湖北省武汉市二月调考读后续写解析+课件

武汉市二月调考大作文解析阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。FromthedayTonywasborn,Jeffrefusedtolethisson’sdisabilitiesholdhimback.Tonyhascerebralpalsy,makingitdifficultforhimtowalk.DeterminedtoshowTonythathecouldpursuehisdreamofbeinganathlete,whenhewas15yearsold,JeffsignedhimupwithTeamTriumph,anorganizationthathelpskidswithdisabilitiesinendurancesports.“Itgavemeanewperspectiveonlife,”Tonysaid.Heevendreamedofwalkingmarathononeday.Fromthenon,Tonybecameaddictedtoracing,andJeffalsowantedtobeapartofit.Though

Jeff

had

been

a

minor

league

baseball

player,endurance(耐力)sports

were

new

to

him.He

made

up

his

mind

to

achieve

Tony’s

dream

and

started

doing

things

he

never

dreamed

about.He

began

waking

up

at

4

a.m.sohecouldruninthesilentstreetwhilepushingTonyinaspecialwheelchaircalledaracingchair.Everymorning,hedrovehimselftorunincreasinglylongerdistances.Soon,heandTonywereentering5Kraces,thenontoIron-mantriathlons.

FinishingtheIron-mancompetitioninunder16hourswouldbeanotherdreamforJeffandTony.Thebigdaycame.Theracebeganwitha2.4-mileswimintheriver.JeffhelpedTonyintoakayak.Withoneendofaropetiedtoabeltaroundhisbackandtheotherendtothekayak,Jeffeasedhimselfintothewater.Swimmingwhiledragginganotherpersonisquitetough.Thepaircompletedtheswimin90minutes,andthenitwasontothenextleg:a112-milebicycleride.Theircustom-builtbikehadanadditionalseatinthebackforTonythatfacedbackward.

Aftercompletingthedemandingbikepartinroughlyninehours,theysettheirsightsonthefinallegoftherace——a26.2-milemarathonwithJeffpushingTonyintheracingchair.They’dbeen

competing

for

10

hours,with

only

6

hours

left

for

the

race.The

first

7

miles

went

smoothly.注意：续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph

1:But

at

mile

19,Jeff

began

to

worry

they

were

going

too

slow.Paragraph

2:Jeff

handed

Tony

his

rolling

walker(助行器).

读后续写之情绪描写和精彩结尾一、如何进行情绪描写1、无灵主语+Vt.+宾语e.g.

我开心。Delight

seized(情绪突然侵袭/控制)

me.A

wave

of

delight

seized

me.(加短语）Delight

and

excitement

seized

me.（加并列）Instantly,

a

strong

wave

of

delight

seized

me.(加副词)Instantly,

a

strong

wave

of

delight

seized

me

as

I

heard

what

he

said.（加时间状从）情绪名词：happiness/joy/delight/gratitude/appreciation

/admiration/respect

/anger/rage/fury/annoyance/sadness/sorrow/

fear/terror恐怖/fright恐惧/panic

/guilt/regret

/

astonishment/shock/surprise

/nervousness/anxiety/stress动词：take

hold

of...

wash

over

sb.

envelop(vt.包/裹住)；

sb.

be

overwhelmed

/seized/overcome

by

+

情绪(1)ReliefanddelightwashedovermewhenTonystruggledtohisfeet挣扎着站起来andwalkedtothefinishingline.2、情绪形容词1情绪形容词+

sb.

did

sth

+

非谓语（doing…表伴随或结果）.(1)

Relieved

and

delighted,

Tony

waved

at

me

immediately

after

crossing

the

finishing

line,

conveying

his

happiness

and

gratitude.(2)

Determined

and

inspired/encouraged,

Tony

raised

his

head,

looking

at

me

with

confidence.(3)

Confident

and

determined,

Tony

kept

on

walking,

sweat

streaming

down

his

face.3、让步状语从句：情绪形容词+as

sb

v.,

+

sb.

did

sth.Slightlynervousashewas,Tonypickeduphiscourageandmadehiswaytothefinishingline.4、身体部位+动词非谓语(独立主格,

位置可前可后)，sb.

did

sth.(1)Tearsstreamingdownhischeeks,TonythankedJeffforhistimelyencouragement.(2)Eyesglittering闪现withjoy,Tonyfailedtoutteraword.(3)Arms/Legs/Musclesachingandkneesshaking/trembling,Jeffwasclosetocollapsing(因病或体弱昏倒).(4)Eyessparkling闪耀withfirmconfidence,Tonyshotmeadeterminedlookandpromisedthathewouldmakeit.(5)Toourdelight,Tonycrossedthefinishinglinesmoothly,hisfaceshining闪耀withsatisfaction.2、画面定格：人物动作画面定格/写景画面定格(1)

The

golden

sun

light

streaming

in,

laughter

lingered徘徊

around

and

happiness

floated

in

the

air.(2)

Bathed

in

the

gentle

and

beautiful

golden

sunshine,

they

felt

words

were

powerless

at

the

moment.(3)

Tears

of

mixed

feelings

blurred

Tony’s

eyes,

through

which

he

noticed

Jeff

standing

by

the

side

and

beaming

at（smilingat）

him.3、首尾呼应Realizing

that

Tony’s

dream

came

true,

they

shared

a

laugh.With

Jeff’s

company

and

encouragement,

Tony

fulfilled

his

dream

finally.4、结尾留白Moved

deeply,

he

couldn’t

hide

his

tears,

throwing

his

arms

around

Jeff,

the

man

who

lit

up

his

world.二、读后续写之精彩结尾1、主题升华：名言警句/特殊句式/情感升华法(1)第一种句型:from

then

on

+行动1.E.g.

From

then

on,

Tony

was

addicted

to

pursuing

his

dreams

because

he

realized

nothing

is

impossible

to

a

willing

heart/it

is

not

what

happens

to

you,

but

how

you

react

to

it

that

matters.(2)动作+感动+感悟e.g.

Tony

held

Jeff

tightly,

tears

rolling

down

his

face

without

control.

He

realized

it

was

Jeff’s

selfless

love

that

helped

him

achieve

his

dream,

which

he

felt

deep

in

his

heart.Butatmile19,Jeffbegantoworrytheyweregoingtooslow.WiththedeterminationtoachieveTony’sdreamdeepinheart,Jeffpickeduphispaceandpushedtheracingchairasfastashecould.Thoughhismuscleswereachingandhislegswereshaking,hedidn’thavetheslightestideaofgivingup.Movedbythem,alltheaudienceonthescenestoodupandcheeredthemon打气

loudly.Whatanexcitingmoment!Mile23,mile24,mile25…Thelast100meters!Thefinishlinewasinsight.Atthistime,JeffstoppedbecauseheknewitwastimeforTonytoachievehisowndream.JeffhandedTonyhisrollingwalker.Aftertheyexchangeddeterminedglances,Tonystoodupslowlywiththehelpoftherollingwalker.Slightlynervousashewas,Tonygatheredhiscourageandmadehiswaytothefinishingline.Itseemedthattherunwaywasnotlongfortheable-bodiedbutitwassolongforachildwithwalkingdisability.Confidentanddetermined,Tonykeptonwalking,sweatstreamingdownhisfacethoughhetrippedseveraltimes.TherunwaywitnessedTony’sawkwardbutfirmstepstowardsthefinishingline.Peopleonthespotweremovedtotears,cheeringforhim.“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!”theyshoutedenthusiastically.FinallyTonyreachedthefinallineintime.Floodedbythunderousapplause,TonyandJeffhuggedeachothertightly.

Butatmile19,Jeffbegantoworrytheyweregoingtooslow.Somehowhefoundtheenergytopickupthepace.WithTony'sdreamdeeplyimprintedinhismind,Herealizedhewasnotaloneinthisbattle.Clenchinghisteeth,Jeffusedallhisstrengthandwillpowertopushthe

racingchair.Theaudiencecan'thelpcheeringforthem.Withthunderousapplause,theywereclosetothefinishingline.JeffknewitwastimetofulfilTony’swish.JeffhandedTonyhisrollingwalker.Not