Task-basedWriting黄洁贤.ppt

,Task-based Writing,By Huang Jiexian,Enable the students to grasp how to improve a paragraph.,Teaching goals:,Correction and appreciation:,1. Correct the mistakes in your last passage and admire your teammates passages. 2. Try to tell the whole class what kind of passages can receive high praise from the teachers.,Step 1:,字体工整,卷面干净； 紧扣主题,条理清晰； 语言地道,过渡自然； 长度适中,一气呵成。,评卷教师喜欢什么样的作文?,评卷教师讨厌什么样的作文?,涂涂抹抹，斑斑点点； 书写潦草，卷面不洁； 层次不清，段落不分； 语句不通，杂乱无章。,以30个词概括上面文章的要点。,Possible version:,If I see a person ahead fall down, Ill stop to give a hand because first of all, if all the people avoid getting involved and walk away, the person may not get necessary help or first aid, which may bring unexpectedly serious consequences. Whats more, offering help to those in need is our responsibility. Why should we hesitate when a small act may make a big difference to your fellow men?,当别人遇到意外事故时你是否会停下来帮助？理由是什么？,Actually, I was one of those who once benefited from others assistance. One Monday morning, I was in a big hurry running up the stairs to the classroom when suddenly I missed one step, sprained my ankle and fell down. Painful and embarrassed, I just couldnt gather my strength to get up. At this very moment, some unknown schoolmates passing by stopped, helped me pick up all the scattered books and sent me to the school clinic. I was moved and grateful beyond words.,简述你或他人遇到的一次意外事故，以及得到了什么帮助。,Step 2: Analysis,Read the paragraph again and try to tell how to improve a paragraph?,简述你或他人遇到的一次意外事故，以及得到了什么帮助。,Actually, I was one of those who once benefited from others assistance. One Monday morning, I was in a big hurry running up the stairs to the classroom when suddenly I missed one step, sprained my ankle and fell down. Painful and embarrassed, I just couldnt gather my strength to get up. At this very moment, some unknown schoolmates passing by stopped, helped me pick up all the scattered books and sent me to the school clinic. I was moved and grateful beyond words.,a topic sentence,(主题句),supporting sentences,(扩展句),a concluding sentence,(结论句),a paragraph:,How to improve a paragraph,(段落),(主题句),a concluding sentence,(如何写好一个段落),supporting sentences,(扩展句),(结论句),a topic sentence,主题句要明确、概括,让读者一目了然 本段的主题,明确本段的重点或观点。 1) When it comes to offering help, it reminds me of my experience happening three years ago. 2) Actually, I was one of those who once benefited from others assistance.,1. How to write a topic sentence,(如何写主题句),1) 总结要点,与主题句相呼应; 2)让读者就本段落的主要内容和见解有 深刻的印象。,2. The importance of a concluding sentence,(结论句的重要性),It was his help that saved my life, and I will spare no effort to be a helpful person in the future.,3. The uses of supporting sentences: (扩展句的作用) Supporting sentences can enrich, support and develop the content of the topic sentence and they are the main body of a paragraph.,(扩展句丰富,支持,扩展主题句的内涵, 他们是段落的血和肉。),Compare the following two passages and try to tell how to improve supporting sentences.,4. How to improve supporting sentences: (如何写好扩展句),The world will be full of love if we give a hand to those who need help. Take my experience for example. Once my bike broke down on my way home but I couldnt repair it. So I had to sit down near my bike. Fortunately, a young man came up to me and asked me if I needed some help. I nodded my head. At last, my bike was repaired and I was so grateful.,Passage 1,It is my own experience that convinced me the world is full of love. On a cold rainy evening, I was riding home by myself. Unfortunately, I fell off my bike because of the wet and slippery road. I sat on the road, struggling to stand up, but failed. Painful and frustrated, I didnt know what to do. At this very moment, a stranger came up to me. As I was expected, she helped me up and sent me to the hospital. Then she left without saying anything. I was grateful for her kindness from the bottom of my heart.,Passage 2,It is my own experience that convinced me the world is full of love. On a cold rainy evening, I was riding home by myself. Unfortunately, I fell off my bike because of the wet and slippery road. I sat on the road, struggling to stand up, but failed. Painful and frustrated, I didnt know what to do. At this very moment, a stranger came up to me . As I was expected, she helped me up and sent me to the hospital. Then she left without saying anything. I was grateful for her kindness from the bottom of my heart.,Passage 2,cold rainy,by myself,the wet and slippery road,struggling to stand up,Painful,and frustrated,As I was expected,without saying anything,because of,very,How to improve supporting sentences: (如何写好扩展句),紧记写作词汇“三原则”,A. 转换原则,B. 复杂原则,C. 温暖原则,不要老是使用小学/初中词汇,而要适当地复杂化。,不会说的绕着说, 没把握的换着说。,孤独的名词用形容词来修饰, 孤独的形容词、动词用副词来修饰。,-较高级词汇,-丰富的语法结构,-恰当的连接词,1.以30个词概括以上短文的内容。(已给出) 2.以约120个词就“幸福”话题写一篇短文， 内容包括： 1）请讲述一件你经历过的幸福的事情； 2）简述你对幸福的理解。 文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事。,Step 3: Practice,Being a school bus driver, the author has been feeling unsatisfied with his life until a girl gave him th