2012届高考英语 考前冲刺精品复习讲义 写作（十一） 北师大版

用心 爱心 专心 1 20122012 届高考英语考前冲刺精品复习讲义 北师大版 写作 十一 届高考英语考前冲刺精品复习讲义 北师大版 写作 十一 简要描述图片 并谈谈你对学生在业余时间参加过多的补习和培训的看法 学生习作 外教批改 In the cartoon Let Go of Me 1 the boy has to attend many spare time schools2 extra classes leaving him tired and depressed It3 This vividly reflects our present school life I think too many after school classes do students more harm than good We are occupied with too many extra classes and endless homework every day which gives us no time to developing4 our own interests and real abilities talents As a result many students feel physically and mentally stressed and some even suffer from nerve5 nervous disorders or poor health No wonder about 60 of the6students wear glasses today7 We students should not be robbed of our spare time We desire a golden and cheerful childhood Going to the theatre visiting museums and joining8 in social activities should become be part of our life9 lives I believe these activities will broaden our horizons and make our school life10 fun and meaningful 旁 批 1 这是标题 每个实词的首字母都应该大写 2 这种表达方式不正确 可以用 extra classes 或 after school classes 3 用指示代词语气更强 起到将本句与上一句联系的作用 4 这里的 to 是动词不定式 因此动词必须用原形 只有当 to 是介词时 后面才能用动名 词 即 ing 形式 例如 I look forward to seeing you 用心 爱心 专心 2 5 nerve 是名词 这里需要用形容词 6 复数名词表泛指时不加冠词 7 这个例子不能有效地支持作者的观点 近视不代表身体不健康 也不能说明神经功能紊 乱 8 and 前后的动词形式要保持一致 由于前面两个动词是动名词形式 因此 join 也应该是 动名词形式 9 our 后应该跟名词复数 10 school life 泛指是单数形式 不要用 our 来修饰 本文构思很好 文体得当 大部分语法错误似乎都是由于粗心而造成的 没有什么是作者不 应该知道的 交卷前一定要确认自己仔细检查过 高分作文秘诀之五 避免使用汉语式英语 例如 Instead of 不要说 Have 60 students think an entrance fee shouldn t be received Use 要说 60 of the students think an entrance fee shouldn t be charged Instead of 不要说 Recently our village has taken place great changes Use 要说 Recently great changes have taken place in our village Instead of 不要说 His friends are few Use 要说 He has few friends Instead of 不要说 Welcome you to visit our school Use 要说 You are welcome to visit our school Instead of 不要说 Today I visited the Smiths my first time visit to an American family Use 要说 Today I visited the Smiths my first visit to an American family 参考下面漫画 请以 I m a Senior Three Student 为题 用英语写一篇 120 词左右的短文 短文应包括以下几条要点 不要逐条翻译 用心 爱心 专心 3 1 简单描述漫画的内容 2 作业负担过重 3 精讲精练 4 多点自由活动的时间 参考范文 I m a Senior Three Student The picture shows a boy who stays up late doing his homework Scores of books pile on the desk in front of him There are always papers waiting to be finished and problems to be solved seeming to have no ending Time is never long enough for a student of Senior Three What I do every day is to listen to the teachers lectures take notes and do my homework I hope our teachers will he