商务交际英语任务评阅及修改(assignment).doc

商务交际英语（二）Assignment l You work in the Sales Department of an international company. Manuela Garcia, an important client, is visiting your company for a day. There are some changes to the itinerary you sent her last week.l Write a letter of 120 - 140 words to Ms Garcia, using the original itinerary and your handwritten notes, informing her of the changes.Proposed itinerary for one-day visit of Manuela GarciaWednesday 20 October11.00Ms Garcia arrives on flight 1 B 432 from MadridOriginal arrival time too optimisticJohn Sallis to meet Ms Garcia at airport 11.30Arrival at companyJohn Sallis to give Ms Garcia an introductory tour of companyRestaurant full. Its now the Swan hotel12.30Lunch at White Hart restaurant( John Sallis, Carol Snape, Tom McAllister Sue Smith Manuela Garcia )Carol cant make it. Explain why14.00 Meeting in boardroom ( Carol Snape Tom McAllister Sue Smith Manuela Garcia )15.30 Coffee breakGive some details16.00 Product presentation ( Carol Snape, Tom McAllister; Sue Smith Manuela Garcia )John has to go early. Sue will take Manuela to the airport18.00 John Sallis to take Ms Garcia to the airport19.30 Ms Garcia departs on flight 1 B 886 to Madrid武汉船舶职业技术学院经济与管理学院商务管理专业10521、10522班作业 英语老师：周俐 2012年10月17日（第七周）（作业于10月26日前上交给我）商务交际英语（二）作业你工作在销售部的一个国际性公司，一个重要的客户路易斯加西亚将访问你的公司一天，你送个他上周行程的一些变化。写一封120140的字给加西亚女士，使用原来的路线，你的手写笔记，告诉她这些变化。 建议路易斯加西亚为期一天的访问行程10月20日（星期三）11:00加西亚女士从马德里约翰.萨利斯1B 432航班，来机场与加西亚女士见面。（原始抵到时间过于乐观）11：30到达公司约翰.萨利斯向加西亚女士介绍旅游公司。12:30在白鹿餐厅午餐（约翰.萨利斯苏.史密斯，卡罗尔.斯内普，汤姆.麦卡利斯特曼努埃拉加西亚）（卡罗尔也没做到这一点，解释为什么。）（餐厅已经满了，现在在天鹅宾馆）14：00在会议上开会（卡罗尔.斯内普，汤姆.麦卡利斯特曼努埃拉加西亚）15:30在咖啡馆休息16:00介绍产品（卡罗尔，汤姆.麦卡利斯特苏史密斯曼努埃拉加西亚斯内普） （提供一些细节）18:00约翰.萨利斯送加西亚女士去机场（约翰要早点去，苏会带曼努埃拉去机场）19:30加西亚女士离开1B886飞行马德里 以上翻译仅供参考 武汉船舶职业技术学院商务管理专业2012年10月17日英语作业：Dear Ms Garcia : Hello ！, Ms Garcia ,Im very glad to write a letter ofWrite a letter to sb. you .I work in the Sales Department of an international companyBetter to tell the companys name so that she knows exactly who is writing to her. . you are an important client, is visiting our company for a day. There are some changes to the itinerary I sent you last week,I Would tell you this These, the changes.ThereHere are are the changes.I hope you can accept. NextThe new itinerary itinerary for one day visit of you : Wednesday day 20 October 11:00 Ms Garcia arrives on flight 1 B 432 from Madrid , John Sallis will meet you at airport ,Because original time too optimistic. 11:30 Arrival at company and I give you an introductory tour of company 12:30 Lunch at White Hart restaurant , no one the restaurant is full . So its now the Swan hotel 14:00 We have a meeting in boardroom 15:30 drinking Coffee and break 16:00 Detailed product Tom McAllister will give some details of product 18:00 John has to go early to sent Ms Garcia to the airport 19:30 Ms Garcia departs on light to MadridAs you write a letter, you should make the changed details into a paragraph instead of a list.Try to merge them into paragraph If you have any questions, please feel free to call me . 10521班 曹加正Add a signature.I will file a B for your work.世纪商务英语听说教程 英语作业Dear Garcia, It is our honor to invite you to visit our companyGood!. Here are some details that should be known by youBetter to write: that you should know. Youd better arrive here at 11am,Wednesday 20 October. Because the original arrival time is too optismistic. Is your reason logic? It does not agree with the requirement.After 30 minutes,we will arrive our company. And then john sallisCapitalization will introduce our tour of companyTour? Check its meaning! to you .the lunch will begin at 12:30.but the restaurant is full .there are so many people ,its now the swan hotel. It is no doubut that the teaste is delicious. At 2pm.we will have the meetingin the boardroom.one and a half hour later.you can have the coffee break,Hope you enjoy yourself. We will give some details about our product.wish you can give us some advice.time flies.No need to mention.at 6pm.you will leave here,john sallis will setSend? you to the airport.90 minutes, later your plane will take off. Thank you!At the end of the letter, add your signature.10521 黄静 学号：201005020108Please pay attention to the punctuation(comma, period), the spelling, and the capitalization of proper nouns, each initial word of the sentence.I will file a B+ for your work.商务交际英语（二）作业你工作在销售部的一个国际性公司，一个重要的客户路易斯加西亚将访问你的公司一天，你送个他上周行程的一些变化。写一封120140的字给加西亚女士，使用原来的路线，你的手写笔记，告诉她这些变化。Poor translation! 建议路易斯加西亚为期一天的访问行程10月20日（星期三）11:00加西亚女士从马德里约翰.萨利斯1B 432航班，来机场与加西亚女士见面。（原始抵到时间过于乐观）11：30到达公司约翰.萨利斯向加西亚女士介绍旅游公司。12:30在白鹿餐厅午餐（约翰.萨利斯苏.史密斯，卡罗尔.斯内普，汤姆.麦卡利斯特曼努埃拉加西亚）（卡罗尔也没做到这一点，解释为什么。）（餐厅已经满了，现在在天鹅宾馆）14：00在会议上开会（卡罗尔.斯内普，汤姆.麦卡利斯特曼努埃拉加西亚）15:30在咖啡馆休息16:00介绍产品（卡罗尔，汤姆.麦卡利斯特苏史密斯曼努埃拉加西亚斯内普） （提供一些细节）18:00约翰.萨利斯送加西亚女士去机场（约翰要早点去，苏会带曼努埃拉去机场）19:30加西亚女士离开1B886飞行马德里Where is your homework? 世纪商务英语听说教程 英语作业Hi Ms Garcia,Good day!So sorry to inform you that the original itinerary has been changed.First, John Sallis will pick you up at airport inDelete it. later because of the problems of traffic congestion“Traffic jam” is better.But you give a good reason!.In addition, well have lunch at the Swan Hotel instead of White Hart restaurant for no vacancies.Good! And Carol is ill, so she wont come.Whats more, Tom Allister will give some details in product presentation.Last, John has to go early, Sue will take Manuela Who is she? She is the one who will receive your letter.to the airport.Any recommendation, please contact with Contact me! me.(should you have any recommendation, please feel free to contact me.)In formal writing, its better to write full sentences.Kind ragards.Shi Feng Well done! Youve got an A! 10521班 石峰 英语作业Dear Ms Garcia, Im glad to write a letter of Write a letter to sb. you .I work in the Sales Department of an international companyBetter to tell the companys name so that she knows exactly who is writing to her. . I an writing you to tell you the new itinerary. On Wednesday 20 October ,I will show you withDelete it. a good arrangement. At 11:00,John Sails will meet you at the airport when you arrive .Arrive on timeIt doesnt agree with the requirement. .At 11:30,you will arrive at company,John sails will introduce you to our Travel Is it a travel company? What does “tour” mean?company. At 12:30,you would have lunch at White Deer White HartRestaurant but The Restaurant which Delete it. is full too. John Sails,Tom Mcallister sue will attend this dinner. Carol cannot arrival itArrival is a noun. ,because she is Lost timeWhat do you intend to express? 她没有时间？ (Shes busy and can not spare the time.).At 14:00, the meeting will be held in boardroom,The end of the meeting, you have a coffee break at 15:30.At 16:00,Carol Snape,Tom Mcallister,Sue Manuera will give you a product presentation. At the same time,acorrding to the product details ,we will offer you a complete introduction.At 18:00,John has to go early,Prevent late?.however,you donnot need to worry about it., Sue will take you to the airport. At 19：30，you can depart on flight 1B 886 to Madrid. I am sorry again, I hope you can accept this arrangement. At last, I wish you a pleasant journey.Good!You should add your signature in the end.Theres no need to include all the information. Only the changed detailed need mentioning.Pay attention to your spelling, punctuation and capitalization of proper nouns and the initial word of each sentence.Youve got a A- for your work. 10521班 陶辉世纪商务英语听说教程 英语作业Dear Ms Garcia ,Im srry to told you that you dont visit in accordance with thecontract Its just an arrangement. Not a contract. Next I will tell you some changes about this visit.There are some suggestions for you stroke ?on Wednesday 20October . Because the original arrival time is too optimistic, Do you think your reason and your result match with each other? wearrange forDelete it. John to meet you when you arrive on flight 1 B 432from Madrid at 11:00. John will give you an introductory of ourcompany when you arrive in our company half a hour later. Wewill have a lunch at Swan hotel instead of White Hart restaurantbecause that Caral forget to order the meal and the Swan hotel isbatter .We should continue to visit when end afterthe rest . Our meetingwill be held in boardroom with Carol ,Tom ,Sue ,Manuela. Therewill be a coffee break at 15:30. A product presentation will bearranged at 16:00, During the product presentation Tom will givesome details of the product. Sue will instead of John take you Sue, instead of John, will take youtothe airport at 18:00, because John has to go eariy. And youdeparts on flight 1 B 886 to Madrid at 19:30.Looking forward to your visit. I think you will have good timehere.Each of us will have more understanding .Whats the point?Yours,Wangkun 10521班 王坤Good! I will file an A for your work.Dear Ms Garcia,I would like to express my apologies for the changes of the itinerary that I sent you last week. Now ,I an writing you to tell you the new itinerary.There are some details of your one-day visit to our company on Wednesday 20 October. Because the original arrival time is too optimisticGive a more specific reason., we arrange for John to meet you when you arrive on flight 1 B 432 from Madrid at 11:00. After 30 minutes ride, you are arriving at our company. Then John will give you an introductory of our company. An hour later ,we will have lunch at Swan hotel instead of White Hart restaurant with John ,Carol ,Tom ,Sue ,and Manuela, because of the full of White Hart restaurant.because the white hart is full. Full is an adj. The arrangement of the afternoon is as follows. 14:00, A meeting will be held in boardroom with Carol ,Tom ,Sue ,Manuela. There will be a coffee break at 15:30. A product presentation will be arranged at 16:00, During the product presentation Tom will give some details of the product. Sue will instead of John take youSue, instead of John, will take you. to the airport at 18:00, because John has to go earily. And you departs on Flight 1B886 to Madrid at 19:30.Above is all the schedule of your visit. I think we will share an unforgettable day for your visit. Do you think so ?No need to mention it. Yours, Zhang XiongjunYouve got a B for your work.Dear Ms Garcia,I would like to express my apologies for the changes of the itinerary that I sent you last week. Now ,I an writing you to tell you the new itinerary.There are some details of your one-day visit to our company on Wednesday 20 October. Because the original arrival time is too optimisticGive a more specific reason., we arrange for John to meet you when you arrive on flight 1 B 432 from Madrid at 11:00. After 30 minutes ride, you are arriving at our company. Then John will give you an introductory of our company. An hour later ,we will have lunch at Swan hotel instead of White Hart restaurant with John ,Carol ,Tom ,Sue ,and Manuela, because of the full of White Hart restaurant.because the white hart is full. Full is an adj. The arrangement of the afternoon is as follows. 14:00, A meeting will be held in boardroom with Carol ,Tom ,Sue ,Manuela. There will be a coffee break at 15:30. A product presentation will be arranged at 16:00, During the product presentation Tom will give some details of the product. Sue will instead of John take youSue, instead of John, will take you. to the airport at 18:00, because John has to go earily. And you departs on Flight 1B886 to Madrid at 19:30.Above is all the schedule of your visit. I think we will share an unforgettable day for your visit. Do you think so ?No need to mention it. Yours, Zhang Yong Same work as Zhang Xiongjuns. As I cant judge who copied, Ill give you a B equally. Hope you can be responsible for yourself.世纪商务英语听说教程 英语作业Dear Ms Garcia Sorry, because of some reason, was originally scheduled fordelete next weeks schedule has some changes, the first to you about itWe here inform you at the first time. Because original arrival time too optimisticIts not a sentence. Now will visit time change to Wednesday 20 October .you arrives on flight 1 B 432 from Madrid at 11:00am. John Sallis to meet you at airport. You arrival at company at 11:30am. John Sallis to give you an introductory tour of company. Because White Hart restaurant is full ,Carol can not make it, It is now lunch at the Swan hotel at 12:30pm .John Sallis, Carol Snape Tom McAllister and Sue Smith willget together with you and Carol Snape Tom McAllister and Sue Smith and you have a meeting in boardroom at 14:00pm.Next,you have a coffee break 15:30pm .At 16:00pm you will have a product pressentation .Tom MaAllister will give some details to you.Because John to go early .sue will take you7 to the airport at 18:00.Finally,you departs on flight 1 B 886 to Madrid. Finally early to wish you have a nice trip next week!SincerelyHu chungang You should learn how to write a sentence. Infinitive can never function as predicate in a sentence.John Sallis to meet you at airport. (Grammatical error )John Sallis will meet you at the airport.Please correct these mistakes in your letter.I will file a B+ for you. 姓名： 胡纯刚 班级：10522 学号：201005020207Dear Ms Garcia,I would like to express my apologies for the changes of the itinerary that I sent you last week. Now ,I an writing to you to tell you the new itinerary.There are some details of your one-day visit to our company on Wednesday 20 October. Because the original arrival time is too optimistic, Give a specific reason.we arrange forDelete John to meet you when you arrive on flight 1 B 432 from Madrid at 11:00. After 30 minutes ride, you are arriving at our company. Then John will give you an introductory of our company. An hour later ,we will have lunch at Swan hotel instead of White Hart restaurant with John ,Carol ,Tom ,Sue ,Manuela, because of the full of White Hart restaurant.Because white is full.The arrangement of the afternoon as follows. At 14:00, A meeting will be held in boardroom with Carol ,Tom ,Sue ,Manuela. There will be a coffee break at 15:30. A product presentation will be arranged at 16:00, During the product presentation Tom will give some details of the product. Sue will instead of John take you Sue, instead of John, will take you.to the airport at 18:00, because John has to go eariy. And you departs on flight 1 B 886 to Madrid at 19:30.Above is all the schedule of your visit. I think we will share an unforgettable day for your visit. Do you think so ?Yours,Jiang LongYouve got an A-.Dear Manuela Garia: I,m sorry to tell you something, there are some changes to the itinerary I sent to you last week On Wednesday 20 October 23,I will provide you with a good arrangrment. At 11:00,John Sails will meet you at the airport when you arrive .the original time is too optimistic.At 11:30,you will arrive at company,John sails will introduce you to our company.Introduce our company to you. At 12:30,you can have lunch not Where should you put “not”?at white Hart but Swan Hotel which is full too. John Sails,Tom Mcallister sue will attend this dinner. Carol can,t make it ,beaause she is ill.At 14:00, the meeting will be held in boardroom,then you can have a coffee break at 15:30.At 16:00,Carol Snape,Tom Mcallister,Sue Manuera will give you a product presentation.At the same time,acorrding to the product details ,we will offer you a complete introduction.At 18:00,John has to go early,however,you don,t need to worry about it., Sue will take you to the airport. At 19：30， you can depart on flight 1B 886 to Madrid. I,m sorry again, I appreciate hearing form you. Liu huajunPlease check your mistakes and correct them.Youve got an B+.世纪商务英语听说教程 英语作业Dear Ms Garcia, Do you remember I sent an itinerary for youSend sth. to sb. about your one-day visit to our company? There are some changes here,I hope you will accept it . First, its your arrival time thats too optimistic ,it can be postponed to 8:00am.The original time is 11:a.m. If you postpone it, the time should be later than the previous. Second, the place of your lunch is changed to Swan hotel, the original one White Hart is full. And Carol Snape cant make it with you b