朗声UNIT写作人物写作改变自我.ppt

写作训练（unit1) 基础写作：人物写作 任务型写作：改变自我,基础写作：人物写作,第一节：基础写作,假设你是学校英文网站的通讯员，最近该网站准备介绍一些优秀学生，请你用英文为卢燕同学写一篇简介。 请根据以下中文提纲，介绍卢燕同学的基本情况。 姓名：卢燕 职务：高二（2）班班长 特点：严于律己，乐于助人，健康、活泼 爱好：体育、歌唱、跳舞 事迹：她各科成绩都很好，但刚进校时，在英语学习方面有困难，经过努力，成绩提高了。不久前参加了英语演讲比赛并获得一等奖。,1 卢燕是高二（2）班班长，严于律己，乐于助人。,5 不久前参加了英语演讲比赛并获得一等奖。,2 她健康，活泼，爱好体育、唱歌和跳舞。 3 她各科成绩都很好。 4 进校时，在英语学习方面有困难，经过努力，成绩提高了。,信息排列参考:按照题目内容顺序,人物介绍的一般步骤： 1、概况 age, sex, birth-place, background 2、 外貌性格 character appearance 3、教育 education 4、生平事迹 big events in his her life (in order of time) 5、评估价 evaluation,be born in. Born into a family, . writer, athlete, professor, journalist, physicist, scientist,1 概况：,attractive active brave caring careful easygoing humorous lovely lively optimistic outgoing,2、性格、特征,frank honest modest patient popular responsible straightforward selfless talented tolerant warm-hearted,gentle smart clever courageous ambitious generous hardworking diligent learned educated knowledgeable,bright intelligent independent confident curious considerate positive devoted determined energetic painful,receive little education receive further education in go abroad for further education major in graduate from be admitted to. win the first prize receive a doctors degree,3、教育,be interested in be fond of Her hobbies are. do well in all ones subjects be good at have a gift in be gifted in perform well in behave oneself,4. 生平事迹,devote oneself to sth. be strict with sb. in sth. have difficulty in (doing) sth. manage to do sth. make (good/great/significant) progress overcome the difficulties,be capable of (doing) sth. be bent on (doing) sth. make up ones mind to do sth. be determined to do sth. take up sth. be enthusiastic about (doing) sth. be active in doing sth.,be determined to do sth. be absorbed in (doing) sth. make contributions to be ready to do sth. be willing to help others take delight in doing sth.,(in) doing sth. complain about sth. take an active part in (doing) sth.,on sth.,spend ones spare time,be thought highly of be famous/known for sth. be admired respected by One of the best most famous Set an example to,有用短语, 熟读背诵： be admitted into a key university 考上重点大学 major in law主修法律 get a masters degree 获得硕士学位 graduate from Harvard University毕业于哈佛大学 win the first prize获得一等奖 win a gold medal赢得一枚金牌 win the Nobel Prize 获得诺贝尔奖 become a world champion 成为世界冠军 set a good example to us 给我们树立了良好的榜样 (10) be highly thought of受到好评 (11) be awarded a medal for因而获得奖章 (12) be awarded the title of获得称号 (13) devote .to . 把专用于/奉献给,Lu Yan, the monitress of Class2, Grade 2, is very strict with herself in her study and daily life, and is always ready to help others. She is healthy and lively and is fond of sports, singing and dancing. Not only is she very kind and active, but she also does well in all her subjects. Although she had quite a lot of difficulty in learning English when she first came to school, she managed to make significant progress with great efforts. Whats more, she took part in an English speech contest not long ago and won the first prize.,任务型写作 改变自我,第二节 读写任务,阅读下面短文，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。 There is a story telling of a religious master who is said to be capable of moving mountains. A man came to him and asked him to show how to do it. The master sat in front of a mountain for a moment, then went to the other side of it and declared that he succeeded. All the audience were greatly puzzled and begged him for an explanation. He said, “ There has never been a way of moving mountains. What you can do is to go to the mountain if it doesnt come.” One of my friends, though having the qualities needed to become a businessman, was bent on being a painter. He resigned from office and devoted himself entirely to painting at home. Several years, however, saw no progress in this regard. A painful reflection over the past brought him to his senses. He made up his mind to take up business in place of painting. It took him only a few years to become a rich businessman. Meanwhile, he spent his spare time exchanging experience and skills in painting and calligraphy. His works finally won approval of expert painters and were on sale in art galleries and grand hotels. He had his collections published and his dream of becoming a painter came true at last.,写作内容：,请就以上的文章写一篇读后感，内容包括： 以约30个词概括这段短文的内容； 然后以约120个词就“改变自我”为主题发表你的看法，内容包括： 当所面对的事实无法改变时，是否应该改变自己？ 举例说明你的观点； 总结你的看法。,存在问题,概括：信息不全；语言不够简练 过渡：概括与主体部分过渡生硬或无过渡句，过渡词。 例子不当，无法体现“改变自我” 时态 总结看法，点题不到位。 对主题的理解不充分； 中式表达,概括 记叙文:1）单独讲述一件事一个故事 2）讲述一件事一个故事+ 写作目的 故事寓意 主题,1）The passage tells us the a story of., sbs experience , 主题句（大意）+ 细节（时、地、人、事）,2）The passage tells us + 主题 寓意目的+ by showing the example of + 故事大意。 The passage tells us the story experience ofIt points out that + 寓意 写作目的,The story tells us emphasizes focuses on,the importance,advantages,disadvantages,reasons,ways/ ideas,that,By telling us the story of., the passage tells us . The passage tells us the story of in order to The passage points out that.by showing the example of,The passage tells two stories about a religious master and a painter respectively, both of whom changed themselves when facing something unchangeable and eventually achieved their goals.,概括部分参考答案(1)：,The passage tells us two stories, one of which is a religious master, who moved the mountain by going to the other side of it. Another one is a painter who realized his dream by changing his career.,By telling two stories about a master who went to the mountain when it didnt come and a man succeeded by changing himself, the passage tells us that we should change ourselves if something else cant be changed. The author mainly shows us a story of a master and his friends experience in order to make us understand that if we cant change the situation, we can change ourselves to achieve our goals.,概括部分参考答案(2)：,当所面对的事实无法改变时，是否应该改变自己？ 观点+论述,（范文） I cant agree with story more. There are so many difficulties for us to overcome in life. Once we can not change the situation, try to change ourselves instead. Things will turn out to be fine, and we may even get unexpected reward. （2）There is no denying that everyone will face some facts and even difficulties which are unpleasant to us but cant be changed. In this case, it is necessary for us to change ourselves instead of being negative. Those who can succeed at last are good at making some changes to overcome the difficulties.,试举例说明。,（1）For example, I disliked studying in school at first, for it was too boring and dull. But when I found that lots of people couldnt find jobs or even making a living because of their poor education, I realized that life is cruel, and without great education, I will not have a good future and all things will be hard. So I changed my mind and studied hard. Surprisingly, I found learning enjoyable and my grades were improved.,试举例说明。,（2）For example, I once failed in the final exams, which made me sad and upset at first. But after thinking a lot, I realized that this was the fact I must accept and it was no use crying any more. Therefore, I made up my mind to work harder and became more confident about myself. As a result, I got good marks in the exams the next term with my great effort.,试举例说明。（范文）,As one of top students in the class, I used to think English was just a piece of cake and thus I ignored it totally. Consequently, I failed in several exams. My English was so poor that it seemed there was no way out. It was not until then that I realized English was not so easy and there was no gain without pain. Then I developed the right attitude. I took an active part in English classes. In the meantime, I kept an English diary, which helped me think in English. Much to my delight, one year later, I became one of the top ten students in the class again.,你的看法1 Life is tough, and there are too many things we can not change. The only thing we can change is ourselves. People who are stubborn and always complain about life wont be the winners. What we should do is to take a positive attitude and create happiness ourselves rather than depending on the God.,你的看法2 In my opinion, it is easier for us to succeed if we change ourselves if necessary. Since it is hard to change the fact, we can change ourselves. It will really make a difference in our life. So, keep the saying in your mind, “what you can do is to go to the mountain if it doesnt come.”,你的看法（范文） In the face of difficulties that cannot be changed, only by changing ourselves and trying hard can we overcome them and achieve what we want.,Sample writing,The passage tells two stories about a religious master and a painter respectively, both of whom changed themselves when facing something unchangeable and eventually achieved their goals. I cant agree with story more. There are so many difficulties for us to overcome in life. Once we can not change the situation, try to change ourselves instead. Things will turn out to be fine, and we may even get unexpected reward.,Sample writing,As one of top students in the class, I used to think English was just a piece of cake and thus I ignored it totally. Consequently, I failed in several exams. My English was so poor that it seemed there was no way out. It was not until then that I realized English was not so easy and there was no gain without pain. Then I developed the right attitude. I took an active part in English classes. In the meantime, I kept an English diary, which helped me think in English. Much to my delight, one year later, I became one of the top ten students in the class again. In my opinion, nothing is hard to a willing heart. In the face of difficulties that cannot be changed, only by changing ourselves and trying hard can we overcome them and achieve what we want.,As the master said, if the mountain doesnt come, what we should do is to go to the mountain. I cant agree more with him. When we cant change the situation, what we should do is to change ourselves to adapt to it instead of complaining or stopping our steps. Because its known to all that only when we adapt to the environment can we succeed. Otherwise, we wont achieve our goals. Take me for example. I used to be upset to study in such a noisy surroundings. Since I never thought of