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情景作文1/64英语书面表示判卷标准年、年评分标准均为:1.以关键点内容定档次。2.以语言质量定分数。2/64给分档次一档文:(18-20分)二档文:(15-17分)三档文:(12-14分)四档文:(6-11分)五档文:(1-5分)六档文:(0分)注:情景作文字数少于60,扣1分。情景作文3/64评卷给分细节要求1.阅卷中不要经过找单词去找关键点,一定要从上下文来找关键点。2.阅卷重点放在用完整、准确句子去表示思想上,满篇没有正确句子,一样打0分。3.全部关键点齐全进三档(12分以上),要确保关键点和细节相互支撑。4.少一个细节进三档上线(14分),能够视其语言情况+1或-1分(说明该学生最高可得15分,最低可得13分)。5.少两个细节进三档下线(12分),能够视其语言情况+1或-1分(说明该学生最高可得13分,最低得11分)。6.行文中图先后次序有误或人称错误直接进四档(6-11分)。7.文章不能以投放垃圾作为结束,要加上一个合情合理结尾,不然要在所得分数中扣-1分。8.一档或二档文确实定要依文章上下文连贯、紧凑,以及语言质量来决定。9.关键点和细节可出现在一句话中。10.写落款、题目或称呼都忽略不计,按照正常情况给分。情景作文4/64假设你是红星中学高三一班学生李华,为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“OurSpringOuting”英文稿件。请依据以下四幅图先后次序,叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束完整过程。注意:词数不少于60。提醒词:游乐园amusementpark垃圾箱bin情景作文5/64假设你是红星中学高三一班学生李华,为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“OurSpringOuting”英文稿件。请依据以下四幅图先后次序,叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束完整过程。注意:词数不少于60。提醒词:游乐园amusementpark垃圾箱bin6/64情景作文7/64内容关键点及细节1.关键点:讨论细节:

①去游乐园

②划船

③爬山

④决定去爬山情景作文8/64关键点:讨论

haveaheateddiscussionaboutwhether…

discusswhether…

thereisaheateddiscussionaboutwhether…

9/64细节:

①去游乐园

gotoamusementpark

②划船

goboating

③爬山

gomountain-climbing

④决定去爬山

decideto(gomountain-climbing)10/64Lastweekwehad

aheateddiscussionaboutwhetherweshouldgoSpringOuting

TherewasaheateddiscussionaboutwhetherweshouldgoSpringouting.11/64Lastweek,ourclasshadaspringouting,whichthewholeclassthinkwasquitemeaningful.

12/64Lastweek,therewasaheated–discussiononwheretogoforourspringouting.Somestudentswantedtogotoamusementpark,someconsideredtogoboatingandothersgavetheirideasforclimbing.Eventually,wedecidedtotakeaclimb.

13/64Lastweekourclassorganizedaspringouting.Tomakethismemorableactivitymorewonderful,wediscussedthedestinationcarefullyandfinallydecidedtogomountain-climbinginsteadofotherchoiceslikeplayinginanamusementparkandgoingboating14/64内容关键点及细节2.关键点:爬山

细节:①携带吃、喝

②天气③风景

④进行竞赛---看谁先到山顶情景作文15/64关键点:爬山

gomountain-climbing

climbthemountain

gohiking

goclimbingthemountain16/64细节:

①携带吃、喝

withfoodanddrinkontheirback

②天气

ashinyday

afineday

aniceday

asunnyday

thewarmsunshine

17/64③风景

flowers

trees

abeautifulscenery

abeautifulview

abeautifulsight

18/64④进行竞赛---看谁先到山顶

1.competewitheachotherinclimbingthemountainfor…

beincompetitionwitheachotherfor…

holdamountainclimbingcompetition

2.reachthetopofthemountain19/64内容关键点及细节3.关键点:捡拾垃圾(可捡拾自己也可捡拾他人)细节:①一路走,一路捡,②要有对场面描写情景作文20/643.关键点:捡拾垃圾(可捡拾自己也可捡拾他人)

pickuptherubbish

collecttherubbish

gathertherubbish

21/64细节:

①一路走,一路捡,

picktherubbishas/while…walk

②要有对场面描写

1.Wastedbottlesandusedpackageswerethrowneverywhere

2.

wewereshockedtoseelitterhereandthere,suchasbottlesandbananaspeels.

22/64内容关键点及细节4.关键点:投放垃圾细节: 垃圾分类:可回收 和不可回收情景作文23/644.

关键点:投放垃圾

1.puttherubbishintothebin

2.throwtherubbishintothedustbin

3.droptherubbishintothedustbin24/64细节:垃圾分类:可回收和不可回收

1.divide/classifythemintotwogroups:recycleonesandthe

non-recycleones.

2.puttherubbishintothenearbyrecyclingbinandnon-recyclingbinrespectively(=separately)

3.throwalltherubbishintotheproperbins.

4.puttherubbishintothebindifferently.

语言变通,思维活跃25/64Lastweek,thestudentsinmyclassdecidedtogooutforaspringouting.Someofuswantedtogototheamusementpark.Somewantedtogoboatingandsomewantedtoclimbthemountain.Finallywedecidedtoclimbthemountain.Iwasashinyday.Allofuswerehappy.Butwhenwereachedthetopofthemountain.Wefoundthatrubbisheverywhere!Wepickedtherubbishandthrewthemintothedustbin.Ithink,weshouldn’tthrewtherubbisheverywhereandweshoulddoourbesttoprotecttheenvironment.Themorewedo,themorebeautifultheearthwillbe!情景作文第二幅图少关键点,第四图少细节,语言表述缺乏准确性和逻辑性,影响了对所写内容了解。9分②26/64LastweekourClass1Senior3inRedStarHighschoolhadanunusualspringouting.Thedaybeforeweleft,ourclassmateshadaheateddiscussionaboutthedestinationoftheouting.Somestudentssuggestedtheamusementpark,whileotherspreferredboatingandmountainclimbing.Whenitcametopractice,wewerehavingagoodtimeclimbingatlast.However,atthetopofthemountain,wewereangryratherthanshockedtofindoutthatloadsofrubbishwerediscoveredeverywhere.Meanwhile,itcametoourmindthatwehadtocleanthismessup.Thus,afterrecyclingtherubbishindifferentbins,wewereallverycheerfulthatwenotonlyreturnedthebeautybacktothemountain,butalsohadawonderfulspringouting.遗漏了第二幅图这个关键点,只能进四档,但其语言很好故+1分,总分为12。情景作文①27/64Lastweek,ourclasshadaspringouting,whichthewholeclassthinkwasquitemeaningful.Whengettingpreparedfortheactivity,wehadaheateddiscussionaboutwheretogo.Opinionsdividedamongthestudents.Somestudentssuggestedwegototheamusementparktogetrelaxed,whileothersrecommendedthatwegoboating.Finally,mostofthestudentsagreedtogohiking.Onasunnyday,myclassgatheredatthefootofthemountain,andeveryonelookedsoexited.Whilehikinginthemountain,weallhadahappysmile.Butwhenreachingthetopofthemountain,wearesosurprisedtofindthatlotsofrubbishwasleftthere.Thenwedecidedtocollectthemwiththebagswebought.Everyonesparednoefforttodoagoodjob.Atlast,whenwegotdownthemountain,wethrewalltherubbishintotheproperbins.Howmeaningfulwasourspringouting!情景作文覆盖了全部内容关键点,但有个别细节缺失,全文行文流畅,内容连贯,有少许错误。14分⑤28/64

Lastweek,therewasaheated–discussiononwheretogoforourspringouting.Somestudentswantedtogotoamusementpark,someconsideredtogoboatingandothersgavetheirideasforclimbing.Eventually,wedecidedtotakeaclimb.Thenextday,allofuspreparedwell.Withourenjoyment,eachofusclimbedthemountainfullofenergy.However,whenwegottothetopofthemountain,whatcoveredoureyesfirstwasthemassofrubbish.Itwasreallyapitythattherubbishdestroyedabeautifulscenery.Atlast,wemadeupourmindtopickuptherubbish.Afterawhile,witheveryone’seffort,therubbishwasclearedoffimmediatelyandweputthemintotherecycledandunrecycledbins.Inmyeyes,thisspringoutingnotonlygaveuslotsofpleasure,butalsogaveusameaningfullesson.Onlytoprotectourenvironment,canwegetabeautifulsociety.Therefore,Ihopeeveryonecanjoinustomakeourhomecleanandtidy.情景作文覆盖了全部内容关键点,语法和用词能够满足任务要求,篇章较为连贯,有少许语言错误。16分④29/64Lastweekourclassorganizedaspringouting.Tomakethismemorableactivitymorewonderful,wediscussedthedestinationcarefullyandfinallydecidedtogomountain-climbinginsteadofotherchoiceslikeplayinginanamusementparkandgoingboating.Withhighspirits,westartedourspringoutingonafineday.Flowerspresenteduswiththeirsweetestsmilesandweweresoakedupinthewarmsunshine.However,wewereshockedwhenwereachedthetopofthemountain.Wastedbottlesandusedpackageswerethrowneverywherewhichtotallyruinedthebeautyofthenature.Feelingagreatpityforthetourists,wepickeduptherubbishandcarefullydividedthemintotwogroups:recycleonesandthenon-recycleones.Afterthat,weputtherubbishintothebindifferently.Wecallonawarenessonprotectingourenvironmentwhichisofgreatimportance.Thoughclearinguptherubbishwasatoughtask,ourheartswerefilledwithjoyandwewillrememberthisoutingforever.内容关键点齐全,描述语句丰富,上下文连贯,有效地使用了语句间链接成份,只有个别用词错误,表达了较强语言利用能力。19分情景作文③30/64

Inthelastweek,teachertellus“wewillbegotospringamusement”wewereveryhappystudentsthinkswewillgotopark.Ithasmouter,hill,river,boatandsoon.Wewereaskedonnoon.Thelastiscomeon!Tomorrow,teacherandusgonetoamusementpark,wewereplayedveryhappyweweregonetherethatwewerewenttogoto!Monter.Hill,river,boat.Inthenoon,wewerehavefood,weallkindsoffood,Weareverylikethen.Intheafternoon.Wewillgooutcomebackwewereouthadfoodgotothebin.Wewereveryhappycomeback.0分情景作文⑥31/64Possibleversion

LastThursday,wehadaclassmeetingtodiscusswheretogoforourspringouting.Wecameupwithseveralchoices,suchasgoingboating,climbingamountain,andgoingtoanamusementpark.Finallywedecidedtogomountainclimbing.

Thenextday,wesetoffearlyinthemorning,whileclimbingthemountain,weenjoyedthewarmsunshineandabeautifulview.However,whenwereachedthetop,wewereshockedtoseelitterhereandthere,suchasbottlesandbananaspeels.Thenwestartedtopickupthelitter.Afterwards,weputtherubbishintothenearbyrecyclingbinandnon-recyclingbinrespectively.Weweretiredbuthappy.32/64情景作文出现主要问题1.审题不仔细,遗漏关键点。2.缺乏细节观念,不能使文章衔接紧密。3.人称和时态观念差,文章直接降档。4.语言基本功差,漏洞百出。5.缺乏交际观念,极难出众地完成写作任务。情景作文33/64

总复习看图类作文P210(1)34/64Picture1

关键点:

1.pay/makeavisittoChina

2.beonavisittoChina

3.haveatriptoChina

4.goonavisitto35/64细节(难)

gototheGreatWall

gotonthetaxi

talkwithme

alongwayfrom…

getthere

climbtheGreatWall,36/64Picture2

关键点:

lose

mypurse37/64细节:

lookforthepurse

wonderwhere….

beworried

leaveitonthetaxi

38/64Picture3

关键点:

telephonethetaxicompany39/64细节(难)

1.

receivethecall

2.checkmynameandeverythinginmypurse

3.leavethepurseonthetaxi

4.comfortme

(turnitin;senditto…)

40/64Picture4

关键点:感激

thankyoufor…

41/64细节:

Notatall.

bemoved

betouched

feelhappy42/64IhavejustpaidavisittoChina.WhenIgotthere,whatimpressedmemostwas

notonlythebeautifulscenerybutalsothehonestpeople.IwenttotheGreatWallonedaybytaxi.HardlyhadIgotonthetaxiwhenthedriverstartedtalkingwithmeinEnglish.ItwasalongwayfromthecityofBeijingandIttookmeaboutonehourtoarrivethere.IwassoamazedatseeingitthatIcouldn’thelpstartingtoclimbit,forgettingalmosteverything.IlostmyselfinsuchawonderfulWall.43/64Intheafternoon,IwasabouttogobacktomyhotelwhenIfoundthatmypursewaslost.Iwasworriedandlookedforithereandthere,butIcouldn’tfindit.SuddenlyIrememberedIhadleftitonthetaxi.44/64Withthehelpofawarm-heartedman,Iimmediatelytelephonedthetaxicompany.Theman/clerk/staff(whoreceivedthecall)checkedmynameandeverything.Hecomfortedme,sayingthatthedriverhadturneditinandthathewouldhaveitsenttomyhotelassoonaspossible.45/64WhenIgotbackmypurse,IwassotouchedthatIthankedtheclerkverymuch.IhavehadsuchawonderfultimetherethatIwillneverforgetmyexperienceinChina.

写文章一定要有结尾46/6408西城抽样4月一模47/64Picture1

关键点:

gather/meetattheschoolgateandsetoutbybile

48/64细节:

1.Withacamera,notebooksandbottlesofwaterinourbackpacks2.场面描写

behappy49/64Picture2

关键点:

searchformistakes/mistranslatedorincorrectlyspeltEnglishonstreetsigns

50/64细节:

1.tookpicturesof2.tooknotesofthesigns3.场面描写

Abusy,butdelightfulmorning51/64Picture3

关键点:discussandcheck/correct

52/64细节(难)

1.writethewrongsentencesontheblackboard

(presentallthemistakesinclass)

2.compupwiththecorrecttranslation

3.WiththehelpofourEnglishteacher

4.puttheincorrectsentencesintothecorrectones

53/64Picture4

关键点:

telltheeditorsaboutwhatwehavefound(ourfindings).

54/64细节:

1.writetothenewspaper2.hopeoureffortwillbeofsomehelptotheBeijingOlympics.(回到主题)注意:要有结尾

55/64DearPeter,

Howarethingsgoing?WehavebeenbusypreparingforthecomingOlympicsrecently.

LastSundaywehadanactivity-tosearchformistranslatedorincorrectlyspeltEnglishonstreetsigns.EarlyinthemorningmyclassmatesandIgatheredattheschoolgate.Withacamera,notebooksandbottlesofwaterinourbackpacks,wesoonsetoutonourdetectivetripbybike.Nosoonerhadwereachedourdestinationthanwebegantodevoteourselvestoworking.Inthestreet,someofustookpictureswhileotherstooknotesofthesignswethoughtwerewrongorquestionable.Abusy,butdelightfulmorningsoonpassed.

56/64IntheEnglishclassnextmorning,wepresentedinclassallthemistakescollectedincluding“WellcometoBeijing”and“TakeNoticeofSafe”.WiththehelpofourEnglishteacherwehadaheateddiscussionaboutwherethemistakeslieinandfinallywecametoaconclusionthatthecorrecttranslationshouldbelike“WelcometoBeijing”and“Caution!”,etc.Thenwewrotetothenewspaperandtoldtheeditorsaboutwhatwehadfound.WehopeoureffortwillbeofsomehelptotheBeijingOlympics.

WeweretiredbuthappybecausewenotonlyimprovedourEnglishlevelbutalsomadealittlecontributiontotheOlympics.

Yours

LiHua

57/64DearPeter,

Howarethingsgoing?WehavebeenbusypreparingforthecomingOlympicsrecently.

LastSundaywehadanactivity-tosearchformistranslatedorincorrectlyspeltEnglishonstreetsigns.EarlyinthemorningmyclassmatesandIgatheredattheschoolgate.Withacamera,notebooksandbottlesofwaterinourbackpacks,wesoonsetoutonourdetectivetripbybike.Inthestreet,someofustookpictureswhileotherstooknotesofthesignswethoughtwerewrongorquestionable.Abusy,butdelightfulmorningsoonpassed.

IntheEnglishclassnextmorning,wepresentedinclassallthemistakescollectedincluding“WellcometoBeijing”and“TakeNoticeofSafe”.WiththehelpofourEnglishteacherwediscussedandfinallycampupwiththecorrecttranslation-“WelcometoBeijing”and“Caution!”,etc.Thenwewrotetothenewspaperandtoldtheeditorsaboutourfindings.WehopeoureffortwillbeofsomehelptotheBeijingOlympics.

Yours

LiHua58/64

DearPeter,

Howarethingsgoing?WehavebeenbusypreparingforthecomingOlympicsrecently.

LastSundaywehadanactivity-tosearchformistranslatedorincorrectlyspeltEnglishonstreetsigns.Earlyinthemorningmyclassmatesand

Igatheredat

theschoolgate.Withacamera,notebooksandbottlesofwaterinourbackpacks,wesoonsetoutonourdetectivetripbybike.Nosoonerhadwereachedourdestinationthanwebegantodevoteourselvestoworking.

Inthestreet,someofustookpictureswhileotherstooknotesofthesignswe

thoughtwerewrongorquestionable.Abusy,butdelightfulmorningsoonpassed.

IntheEnglishclassnextmorning,wepresentedinclassallthemistakescollectedincluding“WellcometoBeijing”and“TakeNoticeofSafe”.WiththehelpofourEnglishteacherwehadaheateddiscussionaboutwherethemistakeslieinandfinallywecametoaconclusionthatthecorrecttranslationshouldbelike“WelcometoBeijing”and“Caution!”,etc.Thenwewrotetothenewspaperandtoldtheeditorsaboutwhatwehadfound.WehopeoureffortwillbeofsomehelptotheBeijingOlympics.

Yours

LiHua

59/64形成练习unit660/64

IwashavinganEnglishclasswhentheearthquakehappened.AsIwassittingnearthedoor,Iwasabletoescape.Injustasecond,allthehousesaroundfelldowntothegroundandthefive-storiedschoolbuildingwasinruins.Feelingsoalone,helplessandfrightened,Iwastotallyindespair.Therescuegrouparrived.TheymadeeveryefforttosavethestudentsburiedintheruinsandIdidmybesttoassistthem.Thefewdaysoftherescueworkenabledmetoquicklygrowup.Isawandexperiencedwhatwastheworst-oneofthebiggestearthquakesinhumanhistoryandwhatwasthemostdear—thelovebetweenourhumanpeople.Now,withthesupportandaidofthewholenation,wearerebuildingourhometown.Ibelievethattherebuiltnew

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