SAT满分作文详细赏析-智课教育出国考试.pdf

智 课 网 S A T 备 考 资 料 SAT满分作文详细赏析 智课教育出国考试 SAT 满分作文是很多SAT考生的目标 想要拿到SAT满分作文不是 一件容易的事 但是按照SAT满分作文的技巧来练习可以让大家的SAT 作文写作质量得到提高 Assignment Should heroes be defined as people who say what they think when we ourselves lack the courage to say it 一 写作题目 Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below Traditionally the term heroism has been applied to those who have braved physical danger to defend a cause or to protect others But one of the most feared dangers people face is that of disapproval by their family peers or community Sometimes acting courageously requires someone to speak out at the risk of such rejection We should consider those who do so true heroes Assignment Should heroes be defined as people who say what they think when we ourselves lack the courage to say it 题目翻译 英雄主义 一词传统上适用于那些勇于面对身体上的危险而去捍 卫一项事业或保护他人的人 但是 人民面对的最可怕的危险之一是来 自家庭 同伴或集体的反对 有时候 冒着被拒绝的风险言所欲言也是 一种勇敢 我们应该视这样做的人为真正的英雄 命题 英雄是否应该被定义为在我们缺少发言的勇气时言其所想的 人 二 6分范文 There are many types of heroes in real life or in literature but the most courageous type of all is the one who is willing to stand up and say what they believe in even when everyone else lacks the courage to do so Many people are content to go through life following the crowd They will themselves to believe in ideas that society says is right even when they know in their heart it is wrong A hero is one who is willing to give up his position in society in order to tell people what he believes is right The abolitionists such as Harriet Beecher Stowe and William Lloyd Garrison were heroes in their own time Before the Civil War people in all sections of the country thought that African Americans were animals and treated them as such During the reform period of the Jacksonian era William Lloyd Garrison began to publish his abolitionist newspaper The Liberator In this newspaper he demanded that the African American slaves be set free immediately without any compensation to their owners Because his view on slavery was against the common belief of the population he was not received well Throughout his life he was given multiple death threats and one of his abolitionist friends was killed Harriet Beecher Stowe was an abolitionist after Garrison s time but she was received in much of the same way After the Fugitive Slave Act of 1850 was released she wrote the book Uncle Tom s Cabin It was a story of a slave living in the South and the cruelty of his owner The inhumanness of the owner caused many southerners to ban the book in anger but at the same time it brought the terrible act of slavery to the light Many northerners used this book as a weapon against the South s peculiar institution Rudyard Kipling once wrote in his poem If that you will be a man if you can stand up and say what you believe in when all men around you doubt you Heroes must have the courage to risk everything they love to stand up for themselves in the face of opposition Both William Lloyd Garrison and Harriet Beecher Stowe stood up against a society which had accepted slavery as a right They believed that what their heart told them was right and risked everything to tell the public what they believed in These two people have hopefully shown others to believe in themselves and what they view in their hearts 范文翻译 现实生活和文学作品中存在各种英雄 但最有勇气的当属在众人都 不敢发言时还能站起来阐述自己信念的人 许多人满足于人云亦云的生 活 他们将社会承认的正确意见奉为圭臬 即使内心认为这种意见是错 误的也绝不反对 而英雄则愿意牺牲现有的社会地位来告诉众人他所信 奉的真理 废奴主义者 如斯托夫人 Harriet Beecher Stowe 和威廉 劳埃德 加里森 William Lloyd Garrison 是他们时代的英 雄 内战之前 全国各地都视非裔美国人为动物 并以对待动物的方式 对待他们 在杰克逊总统改革期间 威廉 劳埃德 加里森开始发行废奴 主义报纸 解放者 他在报纸中呼吁立即释放黑奴 并且不予奴隶主 任何补偿 因为加里森关于奴隶制的观点与社会普遍认识相左 他并不 受人欢迎 加里森在一生中多次遭人死亡威胁 他一位信奉废奴主义的 朋友也遭暗杀身亡 斯托夫人是加里森之后的一位废奴主义者 她也受 到了相同待遇 1850年 逃亡奴隶法 颁布以后斯托夫人撰写了 汤姆叔叔的小屋 小说讲述了发生在美国南部地区一个黑人奴隶与他残酷的主人之间 的故事 书中对奴隶主不人道行为的描写使得许多南方人怀着愤怒的心 情把此书列为禁书 但同时也使奴隶制度的暴行大白于天下 许多北方 人以此书为武器攻击南方的黑奴制度 鲁德亚德 吉卜林曾在诗作 如果 中写道 如果你能在旁人都怀疑 你的时候站起来宣布你的信念 你就是一个真男人 1 英雄必须在面临 反对时有勇气牺牲所爱的一切捍卫自己的观点 加里森和斯托夫人都曾 反抗承认奴隶制的社会 他们相信自己内心的声音是正确的 并勇于牺 牲一切告诉公众他们的信念 他们或许能让旁人明白 要相信自己 相 信内心 三 得分点详解 1 effectively and insightfully develops a point of view on the issue and demonstrates outstanding critical thinking using clearly appropriate examples reasons and other evidence to support its position 围绕论题有效 深刻地发展一个论点 运用贴切的事例 因果分析 和其他证据支持论点 从而展示出色的思辨能力 针对命题 英雄是否应该被定义为在我们缺少发言的勇气时言其所 想的人 本文提出论点 英雄愿意牺牲现有的社会地位来告诉众人 他所信奉的真理 为了支持论点 作者以两位废奴主义者 斯托夫 人和威廉 劳埃德 加里森为例 展示了这两位英雄如何反抗不公正的奴 隶制度 而不是和众人一样 将社会承认的正确意见奉为圭臬 即使内 心认为这种意见是错误的也绝不反对 在叙述事例时 作者非常注重 细节 不仅给出了两位主人公的全名 还具体到加里森发行的刊物名 解放者 斯托夫人的小说名 汤姆叔叔的小屋 以及当时的1850年 逃亡奴隶法 增强了文章的可信度和说服力 作者还在末段引用了鲁 德亚德 吉卜林在诗作 如果 中表明的观点 如果你能在旁人都怀疑 你的时候站起来宣布你的信念 你就是一个真男人 从而进一步加强 了论点 然后作者总结到 英雄必须在面临反对时有勇气牺牲所爱的 一切捍卫自己的观点 加里森和斯托夫人都曾反抗承认奴隶制的社会 他们相信自己内心的声音是正确的 并勇于牺牲一切告诉公众他们的信 念 最后作者进一步深化 指出英雄对社会的影响 他们或许能让 旁人明白 要相信自己 相信内心 整篇文章综合运用了事例 分析 和引用来证明论点 展现了出色的思辨能力 2 is well organized and clearly focused demonstrating clear coherence and smooth progression of ideas 结构合理 中心明确 思路连贯 衔接自然 文章采用总 分 总的结构 首段提出论点 中间段用事例证明论点 末段引经据典 总结事例并深化论点 在叙述事例的时候 作者先论 述尽管威廉 劳埃德 加里森 关于奴隶制的观点与社会普遍认识相左 他仍然勇于发行 解放者 以宣传自己的观点 接下来 作者以 斯 托夫人是加里森之后的一位废奴主义者 为过渡句引出斯托夫人的例子 指出尽管斯托夫人的小说 汤姆叔叔的小屋 使许多南方人怀着愤 怒的心情把此书列为禁书 但同时也使奴隶制度的暴行大白于天下 全文紧扣论点 不枝不蔓 起承转合十分得体 3 exhibits skillful use of language using a varied accurate and apt vocabulary 显示运用语言的技巧 词汇丰富 准确 恰当 4 demonstrates meaningful variety in sentence structure 运用多种句子结构 5 is free of most errors in grammar usage and mechanics 在语法 用法和技巧上错误很少 本篇范文文风平实 贵在用词准确 形象 如第一段的 Many people are content to go through life following the crowd 从众的概念变成了看得见的行动 如第二段的 it brought the terrible act of slavery to the light 同样具有画面感 同样是第二段 Before the Civil War people in all sections of the country thought that African Americans were animals and treated them as such 用such指代a nimals 避免了用词重复 作者对各种句式的运用也很熟练 开头第一 句 There are many types of heroes in real life or in literature but the most courageous type of all is the one who is willing to stand up and say what they believe in even when everyone else lacks the courage to do so 是一个多重复合句 第二段的 The abolitionists such as Harriet Beecher Stowe and William Lloyd Garrison were heroes in their own time 运用了插入语 四 经典词句 be content to do sth 满足于做某事 follow the crowd 追随众人 all sections of the country 全国各地 common belief 普遍观念 death threat 死亡威胁 inhumanness 没有人性 bring sth to the light 使某事曝光 stand up against sth 站起来反对某事 五 事例扩展 范文中斯托夫人和加里森的例子还可以应用于是应该相信权威 大 众还是坚持个人观点的论题 如 1 Is the opinion of the majority in government or in any other circumstances a poor guide 2 Do we tend to accept the opinions of others instead of developing our own independent ideas 3 Is it important to question the ideas and decisions of people in positions of authority 4 Is it more valuable for people to fit in than to be unique and different 5 Is it always best to determine one s own views of right and wrong or can we benefit from following the crowd 6 Do people need to unlearn or reject many of their assumptions and ideas 7 Is it better for a society when people act as individuals rather than copying the ideas and opinions of others 8 Are widely held views often wrong or are such views more likely to be correct 9 Do all established traditions deserve to remain in existence 10 Should society limit people s exposure to some kinds of information or forms of expression 以及关于逆境和挑战的论题 如 1 Do you think that ease does not challenge us and that we need adversity to help us discover who we are 2 Do people learn who they are only when they are forced into action 3 Does true learning only occur when we experience difficulties 4 What is your opinion of the claim that disagreement leads to progress 5 Are people s lives the result of the choices they make 6 Is success in life earned or do people succeed because they are lucky 7 Is it better to change one s attitude than to change one s circumstances Score Explanation SAT作文6分范文点评 This paper demonstrates clear and consistent mastery by insightfully developing the point of view that A hero is one who is willing to give up his position in society in order to tell people what he believes is right The writer demonstrates outstanding critical thinking by focusing on abolitionists William Lloyd Garrison and Harriet Beecher Stowe as examples of heroes who spoke out against the injustice of slavery and refused to believe in ideas that society says is right even when they know in their heart it is wrong First the essay explains that William Lloyd Garrison published The Liberator to voice his demands that the African American slaves be set free immediately without any compensation to their owners even though his view on slaver