2011凌云级高三十月阶段考.ppt

高考英语写作定位,1 熟悉的话题 2 100-140个词 3 不止一个段落,高考写作,1 避免随心所欲 2 取悦评判教师 3 关注谴词造句,写作,1 输入 2 模仿 3 再生,假如你是Lily, 请根据下列提示和要求给你的外国笔 友Peter 写一封信。 如何度过了高三学习的第一个月？ 想在明年高考考那所大学？为什么要考这所大学？ 为了实现你的目标，今后要做哪些方面的努力？ 注意：1. 词数：120左右 2. 信的开头和结尾已写好，不计入总词数。 Dear Peter, How are things with you? Are you still working on your paper?_ Best wishes,评分原则,词语句子准确 内容要点齐全 篇章结构分段 词数100-140 结束句添加 书写工整 按档次给分： 五档：20、21、22分 四档（上）：18、19分 四档（下）：16、17分 (附中学生的书面表达至少要有17分） 三档（上）：13、14、15 三档（下）：11、12 凡套题、跑题的书面表达得分为5-8分。 凡书写较差的视为三档下的作文。,一、注意 1.多套用句型, 句式多样性；避免汉式英语(不写没把握的句子和词组) 2.注意连贯， 条理清楚；正确使用连接词。 3.要检查主谓一致、习惯用法、单词拼写等方面的错误。 4.写作前先理清思路，注意要点，以免遗漏；可以先将重要词组、句型列出，再开始写作。 5.要根据自己的实际情况或虚构情节完成写作，要有话可说，要符合半开放作文的写作要求。 6.书写工整,二、存在问题： 1. 审题不清： 1)“如何度过了”看成“将如何度过” 2)是叙述自己的情况，不是要对方叙述情况 3）没有写出想上的大学的名称，太写实，不懂得虚构。 2.中式英语表达较多，不会套用句型，短句偏多-出现较低级错误。 3.部分同学拼写错误严重-基本功差。,二、存在问题： 4.答题前没列提纲，结构混乱，思维混乱 5.部分同学出现套题现象（套用上一篇）。 6.有些作文收尾不自然，很唐突。 7.答题时间不足，建议书面表达答题时间为25-30分钟。 8. 部分学生无话可说，字数不够。 9.部分同学书写较差，卷面不整洁，思维混乱，涂改较多（严禁在考试中使用涂改液、带、纸等）-屡教不改会吃亏的。,优点,部分同学开始使用讲评过的范文的句型和短语。悟性高 如：spare no effort to do Theres no denying that attach importance to sth. be admitted to a university feel stressed out make good use of I would appreciate it if you did be admitted to a university,优点,取悦评卷教师：聪明 I want to enter Fujian Normal University I dream of being a teacher Without the teachers help, I would not 今后的努力： devote myself to learning English attach more importance to English join the English club,常见错误,? the Xiamen / Beijing/ Fudan University ? come true my dream ? to make my dream realize school和university 不分 everyday和every day 的区别 ？ Its no doubt that ? appreciate my teachers ? prepare the exam ? I quite felt a sense of stress out. ? stressful ? Every minutes count. ? With the time went by,优秀习作及点评：22分 Im writing to tell you something about my life and study. ( 开门见山， 与前面过度自然）As you know, Im preparing for the coming exams. With time going by, I have been trying my best to enhance my ability. (to improve my abilities ) Everything goes well. When it comes to my dream, being admitted by Pecking University ( Beijing University )is my dream. （ 好句 ）Pecking University is famous for its education( for its academic atmosphere ).I want to major in English, which is the most important factor in deciding your future. (取悦评卷教师，不错）Besides, I also want to minor in Math ( 辅修数学 ，很好） （还可以 用take a course in Math )mainly due to the fact that math is my favourite subject . ( that I like math as well ) .,To come true my dream, (高分考生不该犯的错 。come true 是不及物动词短语，不跟宾语，应改为To make my dream come true; To reach / realize /achieve my dream; To turn my dream into reality )I ought to devote myself to study ( to my studies ). The most significant thing I have to take into consideration is to make up my mind to study harder and harder. It is also of great importance to pay close attention to my physical health. Doing sports is , to a large degree, very useful for me. I can reap lots of benefits from it . （ 全都是好句）,Besides what is mentioned above, it is still necessary to think of my mental health, The way to relax my self is listening to light music. ( 由于字数的限制，为了更简练，可以改为：. Besides , I relax myself by listening to light music in my spare time .) Only in this way can I get rid of too much pressure. How about you? I think it a great pleasure to write to you. Dont hesitate to write to me whenever you need help. Best wishes.,优秀习作及点评：22分 How time flies! The ( This ) September has quickly passed ( passed before we knew it ). Just as you had (不用 had )pointed out, the life of Senior 3 is filled with both challenges and difficulties. I did feel stressful ( 此处不该错stressed out /under much stress)for some time due to the huge amount of homework ,but fortunately I managed to calm my mind( calm myself ) and found( find ) a more effective way to learn. To tell you the truth, I really dream of being admitted to Peking University next year. Its fascinating history and impressive learning atmosphere have been attracting me since I was young. Also, I think it will give me more chances to develop my abilities.,However, the road to success is sure to be tough. In order to realize my dream, I must make better use of time and study more effectively. Whats more, I have to be calm enough to cope with all the troubles , always adopting a positive attitude to the details I may come across while studying. Last but not the least, I will work steadily for my goal , not ( without)being too stressful ( nervous, stressful 多跟life,job 等连用)all the time. 要有一两个结束句。,高三11班纪晓芊： Having studied for nearly a month in Senior 3, I feel stressed. There are various courses for us to study. We are burdened with much homework nearly every day. In addition, there are varieties of activities of activities for us to take part in. I will spare no effort to realize my dream of being admitted to Xiamen University, for there is a fantastic place. I am deeply impressed by the beauty of the university. Apart from the scene, the education level here is quite good. In order to make my dream come true, I will put a lot of effort into the preparations for the College,Entrance Exam. For one thing, I think it necessary for me to go through the things we have learned carefully. For anther, I need to concentrate my attention on improving English. Besides, I shall raise the awareness of communicating with teachers. Above all, I will attach importance to learning, for future is in my hand. I would appreciate it if you could write me soon. 全文流畅，恰如其分地运用学过的句型、短语。值得同学们模仿。,One possible version: Dear Peter, How are things with you? Are you still working on your paper? Last month most of my time was divided between attending classes, doing homework and going over lessons. That is perhaps a life every Senior 3 s