作文题目：yourhelpneeded.doc

作文题目：your help needed写一封倡导信希望社会对某个病人进行捐助，该病人是你们学校的一名学生1.目前病情及家庭情况2、经济困难3、希望被捐助14 points (漂漂亮亮) Jan. 8th , 2005Dear friends,Im writing to you, on behalf of the student union, to ask for help for our schoolmate, Li Ming. Hes seriously ill and has to have a lung transplant at once. To make things worse, he comes from the west of our country, which means that his family is quite poor.Li Ming is now confronted with the following difficulties. To begin with, he cant afford the medical expenses. His family doesnt have a good financial background and moreover, his parents have already borrowed a lot of money to send him to university. In view of their low income and severe financial situation, we hope you can show your sympathy. In addition, his family is far away and he needs someone to take care of him day and night instead of his parents who are thousands of miles from here. Only under careful care can our friend recover from his disease.On no account can we see our friend suffer without giving him a hand! Hes in desperate need of your help, especially in financial donations to help pay his expenses. Anyone who wants to offer help can contact us at 65123312 or you can email us by . Please act without delay! Yours sincerelyZhang HuaChairman of the student Union1.Appropriate use of high-level vocabulary2.Appropriate use of various types of sentences: simple, compound, complex/ narration, exclamation, inversion/ parenthesis, attributive clauses3. clear and logical organization, good coherence4.Correct formatAsk first, explain later11 points （清清楚楚）Dear friends,Xiao Ming is a student of our university. He is one of the top students in the class, but last year he got cancer. Since then, his life had changed a lot. He couldnt go to school as usual and his parents can no longer afford the medicine expenses.Xiao Mings father is a worker with a low salary. His mother is out of job and in order to take care of the son, she cannot leave to find a job. Now all the savings are used out, furthermore, the parents cannot borrow any more money from the raletives.The medicine expenses have become more and more. Xiao Ming needs to be attended and take a lot of medicine. As the students of the university, we decide to do something for him. But our power just can help him a little, so your help is needed! If everyone just contributes a little, that will make a great difference.We sincerely need your help! All of us hope Xiao Ming can recover from diseases. If you want to contribute a little, please contact us.Tel: * * Student Union8 points （马马虎虎）Dear friends:Your help is needed! A seriously ill student is needing your help. The patient is a good boy of our college. One year ago, he got lang cancer, now he is still treated by Nanhai Hospital. He is from a undeveloped area, his family isnt rich enough to afford the big bill of medicine and operation, and the poor boy become weaker and weaker, even cant live without the pure oxeyn.Now, the problems is money. Our college has subscribe 5000 yuan to his family, but its still not enough. The doctor said the disease can be cured if only good treatments and operations. But the poor family cant afford them, both of his parents feel grief every day.Now, we ask for your help, please help a intellgincal and kind-hearted student, help him get rid of the disease! Even if one of our help is not a big force, but many of ours and yours help can help him. If you decide to donate money to him, you can telephone 12345678, and we are waiting for you at any time. Student Union5 points（糊里糊涂）Dear all:There is a student who is seriously ill by the leprosy. Her name is Lingling that from Gaoqiao University. Her father is a common worker in a small factory where is 600 RMB per month. Her mother is out of work for three years.To treat her illness, the family has been used all their money. Now they are meeting the difficults as following: Firstly, the expensive money for the treatment they cant be afforded. Secondly, her mother also has some illness seriously, no one has anytime to keep her. If they cant afford the money for modern treatment, the illness of Lingling will be more seriously.Now, I think there are many people would give your help to the illness girl. If you want to contribute your something to this girl, please phone this number; 9999999, Miss Wang will wait for you. Thank you very much. The Student Union2 points（一塌糊涂）Every students,A young man, our closest friend, who studing with you in the same college seriously ill now. When we came to viste him several days ago, we were sad to saw our friend lay on the bed, much thinner than before. His parents have been tired for some years.Smails couldnt be found on their face. We all standed sclint and didnt know what to say. Now the worest thing trouled them is how to finace the treatment. As what is mentioned above, the parants did both tired and have no idea about the money. Moreover, theis son need a profressional nurse to take care. All t