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高考英语书面表达高分策略之一“两避免三适当”在全国各省市高考题中，书面表达或写作的分值从25 分到40 分不等，但有一点是肯定的，那就是：书面表达的能力举足轻重。如何用英语写出流畅、地道的文章是考生们一直以来的渴望。笔者在多年的教学实践中摸索出“两避免三适当” ，与大家共享。汉化英语Hi, long time no seehow are you ?Im good!I 两避免一、避免汉化英语，使句子更地道请看学生的原句：1. 有大约百分之十五命男孩和超过百分之十的女孩想从事科研。There are about 15% boys and over 10%girls want to do research .2. 在过去的两年中唐山修了好多条宽阔的马路。In the past two years, Tangshan has builtmany wide roads.分析：1. 本句一字不落地把汉语罗列成了英语，是一个典型的“汉化句子”。错误的根本原因在于：没有找到句子的主干，错误的认为只要句子以“有”开头，就使用thereb e句式，导致句子中出现了两个动词。正确形式应是：About 15% boys and over 10%girls want to do research ; 2. 本句的错误在于：没有找到句子的主干，且误用了时态和语态。正确形式应是：In the past two years,many wide roads have been built in Tangshan。那么，如何才能写出地道的英语句子呢？第一步:找出句子主干第二步:确定主干的相关词汇第三步：翻译句子主干（注意时态和语态）第四步。添加修饰成分请看下面的例子：北京是中国的首都，有3000多年的悠久历史。第一步:找出句子主干1) 北京是首都2) 北京有历史第二步:确定主干的相关词汇1) Beijing ,be, capital2) Beijing ,have, history第三步：翻译句子主干（时态用一般现在时，语态用主动）1) Beijing is the capital2) Beijing has a history第四步.添加修饰成分(斜体部分为添加成分）1) Beijing is the capital o f China with along history o f over 3,000 years.2 .仔细检查:组篇成文后，浏览全文、进行检查。作文范文：Three years ago I failed an important examin my life and became a student in an ordinaryschool. Disappointed as I felt on theshabby campus and in the poorly-equippedclassroom, I found the teachers patient andconsiderate. Besides, I enjoyed the friendly atmospherein class. I decided to make the bestof it. I worked hard and got along well withmy teachers and classmates. Whenever I haddifficulties, they were always available. Soon,I became one of the top students in my class,which greatly increased my confidence andgot me motivated. My experience tells methat it is not what you are given but how youmake use of it that determines who you are. 92) Beijing, the capital o f China，has along history o f over 3,000 years.当然也可以把两个主干变成并列形式：Beijing is the capital city of China andhas a long history of over 3,000 years.跟踪练习：1 .害怕挨骂，男孩没关水龙头就跑了。2 .今年南方的雪灾中有107人失去了生命。Possible versions:1. Afraid of being scolded, the naughtyboy ran away without turning off the water.2. One hundred and seven people losttheir lives in the snowstorm in the south thisyear.二、避免使用单一句式，使文章更丰富多彩(2 0 1 1年石家庄市一模）请根据以下图表提供的信息，介绍中国大学毕业生择业的意向。As is shown in the chart, most boys liketo work in the government. While most girlsprefer to be teachers. A little more than 25%of boys choose teaching and about 25% ofgirls choose public servants as the secondchoice. Only ten percent of boys prefer doctors,and the equal number of girls are interestedin research. More than ten percent ofboys want to set their feet in research andbusiness. Meanwhile, over ten percent of girlswould like to do business and become doctors.分析:本段共有六个句子。主语分别为most boys， most girls， A little more than25% of boys, about 25% of girls, Only tenpercent of boys, the equal number of girls,More than ten percent of boys, over ten percentof g ir ls 。 这六个主语都不同，即使是百分数也略有不同，而不像学生的习作中都使用了同样的百分数。谓语分别为：like towork，prefer to be，choose，prefer，are interestedin ,want to set their feet in , would liketo ,而避免了都使用want to be . 分析：斜体字部分为增加的细节, 从目的角度添加了细节,从意义角度添加了细节， 从希望的角度添加了细节，共添加了 4 5 个字。除了这三个角度外，还可以从结果、方式、原因、伴随状况、号召、祝愿或感谢等角度适当添加细节，句型可使用状语从句，非限制性定语从句，分词或名词性从句等。跟踪练习：Writing 写作提示2013年湖北英语短文写作与往年一样，给出了 一句英语提示，要求 考生结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。属于开放性的作文。考生只要抓住 凡事都具有两面性这个主题人手，写起来就得心应手了。我们常说： Each coin has two sides.也是这个道理。因此,我们说话的时候应该润物 细无声、温和、幽默诙谐，不能出语伤人。这是本题的切入点。本文属于观点类题型,重点要阐明语言的伤害性，这就意味着要 举例论证,事实胜于雄辩，要有理有据。建议使用第一人称,时态选用一 般现在时和一般过去时。内容要点：介绍自己在语言方面的长处记叙出语伤人的某件事 eccentric adj.古怪的，异常的；偏离轨道的自己的认识和感想 One possible version ：My deskmate admires my fluent English very much and I usually feel encouraged by his compliments.One day,when we learned the new word “eccentric” in class,we were asked to make a sentence with it. I volunteered to do it by saying “ My deskmate is an eccentric boy whose clothes never fit him. ，Hearing this,the whole class burst into laughter and my deskmates face turned red. After class，I learned from the teacher that my deskmate would have dropped out of school if he hadnt been helped by others. My mindless words must have hurt him deeply.Not until then did I realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative ways. We should avoid hurting others if we cant always be encouraging when we speak.三、适当使用过渡性词语，使文章更流畅请看学生的原句：Some students are heavily pressed by theCollege Entrance Examination. Others workwith a light heart分析：这是两个简单句，实际上我们可以用一个过渡性词语把这两个句子连起来：Some students are heavily pressed whileothers work with a light heart.常用的过渡性词语有：1. 表示时间的过渡性词语1) first, then, next, finally; 2) firstly, secondly, thirdly., finally; 3) for one thing, foranother; 4) on one hand, on the other hand;5) in the past, at present / nowadays, in thefuture; 6) from then on, from now on；7) at thesame time, meanwhile ； 8) after a while, afterthat, since then2. 表示空间的过渡性词语 aon the right / left, on one side of, on theother side of, at the foot / top / end of, in themiddle / center of, in front of, at the back of,next to3. 表示递进的过渡性词语 what s more, moreover, furthermore, besides,in addition to, still, also, not only. butalso., even, as well, the most important ofall, worst of all, especially, in particular, tomake things worse, above all4. 表示解释说明的过渡性词语for example, for instance, such as, thatis, in other words, in this / that case, in fact,as a matter of fact, actually, personally, andso on5. 表示并列转折关系的过渡性词语and, or, but, yet, however, while, so,therefore, thus, otherwise, on the contrary, afterall, instead of6. 表示概括归纳的过渡性词语in a word, in short, generally speaking,as far as I know, as we know, on the whole,as a result例如：假如你叫钱伟。2014年世界杯即将在巴西举行。作为在巴西的一名中国留学生，想给巴西总统写一封建议信，希望所有施工工程能按时完成，并希望政府能采取措施提高安保和巴西人民的文明程度，维护好巴西的形象。并恳请他能让自己成为2014年世界杯的志愿者。要求：1. 100词左右。2 .不得在信中透露你的真实身份。参考词汇:2014世界杯the 2014 WorldCup ;文明的 civilized;形象 image。One possible version:Dear President,I am a Chinese student in Brazil. As the2014 World Cup is drawing near, I cannothelp writing to you.Firstly, my suggestion is that all theconstruction work be completed in time sothat the players can compete in desirablefields. Whats more，I do hope that thegovernment can take measures to make thecompetition safe and our citizens morecivilized so as to improve and keep the goodimage of Brazil.Secondly, I want to express my desire tobe a volunteer. It is clear that there will bemany Chinese football fans then and Chineseis my native language. In addition, I am goodat communicating with others and I have agood knowledge of Brazil. Therefore，I can bea qualified volunteer.I am looking forward to your reply.Sincerely Yours,Qian Wei2.美国的“虎妈”以严厉教育女儿曾闻名一时，而中国最近出现了一位“狼爸” 萧百佑，他的口号是：“ 三天一顿打，孩子进北大”。请简姜描述漫画的内容并对他的做法提出自己的看法。要求：100词左右。 ，参考词汇:狼爸Wolf DaddyOne possible version：As can be seen from the picture, a fathernamed Xiao Baiyou is holding up his cane tobeat his children. As a result, three of hischildren have been admitted to BeijingUniversity. Apparently，his stem method doesreceive satisfactory results.However, as far as I m concerned, Idon t agree to the way he educates hischildren. On one hand, children have thesame rights as grown-ups and they should berespected. Besides, its against the law tobeat them. On the other hand, it might havebad effects on their studies. Worse still,beating children not only does harm to theirhealth, but hurts their self-esteem in the longterm.In my opinion, the best way to educatechildren is to teach them how to form goodlearning habits and introduce proper learningmethods to them.分析：本文共使用了十个过渡性词语，分别是：As，As a result，ApparentlyHowever ，Besides,On one hand， On the ot