ofeducationinequalityinmodernChina.(facts)School-agecountrychildrenareoftendroppingoutofschoolduetopoverty.Eventhosewhomanagetostayinschoolarestillsufferingfromthelowstandardsofeducationalfacilities.

Comparatively,citychildrenhavemuchbetteropportunitiestoreceivegoodeducation.(results)Thus,schoolsinthecountrysidegenerallyhavemuchlowerenrollmentratesthanthoseinthecity,whichinturnworsenstheproblem.32/57Step3Solutions

(youropinions/suggestions)33/57thegovernmentallcitizensIndividual(从大到小)beawareofOnlyinthiswaysocialjusticeharmonioussociety(从意识到行动)34/57AsfarasI’mconcerned,/Inmyopinion,/Frommypointofview,…2.Itishightimewetooksomemeasurestoputanendtothisphenomenon./Immediatemeasuresshouldbetakento…3.Thegovernmentshouldmakelawsto…4.Weshouldraisepeople’sawarenessof…5.Everyoneshouldmakegreateffortsto…Onlyinthiswaycanwe…Sentencestructures:

Canyouthinkofsome

sentencestructurestoformyourlastparagraph?35/57Sentencestructures:1.AsfarasI’mconcerned,/Inmyopinion,/Frommypointofview,…2.Itishightimewetooksomemeasurestoputanendtothisphenomenon./Immediatemeasuresshouldbetakento…3.Thegovernmentshouldmakelawsto…4.Weshouldraisepeople’sawarenessof…5.Everyoneshouldmakegreateffortsto…thegovernmentallpeoplebeawareofOnlyinthiswaysocialjusticeharmonioussociety36/57Frommypointofview,tosolvethisproblem,thegovernmentshouldspendmoremoneyontheimprovementofeducationinruralareas.Moreover,allcitizensinthecommunityshouldbeawareoftheseriousnessoftheproblemanddowhatevertheycantohelp.Onlyinthiswaycanwehavemoresocialjusticeandthushaveamoreharmonioussociety.37/57Whateverthepictureis,justremember:Proper

descriptionAccurate

analysisReasonable

solutionsOnlyifwekeeptheserulesinmindcanwemakeit.Conclusion:

38/57表达技巧巧用衔接词引用公式化语言转换优化优美句型39/571)引用公式化语言Part1DescribethepicturePart2InterpretthepicturePart3Giveyouropinionsaboutthephenomenon40/57Part1Describethepicture1.Asisdescribed/illustrated/conveyed/revealed/showninthepicture,…2.Thepictureistalkingabout/shows…3.Ascanbeseeninthepictureabove,…4.Thepicturedescribesaninterestingphenomenon…5.Thepictureaboveisabout…41/57Part2Interpretthepicture1.Itseemsveryridiculousthat…However,thiskindofstoryisperformedeverywhere.2.Itistheexactreflectionof…3.Thepictureindicatesthatwe…Nowadays,itisacommonphenomenonthat…42/574.Simpleasitis,thedrawingsetsusthinkingtoomuch.5.Thisisasatirical/ironical

(讽刺)cartoonwhichdescribesvividlyakindofcommonphenomenonthatouranimalfriends,frogs,areingreatdanger.43/57Part3Giveyouropinions1.FromwhereIstand,itistimethatsomeeffectivemeasuresshouldbetakentosolvetheproblems.2.AsfarasIamconcerned,/Personally,/Inmyopinion,/Frommypointofview,/Onmypart,/Onapersonalnote…3.Throughtheaboveanalysis,Ibelieve…4.Judgingfromwhathavebeenarguedabove,itis,therefore,necessarythatsomeeffectivestepsbemadeto…44/572)巧用衔接词1)表示平行或选择关系

aswellas,togetherwith,notonly…butalso...,ratherthan…2)表示转折关系however,inspiteof,otherwise,while…3)表示对比关系onthecontrary,insteadof,ononehand…ontheotherhand...4)表示因果关系therefore,asaresult(of),owingto,dueto,thanksto…45/575）表示时间、次序关系

firstly,…secondly,…,foronething...foranother,eventually…6）表示递进、强调关系what’smore,inaddition,worsestill,moreover,furthermore,aboveall…7）表示解释、说明关系suchas,forexample,forinstance,inotherwords,andsoon…8）表示结论inshort,inbrief,inaword,ingeneral,onthewhole,inconclusion…46/571)______________________educationisbeneficialtousstudents.不可否定，教育对我们学生是有益。2)______________________________educationisveryimportanttous.全世界都知道，教育对我们是非常主要。3)_______________________educationconcerningqualityleavessomethingtobedesired.毫无疑问，我们相关素质教育是令人不满意。3)优美句型ThereisnodenyingthatItisuniversallyacknowledgedthatThereisnodoubtthat47/574)______________usingthefrogstokillharmfulinsects______itwon’tcreateanypollution.

使用青蛙捕捉害虫优点是它不会制造任何污染。5)________________________________peoplefoundwhatenvironmentmeanttous.

直到多年之后人们才发觉环境对我们来说意味着什么。

___________________________peoplefind

whatenvironmentmeanttous.6)_______________________wecan’taffordtowasteit.时间是如此宝贵，经不起浪费。AnadvantageofisthatItwasnotuntilmanyyearslaterthatNotuntilmanyyearslaterdidSopreciousistimethat48/577)____________________________alwaysstayhealthy.

只有借着做运动，我们才会一直保持健康。8)__________________,I’mstillunabletofindasuitableplacetolivein.即使我已经很努力了，不过我依然找不到适当居住地。9)____________________ignorethevalueofreading.我们绝对不能忽略读书价值。10)________thattheauthoritiesconcerned_____properstepstosolvetheenvironmentalproblems.该是相关当局采取适当办法来处理环境问题时候了。11)We_________lay

_____muchemphasisoneducation.

我们在怎么强调教育也不为过。Onlybytakingexercise

willweHardworkingasIamOnnoaccountcanweItistime

took

cannevertoo49/5712)______________goodinterpersonalrelationshipplaysanimportantroleinourlife.显然，良好人际关系在我们生活中饰演着主要作用。13)Weshould_________________protectourenvironment.我们应该不遗余力去保护我们环境。14)Protectingfrogs__________________protectingourenvironment.保护青蛙与保护环境息息相关。15)____________someeffectivemeasures,wecanfinallyprotecttheearth.因为一些有效办法，我们最终才能保护地球。ItisobviousthatsparenoeffortstoiscloselyrelatedtoThanksto50/5716)______________________weareadmittedtouniversities.过不了多久我们就会被大学录用。17)____________________________MoYanhaswontheNobelPrizeinliterature.

我印象最深就是莫言取得了诺贝尔文学奖。18)_________________wehavetoprotectfrogs________theyarefriendsofman.我们必须保护青蛙原因是它们是人类朋友。19)_________effectiveactionswetake,__________lifewewilllive.

我们办法越有效，我们生活就会更加好。

ItwillnotbelongbeforeWhatimpressesmemostisthatThereasonwhyisthatThemorethebetter51/57

下列图描述是当前社会上所存在一个社会现象：酒后驾车。请描述这幅漫画并谈谈你认为应采取哪些办法禁止酒后驾车。Let’stryit!52/57StepsContentsDescription(Para1)Analysis(Para2)Solution(Para3)“kiss”thewall;

iscaughtby;drinksomuch;can’tstandnormallyagreatdanger;forbiddrinking