四六级写作精讲

1、problems in our writing,(1). 结构：看不出清楚的三部分或三段 (2). 切题：没有按照三句提纲写作 (3). 表达：语言表达不清,支离破碎。 Social many people develop now at full speed throw up one job and take on another. (?),中式英语 The story make me have some ideas. (?) We have nobody to depend on in the future. (?) There have many people. (?) to live w

2、ithout their parents. (?) School is a study place. (?) money society (?) social man (?) reality story (?),语法错误-词汇,Nowdays /nowaday /In nowadays, 像 likes(?) unlike dislike the true/be ture phonomenons phonomena thefting/thiefed/thieve theirs boss/thier the children the parents effect our study unusef

3、ul unindependent overdegree,writter Was took/tooked/taked on one handon another hand firstlythe other hand For one thingfor the other thing to come true their different aim Make them do / let them do,(4).连贯性,1. 缺少连贯性。没有连接词 2. 连接词使用不当。如Therefore，However, As a result, etc.,(5). 其他,1. 题目：缺失，字母大小写。 2. 文

4、中出现省略号“”和缩略语,如“Oct.”，“arent”，应用“etc.”, “and so on”表达“等”。 3. 文中出现中文甚至空格，如“心理课程”，“ ”。 4主观表述，论据不充分，举例不具代表性，身边的事例。should 5字数过多，书写潦草，卷面不洁。,范文分析,Accidents Concerning Campus Security 1. 目前校园安全事故常有发生 2. 这种现象造成的恶劣影响 3. 应该如何杜绝这种现象,Accidents Concerning Campus Security 1. 目前校园安全事故常有发生 It is an issue that accide

5、nts concerning campus security, which has shocked the public and sparked a heated discussion, frequently occur in some schools. 2. 这种现象造成的恶劣影响 This phenomenon can impose a quite negative impact on the individual as well as the whole society. First of all, the cruel scene has made many passers-by pan

6、ic, not to mention the intense grief suffered by the relatives of the young victims. Besides, the phenomenon will definitely pose a threat to the stability and security of the whole society. Moreover, Some people even lose their confidence in living a secure and happy life.,Accidents Concerning Camp

7、us Security 3. 应该如何杜绝这种现象 From my personal perspective, several counter-measures can be taken. For one thing, relevant authorities are to make sure that some equipments are available in case of emergencies. For another, activities are to be launched to enhance the safety awareness of the pupils as w

8、ell as their parents. Only in this way can we finally get rid of this kind of phenomenon.,What Do We Expect from a Friend?,1.每个人都需要朋友 2.不同的人对朋友有不同的期待和要求 3.我的观点,What Do We Expect from a Friend?,1.每个人都需要朋友 Everybody needs friends. Just as Abraham Lincoln put it, the better part of ones life consists o

9、f his friendships. 2.不同的人对朋友有不同的期待和要求 It is undoubted that friends are playing various roles in different peoples mind. Some people expect their friends to guide and lead them like a mentor. Others expect their friends to share the glory and burden like families. Still others hope that the friends c

10、an relax them and bring them more enjoyment. Friends seem to be capable of any parts. 3.我的观点 As for me, I think there is no ideal friend out there ready to wait for us. We need to look for them, communicate with them, adapt to them and get ready to accept an imperfect friend. Also we should be consc

11、ious enough to know that we cannot expect too much and too many roles of any friend. Only after we have recognized the above points can we get real and lasting friends.,On Job-hopping 1. 目前有许多人跳槽 2. 他们跳槽的目的各部相同 3. 你的看法,On Job-hopping 1. 目前有许多人跳槽 Recently Job-hopping has become very frequent. Some pe

12、ople, especially young people are prone to abandon their occupation while in favor of another. 2. 他们跳槽的目的各部相同 For the purposes of job-hopping, different people have different ideas. Some of them think they can get better jobs and higher income by job-hopping. Others think they can find better workin

13、g conditions after engaging in new jobs. And there are still some people who quit their jobs just for the sake of their own interests.,On Job-hopping 3. 你的看法 In my opinion, people should act with prudence when changing jobs. A prerequisite to job-hopping is the avoidance of the conflict between the employer and the employee.,4. Brainstorming,Teenage Smoking Soars 1.近些年来越来越多青少年吸烟，尤其是许多女孩子也开始吸烟了。 2.分析这种现象形成的原因。 3. 我的建议,On Western Fest