高中英语议论文讲评.ppt

A comment of composition 作文讲评 议论文 An argument 制作人：刘海艳 作为一个中学生, 你肯定经历过多次考试, 体验过成功, 也遭遇过失败. 请你根据提示内容, 简要概述中学生普遍存在的对考试失败的两种 态度, 并结合自身实际, 说明你的观点. 态度一: 当考试结果不尽人意时, 情绪低落, 丧 失信心, 不再继续努力. 态度二: 当考试失败时, 分析找出失败的原因, 鼓励自己, 增强自信, 避免再犯同样的错。 你的观点: 失败乃成功之母, 写作内容 作文满分25分。 作文得分情况数据分析： （其中20分以上（优秀）3人，占5.2% ）10-14分11人，占18.9%; 5-9分11人，18.9%; 1-4分5人，8.6%; 0分5人+10人空白作文（记0分）共15人，占25.8%. 27.6% 5.2% 全班平均分8.75分（35%）。 全班58人。 上交有效作文48人， 另有10人空白作文。 18.9% 18.9% 8.6% 25.8% 15分以上（及格）16人，占27.6%; Good good study, day day up! 好好学习，天天向上！ You Give Me Stop！ 你给我站住！ How are you？How old are you？ 怎么是你，怎么老是你？ heart flower angry open 心花怒放 night night do succeed class 夜夜做功课 Give you a colour see see! 给你点颜色瞧瞧！ 老外：“Hi.” 前台小姐：“You have what thing？” 老外：“Can you speak English？” 前台小姐：“If I not speak English, I am speaking what？” 老外：“Can anybody else speak English here？” 前台小姐：“You yourself look. All people are working, no people have time, you can wait, again wait a wait, if you not think wait, you can go！” 老外：“God. Anybody here can speak English？” 前台小姐：“Shout what shout, quiet a little, you on earth have what thing？” 老外：“I want to speak to your head.” 前台小姐：“Head not here. You can tomorrow come！” ChineseEnglish+ Chinglish Because I didnt work hard. Lets work hard. Failure is the mother of success. Ive been thinking about this for a long time. It is a bad way. 英语作文十大常见错误 一篇优秀的英语作文在内容和语言 两方面应该是一个统一体，任何一方面 的欠缺都会直接影响到作文的质量。然 而，很多学生在写作中或者由于粗心大 意，或者由于基本功不扎实而经常出现 名词不变复数，第三人称单数不加s， 前后不一致，以及时态语态、句子完整 性等多方面的错误。 如作文要求写一项最喜欢的课外 活动，有些学生将作文的主题定位为 “我最喜欢的活动”，偏离了“一项、 课外活动”这一主题。依据作文的评 分原则，若文章内容不切题，则不管 语言如何规范、用词如何准确，都不 会得高分，通常还会被判为零分。 1. 审题不清 2.拼写错误 I beleive you can help me. I believe you can help me. reasonmy failure difficulty 3.名词单复数问题 误:My father and my mother is all teacher. 正:My father and my mother are both teachers. tests exams 4. 缺少动词 在汉语中没有动词的句子是允许的，但 英语中每个完整的句子都必须有动词来构成 。 误:I happy I can come to Beijing Zoo. 正:I am happy I can come to Beijing Zoo. 误:The apples cheap. Ill take some. 正:The apples are cheap. Ill take some. be am 5.缺少介词、 副词、冠词等 误: Because heavy rain, we cant hold the sports meeting. 正: Because of the heavy rain, we cant hold the sports meeting. 6.代词的误用 英语中代词的形式很多，包括主格、宾格 、物主代词、反身代词等。而汉语中没有主格 和宾格、形容词性物主代词和名次性物主代词 之分；此外汉语中很多时候不用物主代词，而 英语中物主代词是不可省略的。 误:I mother bought a present for I. 正:My mother bought a present for me. reason failuremy Your 7.语言不简洁 修改前： A famous sportsman was giving a speech which was rather interesting. 修改后： A famous sportsman was giving an interesting speech. 8.前后不一致 所谓不一致，包括数的不一致、 时态不一致及代词不一致、主谓不一 致等. 误:When one have knowledge, he can do what he want to do. 正:When one has knowledge , he can do what he wants (to do) are 9.时态、人称和数的搭配错误 汉语动词无时态、人称和数的变化 ，而对英语来说，这些都至关重要。 误:When I get to the station the train leave. 正:When I got to the station the train had left. attitudes 10. 综合性错误 综合性错误是指单词的大小写和 标点符号的错误等，以及形容词和副 词的混淆、连词的误用等等。 As students, we have experienced many tests. Then, I begin to analyse the causes of failure. 原文翻译 句子乱用 格式不规范 马虎了事 标点符号 实战演练 Read the composition carefully, Work in groups, try to find the mistakes as many as possible, Then try to correct them. As a student.we must face to exam.When the exam coming,Many students become very nervous and dont how to deal with this problems. We have many test at school and often failed the test.When we failed the exam,we felt very upset even crying.Because of the failure,any students didnt work hard and give up study.This way is bad,we shoudnt like to do.Any students analyse exam paperand become more hard before in order to do better in the next exam。 Failure is the mother of success.Lets hard work. 原文照录 作为一个中学生, 你肯定经历过多次考试, 体验过成功, 也遭遇过失败. 请你根据提示内容, 简要概述中学生普遍存在的对考试失败的两种 态度, 并结合自身实际, 说明你的观点. 态度一: 当考试结果不尽人意时, 情绪低落, 丧 失信心, 不再继续努力. 态度二: 当考试失败时, 分析找出失败的原因, 鼓励自己, 增强自信, 避免再犯同样的错。 你的观点: 失败乃成功之母, 写作内容 审 题 体裁: 时态: 人称: 要点: 议论文 现在时 第一人称 (1) 我们中学生经历过多次考试, 体验过成 功, 也遭遇过失败. (2) 态度一: 当考试结果不尽人意时, 情绪 低落, 丧失信心, 不再继续努力. (3) 态度二: 当考试失败时, 分析找出失败 的原因, 鼓励自己, 增强自信, 避免再犯 同样的错。 (4) 我的观点: 失败乃成功之母, 正 反 观 点 对 比 类 的 文 章 提 出 问 题 不同观 点对比 说明自 己观点 (1)我们中学生经历过多次考试, 体验过成功, 也遭遇过失败. 对考试失败大致有两种态度. (2)态度一: 当考试结果不尽人 意时, 情绪低落, 丧失信心, 不再继续努力. (3)态度二: 当考试失败时, 分析 找出失败的原因, 鼓励自己, 增强自信, 避免再犯同样的错。 (4)我的观点: 失败乃成功之母, 句型短语 (1)我们中学生经历过多次考试, 体验过成功, 也遭遇过失败. 对考试失败大致有两种态度. have/take many tests/exams do well in the exams / achieve success suffer from failure/ fail (in) the exams take different attitudes towards/ there are different attitudes towards (2) 态度一: 当考试结果不尽人意时, 情绪低落, 丧失信心, 不再继续努力. be in low spirits / have passive attitudes no longer study hard/ no longer try ones best lose heart/confidence 句型短语 (3)态度二: 当考试失败时, 分析找出失败 的原因, 鼓励自己, 增强自信, 避免再 犯同样的错。 find out/analyze the causes encourage oneself have/take active attitudes build up self-confidence avoid making the same mistake 句型短语 (4)我的观点: 失败乃成功之母, In my view / opinion, As for me, As far as I am concerned, I agree with Failure is the mother of success. 句型短语 总起: 表达不同观点的套语 Different people hold different opinions. People have taken different attitudes towards People have different opinions on this problem. On the contrary, others hold a different view. However, each coin has two sides. On the other hand, people object(反对) that . 衔接: We middle school students have had many tests or exams and have both achieved success and suffered from failure, but different students take different attitudes towards failure. Some fall in low spirits when they dont do well in the exams, losing heart and no longer studying as hard as before. However, most students take an active attitude towards failure. By encouraging themselves to be self-confident, They find out and analyze the causes so that they will no longer make similar mistakes. In my opinion, failure is the mother of success, which can teach us a lot in the process of reaching our goals, and only by tasting failure can we enjoy the fruit of success. We middle school students have had many tests or exams and have both achieved success and suffered from failure, but different