河南省郑州市2014高考英语一轮 短文改错、书面表达训练（18）VIP

1 郑州市郑州市 20142014 高考英语短文改错 书面表达一轮训练 高考英语短文改错 书面表达一轮训练 1818 附参考范 附参考范 文文 Passage Mark Twain was born in a small town of Horid When he is only 1 twelve years old his father died Late he became a river boat pilot 2 Mark Twain was her pen name During the American Civil War 3 He worked as a reporter and write a lot of stories Gradually he 4 made his mark and his work were popular He became one of the 5 best known writer of the 19th century in the U S A In his life 6 Mark Twain wrote the number of stories and novels on which 7 Adventure of Tom Sawyer is the most famous one His writings 8 have been translated to many other languages and they are 9 deeply love by the readers all over the world 10 参考答案 Key 15 1is was 2 Late later 3 her his 4 write wrote 5 work works 6 writer writers 7 the a 8 right 9 to into 10 loved 结束 一 导语 What does beauty really mean Everybody has own definition The standard of beauty changes with different society culture and nations Some hold the point that the beautiful appearance is of great importance which is visible to all Others have the idea that the spiritual beauty is the loveliest one which lasts long However different it might be their opinions are all acceptable 什么是美呢 每个人都有自己的定义 美的标准因社会 文化和国度不同而产生差异 有的人认为相貌上的美是最重要 最直观的美 有的人则认为心灵上的美才是最可爱 最长 久的美 无论哪种美 这些对美的定义都是有道理的 2 二 创设情境 以 What is beauty in your mind 为主题 发表自己的看法 题目自拟 要求 1 行文流畅 观点鲜明 2 内容丰富 层次分明 3 词数 150 左右 三 学生习作 BeautyBeauty willwill buybuy nono beefbeef Everyone admires beauty Nowadays some people tend to think that they own beauty if they have a good looking They are not satisfied with their appearance They spend much money taking a kind of operation Can beauty really be man made If so everybody can get beauty As a result there is no beauty at all The appearance is given by our parents and is unique in the world Everyone should value it I d rather prefer nature as the standard of beauty Just accept yourself accept everything the god gives to you and create the beautiful life belong to you Many heroes don t have beautiful surface However their beautiful images often come to our minds Their beauty comes from their contributions to the society Don t be eager to judge whether a person is beautiful or not without a thorough understanding of him A beautiful person is not the one with a good looking but with a broad and kind heart Good looking is pleasant while spiritual beauty is more important As an old saying goes Virtue is fairer than beauty If you have a kind heart you own real beauty 点评 本文以谚语 漂亮不能当饭吃 为题 直截了当地亮出了自己的观点 全文 以 美德胜于美貌 为主线 阐述了 追求外形的美而放弃了内在的美不是真正的美 文 章观点鲜明 结构严谨 用词恰当 作者能运用谚语来强化自己的观点 有较强的英语语言 组织能力和表达能力 本文有两处语言错误 I d rather prefer 应改为 I d prefer would rather 表示 宁愿 prefer 也是 宁愿 的意思 两者不能连用在一起 belong to 改为 belonging to 在此处作定语 结束 201 内江 广安模拟 Last Saturday we had a party at home Dad s friends come1 along with their families Since Mom was not at home Dad2 and I had to prepare everything so it turned out such a miracle3 3 that they did make it Everything went perfectly fine 4 A lot of kids who came that day I had the most wonderful time5 with Steven It was just amazed to find someone so much6 like me We had a lot of things by common The time seemed7 short to me and I wished we could have had some more time8 to continue the conversation Hopeful we re going on9 a trip together next summer and also summer after next 10 答案与解析 1 come came 整篇文章为一般过去时 应把 come 改为 came 2 3 so but 前后语境为转折关系 应把 so 改为 but 4 they we 根据上文可知作者使用了第一人称 此处指作者和父亲俩人 因此应 把 they 改为 we 5 去掉 who 本句为简单句 去掉 who 6 amazed amazing 主语为 it 应用 amazing 作表语 表示 令人惊异的 7 by in 固定短语 have in common 表示 有 相同之处 8 去掉 had wish 后的宾语从句用虚拟语气 谓语应用情态动词 动词原形 因此 把 had 去掉 9 Hopeful Hopefully 副词 hopefully 放在句首 表示 希望 副词作状语修饰 整个句子 10 在 also 后加 the next summer 指明年夏天 the summer after next 指后年夏 天 结束 4 近几年的高考 考试说明 中 关于高考英语书面表达评分标准第五档 很好 中有这样一段 话 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误 但为尽力使用较复杂结 构或较高级词汇所致 这就是说 学生仅运用基础的词汇和基本的句型 不能体现出较强的 语言运用能力 即使表达无语法错误 也不能得高分 相反有些错误 目的在有意识地使用复杂 结构或较高级词汇 也不扣分 仍属于最高档次 高考把写作要求提到了这样一个高度 有利 于反映学生的水平层次 有利于指导教学 原来 要点完整 语言无误 行文连贯 表达清楚 的 标准就落后了 在平时的教学中 训练最多的 学生们也最习惯的是五种基本句型 主语 谓语 主语 谓语 宾语 主语 谓语 间接宾语 主语 谓语 间接宾语 直接宾语 主语 谓语 宾语 补 足语 用这些句型组织的句子单一 无生气 不能给人一种含金量高的审美享受 客观形势 对我们提出了高难度的要求 我们怎样才能对书面表达进行科学的操作 怎样才能控制写作呢 本 文拟就这一课题进行讨论 希望能给学生以启迪 调动积极性 开拓思维 培养创新精神 首先 在整篇文章中 避免只使用一两个句型 要灵活运用各种语法结构 使文章有声有色 一 改变时态 例 The bell is ringing now 一般 There goes the bell 高级 二 改变语态 例 People suggest that the conference be put off 一般 It is suggested that the conference be put off 高级 三 使用不定式 例 He is so kind that he can help me 一般 He is so kind as to help me 高级 5 四 使用过去分词 例 She walked out of the lab and many students followed her 一般 Followed by many students she walked out of the lab 高级 Once it is seen it can never be forgotten 一般 Once seen it can never be forgotten 高级 五 使用 V ing 形式 例 When he arrives please give me an e mail 一般 On arriving his arrival please give me an e mail 高级 If the weather permits I ll come tomorrow 一般 I ll come tomorrow weather permitting 高级 六 使用名词性从句 例 It disappointed everybody that he didn t turn up 一般 The fact that he didn t turn up disappointed everybody 高级 I happened to have met him 一般 It happened that I had met him 高级 To his surprise the little girl knows so many things 一般 What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things 高级 七 使用定语从句 例 The girl is spoken highly of Her composition was well written 一般 6 The girl whose composition was well written is spoken highly of 高级 八 使用状语从句 例 I won t believe what he says 一般 No matter what he says I won t believe 高级 If you come back before six o clock you can go out 一般 You can go out on condition that provided that you come back before six o clock 高级 If she doesn t agree what shall we do 一般 Supposing that she doesn t agree what shall we do 高级 结束 高考英语作文精选范文 看图作文类看图作文类 5 5 根据图画写一篇短文 叙述某天小明与其妈妈发生的故事 根据图画写一篇短文 叙述某天小明与其妈妈发生的故事 妈妈阻止儿子去扶摔倒的女孩 妈妈阻止儿子去扶摔倒的女孩 儿子对于倒了的油瓶置之不理 儿子对于倒了的油瓶置之不理 要求 要求 1 1 不仅要表述出图中的内容 还要发表自己的感想 不仅要表述出图中的内容 还要发表自己的感想 2 2 字数 字数 100100 字左右 字左右 3 3 开头已给出 开头已给出 OneOne day day XiaoXiao MingMing sawsaw a a littlelittle girlgirl fallfall overover HeHe wantedwanted toto helphelp thethe girlgirl up up butbut hishis mothermother stoppedstopped himhim andand said said Don t Don t dodo that that otherwiseotherwise othersothers willwill thinkthink itit waswas youyou whowho knockedknocked herher down down A A fewfew daysdays later later thethe mothermother waswas shockedshocked toto seesee XiaoXiao MingMing justjust letlet thethe fallenfallen oiloil bottlebottle be be AndAnd XiaoXiao MingMing saidsaid toto hishis mother mother If If I I diddid somethingsomething aboutabout thethe bottle bottle youyou wouldwould thinkthink thatthat itit waswas I I whowho knockedknocked itit over over I I disagreedisagree withwith whatwhat thethe mothermother diddid inin thethe story story I I thinkthink parentsparents shouldshould setset a a goodgood exampleexample toto theirtheir children children TheyThey shouldshould notnot onlyonly carecare forfor theirtheir children schildren s health health butbut theirtheir minds minds TheyThey shouldshould letlet theirtheir childrenchildren knowknow itit isis a a pleasurepleasure toto helphelp othersothers whowho areare inin trouble trouble WeWe livelive inin thethe societysociety whichwhich isis a a 7 bigbig familyfamily forfor allall ofof us us EveryoneEveryone shouldshould dodo somethingsomething goodgood toto buildbuild upup ourour society society right right 结束结束 3 Baloney is a kind of sausage that many Americans eat often The word also has another meaning in English It is used to describe something usually something someone says that is false or wrong or foolish Baloney sausage comes from the name of the Italian city Bologna The city is famous for its sausage a mixture of smoked spiced meat from cows and pigs But boloney sausage does not taste the same as beef or pork alone Some language experts think this different taste is responsible for the birth of the expression baloney Baloney is an idea or statement that is nothing like the truth in the same way that baloney sausage tastes nothing like the meat that is used to make it Baloney is a word often used by politicians to describe the ideas of their opponents The expression has been used for years Fifty years ago a former governor of New York State Alfred Smith criticized some claims by President Franklin Roosevelt about the successes of the Roosevelt administration Smith said No matter how thin you slice is it is still baloney A similar word has almost the same meaning as baloney It even sounds almost the same The word is blarney It began in Ireland about 1600 The lord of Blarney castle near Cork agreed to surrender the castle to British troops But he kept making excuses for postponing the surrender And he made them sound like very good excuses This is just more of the same blarney The Irish castle now is famous for its Blarney stone Kissing the stone is thought to give a person special powers of speech One who has kissed the Blarney stone so the story goes can speak words of praise so smoothly and sweetly that you believe them even when you know they are false 1 What s the main idea of the text No more than 5 words 2 According to Americans what does baloney refer to No more than 8 words 3 What do you know about the lord of Blarney castle near Cork No more than 6 8 words 4 Why do people kiss the Blarney stone No more than 6 words 参考答案 1 The other meaning of baloney 2 It is something false or wrong or foolish 3 He was a clever man 4 To get special powers of speech 结束 广东卷 写作 共两节 满分 40 分第二节 读写任务 阅读下面短文 然后按要求写一篇 150 词左右的英语短文 When Sam first got to his boarding school with his parents he was very happy He thought he would be able to go home every weekend When he was told he would not he started crying because the thought of not seeing his parents was driving him crazy He was given uniforms and all other things that he would need for the term He started crying when it was time for his parents to leave He was then taken to the dorm where he saw other children happy He tried as much as he could to fit in but could not because his mind was at home He started feeling homesick 想家 安定 wanted to go homes as soon as possible He got sick soon because he could not eat the school food He could not concentrate in the classroom All he could think was being at home with his family He had no mobile phone or other means to get in touch with his parents He was angry and felt lonely He thought his parents hated him and that was why they left him in a boarding school 写作内容 1 以约 30 个词概括上文的主要内容 9 2 以约 120 个词讲述一次你 或你的朋友 想家的经历 内容包括 时间 地点和起因 想家给学习和生活带来的影响 你 或你朋友 是如何应对的 写作要求 1 作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事 也可以参照阅读材料的内容 但不得直接引 用原文中的句子 2 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称 评分标准 概括准确 语言规范 内容何时 语句连贯 参考范文 The story is about what Sam felt about his first boarding school life As a child he never left his parents so he didn t get used to dealing with everything in school independently Once I had a similar experience I finished my junior middle school in a boarding school At the age of 13 I never delt with the daily things such as washing clothes taking care of money etc especially I felt lonely because I hardly knew any people At first I could not get on well with my classmates and I always looked forward to being on holiday to meet my parents I could not concentrate on my subjects As time went by I gradually adapted myself to the school life I made several friends with our classmates and often took part in t