2013年11月质量月分析2012高考作文杜伟丽.ppt

1、Aims 1. 2012年高考写作题目回顾、分析； 2. 欣赏、分析高考满分作文的优点：篇章结构安排、语法的使用、短语词汇的使用。,题目回顾： 假定你是李华，从互联网（the Internet）上得知一个国际中学生组织将在新加坡（Singapore）举办夏令营，欢迎各国学生参加。请写一封电子邮件申请参加。 内容主要包括： 1.自我介绍（包括英语能力）； 2.参加意图（介绍中国、了解其他国家）； 3.希望获准。 注意： 1.词数100左右； 2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3. 邮件开头和结尾已为你写好。,写作注意事项： 1.邮件的目的和参加的意图要表达清楚； 2.审清人称，本文要用第一人

2、称； 3.自我介绍时，要特别突出英语能力； 4.文章可以分为三段增强层次感，以下要点一定要齐全。 1.自我介绍（包括英语能力）； 2.参加意图（介绍中国、了解其他国 家）； 3.希望获准。,Dear Sir or Madam, After hearing of the news on the Internet that a summer camp will be held in Singapore. As a student who takes great interest in travelling, I really cherish this chance and hope to part

3、icipate in it. 第一段 开门见山，直接交代邮件的写作目的。 Im good at communicating with others and treat others kindly. In particular, Im capable of speaking fluent English. So I can express myself well when introducing Chinese culture to the world. Equally important, through this summer camp, I want to broaden my horiz

4、ons, and have a good knowledge of other countries. 第二段 正文部分语言简洁精炼，长短句并用，要点交代齐全，尤其突出了自己的英语能力。 Lastly, Im looking forward to your reply, with the hope that I can be approved to join in it. 第三段 结束语进一步重申想参加的欲望，紧扣主题。,Dear Sir or Madam, After hearing of the news on the Internet that a summer camp will be

5、held in Singapore. As a student who takes great interest in travelling, I really cherish this chance and hope to participate in it. Im good at communicating with others and treat others kindly. In particular, Im capable of speaking fluent English. So I can express myself well when introducing Chines

6、e culture to the world. Equally important, through this summer camp, I want to broaden my horizons, and have a good knowledge of other countries. Lastly, Im looking forward to your reply, with the hope that I can be approved to join in it. Best regards, Li Hua,同位语从句,定语从句,连词+分词作状语,同位语从句,Dear Sir or M

7、adam, After hearing of the news on the Internet that a summer camp will be held in Singapore. As a student who takes great interest in travelling, I really cherish this chance and hope to participate in it. Im good at communicating with others and treat others kindly. In particular, Im capable of sp

8、eaking fluent English. So I can express myself well when introducing Chinese culture to the world. Equally important, through this summer camp, I want to broaden my horizons, and have a good knowledge of other countries. Lastly, Im looking forward to your reply, with the hope that I can be approved

9、to join in it.,Dear Sir or Madam, After hearing of the news on the Internet that a summer camp will be held in Singapore. As a student who takes great interest in travelling, I really cherish this chance and hope to participate in it. 第一段 ：使用了较为复杂的句式结构，不仅有同位语从句、定语从句，而且take interest in、cherish、 parti

10、cipate in 的使用又把文章提升了一个档次，值得我们在写作中借鉴。,（2句话）,Im good at communicating with others and treat others kindly. In particular, Im capable of speaking fluent English. So I can express myself well when introducing Chinese culture to the world. Equally important, through this summer camp, I want to broaden my

11、 horizons, and have a good knowledge of other countries. 第二段 ：第一句话和第二句话重点强调自己的英语能力。第三、四句话介绍中国在突出自己的英语能力的基础上表明参加的意图，即：让世界了解中国并了解其他国家。句子简洁但要点齐全，并利用 in particular、 so、 equally important作为过渡语使句与句之间衔接自然、流畅。 be capable of 、 broaden my horizons、 have a good knowledge of 属于高级词汇，表现出作者对语言较强的驾驭能力。,（4句话）,Lastly

12、, Im looking forward to your reply, with the hope that I can be approved to join in it. 第三段 ：结束语用很简洁的一句话紧扣主题重申了想参加夏令营的欲望，with the hope that.句式高级，that引导同位语从句给文章增添了亮点。 全文三个段落一共用了7句话对要点进行整合和，给人一气呵成的感觉。虽然文章没有太华丽的辞藻，但是语言简洁、干练，衔接流畅自然，句式多样，在词汇的选择上也很有特点。,（1句话）,Dear Sir or Madam, After hearing of the news on

13、 the Internet that a summer camp will be held in Singapore. As a student who takes great interest in travelling, I really cherish this chance and hope to participate in it. Im good at communicating with others and treat others kindly. In particular, Im capable of speaking fluent English. So I can express myself well when introducing Chinese culture to the world. Equally