2013高考英语作文复习.ppt

2013湖南高考英语作文,2011年高考英语作文赏析,第六部分：书面表达SectionCDirections:WriteanEnglishcompositionaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese假设你参加所在年级的英语作文比赛，请按照如下要求写一篇短文：1，简要描述下图内容，并点明主题；2，联系实际，表达该图给你带来的启示,注意：1，词数不少于120个；2，不能使用真实姓名和学校名称,这一命题一改近几年给足要点、写人写事的保守出题方式，采用了北京卷常用的看图作文。但具体的写作内容还是回归到常考话题的范畴中。题目中的漫画图并不难理解。我们可以理解为积极向上的主题：团结就是力量、部分与整体、人与社会的融合、团队协作、锲而不舍、成功需要积累、积少成多、环保节约、和谐、小错可以酿成大错等等。写作要求与方法。全文应该包括图片描述与主题归纳、联系实际与启示三大部分内容。第一段：简单的描述图片的内容，描述的侧重点是积少成多。并点明主题。第二段：转化为普通的英语议论文的主体段，采取举例法，分析法，等议论方法证明观点。第三段：总结观点，说明自己从图中学到了什么，得到了什么启示。,卷评佳作赏析,ThepartandthewholeworldSomewatermakesupthesea.Theforestismadeupofmanytrees.Inoursociety,thegroupofpeopleconsistsofvariouspeople.Thelittlethingscontributetothewholeworld.Dontforgetthelittlethingsandignorethem,whichwillcostyoualot.Itsobviousthatwelookupsidedownsomelittlethingsfrequently,whilelookuptoseveralhonourablethings.However,thecommonthingismoremeaningfulthanthehonourablething.Normalmanasyouare,youcancreatemorecontributionstothesociety.Itswhatyouhavedonetothesocietythatarereallyimportant.Withakindhearttothesociety,everypartofthesocietyisofsignificance.Themoreyoudevotetothesociety,themoreyouwillgain.Beingapartofthewholeworld,yourlifewillbecolorfulandmeaningful.,23分,25分,Whatadvantages?,Unityispower24Manydropsofwatercanmakeupasea.Manytreescanturnintoaforest.Manypeoplecanbecombinedtogethertomakeasociety.Everythingprovestheideathatunityispower.Lifeisfullofupsanddownsandtherearealwaysmanydifficultieslyingontheroadthatleadstosuccess.Whenwecomeacrosssomedifficulties,whatshouldwedotosolvetheproblems?Ofcourseunitycanhelpusalot.,Forexample,on5thDecember,2008,aterribleearthquakehappenedinSichuanprovince.Manypeoplewereinjuredandlotsofpeoplediedbutthosewhowerestillalivedidntloseconfidence,becausenotonlythewholenationwereunitedandwenttheretohelpthemoutbutalsosomeIndividualsandorganizationsabroadgavetheirhandstothearea.Withallthehelp,Sichuanhasbeenrebuiltwellnow.,Unityispower.Itmakesuswalktogetherandlivebetter.Imsurethatwiththehelpofunitywecanovercomeanydifficulty.,2012年高考英语作文赏析,SectionC(25marks)Directions:WriteanEnglishcompositionaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.在生活中,你自已或他人曾有过物品不慎丢失而又找回的经历,其间有烦恼、有惊喜、有感慨请就此写一篇英语短文.主要内容包括:1)丢失的物品;2)物品失而复得的经过;3)你的感想。注意:词数不少于120个;不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。,卷评佳作赏析,Ontheshelfofmyroomliesasmallblackdigitalcamera.EverytimeIseeit,Iwillthinkaboutanobleandlovingoldman.Itwasasummerafternoon,prettyhot,nobreezeintheair.Igotoutofthehotelwherewejuniorhighclassmateshadhadapartyandwanderedinthestreet.Tiredandthirsty,Iwalkedtotheshadowofabigtreeandsatdownbesideanoldman.Wechattedhappilyforawhile,andthenIgotupandwalkedaway,notrealizingthecamerainthepocketofmyjeanshadjumpedoutandwaslyingunderthetree.NotuntilIgothomedidIdiscoverthatmycamerawasgone.Iwasanxiousandafraidthatmyparentswouldscoldme,soIgotoutlookingforitimmediately.Onthewaytothebigtree,Inoticedtheoldmanwavingatmeholdingmycamera.ItisalreadytwohourssinceIlefthim!Iwasworriedran,24分,uptohim.Afterthatexperience,IwouldalsostayattheplacewhereIfoundsomethingtowaitfortheownerbecauseIwanttospreadthespiritsofhelpingothersthatIlearntfromtheoldman.,这篇文章完成了作文题目规定的任务，文章开头自然，简介了曾丢失的物品一台数码相机，由此叙述相机失而复得的过程，并告诉自己要向文中老人一样不辞辛苦帮助他人。,该文语言流畅，结构清晰有条理，逻辑严密；使用了多变的句式结构，如：Ontheshelfof“,”Everytime“；以及形容词或非谓语动词作状语：Tiredandthirsty.Iwalkedtotheshadowofabigtree”，“notrealizingthecamerainthepocketofmyjeansbadjumpedout和倒装句“NotuntilIgothomedidIdiscoverthatmycamerawasgone语言错误较少；有效采用不同连接手段，层次清楚；全文格式和语域恰当；很好奠哒羁了与目标读者交流的目的。,2012优秀作文的结尾句：,Fromtheexperience,Ihavelearnedthatweshouldhelpthosewhoareingreatneedifnecessary.Onlyinthiswaywilloursocietybemoreharmoniousandhopeful.,Thoughitmayberegardedasaminorthingbyothers,Iwillcherishitasavaluablememoryinmywholelife.Fromthisthing,Ifeeltheunselfishkindnessfromastranger.Iwillalsogivemyhandwhenothersareintrouble.,NoweverytimeIseethecellphone,Icanthelpthinkingofher.ltsherhonestythatIwillalwaystreasureandthankforever.,Afterthat,IbecameabitmorecarefulIhavelearnedhowimportantitistoalwaysdealwithmystuffproperly.Thatstrue.Onecanneverbetoocareful.,Shecouldhavegonetotheconcertwiththeticket.Instead,shereturnedthetickettome.Whatshebroughttomeisnotonlytheticket,butalsowarmthinmyheart.ItisaticketIlostanditiswarmththatIgained.,Whatabeautifulsmilethegirlshowedme!Iwilltrymybesttohelpotherstopaybackthekindnessthegirlgaveme,预测依据：,1.历年话题:04“暑假打算去乡村度假”看图讲述城乡优缺点；05年“去北京参加一次英语夏令营活动”，选择活动内容，并说明理由06年“根据英文短诗写：“MyTeacherMr.Moore”07年“用英文给李华写一篇毕业留言”08根据图片写一个名人，“我的偶像”09新老师的身份,“我的第一堂课”10年英语俱乐部，“我的活动”11看图作文，多角度议论话题：团结就是力量、部分与整体、人与社会的融合、团队协作、锲而不舍、成功需要积累、积少成多、环保节约、和谐、小错可以酿成大错等等12物品不慎丢失而又找回的经历,2.命题的共性与原则：纵观04-11湖南高考英语作文命题的目的与特点：无城乡差别，体现公平；取材通俗贴近生活（总在和谐的社会生活大背景下选一个与学生生活相关的话题：（05“我”的活动，06“我”的老师，07“我”的同窗,08我的偶像，09我的课堂,10“我”的活动-演讲，11团结就是力量/积少成多）；体裁04-10年命题趋向于抒情型记叙文，而2011年完全改变为以论文；12回归经历D.命题趋向于加大开放度，多角度让考生自由发挥；E.写作上明确要求考生做到行文逻辑清晰、语言简洁、情感真实。,预测依据：,1.命题形式：给出图片或简单英/汉说明文字的开放式作文；2.话题内容：取材侧重于在和谐的社会中，贴近学生生活，能表现青年学生的亲情、友情以及个人发展与环境的话题材料。3.能力方向：简洁准确地用英语表达情感与逻辑是考查的重点；,命题的大方向预测：,六个步骤,1、审题,题材、人称、时态、要点,2、抓住要点，一一对应。以词及点：用一两个单词或短语写出每句话的细节要点。,3、扩:联词成句：用联词成句的方法将上述要点的词语扩展成句子。,4、联句成文：,注意：,背景（适当增加时间、地点条件等壮语）,逻辑关系（选适当的连接词）,开头与结尾,5、改:检查修改6、抄；誊写工整,规范抄写（书写不清楚可降一档即降5分）,书面表达如何写？,时态和人称对应,写作类型预测及范文：,总体基本格式：三段式写作2.类型及写作模板：根据历年命题，注意下面模板：图画类写作描图归纳Lookatthepicture./Thepictureshowsthat./Fromthispicture,wecansee.（套谚语）衔接联系Asweallknow,./Asisknowntoall,./Itiswellknowntothat./Inmyopinion,./AsfarasImconcerned.结尾总结Inconclusion./Inbrief./Onthewhole./Inaword./Generallyspeaking.（精炼哲理）,范文1：理想/选择,根据左图，你能想到什么？请简单描述图片，结合实际写出自己的感想,InthepicturewecanseeaboyclimbingaplatformHeistakinggreattroubletoreachthetopofthestairs,ignoringthecomparativelylowerstairsbesidehimThepictureremindsmeofthosewhodreamofachievinggreatsuccesseverydayTheyaresoeagertosucceedthattheyhopetogettotheirdestinationsasquicklyaspossibleTheydontrealizetherearelongerbutsaferwaysforthemtomakeitAsaresult,theymayseemratherclosetotheirgoals,butthefactisonthecontraryInmyopinion,weshouldfocusontheprocessoffightingforsuccessAslongaseverystepisproper,soonerorlaterwewillgainwhatwelongfor,参考范文,辐射：理想、目标的选择等,记叙文写作校园生活类,回忆法开头，感叹式结尾：EverytimeIseeit,Iwillthinkaboutanobleandlovingoldman.正文，特别小心叙述部分的时态和语态becauseIwanttospreadthespiritsofhelpingothersthatIlearntfromtheoldman,抒情式排比：itstimetosaygoodbyeitstimetorecallthegoodmemoriesitstimetoexpressthankstomyhonorableteachersnow-,抒情式结尾Timepassedquickly.Beforeweknewit,wehadtheworkers.,Astimepassedby,wehadtosaygoodbyeto.,Withtimeflying,wehadtosaygoodbyeto.,Howtimeflies!wehadtosaygoodbyeto.,Howtimeflies!Ithadbeendarkbeforewerealizeit.wehadtosaygoodbyeto.,写活固定格式的应用文,January18th,2013DearMark,ThankyouforthekindnessyoushowedmewhenIvisitedyourcampuslastweek.IhavereturnedfullofenthusiasmforHillCollege.Havingbeenraisedintheshadowofalargeuniversity,Atthistimeoftheyear,moststudentsarefocusingon-,预测范文1：我的活动,你校社会活动俱乐部开始招聘新成员。请你根据下面的英语提示，结合去年参加活动的感受，写一封信给你的朋友李平，说服他参加今年的暑假活动。WantedThisSummerActivities:HelpchildrenleftaloneathomeinHongXingVillage,includingsongs,games,sportsandlessons.Helpfarmersharvestcrops.Campinthewoodsnearthevillage;Time:TwoweeksWelcometosignupattheofficeonsecondfloorinthelibrary.SocialActivityClub注意：1.简单描述自己的经历以及今年活动形式；2.说明参加活动的好处；3.不能出现真实的校名或姓名；不少于120词。DearLiping,Iamwritingtotellyousomethingaboutmymeaningfulandexcitingsummervacation.Lastyear,_Yours,LiHua,DearLiPing,Iamwritingtotellyousomethingaboutmymeaningfulandexcitingsummervacation.Lastyear,IparticipatedintheactivitiesheldbytheSocialActivityClubinthevillage,whereInotonlyenjoyedthebeautyofnaturebutgainedmuchusefulexperienceinlife.Withsummercoming,theClubistocarryoutactivitiesinHongXingVillage,helpingthechildrenwhoareleftaloneathomewiththeirlessons,teachingthemsongsandplayinggamesandsportswiththem,whichwilladdalotoffuntothechildrenslifeandbenefitthedevelopmentoftheircharacter.Anotherinterestingthingistohelpthevillagersharvestcropsinthefield.Anditcanmakeusstudentsreallyunderstandwhyweshouldvaluefoodandgrains.Themostthrillingistocampoutsideinthewoodsnearthevillage.,Ihaveneversleptoutsideinthecountryside,whichIthinkcanofferyouaquitedifferentexperience.Iamsureyouwillenjoyyourselfalotifyoujoinusthissummer!Bestwishes!Yours,LiHua,上周五你们班搞了一次环保为主题到某一湖区拾trash的活动；全班分成三小组，你是其中的一位组长。活动结束后，班主任号召全班进行总结。请你用英语写一份总结发言稿。注意：1.活动效果及存在的问题；2.对下次活动的建议；3.不能出现真实姓名和学校名，不少于120词。,更多经典句型：Aseveryoneknows,NoonecandenythatAseveryoneknows,nothingismoreimportantthanprotectingourenvironmentatpresenttime./protectingenvironmentisjustofferingourselvesbetterlivingconditions.,开头：,行文：一二三原则,Tostrengthentheenvironmentawarenessofthegeneralpublic,lastFridaywe,ourclass,dividedintothreegroups(挑战极限),wenttothecityparktopickuptrashesleftbysometourists(挑战极限).,whenwewerecollectingthetrashesnearthelake,manypeoplepausedtowatchandthencametohelp,（再追一步：结果/原因）showingconsiderableappreciationandsupport.,Ontheotherhandourworkstillleftsometobedesired.(长短句原则),目的：经历：一二三原则,Foronething,onedayforourprojectisnotlongenough.Foranother,manypeoplepassedbynotknowingwhatwearedoing.,Nexttimewehavesimilarproject,ifweputupsomeposterstotellpeoplewhatwearedoing,wecoulddobetteratdrawingpeoplesattentiontoprotectingenvironment.,细节支撑，为下文铺垫：,经典的虚拟结尾：,Aseveryoneknows,protectingenvironmentisjustofferingourselvesbetterlivingconditions.Tostrengthentheenvironmentawarenessofthegeneralpublic,lastFridaywe,ourclass,dividedintothreegroups,wenttothecityparktopickuptrashesleftbysometourists.Asaheadofgroup,Ithinkwereallydidawonderfuljob.whenwewerecollectingthetrashesnearthelake,manypeoplepausedtowatchandthencametohelp,showingconsiderableappreciationandsupport.Ontheotherhandourworkstillleftsometobedesired.Foronething,onedayforourprojectisnotlongenough.Foranother,manypeoplepassedbynotknowingwhatwearedoing.Iamsurenexttimewehavesimilarprojects,ifweputupsome