读后续写训练范例.ppt

续写导练（五）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Iwastouchedthroughexperiences,memories,books,stories,animals,angels,andmostofallotherpeople.Peoplehavemovedmeandmolded（对影响重大）mewithmomentsofloveandexamplesofkindness.OnetimeonthedaybeforeChristmasmanyyearsagowhenIwasaminimumwagemill（工厂）worker,Ifoundmyselfwithverylittlemoneyandverylittletimetobuymysmallchildrenafewsimpletoys.IknewthattheywouldhavetobecheaponesandIhopedmychildrenwouldlikethem.Ihatednothavingenoughtogivethemmore.Ihatedbeingpoor.AndIhatedfeelingbadatChristmasratherthanhappy.Ipulledintoastoreparkinglotandcountedmymoneyagain.ItwasntmuchbutmaybeIcouldgetsomethingsmallwithit.AsIwasgettingoutofthecarInoticedtheSalvationArmy（救世军）bellringerattheentrance.IfeltbadagainbecauseIdidntfeelIcouldspareanythingtogivehim.Istartedwalkingtowardstheentrancewhentwocarspulledintoemptyparkingspotsinfrontofme.Thefirstwasashiny,newCadillacandIfeltatwingeofjealousywhenIsawit.“Hownice,”Ithought,“Woulditbetohaveenoughmoneytobuyacarlikethat.”Thesecondcar,though,wasanancientsedan（轿车）morebeat-upandrustythantheoneIwasdriving.Amanhopped（冲）outoftheCadillacandhurriedintothestorerightpastthebellringerwithoutasecondglance.Outoftheoldsedancameayoungmotherwiththreesmallchildrenintow（紧随着）.Herclotheslookedaswornoutashercar,yetshestoppedinfrontofthebellringer,smiled,openedherpurse,anddroppedabillinhisredkettle（钱罐）.,读后续写的基本步骤,一、短文信息定位通过阅读定位所给短文的核心信息，明确故事的任务，环境和情节，并概括文章大意。,二、划线词分类,为了方便设计情节时涵盖划线词汇，可以结合具体材料对划线词按照人物，地点、动作情节和事物（具体和抽象）等分类。,三、设计第一段的内容设计在于搭建本段与前文、后文的桥梁。第二部分注意整篇文章的首位呼应。,四、初稿,五、修改,一、短文信息定位通过阅读定位所给短文的核心信息，明确故事的任务，环境和情节，并概括文章大意。,character:time:place:plots(details),thedaybeforeChristmas,manyyearsago,astoreparkinglot,theauthor,bellringer,amanowningaCadilac,ayoungmotherowninganoldcar.,1.Theauthorwaspoorandfeelingbad.2.themanandthemotherrespondedquitedifferentlytothebellringer.3.,Sumupthemainideaofthepassage,1.Manyyearsago,Theauthorwasaworkwithasmallwage.Hefeltbadbecause.2.Whenhepulledintoastoreparkinglot,hefeltbadagainbecause.3.Whenhewalkenintotheentrance,hefoundamanowninga.,whileayoungmother.However,they.,二、划线词分类,为了方便设计情节时涵盖划线词汇，可以结合具体材料对划线词按照人物，地点、动作情节和事物（具体和抽象）等分类。,三、设计第一段的内容设计在于搭建本段与前文、后文的桥梁;第二部分注意与整篇文章的首位呼应。,part1:part2:,TheauthorsattitudetothemanandthemotherHisopinionsonrichness,nolongerfeelingbadandfollowingthemothersexampleanddroppedabilltothebellringer.Buyingthingsforhischidrenandexpectingamerrychristmas.,四、初稿,part1:itisbettertoberichintheinside;Itiswrongtojudgeapersonbyhisappearanceorwords;Ihadrespectforthepoormotherandwantedlearnfromher.,part2:Itookouta10-poundbilland.Icouldhardlywaittoseemychildren.,五、修改,Paragraph1:Istoodthereforaminuteinastonishment.“Maybe,”Ithoughttomyself,“itsbettertoberichontheinsideinsteadoftheoutside.”Thatrichmanshouldhavedonesomethingtohelpthepoor,buthedidnt.Sometimesitwasreallywrongtojudgeapersonbyhisorherappearance.Ireallyhadrespectforthepoormotherfromthebottomofmyheart.Shesetagoodexampleforherchildrentofollow.,Paragraph2:Inthatsecondawarmthtouchedme,myjealousyandhatred（憎恨）leftme,andalltheloveandjoythatareChristmasfilledme.Ifishedabilloutofmyownpurse,droppeditintheSalvationArmykettle,andwishedthebellringeramerryChristmas.Ifoundafewfunthingstogivemykidsanddroveh