高考英语写作最后冲刺 训练、点评和猜题1（含解析）.doc

2015届高考英语写作最后冲刺 训练、点评和猜题阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。three umbrellassally was a college student in london. she wanted to buy her mother a nice and useful birthday present, but not too expensive.one day after a quick and simple lunch, she went shopping. having looked for half an hour, she came across a shop selling umbrellas at a good price.so she decided to take one. she thought, “mom can carry it when she is wearing clothes of any color.” then she bought a lovely black umbrella and took it to school with her until her class finished. on her way home in the train that evening she felt hungry, so she went to the buffet car. she left the black umbrella above her seat. but when she got back, she found it was gone! sally burst into tears.the other passengers felt very sorry for her and asked what was wrong.when she explained the black umbrella she had bought for her mother had disappeared, and that she had to get off at the next station, the three other passengers asked her for her mothers address so that they could send the umbrella to her in case someone returned it after sally got off the train.the next week, sally got a letter from her mother saying “thank you very much for your lovely presents, but why did you send me three black umbrellas?”写作内容1.以约30个词概括短文的要点;2.然后以约120个词写一篇短文，并包括如下要点:(1)所读故事对你的启发;(2)记叙一个与该故事中sally或陌生人的行为相类似的故事;(3)你对亲人的感恩或对他人善心的感激。写作要求1.在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。3.标题自定。评分标准概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。【思路点拨】 1.概括短文内容：浏览全文再根据文章标题，我们不难发现，这篇文章的主要内容是：文章前四段讲的是：一个名叫sally的大学生为母亲买了一把伞作为生日礼物，可是在火车上给弄丢了；后面两段讲的是：三个陌生乘客给予她的帮助：悄悄给她母亲送去了三把伞；2.记叙一个与该故事中sally或陌生人的行为相类似的故事(两者择其一); 3.你对亲人的感恩或对他人善心的感激(两者择其一)；4.自定标题。【参考答案】love our mother sally, a college student, bought her mother an umbrella as a birthday present but lost it in the train. moved by her kindness and respect for her mother, some passengers in the train later sent her mother three umbrellas. sally loved her mother and remembered her mothers birthday. as a 17-year-old girl, i love my mother very much as well. i send my mother flowers on mothers day. last year, on mothers 45th birthday, i bought my mother a very good comb from store. when i showed it to my mother and told her it was good for her health to comb her hair often, she burst into tears and then smiled to my father and me. never had i imagined that a simple gift would make her so moved. mothers love is the most precious in the world. i think we can show our love for our mother by doing small things. what is most important is to our love every day.【范文评析】1.范文在概括短文内容时，没有直接引用原文中的句子，符合题目设定的要求。一个并列句“sally(人物), a college student(身份), bought her mother an umbrella as a birthday present but lost it in the train(所发生的事情)”和一个简单句“moved by her kindness and respect for her mother(过去分词短语用作原因状语), some passengers in the train later sent her mother three umbrellas(所发生的事情)”就把事情的来龙去脉交代得清清楚楚，很是简洁； 2.“sally loved her mother and remembered her mothers birthday”明确向读者传递了这样的信息：叙述一个与该故事中sally的行为相类似的故事。因此，作者恰到好处地把文章标题定为“i love our mother”。这一段作者特别注意了动词的时态：用了一般现在时和一般过去时。 “as well, i send sb. sth., buy sb. sth. from some place, show sth. to sb., be good for, burst into tears, smile to sb. ”等等词汇的运用读来令人亲切。倒装句“never had i imagined that a simple gift would make her so moved.”更是为文章锦上添花； 3.最后一段使得文章首尾呼应，对文章主题进行了升华。最后一句“what is most important is to our love every day”是神来之笔。附：从另一个角度所写的作文love and get loved some strangers sent sallys mother three umbrellas after they saw sally in tears because she had lost the umbrella she would send her mother as a birthday present. from the story of three umbrellas, we can see that people will love you in return if you give love to others. when i was 16 years old, i was in hospital for a small operation. it was difficult for me to reach out my hands for drinks or food. an old lady who was taking care of her husband in the room often came to my bedside to help me. furthermore, she often told funny stories and made my days there full of joy. she prepared delicious soup for me and her husband. i have been very grateful to her for all that she did. last year, at her 56th birthday, i sent her a big birthday cake and spent a good day at her home. love is a two-way street. love others, and then you will get loved.练习二“no thanksgiving would be no virtue”(没有感恩就没有真正的美德)。如今社会上一些人缺乏感恩之心，少数人甚至在父母年老体弱时都不愿意赡养。请你结合自己的实际，谈几点父母值得你感恩的地方，以及将来你会做些什么来报答父母的养育之恩。注意：1.短文的开头已给出，但不计入词数。2.词数100左右3.感恩：thanksgivingnot only do our parents give us life, but they also give us endless love and support, always sharing our happiness and sorrow. _【思路点拨】 本文考查提纲作为。首先，考生要仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点：结合自己的实际，谈几点父母值得你感恩的地方，以及将来你会做些什么来报答父母的养育之恩；也就是说，本文主要写要学会感恩，主要是对父母感恩，为什么要感谢父母？怎样感谢？这些都要要在文章中表现出来。另外要注意提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。最后，要根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；语言表达要符合英语习惯。【参考答案】not only do our parents give us life, but they also give us endless love and support, always sharing our happiness and sorrow.im very grateful to my parents. they give me so much love and spare no efforts to support me. i still remember once i was seriously ill, they were so worried and almost accompanied me the whole night. now im in senior 3. luckily for me, my parents can understand my stressful condition and often communicate with me with encouraging words. furthermore, they give me enough personal space, which i appreciate so much. what i should do now is to study hard. when i grow up, i will try my best to make my parents live a happy life.练习三感恩，是我们生活中永恒的话题。假设你校正在举行一场有关“感恩”的演讲比赛，请你在“父母、老师、朋友” 中选择一个感恩对象，写一篇英语演讲稿参加比赛。内容要点如下：1.为何感恩；2.如何感恩。注意：1.词数120左右；2.演讲稿中不能出现与本人相关的信息；3.演讲稿的开头与结尾已为你拟好，不计入总词数。good afternoon, everyone! its a great honor to have the opportunity to be with you today. the topic of my speech is “thank you, ” thank you for listening.【思路点拨】 本篇体裁为演讲稿，属于提纲式作文。写好提纲式作文的关键是认真审题和分析所给的提纲，因此考生首先要认真阅读前面的提示，认清写作要求和提纲之间的关系，然后确定文章的主题、文体、人称和时态。根据所给提纲，列出要点，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当。语言力求准确、简洁。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性。考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等。本文根据写作要求应该分成两部分(因为首段已经给出)：第一部分选择一个感恩的对象，阐明感恩的原因 在“父母、老师、朋友” 中选择一个感恩对象，我们有理由相信考生首选的对象就是“父母，尤其是母亲”，因为对“为何感恩母亲，如何感恩母亲”考生有话可说。但是要把“为何感恩母亲”这一部分写好也并非易事。所以考生要有真情实感，不要无病呻吟。第二部分说明感恩的方式 在“如何感恩母亲”方面，考生不妨可以这样来考虑：作为学生，就要用刻苦学习实现梦想来报答母亲；从一些生活小事做起来考虑，我们能为母亲做点什么来感恩母亲等等。【参考答案】good afternoon, everyone! its a great honor to have the opportunity to be with you today. the topic of my speech is “thank you, mum”like many of you, my life has been blessed with a mother who is a source of unconditional love. my mum is an ordinary housewife while i highly appreciate her kind consideration. she keeps me company, cooks me tasty dinners, and makes my room as clean as possible. on top of that, whenever i get upset, she listens to me and comforts me until i have cheered up. im fortunate to have such a caring mother.we know the challenging exam to realize dreams is there for me and you. i appeal to all of us here to work hard for our mums. meanwhile, express your love in return in daily life. either a small talk with mum or a cup of tea for her, and her face will light up.thank you for listening.【范文评析】1.本文第二段的第一句直接指明感恩的对象，并运用短语：like many of you，引起大伙的共鸣。在这一段中同时又运用高级词汇：be blessed with(幸运地享有)，a source of unconditional love(无条件爱的源泉)，keep sb. company(陪伴某人)，on top of(最重要的是)等。全段共五句话，复合句、并列句和简单句三种句式交替使用，充分彰显了作者驾驭语言的深厚功底。即使是简单句写得也不简单：“she keeps me company, cooks me tasty dinners, and makes my room as clean as possible”用三个“动词+宾语+宾语补足语”的结构形成排比，让读者朗朗上口，读起来感觉到气势恢宏。这一段最后，用一句话总结了对母亲的感恩之情，为下文进行铺垫。2.最后一段中讲“如何感恩母亲”。也同样使用高级短语诸如：appeal to sb. to do sth.(呼吁某人做某事)，in return(回报)，light up(呈现高兴的情绪)等等。3.这是一篇演讲稿，本来应该不求句子有多复杂，主要是能够使听众能够理解，产生共鸣就行，但是范文大部分的句子还是比较长而复杂，比如“on top of that, whenever i get upset(时间状语从句), she listens to me and comforts me until i have cheered up(时间状语从句)”到含有两个从句，口头演讲时，不太适宜。猜 题time to give thankswhen it comes to thanksgiving, turkey may be the first thing that comes to mind. its the right picture, but its not complete.celebrated on the fourth thursday in november every year, thanksgiving day is a time for thanksgiving and feasts. its about expressing your gratitude to the important people and all the good things in your life.americans celebrate thanksgiving with much warmth and keep many traditional customs. here we introduce two of the rules americans typically follow on this day.1. time for prayers and paying backthanksgiving day has been associated with prayers in church and in homes for centuries. attending church prayer services in the morning is the first step of many celebrators on thanksgiving day. the churches provide worship (礼拜) services and organize special events for the occasion.before thanksgiving meals, some families gather together and read prayers to thank god for his kindness and the gifts he has bestowed upon (给予) them in the form of friends and family.some people also do voluntary community work on this day, as a way of paying back.2. family reunions and showing gratitudelike chinas spring festival, preparing a big meal and bringing the family together at home is a long-standing tradition of thanksgiving. distances dont really matter as relatives return home to be with their family, no matter how far away.【写作内容】1.以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。2.以约120个词谈谈你对是时候感恩了的想法，内容包括：(1)你认为我们中国人有没有必要过“感恩节”？为什么？(2)以你自己的经历或者身边的人为例，阐述重视感恩的必要性；(3)总结你的观点。【写作要求】1.作文中可以使用实例来支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容论述，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。【评分标准】概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。【思路点拨】 任务型写作要求考生阅读一篇短文，然后完成两项任务：使用约30个词概括要点；使用约120个词写一篇符合要求的短文。这一题型旨在考查考生“用英语获取信息、处理信息、传达信息的能力，分析问题、解决问题的能力以及用英语进行表达的能力”，即“综合语言运用能力”。因此，本篇写作有下列重点需要考生认真思考，加以解决：1.概括短文内容：浏览全文再根据文章大小标题，我们不难发现，这篇文章的主要内容是：西方传统节日感恩节的习俗以及介绍了美国人在节日期间所要遵守的两条规则。2.你认为我们中国人有没有必要过“感恩节”(根据下面的任务判断：肯定有必要)？为什么？ 3.以你自己的经历或者身边的人为例，阐述重视感恩的必要性；4.总结你的观点。【参考答案】this passage is mainly about the customs of a western traditional festival, thanksgiving day, which mainly includes the two rules that americans usually abide by during the festival.after reading the passage, i had a better understanding of thanksgiving day. in my opinion, since the festival has a lovely and healthy theme, why not do as the americans do? dont you think giving thanks to things and people around us is very necessary? we cant deny it is a good chance to spread kindness and consideration.take myself for example. becau