如何写好英语四级作文-段落

题旨来表达。整个段落必须紧扣这个主题(stickorholdtothetopic)，这一个完整的感觉，这就是完整性(completenessoradequateness)。JoeandIdecidedtotakethelongtripwe'dalwayswantedacrossthecountry.Wewerelikeyoungkidsbuyingourcamperanditwithallthenecessitiesoflife.BellabakesthebestrhubarbWestartedoutinearlyspringfromMinneapolisandheadedwestacrossthenorthernpartofthecountry.Webothenjoyedthosepeoplewemetatthetrailerpark.Joereceivedawatchathisretirementdinner.Tooursurprise,wefoundthatwelikedthewarmsouthernregionsverymuch,andsowedecidedtostayhereinNewMexico.本段的主题句是段首句，controllingidea（中心思想）takethelongtripacrossthecountryirrelevantsentences，一个是Bellabakesthebestrhubarbpie，JoeandIBella，Joereceivedawatchathisretirementirrelevantsentences（不相关语句）而丢分，值得引起注意。MynameisRoseanna,andIliketokeepphysicallyfit.Iusedtoweightwohundredpounds,butIjoinedtheYMCAforanexerciseclassanddietprogram.InoneyearIlosteightypounds.Ifeelmuchbetterandneverwanttohavethatmuchweightonmyfive-feetframeagain.Iboughttwonewsuitcaseslastweek.EverydayIpracticejoggingthreemiles,swimmingfifteenlaps,liftingtwenty-poundweightsandplayingtennisforonehour.Mymotherwasaprematurecontrollingidealiketodeepphysicallyfit，但段中有两个irrelevantsentences，Iboughttwonewsuitcaseslastweek，另Mymotherwasaprematurebaby。从上面两个例子可以看出，nativespeakers同样会造出来irrelevantsentencesPhysicalworkcanbeausefulformoftherapyforamindinWorkconcentratesyourthoughtsonaconcretetask.Besides,itismoreusefultowork----youproducesomethingratherthanmoreanxietyordepression.什么是＂amindinturmoil＂（心境不平静）Physicalworktherapy40ItisnotalwaystruethatagoodpictureisworthathousandOftenwritingismuchclearerthanapicture.Itissometimesdifficulttofigureoutwhatapicturemeans,butacarefulwritercanalmostalwaysexplainit.ItisnotalwaystruethatapictureisworthathousandSometimes,picturesareprettyuselessthings.Ifyoucan'tswimandfallintheriverandstartgulpingwater,willyoubebetterofftoholdupapictureofyourselfdrowning,orstartscreaming"Help"?连贯性按时间先后排列(chronologicalarrangement)Wehadanumberofclosecallsthatday.Whenwerose,itwasobviouslylateandwehadtohurrysoasnottomissbreakfast;weknewthediningroomstaffwasstrictaboutclosingatnineo'clock.Then,whenwehadbeendrivinginthedesertfornearlytwohours----itmusthavebeenclosetonoon----theheatnearlyhidusin;theradiatorboiledoverandwehadtousemostofourdrinkingwatertocoolitdown.Bythetimewereachedthemountain,itwasfouro'clockandwewereexhausted.Here,judgementranoutofusandwestartedthetoughclimbtothesummit,notrealizingthatdarknesscamesuddenlyinthedesert.Sureenough,bysixwewerestrugglingandAndrewverynearlywentdownasteepcliff,draggingMohammedandmealongwithhim.Bynine,whenthewindhowledacrosstheflatledgeofthesummit,weknewasweshiveredtogetherforwarmththatithadnotbeenourluckyday.本段从＂rose＂（起床）写起，然后是吃餐(＂nottomissbreakfast＂,＂closingatnineo'clock＂)，然后是＂closetonoon＂，一直写到这一天结束(＂Bynine按位置远近排列(spatialarrangement)。Fromadistance,itlookedlikeaskinnytube,butaswegotcloser,wecouldseeitfleshoutbeforeoureyes.Itwastubular,allright,butfatterthanwecouldseefromfaraway.Furthermore,wewerealsoastonishedtonoticethatthebuildingwasreallyintwoparts:apagodasittingontopofatubularone-storystructure.Standingtenfeetaway,wecouldmarvelathowmuchofthepagodawasmadeupofglasswindows.AlmosteverythingunderthewonderfulChineseroofwasmadeofglass,unlikethetubethatitwassittingon,whichonlyhadfour.Inside,thetubewasgloomy,becauseofthelackoflight.Thenasteep,narrowstaircasetookusupinsidethepagodaandthelight