2018广东高考英语备考遵循英语思维规律,修正习作行文表达课件.pptx

2018广东高考英语备考遵循英语思维规律 修正习作行文表达 目录 一 汉语回文诗与英语的直线思维 顶针修辞 顶真 顶针 亦称联珠 蝉联 是一种修辞方法 是指上句的结尾与下句的开头使用相同的字或词 用以修饰两句子的声韵的方法 例如 1 归来见天子 天子坐明堂 出自 木兰辞 2 军书十二卷 卷卷有爷名 出自 木兰辞 3 忽闻海上有仙山 山在虚无缥缈间 出自 长恨歌 一 汉语回文诗与英语的直线思维 理想是石 敲出星星之火 理想是火 点燃熄灭的灯 理想是灯 照亮夜行的路 理想是路 引你走到黎明 饥寒的年代里 理想是温饱 温饱的年代里 理想是文明 离乱的年代里 理想是安定 安定的年代里 理想是繁荣 一 汉语回文诗与英语的直线思维 苏轼 赏花 回文诗 赏花苏轼赏花归去马如飞 去马如飞酒力微 酒力微醒时已暮 醒时已暮赏花归 Conclusion1 英语语言思维类似于回文诗 即 从已知信息推进新的信息 达到行文连贯的效果 一 汉语回文诗与英语的直线思维 即时练习 运用 从已知信息推进新的信息 的直线思维修正下列句子 1 PresidentTrumpsteppedofftheplane Journalistsimmediatelysurroundedhim 2 Wehaveanoldmusicalinstrument Peoplecallitaclavichord SomeonemadeitinGermanyin1681 PresidentTrumpsteppedofftheplane Hewasimmediatelysurroundedbyjournalists Wehaveanoldmusicalinstrument Itiscalledaclavichord ItwasmadeinGermanyin1681 大声朗读下面短文 关注红色 新信息 和绿色 已知信息 词语 感受英语 接力式 思维模式的推进 二 接力式 思维推进模式 TheSnakeFestivalEveryyearonthefirstThursdayinMaythesmallvillageofCoculloinItalyseesthousandsofvisitors TheyareallarrivingtoseetheannualSnakeFestival ThefestivalisheldonSaintDominic sDay StDominiclivedinthetowninthe11thcentury Atthattimethereweremanysnakesinthevillageandmanypeoplediedofsnakebite SaintDomenicgotridofthesnakesandthepeopleofCoculloholdthisfestivaleveryyeartorememberhim Forsomeweeksbeforethefestival peoplecollectsnakesandthen onStDominic sDay theyputallthesnakesonastatueofStDominic Atmiddaytheycarrythestatueandthesnakesinaprocessionthroughthevillage Atthefrontoftheprocessionisabandplayingmusicandatthebackarewomenincostumewhogivesweetsandbreadshapedlikesnakestothepeoplewhoarewatching Attheendoftheprocessiontherearefireworks B F F D C C B A A E E D Conclusion2 接力式 思维推进模式ABC C D D E E F 二 接力式 思维推进模式 假定你是李华 你校英文报 外国文化 栏目拟刊登介绍美国节日风俗和中学生生活的短文 请给美国朋友彼得写信约稿 要点如下 1 栏目介绍 2 稿件内容3 稿件长度 约400字4 交稿日期 6月28日前 2015年全国I卷 即时练习 注意红色词语所存在的问题 从连贯和地道上分析原因 并运用 接力式 思维模式修正习作行文表达 DearPeter I dliketoaskyoutowriteanarticleforourschool sEnglishnewspaper InordertomakestudentsknowmoreaboutAmericanculture ourschoolhasdecidedtosetupacolumntopublishsomearticleswrittenbyAmericanstudents Hearingthenews Iwasveryhappy Icouldn twaittotellyouaboutit Ithinkit sagoodopportunitythatyouareeagertoget Herearesomemorerequirementsaboutthearticle Firstly youareexpectedtowriteaboutAmericanfestivalsandmiddleschoolstudent severydaylife Mostimportantofall yourarticleshouldbefinishedbeforeJune28th Inmyopinion bydoingsonotonlycanyouimproveyourwritingskillsbutalsoyoucanbecomepopularinChina I mlookingforwardtohearingfromyousoon Yours LiHua 二 接力式 思维推进模式 二 接力式 思维推进模式 Problem 写作主题不明确 拓展过多与要点无关的内容 InordertomakestudentsknowmoreaboutAmericanculture ourschoolhasdecidedtosetupacolumntopublishsomearticleswrittenbyAmericanstudents Hearingthenews Iwasveryhappy Icouldn twaittotellyouaboutit Ithinkit sagoodopportunitythatyouareeagertoget Solution 直接删掉 把重点放在与写作要点相关的拓展上 二 接力式 思维推进模式 Herearesomemorerequirementsaboutthearticle Firstly youareexpectedtowriteaboutAmericanfestivalsandmiddleschoolstudent severydaylife Mostimportantofall yourarticleshouldbefinishedbeforeJune28th Inmyopinion bydoingsonotonlycanyouimproveyourwritingskillsbutalsoyoucanbecomepopularinChina Problems 不断切换主语 每句话都由新信息推进 句间缺乏逻辑关联 漏要点 稿件长度 没提及 Inournewspaperthereisacolumnnamed ForeignCulture Fromthecolumn ourreaderscangettoknowmoreaboutforeigncountriesandcultures Therefore weneedanarticleaboutAmericanfestivalsandcustomsandthelifeofAmericanmiddleschoolstudents Forexample foryourschoollife wewouldliketoknowwhetheryouhavehomeworktodobackhome Besides we dgetadeeperunderstandingofyourschoollifeifyoucansharemoreabouttheafter schoolactivitiesinyourarticle Bytheway wepreferthearticletobeabout400wordslongandwewonderifyoucouldsendittousby28thofJune 二 接力式 思维推进模式 Solution 采取 接力式 思维推进 由 旧信息 带出 新信息 A B C B C D E E E D D Conclusion3 接力式 思维推进模式 用旧信息带出新信息 保持文章语意一致和行文连贯 二 接力式 思维推进模式 DearPeter I dlikeyoutoaskyoutowriteanarticleforourschool sEnglishnewspaper Inournewspaperthereisacolumnnamed ForeignCulture Fromthecolumn ourreaderscangettoknowmoreaboutforeigncountriesandcultures Therefore weneedanarticleaboutAmericanfestivalsandcustomsandthelifeofAmericanmiddleschoolstudents Forexample foryourschoollife wewouldliketoknowwhetheryouhavehomeworktodobackhome Besides we dgetadeeperunderstandingofyourschoollifeifyoucansharemoreabouttheafter schoolactivitiesinyourarticle Bytheway wepreferthearticletobeabout400wordslongandwewonderifyoucouldsendittousby28thofJune Wewillreallyappreciateitifyoucouldhelpus Yours LiHua 三 交替式 思维推进模式 大声朗读下面短文 关注红色 新信息 和绿色 已知信息 词语 感受英语 交替式 思维模式的推进 Smokingcigarettesisharmfultoyourhealth Experimentsshowthatcigarettesmokingcancausecancer Besidesthemostseriousandterribledisease illness cancer cigarettesmokingalsocancauseotherhealthproblems Forexample itcangiveonea smoker scough Finally studieshaveshownitiseasyforcigarettesmokerstocatchcolds Whetheryougetanunimportantcoldorterriblekiller cancer smokingisharmful Isitworthit A B C A B1 A B2 A B3 A B4 A B5 Conclusion4 交替式 思维推进模式AB C AB1 AB2 AB3 AB4 AB5 三 交替式 思维推进模式 假如你是李华 你的英国朋友Edward正在学习汉语 希望你推荐一个适合他学习汉语的网站 请你根据以下内容 给他回复邮件 推荐网站 网站内容 1 中文情景对话 中国风俗 中文电影 中文歌曲 成语和唐诗等 2 有在线教师答疑解惑 即时练习 注意红色词语所存在的问题 从连贯和地道上分析原因 并运用 交替式 思维模式修正习作行文表达 DearEdward I mgladtohearfromyou KnowingthatyouarestudyingChineseandwantaChineselearningwebsite I whichIrecommendtoyou First youcanfindalotoflessonsonlineincludingChinesedialoguesinasituation Chinesecustomsandidioms Inaddition Chinesemovies songs Tangpoemsandsoonarenoexception What smore ifyouhaveanyquestions youcanturntotheonlineteacherforhelp Andyoumustbeamazedthatallofthesearefree SoIthinkitissuitableforyou Idohopethatyouwillfindthiswebsitehelpfultoyouandyoucanmakegreatprogress Yours LiHua 三 交替式 思维推进模式 DearEdward I mgladtohearfromyou KnowingthatyouarestudyingChineseandwantaChineselearningwebsite I whichIrecommendtoyou Problem 动词使用主次不分 重点意思表达不突出 Solution 主要动词为recommend 应作为句子的谓语 DearEdward I mgladtohearfromyou Fromyourletter I veknownthatyouarewantingawebsiteforyourstudyofChinese Nowpleaseallowmetorecommendausefulwebsitetoyou 三 交替式 思维推进模式 First youcanfindalotoflessonsonlineincludingChinesedialoguesinasituation Chinesecustomsandidioms Inaddition Chinesemovies songs Tangpoemsandsoonarenoexception What smore ifyouhaveanyquestions youcanturntotheonlineteacherforhelp Andyoumustbeamazedthatallofthesearefree SoIthinkitissuitableforyou Problem 每句话都由新信息推进 语意不连贯 逻辑不一致 TisveryhelpfulforChinesebeginnerbecauseitoffersalotofsituationlessons suchasstories fablesanddialogues Moreinterestingly thewebsiteprovidesmanyfreeandvariousmovies songsandancientpoemsforyoutoappreciateinyourstudyofChinese Recentlyonthewebsite thereisaninteractivefunctionforChinese learningusers Soyoucanturntoitforhelpifyouareinanydifficulty 三 交替式 思维推进模式 Solution 用 交替式 思维模式 以thewebsite推进全文 A A B1 A B2 A B3 A Idohopethatyouwillfindthiswebsitehelpfultoyouandyoucanmakegreatprogress Problem 结束语表达不够地道 Solution 尊重文化 提升内涵 点到为止 Iwishyouenjoyyourselfinyourstudyandyou llbecomemoreandmoreinterestedinChinese 三 交替式 思维推进模式 DearEdward I mgladtohearfromyou Fromyourletter I veknownthatyouarewantingawebsiteforyourstudyofChinse Nowpleaseallowmetorecommendausefulwebsitetoyou TisveryhelpfulforChinesebeginnersbecauseitoffersalotofsituationlessons suchasstories fablesanddialogues Moreinterestingly thewebsiteprovidesmanyfreeandvariousmovies songsandancientpoemsforyoutoappreciateinyourstudyofChinese Recentlyonthewebsite thereisaninteractivefunctionforChinese learningusers Soyoucanturntoitforhelpifyouareinanydifficulty Iwishyouenjoyyourselfinyourstudyandyou llbecomemoreandmoreinterestedinChinese Yours LiHua 三 交替式 思维推进模式 Conclusion4 交替式 思维推进模式AB C AB1 AB2 AB3 AB4 AB5 四 挑战自我 冲击写作满分 假定你是李华 是你校 读书俱乐部 的负责人 计划在下个月组织 英语读书节 请给你的美国笔友Tony写信 介绍本次活动 并请他为本次读书节推荐阅读书目 注意 1 词数100左右 2 可以适当增加细节 以使行文连贯 3 信的开头和结尾已给出 不计入总词数 2017年佛山二模 DearTony I mLiHua inchargeoftheReadingClubinmyschool Iamwritingforthesakeofmakingyouconsciousofthe EnglishReadingFestival Thefestival aimedatstimulatingstudents interestinEnglishreading willbeheldnextmonthbytheclub Wehavedesignedscoresofamazingactivitieswhichmustappealtoeveryone Englishbooksprovidedbythelocallibrarywillbeavailableinourcampus allowingusstudentstogetaccesstothewonderfulworld Ontopofit wewillofferstudentsastagetosharefeelingsandrecommendbookstoeachother IhavefaiththattheirabilitytoadmireEnglishliteraturewillbeimprovedandtheirmindwillberefreshed Insummary thisfestivalwillbenefitstudentsagreatdealwithfullpreparationsbeingmade Wouldyoubesokindastorecommendsomebooksofhighqualitytousstudents Lookingforwardtoyourearlyreply Yours LiHua 四 挑战自我 冲击写作满分 挑战自我 修正这篇20分的作文 冲击写作满分 DearTony I mLiHua inchargeoftheReadingClubinmyschool Iamwritingforthesakeofmakingyouconsciousofthe EnglishReadingFestival 四 挑战自我 冲击写作满分 Problem 词组套用显冗长 forthesakeof使用不当 Solution 开门见山 表达写作目的 符合英语直线思维 DearTony I mLiHua inchargeoftheReadingClubofmyschool I mwritingtotellyouaboutthe EnglishReadingFestival andaskforyourrecommendation 四 挑战自我 冲击写作满分 Thefestival aimedatstimulatingstudents interestinEnglishreading willbeheldnextmonthbytheclub Wehavedesignedscoresofamazingactivitieswhichmustappealtoeveryone Englishbooksprovidedbythelocallibrarywillbeavailableinourcampus allowingusstudentstogetaccesstothewonderfulworld Ontopofit wewillofferstudentsastagetosharefeelingsandrecommendbookstoeachother IhavefaiththattheirabilitytoadmireEnglishliteraturewillbeimprovedandtheirmindwillberefreshed Problems 不断切换主语 句间逻辑关联不够紧密 四 挑战自我 冲击写作满分 Solution 灵活运用 接力式 和 交替式 思维模式 以thefestival为 A 推进全文 Thefestivaltobeheldnextmonthbytheclubistomeetstudents interestinEnglishreading Inthefestival therewillbescoresofamazingactivities whichmustappealtoeveryone Forexample thelocallibrarywillprovideavarietyofEnglishbooksforthefestivaltocreateawonderfulworldofbooksforustoexperiencein Besides wewillbeofferedacheerfulstagetosharefeelingsandrecommendbookstoeachother Duringthisfestival I msurethatwewillbenefitalot whetheracademicallyormentally A A B1 B2 A B3 A 四 挑战自我 冲击写作满分 Insummary thisfestivalwillbenefitstudentsagreatdealwithfullpreparationsbeingmade Wouldyoubesokindastorecommendsomebooksofhighqualitytousstudents Inaword thisfestivalisamatterofimportanceforourschool Ihopeforyourhelp Wouldyoubesokindastorecommendsomevaluablebookstous Anotherversion 直截了当 再次请求帮