全国创新英语大赛辅导.ppt

创新作文大赛系列讲练 之二 写作 李兴民,The bicycle is important for us. The bicycle is of importance for us. The bicycle plays an important role in our life. The bicycle, environmental friendly vehicle, plays an important role in our life. The bicycle is like the air, water, and sunshine and cannot be parted with a moment in our life.,走出房间， 空洞的表达方式： walk out of the room 小偷走出房间应该说： slip/sneak out of the room 美女走出房间应该说： sail out of the room 小孩走出房间应该说： dance out of the room 老人走出房间应该说： stagger out of the room,差的作文中简单句多，而好的作文简单句少；差的作文从句、连词、分词结构出现的频率大大低于好的作文；差的作文中关键词和同义表达出现的频率低于好的作文。,a. 语言准确化 b. 语言多样化 c. 结构清晰化 d. 内容简单化,写作的三个角度： 语言第一位； 结构第二位； 内容第三位 结构简单，语言卓越，内容相关,创新真题: Chinese people always have the tradition of helping others; regardless of a friend or a stranger. However, in recent years, people find that when they try to help others, some changes are taking places. One of the most common examples is that, a passer-by who sent an injured senior people to hospital would be very likely to be recognized as the accident-maker. This kind of events is being rerun again and again. When trapped in the dilemma of tradition and trouble, what would be your choice?,议论文 1. 陈述观点（有独到见解） 2. 论证观点或理由（ 思路清晰，观点明确，论证充分；语言流畅，词汇丰富，句式多样；有效地使用语句、段落间的连接成分, 内容连贯，结构紧凑;词汇和语法使用恰当,错误较少。 ） 3. 总结(呼应主题),1.医生只是换了个头. 2.修改后的病人，戴了项链，戴了眼镜，头发竖起，头上流汗。 3.从修改过的病人中能够看出霸道、愤怒、自大等一些关键词,Writing(本题共100分)Which one of them do you think is the expert? First complete the conversation. Then write down your opinion on the qualities of being an expert.,五个步骤:,1、审题,题材(议论文、记叙文、书信、说明文)、人称、时态、要点,2、词及要点：用一两个单词或短语写出每句话的细节要点即要使用的句型短语。(关键：平时积累),3、连词成句：用连词成句的方法将上述要点的词语扩展成句子。,4 连句成文：,使用较高级的词汇,使用较丰富的句式,使用恰当的连接词,5、检查修改，规范抄写,使用较高级的词汇,1. Wealth does not always bring happiness. Wealth does not always go hand in hand with happiness. 2. We all know that knowledge is power. There is no doubt that knowledge is power. It goes without saying that knowledge is power.,3. There many ways to keep fit. There are numerous ways to keep fit. 4. We should use different ways to get to know the society. We ought to make use of various methods to get to know the society. We are supposed to take advantage of diverse means to get to know the society.,5. As a result the plan was a failure. 6. When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow. 7. She went to Austria in order to study music.,She went to Austria for the purpose of studying music.,At the news of his death, she went pale with sorrow./ The moment she heard the news that,The plan turned out to be a failure.,8. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. 9.You can find my house easily. 10. Different students have different attitudes towards tiger parenting.,The more he spoke, the more excited he felt.,Attitudes towards tiger parenting vary from person to person among students. .,Youll have no trouble finding my house.,尽量用四、六级范围内的积极的,活跃的，常用的词或词组。 尽量用表达最贴切,最生动,最有力的词或短语。 尽量用最符合所写话题,所用文体的词或表达。,“重要的”,important,significant, vital, crucial, critical， etc,big,great, large, huge, vast, titanic, enormous etc.,cause,lead to, result in, bring about, give rise/birth to,get used to,Adapt to, adjust to, makefit, be accustomed to,15个最经典的替换词,1. individuals,characters, folks 代替 (people ,persons) 2. positive, favorable, rosy (美好的)，promising (有希望的)，perfect, pleasurable , excellent, outstanding 代替 good 3. dreadful, unfavorable, poor, adverse(有害的)代替bad 如果 bad 做表语，可以有 be less impressive 代替 . 4.(an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of 代替 many. 5: a slice of, quiet a few , several代替some,6: harbor the idea that, take the attitude that, hold the view that, it is widely shared that, it is universally acknowledged that)替think 7:affair, business ,matter 代替 thing 8: for my part ,from my own perspective 代替 in my opinion,9.benefitial rewarding代替helpful 10.shopper, client, consumer, purchaser, 代替customer 11.exceedingly,extremely代替very 12.capture ones attention 代替 attract ones attention. 13.give rise to, lead to, result in, trigger代替cause. 14.bear in mind that 代替 remember 15.frown on sth 代替 be against , disagree with sth,3、连词成句：用连词成句的方法将上述要点的词语扩展成句子。,4 连句成文：,使用较高级的词汇,使用较丰富的句式,使用恰当的连接词,5、检查修改，规范抄写,使用较丰富的句式,1.复合句：,定语从句 名词性从句 状语从句,2. 非谓语动词短语,不定式短语 现在分词短语 过去分词短语,3. 虚拟句式,If Without/But for (that) It is high time that Suggest/advocate/proposethat,4. 强调句式“It bethat”,用于表达对某种因素的强调。 e.g. It is out of remarkable benefits that many manufacturers produce fake or poor-quality products.,By no means/On no account/Never引导的部分倒装结构，用以加强观点。 e.g. By no means shall we see less of the negative effects that chatting online might have on our lives.,5. 倒装句式,6.对比或比照句式,Just as, e.g. Just as every coin has two sides, has its advantages and disadvantages. Like/Unlike, Like most countries in the world, China is also faced with the social problems of aging population.,7.被动句式,适当用代替主动，这样能更客观的反映事实,句子开头不要总是用we / I (we should pay attention to 而用 Attention should be paid to. ),1.Nothing is + more + 形容词 + than to + V 没有比接受教育更重要的事。 Nothing is more important than to receive education. 2. cannot emphasize the importance of too much. 我们再怎么强调保护眼睛的重要性也不为过。 We cannot emphasize the importance of protecting our eyes too much.,3.There is no denying that + S + V . 不可否认的，我们的生活品质已经每况愈下。 There is no denying that the qualities of our living have gone from bad to worse. 4.It is universally acknowledged that + 句子 全世界都知道树木对我们是不可或缺的。 It is universally acknowledged that trees are indispensable to us.,5.There is no doubt that + 句子 毫无疑问的我们的教育制度令人不满意。 There is no doubt that our educational system leaves something to be desired. 6. The reason why + 句子 is that + 句子 我们必须种树的原因是它们能供应我们新鲜的空气。 The reason why we have to grow trees is that they can provide us with fresh air.,7.Adj + as + Subject（主词）+ be, S + V 虽然我们的国家富有，我们的生活品质绝对令人不满意。 Rich as our country is, the qualities of our living are by no means satisfactory. 8.,The + er + S + V, the + er + S + V More and more= an increasing number of 你愈努力，你愈进步。 The harder you work, the more progress you make.,9.On no account can we + V 我们绝对不能忽略知识的价值。 On no account can we ignore the value of knowledge. 10.,It is conceivable that + 句子 It is obvious that + 句子 It is apparent that + 句子 可想而知，知识在我们的一生中扮演一个重要的角色。 It is conceivable that knowledge plays an important role in our life.,3、连词成句：用连词成句的方法将上述要点的词语扩展成句子。,4 连句成文：,使用较高级的词汇,使用较丰富的句式,使用恰当的连接词,5、检查修改，规范抄写,使用恰当的连接词,一. 转承语： Besides, in addition, moreover, however, nevertheless, despite of +noun ( the fact that), in spite of. 二. 列举要点： for one thing, for another,On the one hand, on the other hand, Firstly, Secondly, Thirdly, Finally,三. 罗列观点用词： argue, insist that, consider, think, maintain that, recommend that, suggest th