中考英语作文题型分析与例文评析.doc

中考英语作文题型分析与例文评析：命题作文命题作文即给出一个统一的题目，限定考生写作的具体范围，要求考生就同一主题展开叙述或评论。写好命题作文的关键是紧扣主题、立意明确、观点清晰。 命题作文例1To be a lovely Shanghainese(2003年上海市英语中考题)审题：该题的重点在于阐述作为一个可爱的上海人，我们关键应怎样做？在2003年的考生作文中，有一部分同学发生了严重的偏题，把描述重点放在形容上海是怎样的一个大都市，因此失分很多。由此看来，审题的准确是非常重要的。学生作文：Shanghai is developing quickly everyday. Quite a few foreigners come to visit Shanghai. As the hosts of Shanghai, we must be lovely Shanghaineses to tell the visitors that Shanghai is an international city. To be a lovely Shanghainese, first, we should do our best to make the city more beautiful to show our enthusiasm. Next, we should be kind and friendly to everyone. We must do so to make our guests fell our zeal. Finally, we should study and work hard to rise our ability. Shanghai is developing and we should make progress to follow the epoch.教师评析：该篇作文行文流畅，结构清晰，以“first，Next，Finally”的结构描述，层次感很强。不定式的恰当运用体现了考生较好的语法功底。教师拟评分：9分 例2Four years school life审题：该题要求考生对四年的初中生活进行回顾和总结，适合以夹叙夹议的方式来写作。（此外，从情感教育的角度来看，阅卷老师总希望读到考生回忆自己美好、快乐的初中生活，而不是讨厌自己的母校、老师、同学等消极情绪的体现。）学生作文：Ive been in my middle school for four years. Four years school life plays an important role in my life. I enjoy making friends, getting knowledge and having interesting time in my school. I have also made friendship with lots of classmates, and I have also been taught different lessons by lots of different patient teachers. I have grown up a lot in the past four years. I will never forget my four years school life.教师评析：整篇作文非常明快、流畅，体现了考生对母校依依不舍的情怀。由于是对初中生活的回顾和总结，考生恰当地选择以现在完成时作为主要的时态来强调影响和结果,文中plays an important role这一词组和被动语态的正确运用也体现了考生良好的词汇和语法功底。教师拟评分：10分中考英语作文题型分析与例文评析：应用文 应用文写作 应用文主要包括信函、电邮、日记、通知、广告、电话等形式，它要求考生不仅能表达题中的主要内容，还能够正确地运用各种文本格式进行规范的书写，这也是 考生对于英语传统文化了解多少的反映。因此，考生应在临考前系统地复习各种文本格式以及打电话的规范用语，以做到处变不惊、百战百胜。例3写一封信给你在云南省西双版纳市的笔友李帆，告诉他你很愿意与他交朋友，并邀请他到上海来旅行。 审题：该题要求考生以规范的信件格式来书写，并把题中所出现的信息点都涵概在内。建议考生可把题目中的信息点都一一划出，以免发生遗漏。 学生作文：LifanXishuangbannaYunnan Province ChinaMay 25th, 2004Dear Lifan, Thank you for your letter. Im glad to be your pen-friend. We are the same years old, but we were born in different places. In my imagination, Xishuangbanna is a very beautiful place. There are a lot of plants and animals. You know I look forward to visiting Xishuangbanna. Would you like to come to Shanghai? Id like to invite you to Shanghai in summer holiday. Shanghai is also a beautiful place. It is a modern city. There are a lot of interesting places such as the Oriental Pearl TV Tower, the Bund, and Nanjing Road Walkway. If you come here, I will show you around Shanghai. You can live at my home and my mother will cook you much delicious food. Lets be best friends!Yours sincerely, Xiaomin教师拟评分：9分例4写一篇题为“A Visit To_”的日记。审题：该题为半命题式作文。考生除了要注意运用正确的日记格式，还可根据自己的经验和熟悉程度来选择、确定文章的主题.学生作文：May 25th, 2004 sunny A Visit To Jinmao BuildingJinmao Building has Chinese traditional styles and it is also modern. It is the signal construction of Shanghai. It is located in the center of Lujiazui Financial Area. Our family visited Jinmao Building today. The traffic there is very convenient. You can got here by tunnel and No.2 subway. And if you live near it, you can walk there just like our family. We went to the eighty-eighth floor of Jinmao Building. We saw the whole view of Shanghai there. Please come to Jinmao Building, and you will get some unexpected gains there.教师评析：整篇作文主题明确，对于金茂大厦的描述也较具体，文中“the signal construction”一词是全文的亮点。但整篇文章的层次不够清晰，句子也以简单句为主，对于参观这一动词的阐述还不够充分。教师拟评分：8分中考英语作文题型分析与例文评析：看图写话 看图写话 看图写话是初中英语作文常考的一种形式，但随着牛津版教材的大量应用，学生的写作能力有了较大的提高，因此中考作文的要求和难度也相应提高。所以，在中 考作文中继续出现简单的叙事型看图写话的可能性很小，但有可能会提供给考生一些具有寓意的漫画或图片，要求考生从中发现问题、提出自己的观点，这对考生的 逻辑思维能力和英语语言的娴熟运用都提出了更高的要求。审题：这幅漫画蕴涵了一个深刻的主题即战争与和平，这与当今世界的热点问题密切相关，它不仅考核考生是否能流畅地表达自己的观点，更需要考生站在人文关怀的高度来观察整个世界。学生作文：A Represent of Freedom and PeaceAlmost everyday we can see there are always a huge number of pigeons enjoying the sunbath in some large squares, but do you often care what a white pigeon stands for? That is peace. For hundreds of years, people always regard pigeons as a represent of freedom and peace. That is because of not only its lovely pure figure, but also its great passion to the outside world. Till now, I still cant help thinking of such a picture: In Iraq, a boy was watching a white pigeon over his head. The background was full of wounded solders and guns. Thus, this lovely white pigeon was contrastive to this iced background and gave people a deep consideration. Suddenly, athought comes into my mind: Why there have been so many wars in the world just for someones own interest? Why cant people live like as mall pigeon with freedom? I hope there will not be wars, FOREVER!教师评析：应该说，要把这篇看图作文写好是有相当难度的，但考生以非常流畅的笔调从鸽子联想到自由与和平，再联想到发生在伊拉克的战争。文风成熟老练，这在初中生的作文中是难能可贵的。教师拟评分：10分例6审题：该图要求考生先看懂漫画，对它进行清晰的描述，同时根据其隐藏的寓意提出自己的观点，如在此图中应关注树木被砍伐而提出环保的重要性。学生作文：Seeing this picture, we know that these trees have been cut down. But as a very little baby in the picture, he must be puzzled. He will ask: What are these? Are these trees? Of course, in our imagination, trees must be tall, strong and green enough. Actually, his question shows humans a problem that is worth thinking about. The covering rate of the forest in the world has kept decreasing these years and it caused a lot of problems on environment. As we all know, trees are very important in our life. They can make the air fresher, reduce natural disasters and soon. So I appeal: Dont cut down trees. Let s make our earth greener for our later generation. Dont let the children think trees are only roots!教师评析：整篇作文结构清晰，全文分三段，第一段详细地描述漫画的内容；第二段阐述其蕴涵的寓意即环保对于世界和后代们的重要性；第三段提出作者的号召，使文章的结尾明快、有力！教师拟评分：10分提示性作文：就是给出一个标题或无标题，给出具体的内容，规定一定的字数，让考生写出作文。由于这类作文已经规定了文章的中心思想和主要内容，因此考生可以不再列出提纲，只要把注意力集中在如何正确、完整地用英文词句表达出中心思想和内容就可以了。 写好提示性作文应注意的事项： 1、仔细审题，明确要求。对所给信息反复阅读，弄清这个题目要表达什么，然后对所给信息进行整理、组织，按照自己的写作思路使之条理化。 2、确保语言精炼。在写作过程中，考生应时刻提醒自己按照已给出的信息点去写，不必有太多的发挥。但也不必按照信息点去逐句翻译。用自己熟悉的短语、句型去体现要点。掌握好文章的长度，不要字数过多或过少。例题分析一、汉语提示根据中文提示和英文提示词语，写一篇意思连贯、符合逻辑的短文。所给英文提示词语必须用上。字数6070左右。 1、昨天晚上我和妈妈出去散步。 2、在路上我遇到了一个外国人。3、他向我询问去温泉饭店（theHotSpringHotel）的路。4、我告诉他沿着路往前走，在第三个转弯处向左拐就能看见饭店。5、他非常感谢我，我也为能帮他而感到高兴。 提示词语：go out for a walk, on the road, the way to, walk along, on the left, thank for, be happy that（分析）写作指导：根据提示我们了解到这是一篇记叙文，所以考生应马上想到时间（yesterday evening），地点（on the road），人物（I, my mother and a foreigner），事件（howto show the way）。其次观察信息点，我们确定这篇文章应用过去式来表达。然后，确定这个事件应用第一人称来叙述。最后，按照信息点合理组织文章，别忘用上提示词语。 （例文） Yesterday evening,I went out for a walk with my mother.On the road,we met a foreigner. He asked me the way to the Hot Spring Hotel.I told him to walk along the road and take the third turning on the left, then he could see the hotel.He thanked me very much for my help.I was happy that I could help him.二、英语提示你收到一封咨询信，请你以旅行社工作人员的身份完成任务。Dear Ace Travel, Im Li Ming, from the east of China. For the coming winter vacation, my family and I want to spend our vacation in a foreign city for ten days. We would like to go somewhere not only warm but also interesting. We dont mind how far we have to go. It has to be a place where we can swim everyday, and it would be nice if our hotel is not expensive but clean and comfortable. We like to pay no more than $ 5,000 for the trip. Could you please give us your suggestions for vacation spots? Thanks a lot.Yours, Li Ming请你根据来信，从下列所给的地方中选择一个或两个符合Li Ming要求的地方，向他提出建议。（80字左右）Tokyo, Sydney, Hawaii, Shanghai写作指导：这篇作文结合了提示性作文和应用文的写作要求。首先，我们要读懂英语提示的内容，也就是那封咨询信的内容。其次，我们要知道书信的写作方法。针对本道题，还要注意，这封信是以旅行社工作人员的身份来写的。最后，还要注意咨询信后的要求-从下列所给的地方中选择一个或两个符合Li Ming要求的地方，向他提出建议及字数限制。下面，我们来看看范文是怎么写的。One Possible version: Dear Li Ming, Im Gina. Its my pleasure to give you some suggestions for your vacation spots. According to your letter, I think either Sydney or Hawaii is the best choice because they are both warm and interesting. There are some inexpensive hotels, which are clean and comfortable in both places. Whats more, you can enjoy sunshine, walk on the beach and swim every day. Besides, there are many good museums in Sydney. （Its also a wonderful place for shopping. ）And if you go to Hawaii, you could have a visit to Pearl Harbor, which is quite educational and historical. （And you can also enjoy exotic dances. ） Thats just my idea. I hope it would give you some help.Yours, Gina对于，提示作文的写法大家都会了吗？不管什么作文的写作，都要要求我们对英语的词汇、短语以及常用的表达方法有一定的积累。所以，在学习写作的同时，不要放松对以上几个方面的复习。英语写作是中考中检测学生语言应用能力的最重要部分。提高中考写作水平，需要有效的训练。正确无误的造句能力和各种文体的写作技巧，两者缺一不可。正确无误的造句能力这得从初中一开始就抓起，首先可以从替换单词、扩词造句训练，做到有效积累，扩大视野，灵活运用。如：如何修饰一个最简单、最常用的“说”？我们就可以写出许多：say some thing gladly（merrily excitedly sadly kindly worriedly loudly sweetl ytimidly bravely confidently）还可说say some thing in a friendly way.替换了一个副词，生动地表达了说话时的不同心情。扩词有：play footballplay foot ball in the play groundplay football in the play ground with my friendsplay football in the play ground with my friends after school.对其中的动词我们还可替换成playgames，play the piano等，后面的状语都可以有相应的更换。又如：a friendmy friendmy close friendmy close friend named Mary.以此类推，我们可以模仿着进行扩句训练。The students love life.The studentsof Class One love enjoyable school life verymuch.为了避免句型的重复，我们还可以转换不同的句型，来表达同一内容。如：The dictionary is so big that it doesnt fit in tomy pocket.The dic ti on ary is too big to fit into my pocket.The dictionary is not small enough to fit into my pocket.这样训练写句的方法，可以帮助学生克服心里先想好中文，然后逐字翻译的不良习惯，从而造的句子符合英语表达的习惯。在平时的学习中，我们可以试着用课文中所学的句型和词汇，设计一些中译英句子，虽然对初中学生有一定的难度，但长此以往可以有效地掌握正确的句子结构，巩固所学词汇，做到活学活用，为中考作文作好铺垫。在牛津7B开始，我们针对所学的句型和学生日常学习生活的真实情景，设计了许多中译英，如：1.尽管我的爷爷奶奶已80多岁了，他们还能每天早上坚持锻炼。(although)2.你与其他