2013高考英语作文复习.ppt

2013湖南高考 英语作文,2011年高考英语作文赏析,第六部分：书面表达 Section C Directions: Write an English composition according to the instructions given below in Chinese 假设你参加所在年级的英语作文比赛，请按照如下要求写一篇短文： 1，简要描述下图内容，并点明主题； 2，联系实际，表达该图给你带来的启示,注意：1，词数不少于120个； 2，不能使用真实姓名和学校名称,这一命题一改近几年给足要点、写人写事的保守出题方式，采用了北京卷常用的看图作文。但具体的写作内容还是回归到常考话题的范畴中。题目中的漫画图并不难理解。我们可以理解为积极向上的主题：团结就是力量、部分与整体、人与社会的融合、团队协作、锲而不舍、成功需要积累、积少成多、环保节约、和谐、小错可以酿成大错等等。 写作要求与方法。全文应该包括图片描述与主题归纳、联系实际与启示三大部分内容。 第一段：简单的描述图片的内容，描述的侧重点是积少成多。并点明主题。 第二段：转化为普通的英语议论文的主体段，采取举例法，分析法，等议论方法证明观点。 第三段：总结观点，说明自己从图中学到了什么，得到了什么启示。,卷评佳作赏析,The part and the whole world Some water makes up the sea. The forest is made up of many trees. In our society, the group of people consists of various people. The little things contribute to the whole world. Dont forget the little things and ignore them, which will cost you a lot. Its obvious that we look upside down some little things frequently, while look up to several honourable things .However, the common thing is more meaningful than the honourable thing. Normal man as you are, you can create more contributions to the society. Its what you have done to the society that are really important .With a kind heart to the society, every part of the society is of significance. The more you devote to the society, the more you will gain. Being a part of the whole world, your life will be colorful and meaningful.,23分,25分,What advantages?,Unity is power 24 Many drops of water can make up a sea. Many trees can turn into a forest. Many people can be combined together to make a society. Everything proves the idea that unity is power. Life is full of ups and downs and there are always many difficulties lying on the road that leads to success. When we come across some difficulties , what should we do to solve the problems? Of course unity can help us a lot.,For example, on 5th December,2008,a terrible earthquake happened in Sichuan province. Many people were injured and lots of people died but those who were still alive didnt lose confidence , because not only the whole nation were united and went there to help them out but also some Individuals and organizations abroad gave their hands to the area. With all the help, Sichuan has been rebuilt well now.,Unity is power. It makes us walk together and live better. Im sure that with the help of unity we can overcome any difficulty.,2012年高考英语作文赏析,Section C (25 marks) Directions: Write an English composition according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 在生活中, 你自已或他人曾有过物品不慎丢失而又找回的经历, 其间有烦恼、有惊喜、有感慨请就此写一篇英语短文. 主要内容包括:1) 丢失的物品;2) 物品失而复得的经过;3) 你的感想。 注意: 词数不少于120个; 不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。,卷评佳作赏析,On the shelf of my room lies a small black digital camera. Every time I see it, I will think about a noble and loving old man. It was a summer afternoon, pretty hot, no breeze in the air. I got out of the hotel where we junior high classmates had had a party and wandered in the street. Tired and thirsty, I walked to the shadow of a big tree and sat down beside an old man. We chatted happily for a while, and then I got up and walked away, not realizing the camera in the pocket of my jeans had jumped out and was lying under the tree. Not until I got home did I discover that my camera was gone. I was anxious and afraid that my parents would scold me, so I got out looking for it immediately. On the way to the big tree, I noticed the old man waving at me holding my camera. It is already two hours since I left him! I was worried ran,24分,up to him. After that experience, I would also stay at the place where I found something to wait for the owner because I want to spread the spirits of helping others that I learnt from the old man.,这篇文章完成了作文题目规定的任务，文章开头自然，简介了曾丢失的物品一台数码相机，由此叙述相机失而复得的过程，并告诉自己要向文中老人一样不辞辛苦帮助他人。,该文语言流畅，结构清晰有条理，逻辑严密；使用了多变的句式结构，如：On the shelf of “, ”Every time “；以及形容词或非谓语动词作状语：Tired and thirsty. I walked to the shadow of a big tree”，“not realizing the camera in the pocket of my jeans bad jumped out“和倒装句“Not until I got home did I discover that my camera was gone语言错误较少；有效采用不同连接手段，层次清楚；全文格式和语域恰当；很好奠哒羁了与目标读者交流的目的。,2012优秀作文的结尾句：,From the experience, I have learned that we should help those who are in great need if necessary. Only in this way will our society be more harmonious and hopeful.,Though it may be regarded as a minor thing by others, I will cherish it as a valuable memory in my whole life. From this thing, I feel the unselfish kindness from a stranger. I will also give my hand when others are in trouble.,Now every time I see the cell phone, I cant help thinking of her. lts her honesty that I will always treasure and thank forever.,After that, I became a bit more careful I have learned how important it is to always deal with my stuff properly. Thats true. One can never be too careful.,She could have gone to the concert with the ticket. Instead, she returned the ticket to me. What she brought to me is not only the ticket, but also warmth in my heart. It is a ticket I lost and it is warmth that I gained.,What a beautiful smile the girl showed me! I will try my best to help others to pay back the kindness the girl gave me,预测依据：,1.历年话题: 04“暑假打算去乡村度假”看图讲述城乡优缺点； 05年“去北京参加一次英语夏令营活动” ，选择活动内容，并说明理由 06年“根据英文短诗写：“My Teacher Mr. Moore” 07年“用英文给李华写一篇毕业留言” 08根据图片写一个名人， “我的偶像 ” 09新老师的身份, “我的第一堂课” 10年英语俱乐部，“我的活动” 11看图作文，多角度议论话题：团结就是力量、部分与整体、人与社会的融合、团队协作、锲而不舍、成功需要积累、积少成多、环保节约、和谐、小错可以酿成大错等等 12物品不慎丢失而又找回的经历,2.命题的共性与原则： 纵观04-11湖南高考英语作文命题的目的与特点： 无城乡差别，体现公平； 取材通俗贴近生活（总在和谐的社会生活大背景下选一个与学生生活相关的话题：（05 “我”的活动，06 “我”的老师，07 “我”的同窗,08我的偶像， 09我的课堂, 10 “我”的活动-演讲，11团结就是力量/积少成多）； 体裁04-10年命题趋向于抒情型记叙文，而2011年 完全改变为以论文； 12回归经历 D.命题趋向于加大开放度，多角度让考生自由发挥； E.写作上明确要求考生做到行文逻辑清晰、语言简洁、情感真实。,预测依据：,1.命题形式：给出图片或简单英/汉说明文字的开放式作文； 2.话题内容：取材侧重于在和谐的社会中，贴近学生生活，能表现青年学生的亲情、友情以及个人发展与环境的话题材料。 3.能力方向：简洁准确地用英语表达情感与逻辑是考查的重点；,命题的大方向预测：,六 个 步 骤,1、审题,题材、人称、时态、要点,2、抓住要点，一 一对应。以词及点：用一两 个单词或短语写出每句 话的细节要点。,3、扩: 联词成句：用联词成句的方法将上述要点的词语扩展成句子。,4、联句成文：,注意：,背景（适当增加时间、地点条件等壮语）,逻辑关系（选适当的连接词）,开头与结尾,5、改:检查修改 6、抄；誊写工整,规范抄写（书写不清楚 可降一档即降5分）,书面表达如何写？,时态和人称对应,写作类型预测及范文：,总体基本格式：三段式写作 2. 类型及写作模板：根据历年命题，注意下面模板： 图画类写作 描图归纳Look at the picture ./The picture shows that/From this picture, we can see（套谚语） 衔接联系 As we all know,/As is known to all,./It is well known to that/In my opinion,./As far as Im concerned. 结尾总结 In conclusion/In brief./On the whole./In a word ./Generally speaking （精炼哲理）,范文1： 理想/选择,根据左图，你能想到什么？ 请简单描述图片，结合实际写出自己的感想,In the picture we can see a boy climbing a platformHe is taking great trouble to reach the top of the stairs, ignoring the comparatively lower stairs beside him The picture reminds me of those who dream of achieving great success every dayThey are so eager to succeed that they hope to get to their destinations as quickly as possibleThey dont realize there are longer but safer ways for them to make itAs a result, they may seem rather close to their goals, but the fact is on the contrary In my opinion, we should focus on the process of fighting for successAs long as every step is proper, sooner or later we will gain what we long for,参考范文,辐射：理想、目标的选择等,记叙文写作校园生活类,回忆法开头，感叹式结尾：Every time I see it, I will think about a noble and loving old man. 正文，特别小心叙述部分的时态和语态 because I want to spread the spirits of helping others that I learnt from the old man,抒情式排比： its time to say good bye its time to recall the good memories its time to express thanks to my honorable teachers now-,抒情式结尾 Time passed quickly. Before we knew it, we had the workers.,As time passed by, we had to say good bye to.,With time flying, we had to say good bye to.,How time flies! we had to say good bye to.,How time flies! It had been dark before we realize it. we had to say good bye to.,写活固定格式的应用文,January 18th, 2013 Dear Mark, Thank you for the kindness you showed me when I visited your campus last week. I have returned full of enthusiasm for Hill College. Having been raised in the shadow of a large university,At this time of the year, most students are focusing on-,预测范文1： 我的活动,你校社会活动俱乐部开始招聘新成员。请你根据下面的英语提示，结合去年参加活动的感受，写一封信给你的朋友李平，说服他参加今年的暑假活动。 Wanted This Summer Activities: Help children left alone at home in Hong Xing Village, including songs, games, sports and lessons. Help farmers harvest crops. Camp in the woods near the village; Time: Two weeks Welcome to sign up at the office on second floor in the library. Social Activity Club注意：1.简单描述自己的经历以及今年活动形式； 2.说明参加活动的好处；3.不能出现真实的校名或姓名；不少于120词。 Dear Li ping, I am writing to tell you something about my meaningful and exciting summer vacation. Last year, _ Yours, Li Hua,Dear Li Ping, I am writing to tell you something about my meaningful and exciting summer vacation. Last year, I participated in the activities held by the Social Activity Club in the village, where I not only enjoyed the beauty of nature but gained much useful experience in life. With summer coming, the Club is to carry out activities in Hong Xing Village, helping the children who are left alone at home with their lessons, teaching them songs and playing games and sports with them, which will add a lot of fun to the childrens life and benefit the development of their character. Another interesting thing is to help the villagers harvest crops in the field. And it can make us students really understand why we should value food and grains. The most thrilling is to camp outside in the woods near the village.,I have never slept outside in the countryside, which I think can offer you a quite different experience. I am sure you will enjoy yourself a lot if you join us this summer! Best wishes! Yours, Li Hua,上周五你们班搞了一次环保为主题到某一湖区拾trash的活动；全班分成三小组，你是其中的一位组长。活动结束后，班主任号召全班进行总结。请你用英语写一份总结发言稿。 注意：1.活动效果及存在的问题；2.对下次活动的建议；3.不能出现真实姓名和学校名，不少于120词。,更多经典句型：As everyone knows, No one can deny that As everyone knows, nothing is more important than protecting our environment at present time. /protecting environment is just offering ourselves better living conditions.,开头：,行文：一二三原则,To strengthen the environment awareness of the general public, last Friday we, our class,divided into three groups (挑战极限), went to the city park to pick up trashes left by some tourists (挑战极限).,when we were collecting the trashes near the lake, many people paused to watch and then came to help, （再追一步：结果/原因）showing considerable appreciation and support.,On the other hand our work still left some to be desired.(长短句原则),目的： 经历： 一二三原则,For one thing, one day for our project is not long enough. For another, many people passed by not knowing what we are doing.,Next time we have similar project, if we put up some posters to tell people what we are doing, we could do better at drawing peoples attention to protecting environment.,细节支撑，为下文铺垫：,经典的虚拟结尾：,As everyone knows, protecting environment is just offering ourselves better living conditions. To strengthen the environment awareness of the general public, last Friday we, our class, divided into three groups , went to the city park to pick up trashes left by some tourists . As a head of group, I think we really did a wonderful job. when we were collecting the trashes near the lake, many people paused to watch and then came to help, showing considerable appreciation and support. On the other hand our work still left some to be desired. For one thing, one day for our project is not long enough. For another, many people passed by not knowing what we are doing. I am sure next time we have similar projects, if