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TOEFLWRITING GUZHENG BETTY KOO LIVE COM 综合写作 独立写作 形式时间字数题材 reading listening writing20min180 225academic writing30min400non academic 题型讲解 综合写作 独立写作 综合写作 近年来 韩剧 风靡大江南北 尤其在女性观众中大受欢迎 然而 看韩剧对女性智商 情商 以及家庭生活来说害处很多 第一 女性过多看韩剧会导致智商下降 因为韩剧大多叙事简单 观 看起来并不需要动脑子 很多结局在 始就可以猜测到 长期看韩 剧导致女性脑子惰性增 长 懒于思考 智商降低 第二 女性看韩剧同时会影响情商 由于韩剧女主角大多以犯而受到男主角喜爱 从而得到完美的爱情 女性观看之后会 犯二始模 仿 因而在现实生活中格格不入 人际交往受挫 第三 观看韩剧还是有害夫妻感情 有很多家庭中因为 女 方看韩剧 而导致 矛盾 这些 女性 用韩剧中不现实的爱情观要求男性 还有的要求丈夫整容成男主 角的样 子 导致感情破裂 头段 ThesisStatement 分论点1 subpoint1 分论点2 subpoint2 分论点3 subpoint3 READING LISTENING 总论点 韩剧有害 韩剧没害 分论点1 女性过多看韩剧会导看韩剧不会导致智商致智商下降下降 分论点2 女性看韩剧会同时影响情商 不会影响情商 分论点3 观看韩剧还是有害夫观看韩剧不会损害夫妻感情妻感情 独立写作 Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement Parentsarethebestteachers Usespeci creasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer Itisimportantforfamilieshavemealstogetherregularly Technologymakespeople slivessimplerratherthanmakespeople slivesmorecomplicated Theenvironmentalissueistoocomplextobesolvedbytheindividuals 头段 分论点1 分论点2 结尾段 Youngpeopletodayaremorelikelytohelpothersthanyoungpeopleinthepast Theworldisrapidlydeveloping andcorrespondingly peopleareprogressinggenerationaftergeneration Currently theyoungpeoplehavebroaderhorizon moreenrichedknowledgeandgreaterambitionthantheirpredecessorshad butunfortunately theyarealsogrowingmoreindi erenttowardothersthanthepeopleinthepast Tobeginwith thecurrentgenerationofyoungpeopleisevenbusierthanonecouldimagine whichleavesthemlittletimetohelpothersout WhenIwasinhighschool mygreatestfriendSophiahadahardtimedealingwithhermathematics whichIhappenedtobepro cientin AsmuchasIwantedtohelpherwiththedi cultmathproblemsafterclass Imyselfwasoccupiedbysomanyotherthings everydayafterschoolIneededtogototheEnglishtrainingclub andduringtheweekendmymotherhadarrangedthecookingclass computerskill trainingclassandsoon becauseshethoughtitwouldbebetterformeifIcouldbemoreversatile Buthowaboutthesituationinthepast Accordingtomymom whentheywereatschool thecompetitionwasnotreallyso erce sostudentswerenotrequiredtobeengagedinsomanyextracurricularactivitiestosharpentheircompetitiveedge Withmorefreetime ofcoursetheycouldcaremoreaboutsomeoneelseotherthanthemselves Second theprevalenceoftheInternetisalsoareasonwhyyoungpeopletodayarelesslikelytohelpothers Whyisthisso TodayadolescentsspendsomuchtimesearchingandreceivinginformationontheInternet andsomeoftheinformationisnotonlywidelyspreadbutalsoprofoundlyin uentialtoyoungsters Forexample 3yearsagothispieceofnewswasalltherageonline anoldgrannyfelldownwhenshewascrossingtheroad Aniceyoungmansawherfalling rantowardsherandtriedtopullherup However thegrannyrefusedhimandcriedoutallofasudden claimingthatitwasthisyoungmanwhopushedherdown Sheevenaskedfora compensationof1 000yuanfromtheman AfterthisnewswasreleasedontheInternet therewasaheateddiscussiononline andthemajorityoftheyoungstersagreedthat nowthatbeinggoodisnotappreciatedandrewarded Iwouldratherbeaby passer Asyoucansee withmoreofthenegativeeventstakingplaceeveryday andwiththerapidspreadofthenegativenews youngpeoplearelessboldtoo ertheirhelptothosewhoareinneed Myideaisthusquiteclearthattheyoungsterstodayarelessfriendlythantheyoungpeopleinthepast BUTTHEREAREOTHERWAYS Therearecertainconsiderationsorfactorsthateveryonetakesintoaccountinarelationship Peoplemaylookforhonesty altruism understanding loyalty beingthoughtfuletc Everyonewouldmoreorlesswishthatthepersonsheisdealingwithhassomeofthesevirtuesabove Puttingtheminanorderaccordingtotheirimportance however canbeverysubjectiveandrelative Whensomeoneaskshim herselfthequestion WhatdoI considertobethemostimportantthinginmyrelationship theanswerdependsonalotoffactorssuchashowhis herearlierrelationshipswere Afterstatingthateveryone sopinioncanbedi erentaboutthis formehonesty inotherwords alwaystellingthetruthisthemostimportantconsiderationinarelationship Oppositeofthisisinarguablylyingandifsomeoneneedstolie eithers heishidingsomethingorisafraidoftellingmesomething Inanyrelationshipofmine Iwouldwishthat rstofall theperson I mdealingwithishonest Eventhoughs hethinksthats hedidsomethingwrongthatIwouldn tlike s he dbettertellmethetruthandnotlieaboutit LateronifI ndoutaboutalieorhearthetruthfromsomeoneelse that dbemuchmoreunpleasant InthatcasehowcanIeverbelieveortrustthatpersonagain HowcanIeverbelievethatthispersonhasenoughcon denceinmetoforgivehim herandcarryonwiththerelationshipfromthere SoifIcannottrustapersonanymore ifthepersondoesn tthinkI canhandlethetruth there snopointcontinuingthatrelationship AlthoughIwouldliketoseealtruistic understanding thoughtfulandloyalbehaviorfrompeople aninstanceoftheoppositeofthesebehaviorswouldnotupsetmeasmuchasdishonestywould Amongallthepossiblebehaviors dishonestyistheonlyoneformethatterminateshowIfeelaboutaperson sreliability Thereforehonestywouldbemy rstconcernandthemostimportantconsiderationinarelationship Inthisresponsethewriter rstapproachesthetopicbyunderscoringthatanumberofcharactertraitsareimportanttoarelationship Thewriterthene ectively developsanargumentthatunlikeothernegativebehaviors dishonestyorunwillingnesstofullydisclosesomebadactioncannotbeforgivenandcanbethemostimportantfactorindestroyingarelationship Thewriter slanguageis uent accurate andvariedenoughtoe ectivelysupporttheprogressionandconnectionofideas Thereareavarietyofsentencestructures includingrhetorical questions Theessayisnotmechanicallyperfect butaslongassucherrorsareoccasional minor anddonotinterferewiththereader sunderstanding anessaylikethisonecanstillearnatopscore BOOKS WEBSITESYOUNEED Sports Beauty Fitness Shopping o cialwebsitesMovies Tech Finance News Edu itunesstore spodcasts SCORERUBRICS 目标 综合写作 4独立写作 5 格式 每段之间空行 每行顶格 标点后 面空 一格 手动大写 AmEorBrE AmEorBrE AmEApartmentBathroomCornElevatorEraserSoccerHonorGlobalizeCenter BrEFlatToiletMaizeLiftRubberFootballHonourGlobaliseCentre ScoringCriteria WellDeveloped WellOrganized LanguageUse 评分标准 准 审题 逻辑例证词句语法 E ectivelyaddressesthetopicandtask Iswellorganizedandwelldeveloped usingclearlyappropriateexplanations exempli cations and ordetails Displaysunity progression andcoherence Displaysconsistentfacilityintheuseoflanguage demonstratingsyntacticvariety appropriatewordchoice andidiomaticity thoughitmayhaveminorlexicalorgrammaticalerrors AVOIDREDUNDANCY Inconclusion althoughIhavetoacceptthatitisimperativethatsomethingbedoneaboutcreatinganewholidayforpeopleand ndtheunderlyingthrustoftheimpliedproposalutterlyconvincing Icannothelpbutfeelwaryoftakingsuch irrevocablestepsandpersonallyfeelthatamoremeasuredapproachwouldbemorerewarding LanguageUse Details 这 面包物语的 香辣 肉松 面包做早膳是极好的 金 黄 诱 人 香溢满堂 若是再配上多 一点奶 黄酱那便是再好不过了 只是吃多了难免油腻 喉咙稍稍不适 若是配上浓 香咖啡 一杯 又解腻 又提神 自然不 负君恩 服务员来杯喝的 噎死我了 每个美国超级英雄的装扮都非常有特色 超人很有 特色 蝙蝠侠很有特色 蜘蛛侠也很有特色 EveryAmericansuperherohashis herownstyle forinstance Supermanwearstheunderwearout Batmandresseshatwithears andSpidermanistotallycoveredasifhewouldnotneedtobreathe 食品有害儿童健康 炸 条有害 炸鸡有 害 可乐有害 Junkfoodisharmfultochildren shealth Frenchfrieshavenegativee ectsonchildren shealth Friedchickenunderminestheirhealth Coco colatakesatollontheirhealth 食品有害儿童健康 炸 条有害 炸鸡有 害 可乐有害 Junkfoodisharmfultochildren shealth Frenchfrieshavenegativee ectsonchildren shealth Friedchickenunderminestheirhealth Coco colatakesatollontheirhealth Junkfoodisharmfultochildren shealth FrenchFrieshavetoomuchoil whichcausesoverweightamongyoungchildren Besidestoomuchfat friedchickenscontainvariouschemicalstoadd avorandcolororpreventthefoodfromgoingbad Thesechemicalscanincreasetherisksofvariousdiseases suchascancer AndCoca Cola decreaseschildren sappetiteforregularmeals causinglackofmineralsandvitaminsintheirbodies Anotherproblemwithcokesisthattheyhavesugar whichcauseschildren steethtodecay 语 言 内容 语 言 表达一定要清楚 只考察语言水平 不考察思想水平 内容 内容和语言同等重要 逻辑错误 比语 言错误更严重 逻辑 奥巴 马很有魅力 凤姐出了场 车祸 凤姐在美国 奥巴 马是美国总统 凤姐 长得丑 凤姐出生在重 庆 凤姐有无语伦比的自信 凤姐喜欢奥巴 马 凤姐虽然 长得丑 这是可以理解的 因为18岁那年 她出了场 车祸 头被 车夹了 一下 但她却有着 无语伦 比的 自信 这是因为她在美国公然发表声明向美 国总统奥巴 马 一个非常有魅力的男人 求爱 多阅读各类英文文章 看范文 仿写 精写 限时写作 Inthepastquartercenturytherehavebeenmanyattemptstouseintimidationtosilencesatireanddissent TheIranianregimesettheprecedentwhenitissuedafatwaagainsttheauthorSalmanRushdieinresponsetohisbookTheSatanicVerses NorthKoreausedcyberviolencetopreventthedistributionofanun attering lmaboutitsleaderKimJongUn NowwehavetheappallingspectacleinParis Theresponseofthefreeworldtothismustbeunwavering CharlieHebdomaybeaverydi erentpublicationtoourown butthecourageofitsjournalists andtheirrighttopublish cannotbeplacedindoubt Afreepressisworthnothingifitspractitionersdonotfeelfreetospeak 头段 写什么 怎么写 模板 Agreatvarietyofpeopleconcentratemoretimeonstayingwithfamilyandfriends Thereexiststhe endlessdiscussionaboutwhetherpeoplelikechoicethejobthatcanpayhighsalariesbutrequire employeestoleavetheirfamilyandfriends Inmyopinion Iprefertochoicethejobthatpaysalowersalarybutallowemployeestostaywiththeirfamilyandfriends Agreatvarietyofpeopleconcentratemoretimeonwhatabilityisimportantforthejob Thereexiststheendlessdiscussionaboutwhethertheabilitytoadapttonewworkenvironmentsisasimportantasahighdegreeofexcellentknowledgeforthejob Inmyopinion theseabilitiesarebothimportantforthejob 模板 Agreatvarietyofpeopleconcentratemoretimeonstayingwithfamilyandfriends Thereexiststhe endlessdiscussionaboutwhetherpeoplelikechoicethejobthatcanpayhighsalariesbutrequire employeestoleavetheirfamilyandfriends Inmyopinion Iprefertochoicethejobthatpaysalowersalarybutallowemployeestostaywiththeirfamilyandfriends Agreatvarietyofpeopleconcentratemoretimeonwhatabilityisimportantforthejob Thereexiststheendlessdiscussionaboutwhethertheabilitytoadapttonewworkenvironmentsisasimportantasahighdegreeofexcellentknowledgeforthejob Inmyopinion theseabilitiesarebothimportantforthejob 头段说什么 有什么说什么 你同不同意凤姐值得娶 Intro 个人认为 男人都应该娶凤姐为妻 这是因为凤姐很勇敢 而且很独立 凤姐 非常勇敢 虽然 长得丑 但从不在乎别 人的看法 还在微博电视节 目上极其活跃表达意 见以及批 判那些嘲笑她的 人 凤姐很独 立 现在凤姐凭 一 己之 力取得了美国绿卡 并且还在在纽约当上了洗脚妹 用双 手养活 自 己 Conclusion凤姐值得娶 方式一 个人观点 解释 原因与主体段分论点一一对应 类 1 年轻人应该在决定 长期的工作之前尝试不同的工作 2 20年后 学生不再会用纸质书了 Youngpeopleshouldtakeseveraldi erentkindsofjobsbeforetheydecidewhichcareertotakeinthelongterm personally beforetheultimatedecisionofwhattodoasacareerfortherestoftheirlife peopleintheir20sneedtotrydi erentjobs becauseof ofskillsthey thecombinationwilllearn circle andofcoursethe nalawarenessofthedestineddomain theenlargedsocial In20yearsfromnow studentswillnotusetheprintedbooksanymore evenifweareinthe2030swhenthehightechnologyisalltherage theprinted materials notonlytextbooksbutalsocomicandentertainingbooks willstillcompanystudents becauseofthe learningatmospherealongwiththepaperbooks Inmyopinion highef ciency the convenience andthesheer extraordinary 同义转述 paraphrasing 同义改写 同义词或近义词替换原有表述 改变语序 具体化 语 言 表达个人观点 personally inmyview inmy opinion Ibelieve asfarasIamconcerned Iaminfavoroftheideathat Iholdwiththeideathat Igoalongwiththeideathat 表原因 dueto 名词 becauseof 名词 since because as 句子 干劲有力 原因采取排比的方式 Practice Doyouagreeordisagree Itisbettertochooseafriendwithwhomyoucanhavefunthantochooseafriendthatwillhelpyouwhenyouareinneed 同不同意TaylorSwift是一个slut 很绿茶很 很多人认为TS是一个slut 但是我觉得纯洁 烂 头段方式二 反方观点 解释 自己观点 注意 原因是客观事实 尽可能详细 很多人认为TS是一个slut 因为媒体曝光了 很多 的男朋友 小到15岁 大到35岁 但是我认为她仍然是纯洁的 小 龙 女般的 女孩 儿 拥有 广泛的知识 比拥有专业知识好 科技让人们的生活更简单而不是更 杂 语 言 1 提出反方观点 someoneargues advocates contendsthat Iconcedethat 2 因果 系的表达 Adv therefore hence consequently asaresult 句型 thereasonwhy isthat 3 转折 however nevertheless evenso despitethat Havingbroadknowledgeinmanyacademicsubjectsisbetterthanhavingspecializedknowledgeinaspeci csubject Technologymakespeople slifesimplerratherthanmorecomplicated 现在的 人 比过去的 人更容易接受教育 头段方式三 背景 头 个人观点 语 言 社会现象 itisacommonphenomenonthat Itisnotraretoseethat Itisawidespreadphenomenonthat 趋势 moreandmore as withThereisagrowingtendencythat 注意 1 背景介绍可中立 可宏观 但背景不能和观点 负相 2 背景之后可加入反方观点 不推荐 Peoplecouldbecomeeducatednowmoreeasilythanpeoplecouldinthepast Intwentyyears time peoplewillleadamoreleisurelylife Teachersshouldassignhomeworkforstudentseveryday 总结 头方式一 个人观点 解释 头方式二 反方观点 解释 自己观点 头方式三 背景 社会现象 趋势 定义 自 己观点 段内展 主体段基本结构一 主体段 主题句 说理 例证 小结 Grouptoursplantravelers entireitineraries Becausetheirtriphasalreadybeenarranged peopledonothavetoworryaboutwheretheyaregoingorhowtheyaregettingthere Theycansimplyrelax enjoytheirtrip andnotgetstressedoutaboutanything Forexample myfamilyoncetookapackagetourtoChina Thetravelagencyarrangedeverything Ittookcareofthehotelreservations transportation andsightseeing Myfamilydidnothavetoworryaboutanything Wejustlookedattheschedulethetravelagencyhadprovidedandfollowedit Thankstothetravelagency wecouldjustrelaxandenjoyourentiretrip Thismadethingseasierespeciallyformyfathersincehedidnothavetoworryeverysingleminuteaboutwherewewouldgonext Allinall wehadagreattrip Grouptourstaketheanxietyofdailyplanningoutoftravelingandlettravelersenjoytheirvacationswithoutanystress Grouptoursplantravelers entireitineraries Becausetheirtriphasalreadybeenarranged peopledonothavetoworryaboutwheretheyaregoingorhowtheyaregettingthere Theycansimplyrelax enjoytheirtrip andnotgetstressedoutaboutanything Forexample myfamilyoncetookapackagetourtoChina Thetravelagencyarrangedeverything Ittookcareofthehotelreservations transportation andsightseeing Myfamilydidnothavetoworryaboutanything Wejustlookedattheschedulethetravelagencyhadprovidedandfollowedit Thankstothetravelagency wecouldjustrelaxandenjoyourentiretrip Thismadethingseasieronmyfathersincehedidnothavetoworryeverysingleminuteaboutwherewewouldgonext Allinall wehadagreattrip Grouptourstaketheanxietyofdailyplanningoutoftravelingandlettravelersenjoytheirvacationswithoutanystress 家 长和孩子在感情方面太过亲近 Parentsmaybetooclosetotheirchildren emotionally Forexample theymaylimitachild sfreedominthenameofsafety Ateachermayorganizeaneducationaltriptoabigcity butaparentmaythinkthistripistoodangerous A schoolmaywanttotakethechildrencamping butaparentmaybeafraidofthechildgettinghurt 主体段 主题句 纯例证 小结 当今人们比过去变得更加以自我为中心了 Today ssocialrealityhasmadepeoplebecomefarmoreself centeredthanpreviousgenerations Normally one scircleofcontactstendstofocusmoreonthosewhoareusefultosatisfytheirpersonalinterests Attentionisgraduallydivertedfromfamilyrelationshipstowardrecreationandorganizationofpro tgroups Suchanabruptchangeinpeople svalueshadindeedresultedintheirgrowing indi erencetotheirrelationshipswithfamilymembers 主体段 主题句 纯说理 小结 练习 宠物有助于培 孩子的责任感 二 怎样说理 改善公共交通有利于提高空气质量 花钱做广告能 帮助一个企业增加利润 问 老李去哪了 答 今天是周末啊 问 今天学校怎么那么干净 答 因为领导来检查了 说理需要stepbystep 一环扣一环改善公共交通有利于提高空气质量 花钱做广告能 帮助一个企业增加利润 用自己的知识解决问题是进行自我提升的好机会年 长的朋友能帮助我们成 长 因果 系 1 副词Hence thus thereforeAsaconsequence asaresult consequently2 非限制性定语从句3 状语从句 because since if4 特殊句型The比较级 the比较级 从书本中学习知识时 我们的学习效率更高 书本 权威性 正 知识 避免弯路 效率高 书本 系统性 连贯学习知识 全面理解 效率高 练习 阔视 在不同的地方生活能让年轻人丰富经历和野 Livinginanewplaceenrichesyoungpeoplewithlifeexperiencesandalsobroadenstheirminds livinginanewplaceallowsyoungpeopletofullyimmerseintoanewenvironmentandintimatelycontactthedetailsoflifethere whichenablesthemtocomprehenddi erentculturesandvalues anewlivingplaceprovidesonewithgreatopportunityofmakingnewfriendswithdiversebackgroundssothatpeoplelearntobeopentodi erentideas anewcountrymeansanewwayofliving whichrequiresonetoadoptnewhabitsandtrynewthings Livinginanewplaceenrichesyoungpeoplewithlifeexperiencesandalsobroadenstheirminds Firstly livinginanewplaceallowsyoungpeopletofullyimmerseintoanewenvironmentandintimatelycontactthedetailsoflifethere whichenablesthemtocomprehenddi erentculturesandvalues Secondly anewlivingplaceprovidesonewithgreatopportunityofmakingnewfriendswithdiversebackgroundssothatpeoplelearntobeopentodi erentideas Thirdly anewcountrymeansanewwayofliving whichrequiresonetoadoptnewhabitsandtrynewthings 并列说理 Firstly ononehand foronething secondly ontheotherhand foranotherthingtopicsentence 说理1 说理2 书本 权威性 正 知识 避免弯路 效率高 书本 系统性 连贯学习知识 全面理解 效率高 递进说理 练习 领导听取队员意 见对团队有好处 听取团队意 见 满意和尊重 士气提高 提高效率 有动力 凝聚力 First ateamleadershouldtakeadvicefromhisorherteammemberssimplybecauseitisgoodforhimorhertodoso Ifaleaderorateam collectivelytakesadviceorsuggestionsfromtheregularmembersofthegroup it satisfactionandrespectamongtheteam Thiswillboostcompanymorale whichwill improveproductionandmotivateteammemberstostriveforteamgoals teammemberswillhavestrongfaithintheleaderandtightlyworktogether First ateamleadershouldtakeadvicefromhisorherteammemberssimplybecauseitisgoodforhimorhertodoso Ifaleaderorateam collectivelytakesadviceorsuggestionsfromtheregularmembersofthegroup itbreeds engenderssatisfactionandrespectamongtheteam Thiswillboostcompanymorale whichwill further improveproductionandmotivateteammemberstostriveforteamgoals Subsequently teammemberswillhavestrongfaithintheleaderandtightlyworktogether 递进说理 topicsentence 说理1 leadto engender 说理2 further moreover 说理3 subsequently 练习 Enjoyinghobbiesorphysicalactivitiesthatareunrelatedtoworkwillallowyoutobecomeabetter roundedperson 做工作无 的activities 遇 见不同的人 思想 撞 包容不同观点 像他人学习知识技能 全面发展 对 比说理 书的效率 高 实践 大量时间花在零散的地方 学习没有针对性 效率不高 领导听取队员意 见对团队有好处 不听取意 见 不满 伤团队士气 影响工作进度 书本权威性正确知识避免弯路效率 高 书本系统性连贯学习知识全 面理解效率 高 实践 大量时间花在零散的地方 学习没有针对性 效率不高 Ononehand becauseoftheauthoritythebookshave wecanmakesurewhatwearelearningisrighttoalargeextentandinthiswaywecanavoidgoingtothewrongdirectionandthushavemoree ciencyinlearning Ontheotherhand becausetheknowledgeinthebooksissystematic wecanlearnconsecutively Afterlearningcomprehensively wecanbemoree cientinlearningtoo However spendingmostofthetimedoingpracticeswouldbecounter productivesimplybecausedoingtonsoftrivialthingswouldcostmuchmoretimethanweexpectandthuswewon tbee cientinlearning Forexample learningaphysicaltheory suchasgravity frombookswouldcostuslessthan10minutes whileitwouldtakeusevenadaytodotheexperimentourselves Topicsentence 正面说理 however nevertheless 反面说理 练习 集中注意力与工作效率及质量紧密相联 看电视是了解外面世界最直接的途径 怎样证明 北京空气污染严重 Beijnghasbeensu eringfromheavyairpollutionformorethanadecadeanditsairpollutionevenhittheheadlinesofthoseforeignmediasuchastheNewYorkTimes CNNoreventhosetabloidsinIndonesia asthetitleof theworstpollutionever or etc PersonallyIhavebeenlivinginBeijingformorethan20yearsandIcanguaranteeyouthatitde nitelywasnotlikethisbefore Severalyearsago theskywasblueandthewaterclean Butnow fromthedataofsomecertainmediaandofcoursemypersona