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美式论文、报告写作技巧 编者按：美式教育的特点即是课程内容强调学生参与及创新运用，因此，报告便成了常见的考核学生学习成果的方式，比如实验报告、学期报告、专题报告、研究报告及论文（含毕业论文）等。研究生presentation 及 seminar 的机会更是占很大的比重，有些甚至占学期成绩很大比例。如何完成报告、论文同时得到良好的成绩，是本文提供给有志留学的有心人参考的目的。 美国大学生由於自小已养成自动寻找答案习惯，在启发式的教育环境下，写报告、论文对他们来说比较不陌生，虽然专业知识上美国学生不见得比外籍学生强，但是表达能力由於自小培养，加上英语能力的优势，常比外籍学生在报告、论文方面有较隹的利基。反之中国学生比较缺乏报告写作的训练，因此如果在留学过程中无法适应美式教育会比较辛苦，其实论文、报告的写作要领其实不难，只要把握技巧就可水到渠成。 通常论文由篇首(Preliminaries)，本文(Texts)以及参考资料(References)三部分构成；而这三大部分各自内容如下： (一) 篇首： 封面(Title) 序言(Preface) 谢词(Acknowledge) 提要(Summary) 目录(Tables and Appendixes) (二) 本文： 引言(Introduction) 主体，含篇(Part)、章(Chapter)、节(Section) 、以及注释 (Footnotes) (三)参考资料： 参考书目(References or Bibliography) 附录资料(Appendix)。 进行论文或报告写作之前，先要确定想要表达的主题，主题确定后，将其具体表达，即为题目。题目可以提供研究者： 一.研究的方向 二.研究的范围 三.资料搜集的范围 四.预期研究成果 通常在确定题目之後就开始找资料从事研究，建议在找资料之前最好去问教授有哪些参考资料来源可供参考引用。构思为确定写作大纲或 Proposal 的先前步骤， 大纲是论文、报告的骨干， Proposal 是研究的架构、流程及范围的说明书。如何构思大纲或Proposal为论文、报告写作前的必要准备工作。好的论文或研究报告，要基于在完整、详实的资料上，而参考资料除了和教授商借之外，最主要的来源就是图书馆了，一般参考资料来源可分成教科书或手册、政府机构的报告、科技或商业方面的杂志，及会议性质的资料。此外现代的电脑资料库也可帮助收集资料，在国外可利用学校的电脑连线资料库寻找自己需要的资料。当一切准备就绪，即可开始着手写报告，一般报告还分大报告如期末、专题等报告，及小报告如 Seminar 式的报告。 就算是小报告，也至少应含 (一)TITLE PAGES ：包含主题名称、作者、日期 (二)Summary： 即主要的结论 (三)Introduction：包括理论背景及内容 (四)Technical Sections：是论文的主体，为最重要的部份应再细分为 几个片断。 (五)Conclusions：即扼要的结论 (六)Appendixes：复杂公式的导引及叁考资料和电脑程式的报表可附加在 此项 美式报告的撰写通常要打字，两行式，行间若有未拼完的字要以音节来连接。写报告通常需要用到电脑，如有计算数字统计图表的需求，也常会用到程式软体如PASCAL、LOTUS，统计分析软体如SAS，也是不可或缺的，电脑绘图在今日已成为工商界及学术界的重要工具，文书处理更是最基本的要求，因此Word for Window、Powerpoint、Excel便成了颇受欢迎的工具。此外在英文语法、文法上的润饰与修改，如能请老美帮忙会比较好。 论文、报告完成后有时会需要做解说(Presentation)，用英文来讲演对中国人来说算是一大挑战，通常课堂讲演时间为十五分钟到三十分钟，若是论文囗试则至少一小时。投影机及麦克风的使用对讲演的效果有很大帮助，正式讲演前多预习几次，时间宜控制适中，上台时忌讳低头拿着报告照念，需留意听众的反应，切中主题，避免太多数字的导引。2004 年-2009 年高考英语满分作文及名师评析2009 高考英语满分作文【全国卷I 海南、宁夏】【试题回放】假定你是李华，正在英国接受英语培训，住在一户英国人家里。今天你的房东Mrs. Wilson不在家，你准备外出，请给Mrs. Wilson 写一留言条，内容包括：1.外出购物2.替房东还书3.Tracy 来电话留言：1)咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)见面取消 2)此事已告知Susan 3) 尽快回电注意：1. 词数100 左右;2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Mrs. Wilson,Im going out shopping, and wont be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 oclock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldnt meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.Yours,Li Hua【名师点评】本文属于提纲式要点作文，是学生比较熟悉的题材，体现了英语学习应该注意实用性，生活型的原则。行文人称、时态运用恰当、准确，各个要点间逻辑连贯，行文通顺。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译，而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句，因此要仔细组织语言，合理安排结构。在语言方面，要特别注意简洁明了，开头要开门见山。【江苏卷】【试题回放】鼠标是计算机时代最佳的人机交互工具之一。它极大地方便了人们的计算机操作。但是，过分依赖鼠标的习惯也会带来一些不利影响。请你以鼠标为切入点，根据下表所提示的信息，用英语写一篇短文。鼠标的必要性对多数人来说，操作计算机，上网冲浪鼠标的便捷性点击、移动、插入、拷贝、删除编辑文本，搜索信息收发邮件，选购商品点播音乐，下载电影如果过分依赖鼠标 (请考生结合自身感受，列举两到三点)注意：1.对所给要点逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。2.词数150 左右。开头已经写好，不计人总词数。3.作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.For most people, its almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy, flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesnt always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.【名师点评】本文为提纲式说明文体裁，所选内容与我们生活相关，考生只要把所给要点逐条陈述，适度发挥，不要逐条翻译即可。文章说理清楚，语言流畅，句式表达多样，用词恰当、准确。不失为一篇满分作文。2008 高考英语满分作文【全国卷】【试题回放】假定你是李华，从小喜爱大熊猫(panda),一直通过有关网站(website)关注三年前在美国圣迭哥动物园出生的大熊猫“苏琳”和她的母亲“白云”。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园工作人员写一封信：1、 自我介绍;2、 祝贺苏琳生日;3、 感谢工作人员;4、 索取苏琳三岁生日照。注意：1、词数100 左右;2、可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯;3、开头语已为你写好。Dear Sir/Madam,Greetings from China!Im Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. Ive been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and Ive been watching her grow on your website,. Now shes going to be three. Id like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.Yours truly,Li Hua【名师点评】本文写作的内容要点如下：1.自我介绍;2.信息来源;3.祝贺生日;4.感谢照顾;5.索取照片;6.合适的结尾。这封信格式正确，行文规范，描述有条不紊，称呼、正文中的开头及结尾、结束语均表达到位。文章行文活泼，感情真挚，语言表述准确，洋溢着作者因大熊猫得到精心照顾而对美方人员的感激之情，以及希望自己愿望成真，得到照片的希冀之情。长短句运用合理，结合了简单句和复合句，流畅自然，不露痕迹，的确是一篇佳作。积累卡片英汉互译好词 1.delighted adj.欣喜的，快乐的 2.express v.表达 3.give birth to v.产生，生育好句 Id like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.我祝福它生日快乐并且对你们的辛勤工作表达我的感激之情，正是你们的努力工作让苏琳和它的父母在美国过着幸福和健康的生活。评析：定语从句的使用。【江苏卷】【试题回放】实现有效的沟通，建立良好的人际关系，不仅要善于言表，更要学会倾听。请你根据下表中所提供的信息，写一篇题为 “Being a Good Listener” 的英文演讲稿。为何倾听表示尊重，增进理解，建立良好的人际关系谁来倾听家长倾听孩子理解孩子，消除代沟，老师倾听学生了解学生，满足需求，同学相互倾听增进友谊，互帮互学，怎样倾听(请考生联系自己拟定内容，列举两至三点。)注意：1、 对所给要点，逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。2、 词数150 左右。开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。3、 演讲稿中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。Good afternoon, everyone.The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you dont like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.Thank you for your listening!【名师点评】这是一篇感情真挚、热情洋溢的演讲稿，文中大量运用排比句型，不但准确流畅地表达出题目中所提供的信息，而且体现出作者熟练运用英语的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同结构的复合句式，将倾听的对象及其作用阐述得淋漓尽致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句议论应如何倾听，则更进一步地增强了这篇演说稿的说服力。积累卡片英汉互译好词 1.promote v .促进 2. interpersonal adj.人际的 3. generation gap. 代沟4. open-minded adj. 虚心的好句 1. students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.同学之间应该互相倾听，这样他们可以互相学习和帮助，也会形成友谊。评析：复杂句的组合，被动句的使用。2. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.我想强调的是我们每个人都应该更多的倾听他人。评析：复合句的使用。【湖北卷】【试题回放】假设你是卜曼宜，你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机，因有质量问题，要求该公司更换。请根据下列要点，用英文写一封电子邮件。要点：1. 问题：手机不响铃，不能发短信;该产品已售完，无法更换;型号新，无配件，无法维修。 2.要求：公司应尽快予以更换。注意：1. 词数为100 左右;2. 参考词汇：配件 spare part;3. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好(不计入你所写词数);4.已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。Dear Sir，I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didnt ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.Thank you for your consideration.Sincerely yours,Bu Manyi【名师点评】本文内容要点齐全，语言丰富，结构合理，如头两句说明了购买手机后发现故障的情况，中间部分说明了无法维修而必须让公司更换手机的原委，最后明确提出自己的要求，明白流畅，将题目所提出的要点全部表达清楚，较好的完成了任务。全文以一般过去时为基调，结合主动语态与被动语态，并使用了so, but, therefore 等连接词，使文章结构完整严密。固定短语，如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用，使文章的语言显得地道而精炼。积累卡片英汉互译好词 1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.绝望的 3. consideration n.体谅好句 To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.令我失望的是，他说因为在中国是新款手机，所以没有配件来修理。评析：复杂句的组织; to my disappointment, 常用短语。2007 高考英语满分作文【全国卷II】【试题回放】一家宾馆新开业，为吸引外国宾客，希望在互联网上进行宣传。请你用英语为其写一篇文字介绍。主要内容包括：1.地点：距白山入口处500米;2.房间及价格：单人间(共20间)，100元/天;双人间(共15间)，150元/天;热水淋浴;3.餐饮：餐厅(中、西餐)，咖啡厅(茶、咖啡);4.游泳池：全天免费开放; 5.欢迎预定。注意：1.词数100 左右，开头语已为你写好;2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.【名师点评】本文开门见山，首先点明了主旨。本文最大的特点是应用了很多比较复杂的句式，使文章比较出彩。开头使用了独立结构交代宾馆位置。which 引导的非限制性定语从句的使用也很正确。总地来说，文章句式精炼，是篇不错的满分作文。积累卡片英汉互译好词 1. provide v.提供 2. convenience n.便利好句 All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable.所有这些服务都会给你带来便利，并且非常的愉快。评析：bring great convenience，带来便利。【安徽卷】【试题回放】假如你是李华，美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物，该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。请你给她写封回信，假如你是李华，美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物，该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。请你给她写封回信，主要内容如下：l 表示赞成。l 提出你喜欢的栏目。l 简要说明理由。注意：1. 词数100 左右。2. 新的开头和结尾已为你写好。3. 适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。4. 参考栏目：栏目columnDear Mr. Green,I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say, “culture express” gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, its necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, “blurt out” is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment” is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely cant miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.Well, I cant list more. I really cant wait to read that magazine!Yours faithfully,Li Hua【名师点评】这是一篇满分作文。由于这篇作文的出现，导致了安徽省今年的英语作文分数普遍偏低。仔细分析了这篇文章，写的的确是好，很地道的美式英语，一些词语的大胆使用，让人不得不猜测此人或者是家人可能有过国外生活的经历，否则这么地道标准的英语，可不是一朝一夕所能写出来的。比如说：my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy和trendy 的大胆运用，list, cant wait to 简直是perfect! 况且文章中没有一个错误，不管是书写还是语法。英语能够学到这种程度，不可谓不让人佩服。【江苏卷】【试题回放】2007年4月29日上午10点到11点，全国亿万学生阳光体育活动在各地大中小学校同时进行，江苏省1，100万学生积极参与了这项活动。教育部倡导学生：u 每天锻炼一小时u 健康工作五十年u 幸福生活一辈子请你根据以上提示，用英语准备一份发言稿，向同学们讲述一下阳光体育活动的有关情况，并就高三学生是否需要每天花一小时锻炼，谈谈你的看法及理由。注意：1、 发言稿应包括以上所有信息，要有适当发挥。2、 词数：120 左右。发言稿的开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。3、 参考词汇：阳光体育活动a national student sports program;教育部the Ministry of EducationGood afternoon, everyone,The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10：00a.m.-11:00a.m.on April 29，2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!Thank you!【名师点评】本文的结构十分明晰，同时句式使用得熟练而准确。本文分为三段，前两段叙述，后一段发表观点，典型的作文结构。在句式使用上，作者用法多样，使用了独立结构和虚拟语气，十分出彩。复杂的句式是本文的特点之一。积累卡片英汉互译好词 1.wage v.发动 2.aim v.瞄准 3. advocate v.提倡好句 1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.教育部提倡我们每天做一个小时的运动，能够健康地活50 年。评析：advocate，其后接虚拟语气，可以省略情态动词。2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records.如果我们不进行运动，我们的学习成绩就不会很好。评析：虚拟语气。【重庆卷】【试题回放】据报道，7 岁的美国女孩Amy Bruce 得知自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)后处于极度的痛苦之中，美国抗癌协会(ACS)决定，每当Amy 收到一封慰问信，就给她增加3美分的治疗款。假如你是新华中学的学生李华，请你用英文给Amy写一封慰问信，主要内容包括：自我介绍得知的情况表示鼓励打算为她做什么祝她早日康复注意：1. 信的格式已为你写好2. 信中不得出现你的真实情况。3. 词数100 左右。4. 请在答题卡上作答。Dear Amy,Im Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. Im sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! Im sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.Yours,Li Hua【名师点评】本文依照要求，涵盖了所有要点。文章使用了高中常见的句式，如I am sorry to hear that., It is reported that.等，都比较好。作者对定语从句的使用恰到好处地修饰了文章，行文自然而通顺，值得学习。积累卡片英汉互译好词 1.realize v.意识到 2.promise v.允诺 3.donate v.捐赠好句 1. I am sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.我很遗憾地得知你身患肺癌，给你带来了巨大的痛苦。评析：which 引导限制性定语从句。2. So, stand up and fight against the disease!因此，坚强地与疾病做斗争吧!评析：掷地有声，语言准确。2006 高考英语满分作文【全国卷I】【试题回放】假定你是李华，亚洲冬季运动会将在你居住的地方举办，现正在招募志愿者，你希望成为其中一员。请按要求用英文给组委会写一封信。内容应包括：1.个人情况：年龄，性别，学历 2.个人条件：英语好，爱好体育，善于交际，乐于助人，熟悉本地情况 3.承诺：提供最佳服务注意：词数100 左右，开头语已为你写好;可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯;生词：申请apply (v. ), application (n.)，志愿者volunteerDear Sir / Madam:I was quite excited when I heard the Asian Winter Games will be held in the city I live. My name is Li Hua. I am an 18-year-old boy student in a senior middle school. And I want to be a volunteer for the games. I like English and sports very much. I like making friends and I am ready to help others. I can be a good interpreter in every sports during the time. Hope the games will be a great success. Hope I will be chosen to be one.Yours faithfully,Li Hua【名师点评】这篇文章写得非常流畅，把握了所有要点，同时以“我”为中心，详细说明了自己对志愿者工作的结合，以此来表达自己的决心。由于用词恰当，这种表现就比较充分，具备一定的说服力。词汇和语句的运用也不错。【安徽卷】【试题回放】假设你是李华，作为选派的交流学生在美国某中学学习了一年，寄住在Mr. Brown 家里，刚回到国内。回国后，你发现自己的一本英语词典遗忘在他家，因此给他写了一封信，请他帮助寄回词典。信的主要内容如下：感谢在美国期间他所提供的帮助一本英语词典忘记带回词典是美国老师送的，非常珍贵词典很可能丢在卧室的书架上邮资自己付注意：1、词数100 左右;信的开头和结尾已为你写好。2、可适当增加细节，使行文连贯2、参考词汇：邮资-postageDear Mr. Brown,I have been back, and write this letter to show my thanks. As the exchange student, you makeme feel warm. Welcome to my country ,Ill show you around in turn.However , there exists a problem that I have left my dictionary at your home. I like it very much , for it was a precious gift from my teacher who comes from the U.S. I guess that my book may stay on your shelf in the bedroom .Do you mind if you send my dictionary to me? I will pay for the postage and Ill be very grateful if you show your warmness again.Im eager to receive your reply.Yours,Li hua【名师点评】本文作为信件，首先其格式是正确的。既然是应用文，那么文章的意图就要明确表示出来，本文在表达作者写作意图的时候，情真意切，用词委婉而合理。文章不但使用了定语从句，还采用了疑问句，让句式变化而不呆板。【重庆卷】【试题回放】加拿大高中生David 在互联网Internet 上登出启事notice，希望结识一位中国朋友，以便学习中国的语言，文化culture。假设你是李华，请在看到这则启事后，用英文给David 发一封电子邮件，主要内容包括：你怎样得知David 的愿望你愿意成为他的朋友你打算如何帮助他你盼望他的回复注意：1、电子邮件的格式已为你写好2、字数：100 词左右3、在答题卡上作答Dear David,Im a student from China and have noticed your requirement on line. You would like to search for a Chinese friend to help you get to know China and its culture. Maybe Im your good choice.China is a country that has a long history of 5,000 years. Not only our history ,but also our culture is the access to understand us better.There are so much that I want to know, if you are interested. Ill be looking forward to your reply. Ill show you around our great China if you come to China.Yours sincerely ,Li hua【名师点评】本文的语言非常流畅，我们可以看到，本文虽没有华丽的辞藻，但是语言的组织和层次感很强。同时连词的使用，如not only, but also ,让文章的重点突出，同时也起到了强调和吸引注意的目的。2005 高考英语满分作文全国卷(四川、云南、陕西等地区用)【试题回放】假设你是李华，最近国内一家英文报纸正在讨论北京动物园是否应迁出市区。以下是你所在班级讨论的情况。请你给该报写一封信，反映讨论结果。赞成迁出： 反对迁出：1.游客多，交通堵塞 1.建于1906 年，中外闻名 2.郊区环境好 2.搬迁易造成动物死亡注意：1.词数100 字左右，信的开头已为你写好。2.可根据内容要点适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。3.参考词汇： 郊区suburbDear Editor ,Recently ,in our class there has been a heated discussion about whether the Beijing Zoo should be moved out of the city . Some of my classmates are in favor of the move .They say large crowds of tourists to the zoo will result in traffic jams .They also say that once moved ,animals will have more space and better living conditions in the suburbs .However ,other students are againstthe idea ,saying that the Beijing Zoo, built in 1906 ,has a history of 100 years ,and is wellknown at home and abroad .So it should remain where it is .Whats more ,moving may cause the death of some animals .To move or not ,this is a big decision which has to be made by people in Beijing.Yours truly,Li Hua【名师点评】这篇文章写得还是比较精彩的。要点表达得完整而准确，清楚展示了主题。先提出了文章的主题，进而列出了赞成的观点及其相关的理由，同时在其后又给出了反面的观点，论据十分充