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1MyExperienceofanOnlineLessonMyfriendrecommendedmeanonlinelessonintroducingtraditionalChineseartstrongly.OutofcuriosityandapassionforprofoundChineseculture,Ihaditonlinewithoutdelay.Thelessonfeaturedthehistoryofartandtheskillsofappreciatingart.SoaddictedwasIthatIlearnedalotfromthelesson.Notonlydiditbroadenmyhorizon,butalsoitarousedmyinterestinChineseart.Additionally,IhadanoverallviewofChineseart.Meanwhile,Ideeplyrecognizedthatonlinelessonsmadevariousinformationaccessibletous.Wedidn'thavetogooutdoorsandadjusttheschedule.Howconvenientitwas!点评：这篇习作写了一节关于中国传统艺术的网课，包括该网课的推荐者，课程名称，课程的特色；在学习成效方面能够利用先总述（learnalotfromthelesson）后分说（broadenmyhorizon,arousemyinterest,hadanoverallview）的层次，逻辑清晰地呈现网课的优势；使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，如so+adj.放句首的倒装，notonly放句首的倒装。2MyExperienceofanOnlineLessonOneofthemostimpressiveonlinelessonsI'veevertakenwasaphysicsclass.Inthatlesson,myteachertaughtusafewphysicaltheoriesandsomebasicskillsindoingexperiments.Whatinterestedmemostwastheexperimenthethenmadeusingthematerialshepreparedinhishome.Throughthelesson,Icametorealizethatnotonlyshouldweenrichourknowledgebutalsostrengthenourabilitytoconductpracticalexperiments.Althoughitwasanonlinelessonwhichwecouldjustwatchthroughvideo,itstilltaughtmealot.点评：这篇习作写了一节物理的网课，包括该课程名称，课程内容，课程中最有趣的部分；在学习成效方面能够紧紧围绕课程内容，逻辑清晰地呈现该网课的优势，比如：丰富我们的知识，增强实验操作的能力；使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，如定语从句，主语从句，Ving做状语，notonly放句首的倒装等。3Waitinginthebaseballfield,bothkidswerenervouslyexpectingtheirfather’scoming.Witheyeslookingaround,theytippedtheirfeettolookfarther,expectingthefamiliarfigure'sappearance.Phoneheldonmyhands,Ialsoglimpsedatitagainandagain,hopingtogetthemailfromhim."Willdadcomeintime?"theymurmured,loweringtheirheadsandstandingmotionlessly.Atthemoment,Ijustutteredawordinaupsettone."May...maybe."Asthegamewasapproaching,Ishouldgotothecornertohandinmyson'scompetitioncard.JustasIturnedtothecorner,Iheardmyson’sexcitedvoice.“Dad.Itisourdeardad."Ascheerfulasbirds,theyskippedtohimandgavehimabigwarmhug.IwasextremelydelightedaswellandtoldhimtosendgenuineappreciationtoAsherafterthegame.Inthedurationoftheexcitinggame,mysonbehavedveryexcellentandhelphisteamwinthefirstprizewithmyhusband'sprofessionalcoaching.Ithinkwithoutthekindnessofthestranger,everythingwouldneverhavegonesmoothly.点评：这篇习作内容丰富合理，富有逻辑性，与原文情境融洽度高（不仅写到父亲的出现，最终赢得比赛，对陌生人善意帮助的感谢，各条线索都有回应）；细节描写很生动，具有画面感。比如：关于脚的细节描写（skiptheirfeet,skiptohim），关于说的细节描写（murmured,uttered），关于看的细节描写（lookaround,glimpse），关于高兴的细节描写(ascheerfulasbirds,beextremelydelightedaswell）；使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，如with的复合结构，Ving做状语，without的含蓄虚拟条件句等。4Waitinginthebaseballfield,bothkidswerenervouslyexpectingtheirfather’scoming.Theyaskedfrequentlywhetheritwasrealthattheirfatherwouldarrive.Ihadnoalternativebuttocomfortthemthattheirfatherwasstrugglingforthepromptarrival.Whenthegamekickedoff,myhusbandstilldidn'tappear,whichmadebothmykidsupset.Affectedbythebadmood,theydidn'tplaywellinthefirstroundofgame.Intheresttimebetweentworounds,Iintendedtoturntothecornertobringsomebottledwaterinabidtomakethemmoreenergetic.JustasIturnedtothecorner,Iheardmyson’sexcitedvoice.Thenatendervoicecametomyears.Thatwasmyhusband!BothmykidsandIwereenvelopedwithgaiety.Hesawthesituationofthegameandguidedtheteammateshowtoobtainthescores.Hiswordsseemedtoinjectpowerintotheirhearts.Finally,ourteamwontheprize.Everyonewaswalkingontheair.MyhusbandcalledAshertoexpresshisheartfeltgratitudeagainandmysonsalsoyelledtothephonewithexcitement."Thankyouverymuch".Ithoughtitwouldbeanunforgettablegameforusduetothekindnessandthelove.点评：这篇习作内容丰富合理，富有逻辑性，与原文情境融洽度高（不仅写到父亲的出现；比赛的全过程，包括比赛开始，赛况，结果；父亲和孩子一起对陌生人善意帮助表示真挚感谢，各条线索都有回应）；关于比赛细节描写很生动，具有画面感。比如：比赛开始（k