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专题二读后续写第二节指导篇(本栏目对应学生用书P383)第4讲

如何解决续写文章中的矛盾冲突

高考读后续写选材应体现积极正能量。虽然话题很广，但是基本围绕“Conflict&Solution”展开叙述。所涉及的冲突主要有4类

(1)人间自有真情系列(主人公或其周围的人遇到贫困、残疾或孤独、失败或自卑等困境)；(2)迷路或苦恼系列；(3)脱险(摆脱危险的动物、人或环境)系列；(4)争吵(误解、背叛或伤害)系列。解决冲突主要通过4个途径

(1)他人的：encouragement，comfort，kindness，love和help等；(2)他物：如河流，太阳等；(3)自己的：courage，effort，calmness和inspiration等；(4)自然：突出和谐，时间与成长。【典例示范】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Onefall，mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal：tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba，Canada.

Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear，Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes，thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner，ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed，andsmelledourgarlicbread.

Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp，whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.

Terrified，ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear，hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway，butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇)，Itooksomepicturesofthebear.

ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes，butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand，throughthefence，sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫)，thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。Afewminuteslater，thebearheadedbacktoourcamp._______________

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Roaringevenmoreangrilythistime，hesmashedhispawscrazilyagainstthewirefence，tryingtotearuswithhissharpclaws.Panickedaswewere，ElliandIscreamedatthetopofourlungs，andwavedourfistsathiminanattempttoscarehimaway.Toourdisappointment，alltheseeffortswereinvain.Thebearviolentlydashedagainstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyonthepointofcollapsing！Chillywindswhippingourfaces，wecouldhearnothingbutthesoundofourheartsbeatingviolentlyinourchests.

Atthatverymoment，thehelicopterarrived.______________________

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thegustingwindfromthehoveringvehiclesweptawayourfearimmediately.Outofthehelicopterdescendedaropetopullusup.Thrilledyetrelieved，wegrabbedtheropeandeventuallylandedonthehelicoptersafeandsound.Whilelookingatthebearfromhighabove，Iwasamazedtospothimcrushthefenceandrushfortheinvitinggarlicbread.Atthisonce-in-a-lifetimemoment，Ireachedintomybackpackandpulledoutthecamera，photographingthatimpressivescene.

【四步成文】第一步

把握原文大意

明主旨和两线文本大意作者和妻子待在营地准备冒险拍摄北极熊，结果北极熊闯入，一场人熊大战即将展开。原文两情线情节线：在营地等待拍摄北极熊→一头北极熊被美味吸引意图闯入→制造噪音无法吓退北极熊→向营地经理求助→喷胡椒粉喷雾剂暂时赶走北极熊情感线：excited，nervous→terrified→worried，anxious→anxious，frightened叙事意图讲述人与熊对抗成功并脱险，主人公成功拍照达成旅行目的第二步

据两首句信息

确定续写方向

1.两段首句定一框

(1)首句衔接段首语可描写被喷雾刺痛眼睛的北极熊肯定被激怒了，回来后会更猛烈地袭击围栏，主人公需采取有效办法避险，如利用随身物品应对攻击，妻子的动作和情绪，烘托场面的危急。

(2)尾句可将人与熊的冲突推到最大，营造危急的场景，如北极熊马上要破栏而入，呼应第二段段首语中的“verymoment”。2.二框二首正能量

(1)首句衔接段首语“thehelicopterarrived”可描写人物“绝处逢生的喜悦”作为第二段开头，接着叙述利用直升机的优势解决问题，如利用螺旋桨发出的巨大声响吓走北极熊成功脱险等。

(2)尾句应呼应原文主旨：成功拍照第三步

原续两“情”相悦

合理添加细节

1.两“情”相悦续写部分情节线的走向：双方对峙→采用新办法避险→脱离险境→拍好照片

续写部分情感线的走向：紧张→恐惧→松一口气但仍心有余悸

2.添加细节

(1)心理描写：夫妇二人面对北极熊一定很恐惧，但脱险后，心理活动会有变化，既感慨逃过一劫又觉得不虚此行，可通过直接或间接的方式，刻画人物心理。

(2)环境描写：在渲染北极熊袭击围栏时的危险场景时，可描写时间紧迫或用拟人的手法描写周围的事物(如风声，草等)，间接烘托人物内心的恐惧。第四步

沿原语言特点

完美连贯表达原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句，进行动作描写、情感描写和心理描写，续写部分可利用适当的并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句描写动作和情感。【即时演练】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

(2024福建漳州一模)InJune’sroomstandsabrightblueclayvase.Notaperfectorbeautifulvase，itisbrokeninseveralplaces.Ithasbeenmended，butspiderlikecracks(裂痕)remain.Ittellsastoryoftwogirls’friendship.AmyandJunemetonaplanereturningfromBangkok，wheretheirfathers，businesspartners，attendedmeetings.JunesatbehindAmy.Midway，AmyhesitantlyturnedaroundandgaveJuneabrightblueclayvase.Itwasasmallgesture，butasimplefriendshipbetweentwo4-year-oldswasestablished.

Yearsflewby.AmyandJunegrewuptogether，playedtogether，studiedtogetherandbecameeachother’sclosestfriend.

However，peoplechangeastheygrowup.Eventhemostspecialfriendshipscanbedestroyed.AsAmy’sinterestsbroadened，shestartedtoseelossandlossofJune.Thoughhurt，Junetriedtobeunderstanding.ShewasstillthereforAmywhenAmyneededsupport.Butwhenshetriedtobringupherdifficulties，Amybrushedheroffbysaying，“Later.”Junecouldn’ttakeitanymore.SoonedaysheinvitedAmytoherhouse，hopingtofiguretheirproblemout.Instead，aterriblequarrelbrokeout.“WhatamItoyou？Yourfriendorjustyourlittledog？”Junecried.Tohershock，Amywasdefensiveandscreamedback.“June，Ihateyou！”Withthesewords，AmystormedoutofJune’sroom，shuttingthedoorhardbehindher.Abluevaseontheshelfjumpedandfellontothefloor，crashingintoseveralpieces.Afriendshipoftenyearswasbroken，justlikethevase.

Oneyearpassed.ItwasJune’sfifteenthbirthday.Insteadoffeelinghappy，Juneonlyfeltdepressed.Sherememberedherfourteenthbirthday.It’dbeenagreatone，andthey’dbeensohappy.BittersweettearsfilledJune’seyes.Shecouldstillremembertheimageoffour-year-oldAmyholdingoutthebluevasetoher.Suddenly，thedoorbellrang.Junejumpedupandrushedtoopenthedoor.注意：

1.续写词数应为150个左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。AtthedoorseepstoodAmy，holdingasmallpackage.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Amylookednervousandhesitant，butshemanagedasmallsmile.“Happybirthday，June，”shesaidsoftly.JunewastakenabackbutquicklysteppedasidetoletAmyin.TheystoodawkwardlyforamomentbeforeAmyhandedoverthepackage.“Iknowwehaven’ttalkedinawhile，butIwantedtogiveyouthis，”Amysaid，hervoicetre