高考英语 书面表达系列及参考范文（32）.doc

2014高考英语书面表达系列系列（32）及参考范文作文（*） 今年5月31日是第21个世界无烟日，英文21世纪报计划举办一次征艾比赛，主题是青少年吸烟问题。请根据以下提示写一篇短文参赛： 1绝大部分青少年吸烟者认为暖姻蓝禧粳酷，氆禾套马上对身体产生危害，只要在危害到来之前戒掉就是了。 2请你驳斥这种观点，应包含以下信息：吸烟浪费金钱，浑身气味，牙齿肮脏，上瘾会致癌，患心、肺疾病；冒丧命之险追求时髦没有益处；戒烟要抓紧时间。 3提出一些帮助人们戒烟的建议(至少60词)。 注意：词数120150，文章标题已绘出，不计入总词数。smoking is not cool and quit now _【参考范文】one possible version：smoking is not cool and quit now most young smokers say smoking is cool and doesnt hurt us fight nowpeople can just stop before it gets dangerous but in my opinion，smoking is not cool at allin addition to the waste of money，smoking makes you smell bad and makes your teeth dirtybeing addicted to cigarettes will poison your bedy with cancer causing byproductsdying of lung and heart disease or cancer wont promote your popularitydont quit until its too late-smoking begins to damage your body the moment you start to quit you should first set a date and quit completely on that daythen find out the times you are most likely to smoke and make a plan about what youll do instead of smoking at those timesfor example，take a walk when feeling stressedtake exercise to resist the desire to smokelet your friends give you a help reminding you if necessary*结束 a good face is a letter of recommendation some people say beauty is just a skin deep. i dont quite agree with them. good appearance often makes a big difference in social communication, competition， finding jobs and so on. not only can good appearance help you become more confident， but also it helps you be impressed. if you want to get a good job，the first sight is important. physical beauty is probable to draw much attention. however，we have to face this problem. we have no right to choose our appearance. when necessary，we can make up ourselves. if you think doing this is a good way to improve your confidence，just do what you really want to regardless others opinion. it is worth all the money and time. facing a variety of social pressures，we young people should build confidence. confidence is the key to success. in a word，you may not be the most beautiful one，but you can be the most attractive one；you may not the best one，but you can be the most confident one. show yourself and chances will kiss you in time. 【点评】 爱美之心人皆有之。我们追求美，创造美，一副好脸孔就是一封介绍信，作者围绕这一主题进行阐述。在现代社会里，美丽的外表在社交、竞争、求职等方面有着不可低估的作用。作者立意大胆，构思巧妙，很有个性。文章叙述清楚，层次分明，过渡自然。在语言表达上，运用倒装句、排比句等句式，增强了文章的感染力。 文中语言错误有两处： probable改为likely。probable不能用某人或某物作主语，常用it作形式主语，构成it is probable for sb. to do sth.结构。 regardless之后加of。regardless of是复合介词，意为“不理会、不顾”。*结束 一、导语 what does beauty really mean？ everybody has own definition. the standard of beauty changes with different society， culture and nations. some hold the point that the beautiful appearance is of great importance， which is visible to all. others have the idea that the spiritual beauty is the loveliest one, which lasts long. however different it might be， their opinions are all acceptable. 什么是美呢？每个人都有自己的定义。美的标准因社会、文化和国度不同而产生差异。有的人认为相貌上的美是最重要、最直观的美，有的人则认为心灵上的美才是最可爱、最长久的美。无论哪种美，这些对美的定义都是有道理的。 二、创设情境 以“what is beauty in your mind”为主题，发表自己的看法，题目自拟。要求：1. 行文流畅，观点鲜明；2. 内容丰富，层次分明；3. 词数150左右。 三、学生习作 beauty will buy no beef everyone admires beauty. nowadays some people tend to think that they own beauty if they have a good looking. they are not satisfied with their appearance. they spend much money taking a kind of operation. can beauty really be man-made？if so， everybody can get beauty. as a result，there is no beauty at all. the appearance is given by our parents and is unique in the world. everyone should value it. id rather prefer nature as the standard of beauty. just accept yourself, accept everything the god gives to you，and create the beautiful life belong to you. many heroes dont have beautiful surface. however，their beautiful images often come to our minds. their beauty comes from their contributions to the society. dont be eager to judge whether a person is beautiful or not without a thorough understanding of him. a beautiful person is not the one with a good looking，but with a broad and kind heart. good looking is pleasant while spiritual beauty is more important. as an old saying goes，“virtue is fairer than beauty.”if you have a kind heart，you own real beauty. 【点评】 本文以谚语“漂亮不能当饭吃”为题，直截了当地亮出了自己的观点。全文以“美德胜于美貌”为主线，阐述了“追求外形的美而放弃了内在的美不是真正的美”。文章观点鲜明，结构严谨，用词恰当，作者能运用谚语来强化自己的观点，有较强的英语语言组织能力和表达能力。 本文有两处语言错误： id rather prefer应改为 id prefer。would rather表示“宁愿”，prefer也是“宁愿”的意思，两者不能连用在一起。 belong to 改为belonging to，在此处作定语。*结束 假如你叫王方，乘出租车时丢了手提箱。在失物招领处，工作人员要求你用英文写一份书面材料。 内容要点：1 上午11点钟到达机场，然后带着5件行李乘一辆黄色出租车到假日酒店（holiday inn）；2 到达酒店后，发现由于粗心将手提箱遗失在出租车上。不幸的是，未注意到出租车的车牌号；3 手提箱是黑色的，由塑料制成，尺寸大约为60cm40cm16cm；4 箱内有一台摄像机、两条长裤、三件衬衫、几本儿童读物以及一个钱包。钱包内有一张2,000美元的支票；5 你的联系电话是 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 文章的开头已为你写好。 my name is wang fang. i arrived at the airport at 11 am. 学生作品： my name is wang fang. i arrived at the airport at 11 am. then i took a yellow taxi to the holiday inn with five luggages. when i arrived at the holiday inn, i found my suitcase had been left in the taxi because of my carelessness. unfortunately, i didnt notice the taxis licence. the suitcase is black and made of plastic. it is about 60 centimetre by 40 centimetre by 16 centimetre. in it, there is a camera, two pairs of trousers, three pieces of shirts, several books for children and a purse. in the purse, there is a check of 2,000 dollars. could the finder make relation with me? my telephone number is thank you. wang fang 点评： 1. 第一段第3句：luggage为不可数名词，five luggages表达不正确，可改为five pieces of luggage。 2. 第一段第5句：licence意为执照，不是牌照，故the taxis licence可改为the number of the taxi。 3. 第二段第2句：表示度量单位的centimetre为可数名词，应把三个 centimetre都改为centimetres。 4. 第二段第3句：in it过于简短，不必在其后停顿，其后逗号应去掉。 5. 第二段第3句：shirt是可数名词， three pieces of shirts表达不正确，应改为three shirts。 6. 第二段第4句：表示价值时，通常用介词for，故of最好改为for。 7第三段第1句：make relation with me表达不正确。习作者想表达与我取得联系，可改为get in touch with me或return the suitcase to me。 修改好的文章：my name is wang fang. i arrived at the airport at 11 am. then i took a yellow taxi to the holiday inn with five pieces of luggage. when i arrived at the holiday inn, i found my suitcase had been left in the taxi because of my carelessness. unfortunately, i didnt notice the number of the taxi. the suitcase is black and made of plastic. it is about 60 centimetres by 40 centimetres by 16 centimetres. in it there is a camera, two pairs of trousers, three shirts, several books for children and a purse. in the purse, there is a check for 2,000 dollars. could the finder get in touch with me? my telephone number is thank you. wang fang*结束书面表达的要求是切中题意,语言准确,条理清楚。写作既可以体现词汇、句型、语法等的掌握情况,又可以体现一个人的逻辑思维。因此,写好一篇短文是件不容易的事。高考命题逐渐向开放式的作文过渡,开放式的作文更有利于考生发挥自己的水平,其难度也相应提高了。因此,对于开放式的作文,只要短文写得流畅,表达得清楚,体裁正确,逻辑合理,就应视为是一篇好作文。请参考下面一篇书面表达:写作要求:出国留学已成为一种潮流,请你就此问题谈一谈自己的观点,简要论述留学的利与弊。词数为100左右。范文如下:nowadays going abroad to study is very popular. even some primary school students, whose families are well off, are studying abroad, let alone university students and postgraduates. studying abroad can widen ones view and help learn about the cultures of foreign countries. of course, its a good way to learn foreign languages. but studying abroad is not suitable for everyone because of the high cost and fees. if a students family cant support him and he has to struggle in a foreign country for a living not for his studies, i think he neednt go abroad. he can study well in china and he will be able to become successful.so going abroad to study is one way, but not the only way, to ones education and success.点评:本文从出国热入手,写出了作者对出国留学的看法,有利的一面是开阔视野,学习外国的文化和语言;不利的一面是费用太高,并非适合所有学生。作者巧妙地陈述了对留学的赞同和反对,并以结尾句点出了出国留学对于一个人的教育与成功并非是唯一的出路。在写本篇作文时,在表达上应当注意以下几点:1.由于高考作文一般要求写一篇100词左右的作文,篇幅不易太长,不能随意发挥。题材广泛,但不能失去控制。2.在写作中要尽力避免使用一些生词,如:潮流(trend)。遇到需要的词汇而不会表达时,换种说法表达即可。因此,上文的第一句nowadays going abroad for studies is very popular.就是一个很好的转换表达。3.对于这个题目,短文中应当有留学的利与弊两方面的内容,不要只论述单方面的内容。4.学会使用一些连接词以及一些过渡性的词汇,使行文自然、流畅。如范文中的nowadays, even, but, of course, if, so, i think等。5.注意文章的开头与结尾句。第一句的作用是引出下文,而结尾句是画龙点睛。*结束作文（*） 假如你是李华，你的美国朋友peter想和家人来中国定居，请你帮他在city a和city b两座城市中做出选择。下面的图表是对这两座城市在就业、安全、娱乐和气候等方面的对比。图标左边的数字表明人们对这两座城市的喜爱程度。请根据图表提供的信息，给peter写一封信，提出你的建议并说明理由。 2可适当增加细节，以使文章连贯。3信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。dear peter， im so glad to learn that you and your family are coming to settle down in china_ nev